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Oh man, I just, I love you. I've been reading your review on Blood Raining Night and I must have laughed 10 minutes straight at the part where Minna got amnesia from watching Pokemon. Thank you so, so much for letting me know about this gloriously awful cosmic fuckery of a fanfic.

omg welcome man

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 45 ways to avoid using the word ‘very’

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I’m an electrical engineer. I was very lucky to have great professors in my field throughout my academic career. And yet if you asked me which professor had the biggest impact on me, without hesitation, I’d say my English professor freshman year: Prof. Spengemann. He destroyed my terrible English high school writing and built me back up. We could not use the verb “to be” in any form. No negative adjective phrases. No use of “very.” It’s amazing how much solid writing reshapes your brain.

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Chapter 29 - Getting Sloppy (and HITIUS NOTE)

Sorry I keep making empty promises guys, looks like my life was more hectic than I thought it would be, with all my IGCSE's coming and all

So this blog would be on hitius, I have no idea for how long though. If you guys want any fanfic (any fanfic) just submit it and I'll review it no prob!

I'll also continue to post writing references that I come across for anyone who needs it.

Now, onto the fanfic!

Believe it or not our heros made it back to Reicheru’s house even though she was still blind but had glass eyes.

They all had the funnest boat ride on the trip over. 

It was the time of the day when the moon slipped into the black sky, silky and black like a waterfall full of white eyes. And the moon itself what a white face.

These metaphores/similies are getting waaaay out of hand. I'm cringing myself just reading it.

Oh Blood Raining Night, how I miss you so (not).

Reicheru was still holding Elaine in her arms as they approached the door. Yuki delicately knocked on the door to grab the attention of the one living person in the house. Amirru stepped up to the door and peeped out of the eyehole. “Aye what are all of you dooin in the night?” He said with a subtle sterness.

Don't use that fuckin sass.

Yuki looked suprised and spoke in a baby soft voice,

What? Is she going to babble like a baby to him???

What is that secret code or something?

“well who in the blaze are you?” "That’s my housekeeper!" Reicheru smiled. "Amirru" she said, "open the door." "I…I don’t want any of you to see me. Ill unlock the door but then I’m going to fuck away." Amirru said as he put the key into the lock unlocking it and then bolting into the kitchen like a rapid sparrow. "Huh?" Yuki scratched at the back of her neck. "Your housekeeper sure is weird, Reicheru."  "Oh no Yuki he’s really nice. He makes the best spaghetti." Reicheru smiled at Yuki with her fangs showing and her eyes closed. "Makes good spaghetti you say?" Sebastian rubbed his chin in thought. They all opened the door and walked in. "Reicheru," Yuki said as she followed Reicheru into the bedroom "are you sure you’ll be okay? Do you need me and Minna-chan to stay over? I’m the guardian of both you and Tenshikuzu anyway." It was a terrible idea! Recheru shook her head “No you should take Minna-chan back home. I don’t want to get her in trouble.It’ll probably be safe here but i can’t be sure.” "Okay." Yuki hugged Reicheru. "Take care of my neice. and my sister." She smiled and lightly held Reicheru’s face. "I will Yuki-chan." Reicheru waved everyone goodbye and they left. She continued into the bedroom holding Elaine. She layed her down on the bed and sat next to her, strocking her hair. After a while Elaine’s eyes twitched a little and then opened like a blood red clam.

She should get those eyes checked man.

A smiled spread across her tiny pale face. "Mama?" Elaine squeaked. "Yes, sweetie! I’m here" Reicheru leaned over and kissed Elaine on the forehead. "He’s here…" She spoke in a whisper.

WHAT THE FUCK

"What…" Reicheru felt a chill down her spine and her furry ears perked up. "Stay here." She said calmly and made her way to the living room, feeling all the furniture and stuff. Reicheru made it to the door at last. She leaned her ear against the door to see if she could hear anything. Nothing. Nothing was moving. But that wasn’t true…little did she know that the eyes of a strange dark figure were secretly watching her through the peephole in the door.

Umm.

His breat quiet. He made a creek. Reicheru got angry. “Dad,” she spoke loudly with an abience of force and strength, “I KNOW your here. Go away!”

But I thought he was dead???

"Mew!" A delicate sound came from the other side of the door.  Amirru came up from behind Reicheru and gently pushed her to the side. “I’ve got this, Miss Oni.” He unlatched the door. "I could’ve sworn I heard him…" Reicheru’s words faded away like the clouds in the sky. "Everyone barely left 15 minutes ago, ma’am. They would’ve seen him." Amirru let Mew in. Her crimson hair was wet and so looked like blood dripping from the top of her head.

What the fuck is the deal with blood in this fanfic??

Is EVERYONE a murderer?

Amirru put his arm around her, "come in." He said. "I’m not sure how I got here…" Mew said. "I need help…" "Oh dear! I better make spaghetti." Amirru sat Reicheru and Mew down and then scuttled to the kitchen.

We don't need your shitty spaghetti, WE NEED A DOCTOR.

"What’s wrong Mew?" Reicheru had a worried expression on her deformed face. "I think I might be dieing…" Tears of sadness and worry dripped from her shiny eyes.

Yep she definitely needs a doctor.

"Dieing??" Reicheru shook her head. "What could make you think that?" Amirru came out with a big bowl of salad and cheese. “Hey you two.” He said. “Doesn’t this look nummy? I need to help you Reicheru because of your lack of arms.” He started pileing the salad into her mouth. “Just wait for the garlic bread.” Mew shook her head. “Thanks for the offer…I can’t eat right now. Anyway, I’ve been in pain for the past couple of weeks now. I keep getting sick and throwing up everywhere. It’s not getting any better.” "When did this happen exaclty?" "It started like during what would’ve been the wedding with your dad." "Hmmm…my daddy…" Reicheru pondered in thought. It made sense to Reicheru! "Oh you sound pregnant!" Then Reicheru thought about it some more. "But…that would mean…" Mew looked intently at her. "That would mean you’re carrying my half-sister." Reicheru barely made the words out of her mouth without tossing her salad all over poor Mew.

What the fuck is????? WHAT?

"Oh sweet jesus…" Amirru dropped cheese.

My Brain can't process this fanfic

I'm done

I'M FUCKING DONE

GOODBYE EVERYONE

DAN IS DONE

...

Okay I kid I kid.

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MUSIC TO INFLUENCE YOU TO WRITE

Feel like you need a song to influence you to write a scene or character? Here are a list of Playlists and Songs you can listen to to get you going!

HAPPY BASED

When Everything is Wrong and you need a pick-me-up

a bunch of songs that make me Legit Happy!!

Carried Away

Stutter

 Some Days they Taste Like Lemonade

Picking Up the Pieces

Keep Your Head Up

It’s Time to Begin, isn’t it?

Endless Cheesin

Free Yourself

Undertone

SEX SCENES

lets do it (lets fall in love); a playlist for an old-fashioned love affair

Songs to fuck to

Between Two Points

Erotic Moments

 Nice and Slow

Breathe My Name

We Had a Promise Made

The Only Sex Playlist

Skin & Bones

A Forever Love

SAD SCENES/ HEARTBREAK

Hello My Old Heart

Shelter

See all my dreams die

We All Feel Lost Sometimes

Whispers Wasted in the Sand

Time to Study

One of those Sad Days

Sad Sad Songs

Goodnight Moon

When I Run Through the Deep Dark Forrest

PSYCHOPATHIC CHARACTER/SUSPENSE SCENE

[MADNESS;] | a playlist to get in the insane muse for your character

The Devil Within Digital Daggers

Villains and Demons

 Lose Your Soul

Savage Desires

I’ll Be Dead Before the Day is Done

A Killer’s Symphony

Murder He Says

A Boy’s Best Friend

In a Stranger’s Dream

BADASS CHARACTERS/ACTION-FIGHT SCENE

Not Your Regular Damsel in Distress

Biting Down

Light it Up

This is it, the Apocalypse

I Pretend I’m a Bad Ass

There is No Reconciliation

Shit to Fuck Shit Up to

Run

Let’s Go Hunting

Cancel the Apocalypse

Red Lipstick and a Black Jacket

INSTRUMENTAL/ CALM 

Breathe

The Light Shines Through

Dreamland

Floating

When in France

Sing Me to Sleep

Violin at the Movies

À la dérive

Home is where your heart it is

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»»>FANMIXES

HANNIBAL

My Game my Rules

Wicked

The Devil is in the Details

The Pale Horse

Excellent Taste

Kill Run

Where is My Mind?

Psychosoma

Nothing Here is Vegetarian

Help

BBC SHERLOCK

An Absence of You

I Misbehave

Something Lonely in the Bone

I’m not a Psychopath… 

Thank You, Johann Sebastian Bach

Dying From These Exist Wounds

You Put the Devil in Me

Study and Investigate

Fist Kisses and Love Bites

Sorrow Waited Sorrow Won

SUPERNATURAL

Lost Boy

You the Moon

Taller Than God

A Very Supernatural Roadtrip

I Call This One “the Blue Steel”

Driver Picks the Music, Shotgun Shuts his Cakehole!

Bad Blood

An Angry Blade

Wow Just Smash Your Mouths Together

Fury is Coming

The Sacrifice

I’d love to add more (music and fandoms) but let’s just give you this for now! Happy Listening! 

ALSO: These (obviously) are not my fanmixes/playlists so give some props to the people who made it! They would love it! Also, if you see your playlist on here and would like it removed, tell me! Thank you!

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These links represent the index of pages from Grammar.ccc, an excellent resource for all things English grammar.

A, An, The (articles) 

A- Adjectives 

Abbreviations 

Abstract Nouns 

Absolute Phrases 

Acronyms (plurals of) 

Acronyms (redundancy) 

Active Voice (in verbs) 

A.D. and B.C. 

Adjectives 

Adjective Clauses 

Adjectival Labels 

Adjuncts 

Adverbs 

Adverb Clauses 

Adverbial Conjunctions 

Agenda (for meetings) 

Agent (of a sentence) 

Agreement: Pron. & Ant. 

Agreement: Subj. - Verb 

Alphabetical Order 

Amplifiers 

Analysis-Classification 

And to begin sent. 

Anomalous Anonymies 

Antecedent 

Apologetic Quotation Marks 

Apostrophe 

APA-style Documentation 

Appositive Phrases 

Argumentative Essays 

Articles 

Articles & Acronyms 

As versus Like 

Ask Grammar 

Attributive Noun 

Auxiliary Verbs 

Bad and Badly 

Bare Infinitive 

"Be" (the verb) 

Because to begin sent. 

Because clause 

Bible (parallelism) 

Bookshelf (recommended) 

Brackets 

Brainstorming 

British Spelling 

Bulleted Lists 

Bush, George W., solecisms 

Business Letter (format) 

But to begin sent. 

Can and Could 

Capitalization 

Case (of pronouns) 

Cases in appositives 

Catenative Verbs 

Causative Verbs 

Cause-Effect Essays 

Classification-Analysis 

Clauses 

Cleft Sentences 

Clichés (Eliminating) 

Clustering (ideas) 

Coherence 

Collective Adjectives 

Collective Nouns 

Colon 

Combining Sentences 

Commas 

Comma Splices 

Company Names 

Comparative Adjectives 

Comparative Adverbs 

Comparison-Contrast 

Complements 

Complete Predicates 

Complex Sentences 

Compositions (writing) 

Compound Plurals 

Compound Possessives 

Compound Words 

Compound Sentences 

Compounded Subjects/Objects 

Compound-Complex Sentences 

Compounding Pronouns 

Computers and Writing 

Concluding Paragraphs 

Concrete Language 

Concise Sentences 

Conditional Verbs 

Conditional (1st, 2nd, 3rd) 

Confusion (Eliminating) 

Conjunctions 

Conjunctive Adverbs 

Conjuncts 

Contractions 

Contractions (in essays) 

Coordinate Adjectives 

Coordinating Conjunctions 

Copulas (verbs) 

Correlative Conjunctions 

Could 

Count Nouns 

Cumulative Sentences 

Dangling Modifiers 

Dashes 

Deadly Sin Checklist 

Definition Essays 

Degrees (adj) w/ premodifiers 

Demonstrative Pronouns 

Dependent Clauses 

Descriptive Essays 

Determiners 

Diagramming Sentences 

Dictionaries, Thesauri (list) 

Direct Objects 

Directory of Tenses 

Discontinuous noun phrase 

Disjuncts 

Display (Vertical) Lists 

Ditransitive Verbs 

Do, Does, Did 

Do versus Make 

Double Negatives 

Double Possessives 

Double Prepositions 

Double Punctuation 

Downtoners 

Dynamic Verbs 

Editing/Proofreading 

E.g. and i.e. 

Ellipsis 

Elliptical Clauses 

E-mail (capitals) 

Emphasizers 

Emphatic Sentences 

Essay Writing 

Essential Clauses

Euphemism 

Evaluative Essays 

Examples (in essays) 

Exclamation Mark 

Expletive Constructions 

Factitive Verbs 

Family Names (plurals) 

FANBOYS 

Few and A Few 

Fewer and Less 

Finite Verbs 

First Conditional 

Five-Paragraph Essay 

Focus Adverbs 

Format Requirements 

Fragments 

Freewriting 

Fused Sentences 

Future Tenses 

Gender Problems 

Gerunds 

Gerunds vs Infinitives 

Gerund Phrases 

Gettysburg Address (parallelism) 

Going to … 

Good and Well 

GrammarPoll 

GrammarRock Lyrics 

Have, Has, and Had 

Helping Verbs 

Historical (a/an) 

Holidays (forms) 

Homonyms/Homophones 

Hyphens 

I.e. and e.g. 

Imperative Mood 

Indefinite Pronouns 

Indefinite Relative Pronouns 

Independent Clauses 

Indicative Mood 

Indirect Objects 

Indirect Questions 

Indirect Quotations 

Indirect Speech 

Infinitives 

Infinitive Phrases 

Initials 

Intensifiers (adverbs) 

Intensifiers (Unnecessary) 

Intensive Pronouns 

Interjections 

Internet (writing resource) 

Interrobang 

Interrogative Adjectives 

Interrogative Pronouns 

Intransitive Verbs 

Introductory Paragraphs 

Inversion (of subj-verb) 

Irregular Plurals 

Irregular Verb Forms 

Italics 

Its versus It’s 

Jr., Sr., etc. 

Lay, lie 

Less and Fewer 

Like versus As 

Linking Verbs 

Lists 

Literature (writing about) 

Little and A Little 

Logic 

Mass Nouns 

May and Might 

Minutes (for meetings) 

Misplaced Modifiers 

Mixed Constructions 

Mixed Metaphors 

MLA-style documentation 

Mnemonics (spelling) 

Modal Auxiliary Verbs 

Modifiers 

Modifier Placement 

Moods of Verbs 

More Than vs Over 

Mutating/Mutated Plurals 

Myself, me 

Narrative Essays 

Nonrestrictive Clauses 

Negative Adverbs 

Nominative Absolute 

Nominative Possessive 

Non-Count Nouns 

None (singular/plural) 

Non-Finite Verbs 

Nouns 

Noun Clauses 

Noun Markers 

Noun of Address 

Noun Phrases 

NOTORIOUS CONFUSABLES 

Numbered Lists 

Numbers (Using) 

Object Complements 

Objectivity (maintaining) 

Objects 

One (as a pronoun) 

Online Resources 

Outlining 

Over vs. more than 

Oxford Comma 

Packed Noun Phrases 

Paragraphs 

Parallelism 

Parentheses 

Parenthetical Elements 

Participles 

Participial Phrases 

Particles 

Parts of Speech 

Passive Gerunds 

Passive Infinitives 

Passive Participles 

Passive Voice (in verbs) 

Perfect Infinitive 

Periodic Sentences 

Periods 

Person (of pronouns) 

Personal Essays 

Personal Pronouns 

Phrasal Modals 

Phrasal Verbs 

Phrases 

Plagiarism (avoiding)

Plague Words 

Pleonasm 

Plural Noun Forms 

Plurals & Apostrophes 

Plurals of Compounds 

Point of View 

Possessives 

Possessive w/ Gerunds 

Powerpoint Presentations 

Predeterminers 

Predicate Adjectives 

Predicate Nominative 

Predicates 

Prefixes 

Preposition (end of sent.) 

Prepositions 

Prepositions (list) 

Prepositions, Superfluous 

Prepositional Phrases 

Primer Language (Avoiding) 

Process Essays 

Progressive Verbs 

Pronouns (Defined) 

Pronoun - Ant. Agrmnt 

Pronouns & Nouns Combined 

Pronoun Cases 

Pronoun Consistency 

Proofreading/Editing 

Proofreading Symbols 

Proper Adjectives 

Proper Nouns 

Punctuation 

Purpose (in writing) 

Quantifiers 

Question Marks 

Quotation Marks 

Reciprocal Pronouns 

Redundancy (Avoiding) 

Referral Form 

Relative Adverbs 

Relative Clauses 

Relative Pronouns 

Reflexive Pronouns 

Reported Speech 

Research Papers 

Restrictive Clauses 

Resulting Copulas 

Resumes 

Resumptive Modifier 

Reviews (Literary) 

Rhetorical Questions 

Run-on Sentences 

Second Conditional 

Sequence of Tenses 

Semicolons 

Sentence Combining 

Sentences (defined) 

Sentences (types) 

Sentential Clauses 

Sequence of Verbs 

Serial Comma 

Sexism in Language 

Shall and Will 

Should 

Sic 

Silent Speech 

Simple Predicates 

Simple Sentences 

Simple Subjects 

Single Quote Marks 

Slant (or Slash) 

Slash (or Virgule) 

Solidus (or Slant) 

Spelling 

Split Infinitives 

Sports Teams’ Names 

Squinting Modifiers 

Stacked Noun Phrases 

Stative Verbs 

Stylistic Fragments 

Subject Complements 

Subjects 

Subject-Verb Agreement 

Subject-Verb Inversion 

Subjunctive Mood 

Subordinate Clause 

Subordinating Conjunctions 

Summative Modifier 

Suffixes 

Superlative (Adjectives) 

Suspended Compounds 

Tag Questions 

Tenses of Verbs 

Tense Consistency 

Than and Then 

Than (in comparisons) 

That (omitted) 

That versus Which 

Thesis Statement 

Third Conditional 

Third-Person Essays 

Titles (italics, etc.) 

"To Be" Verb 

Tone 

Topic Sentence 

Toward and Towards 

Transitions (b/w sentences, par’s) 

Transitive Verbs 

Unbiased Language 

Underlining 

Understood Subjects 

Untriggered Reflexive Pron. 

Used to 

Verbals 

Verbs 

Verb Complements 

Verb Tense Sequence 

Verb Tense Directory 

Verb Tenses 

Verb Tense Consistency 

Vertical (Display) Lists 

Viewpoint Adverbs 

Virgule (or Slash) 

Vocatives 

Vocabulary (Building) 

Voice (active/passive) 

Well and Good 

Which versus That 

Who and Whom 

Will and Shall 

Will and Would 

Wordy versus Concise Sentences 

Writers (on writing) 

Writer’s Block 

Zero Articles

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Plotting by J.L. Bell

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It’s so beautiful.

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THIS

THIS IS MAGNIFICENT MY GODS

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IMPORTANT!!!

[katy-133]

123 Ideas for Character Flaws

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Basics:

Sub-genres: 

Alien Invasion: Involves aliens who invade Earth (usually).

Alternate History: Just as the name suggests, this genre deals with alternate histories. This can include traveling back in time, changing something, and returning to the changed future (such as Back to the Future).

Apocalyptic/Post-apocalyptic: This genre deals with the “end of the world” or what happens after such an event.

Artificial Intelligence: Involves artificial intelligence, usually one that becomes more “human”.

Astronaut: Deals with astronauts, often those who run into aliens or other disasters in space. The characters often die or disappear.

Biopunk: This genre is about altering genetics and DNA. These stories often take place in the near-future in which humans have been altered or in which human experimentation is common.

Cyberpunk: Involves a cyberworld or A.I. and is often set in the near-future. Blade Runner is a good example.

Detective: A cross-over between detective fiction and science fiction.

Dystopian: Dystopians are often “false utopians”, but underneath there is suffering.

Environmental: This genre focuses on the environment and threats against it.

Generation Ship: In which a society lives entirely on a ship and has been there for generations. They often know nothing of outside worlds. The ship in Wall-E is an example.

Gothic Sci-fi: Science fiction with a horror element. Think Frankenstein.

Hard Sci-fi: This genre pays special attention to scientific detail and accuracy.

Humor: This genre is light and humorous.

Kaiju: This is a Japanese sub-genre that involves a large monster as the antagonist.

Lost Worlds: As the name suggests, this genre has lost worlds or mysterious places. Lost is a prime example.

Military Sci-fi: Self-explanatory. Deals with war and military elements in a science fiction setting.

Multiverse: Involves many universes.

Robot: Involves robots as the main focus of the story.

Soft Sci-fi: This sub-genre does not put too much emphasis on scientific accuracy or detail.

Space Opera: Features adventures in space, such as Star Wars.

Steampunk: Involves Victorian-like settings with high technology.

Superhuman: Involves making humans superhuman or giving them extra abilities.

Time Travel: Self-explanatory.

Utopian: The opposite of dystopian, though characters may still see problems with this type of society. Utopians are ideal societies.

Western Sci-fi: Science fiction with Western elements (as in the Wild West). An example is Firefly.

Word Counts:

Hard Sci-fi: 90k - 100k

Space Opera: 90k - 120k

General: 80k - 115k

Middle Grade Sci-fi: 30k - 75k

Setting:

Most sci-fi takes place in the future or the near-future. Where does yours take place? Why does it take place in that time period? Once you know when it takes place, figure out the society. You’ll need to know how society got to that point and why. Was there a war? Did one country become two because of that?

Other than the time period you’ll need the actual setting. Does it take place in space? On a planet? Where on that planet? Or does the setting change because of travel?

Science:

The less you know about science, the softer your sci-fi will be. Take what subject you know most about (biology, chemistry, ecology, etc.) and use that for most of the science stuff, as long as your confident in your knowledge. However, keep it general and broad.

Technology advances more and more each day, much more than it did one hundred years ago. Establish the technology of your world and how quickly it evolves. Decide what is common place and what is rather new. Do only certain people get certain technologies? Why?

With more advances in science comes better medicine and probably longer life. Think about how long your characters are likely to live and establish what medicines are available (like if there is a cure for cancer or if certain diseases have been completely wiped out).

More:

Are We Going Somewhere Nice?

Time, Distance, and Cost in Science Fiction

Making Believable Future Technologies

Magic and Science Fiction

Time and Holidays

Axial Tilt

The Edge of Thought

Putting the Science in Your Science Fiction

How to be Memorably Wrong in Science Fiction

Putting Your Stars in Their Places

Animals in Science Fiction

Ten Laws of Good Science Fiction

Writing Science Fiction Articles

How to Write Science Fiction

5 Tips for Writing Science Fiction

World Building Links

World Building in Science Fiction

World Building for Sci Fi

How to Write Good Science Fiction

How to Write Science Fiction

Reading:

Best Dystopian and Post-apocalyptic Books

Upcoming Books of 2012 and 2013

Best Steampunk Books

Top 100 SF

Best SF with a Female Protagonist

Non-White Protagonists in SF, Fantasy, Horror, and Paranormal Romance

Underrated SF

Best Erotic SF

[danreviewsstuff]

Have you ever heard of "Gutters"? This is a really good fanfic btw ;u;

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6122026/1/Gutters

I've read it before, and it is certainly a good fic!!!

[danreviewsstuff]

Blood Raining Night Chapter 28: Weird fetish shit and romance (Alt title: I'm back!!!)

I have some free time, so I decided to review this once and for all

Thanks to recolorscentral for submitting!

Hentai warning...there's an explanation for it but its kinda hidden >,,< like symbolism

Um... okay?

thank you for the wait! i had like half of it done for a long time but the fanime is taking up so much of my time ^^' and school

I know right?

--------------------------------------------- Chapter 28 - Caramelized Tears of Blood Reicheru could only feel the clones hands rest upon her shoulders but she knew it was a clone because her voiced sounded exactly like hers.

Aren't clones supposed to be like you?

I mean, clones are exact copies of you???

"You're willing to help me?" Reicheru rested her metal hands on her clone's shoulders. "Only as much are your willing to help yourself." She said with a mysterious voice, like a sword shiethed in a hilt hidden from the eye.

Ah yes, I missed those misplaced metaphors.

Reicheru shook her head frusterated and confused, "what do you mean? I've been trying to help myself but you know where my baby girl is! Please help me!" "You mean...OUR baby girl." From the next walls came a rattle and a shake. Reicheru could hear Yuki's voice above the wind faintly crying like raindrops upon a tin roof of a shed.

THAT ISN'T FAINTLY

THAT'S NOT A FAINT SOUND

THAT'S MORE LIKE WAKING YOU UP AT 2 AM IN THE MORNING SOUND

ARE YOU DEAF? 

"Seba..." She heard hercry. "What is he doing to her?? I have no time for this you have to tell me where my daughter is so I can save Yuki and get Tenshikuzu back! Yuki!" She cried, "I'm coming for you be careful!" "Don't worry about her she's knee deep in it."

Knee deep with what exactly

The clone said lowly. "The only way you can get your daughter back is if you learn to love." Reicheru's eyes sparked, "I know how to love!" "But you don't love everyone." The clode put her hand on Reicheru's eyeless cheeks. "You need to learn to love yourself." she closed her eyes and went in for a kiss. Their lips met like the wip on the ass of a submissive beast boy.

"I've never loved myself before...not like this!" Reicheru's ears began to twitch uncontrollably. "Do I have to do this?"

Oh

"We're going to love us hard." the clone took Reicheru by the neck and pushes her up agaisnt the cold steel wall.

Oh?

"This will bring more love into your heart." She snaked her hand up Reicheru's belly and to her chest to gently squeeze her bob.

'to gently squeeze her bob'

?????

WHAT

Reicheru accepted her own advances and hugged the clone. The rubbed noses and continued kissing, their hot soggy breath blowing on their delicate skin. Reicheru put her hands on her clone's butt and rubbed it furiously.  "I never realized how nice my ass was." Reicheru laughed. "See? You can love yourself. Now find out what you love about your face."

I don't think this was the type of 'loving yourself' I had in mind

Also HOW THE FUCK IS THIS SYMBOLIC

Reicheru kissed her clone all over the face and right on the tip of her nose. "I love my nose and my lips." She kissed herslef again. She placed her hands neatly over her bumpy tits. "I remind me of my mom. I miss her." She then rand the surface of her face over the surface of the belly and back up to the head. She suddenly felt her clone's twig like fingers surrounding the outside of her cave like eels trying to get in. She did things to her and it mildy hurt. "nyow!" Reicheru squeaked. "That kinda hurt."

No shit

"It's called tough love." The clone deviously smiled. "You haven't loved all of yourself yet." "Haven't I??" Reicheru sighed. "You need to love our ass." With a big grin bending over she said. "No...you have been in that test tube for a long time Tenshikuzu only knows what's in there!" Reicheru quivered like a marionette, "sure that sounds good!" But then her clone exploded!

WHAT????

Her head flew off in a grousome way and rolled over to the other side of the floor. "Holy shit!" Reicheru's heart rate went up! She walked over to the clone's head. The clone's lips parted to talk... "Your little girl is right above us on the surface of the earth. Thank you...for loving you..." Her head broke down to a million little peices and flew away.

SERIOUSLY THOUGH

WHAT THE FUCK JUST HAPPENED

Reicheru took this opportunity to break down the walls to save Yuki! As she burst through the door she screamed, "YUKI ARE YOU OKAY?" As the wall crumbles she could see Yuki on the other side. Sebastian was busy piling food after food into Yuki's mouth! She was covered in cake and frosting and pudding.

Oh now inflation/force feeding fetish

Great

"Oh Kami..." Yuki wiped off her mouth. "He wouldn't stop feeling me this shit. But I actually kind of like it! We need to find your daughter!" Sebastian looked at Yuki longingly shyly pulling at his gloves, "Can I come too?" "Of course!" She grabbed Sebastian and Reicheru's hand, "We're going through the roof Reicheru! Prepare to punch it into oblivion!" They all rocketed off the ground and burst through a mile of cement and goider. They all tumbled out onto the earth.  Sebastian stood up and dushted himself off, "I didn't like working for that freak anyway." "WELL WELL WELL...How the fuck did you guys end up all the way out here?" It was Sesshomaru the Vampire Lord and he was at a table with a figure under a sheet on it. The sheet was blood stained with sadness and death. 

Of course!

"I've had enough of you all! And my surgeon slash butler betrayed me!" He took out a scythe and spun it around. "Let's part!" He nimbly ran up to Reicheru. Yuki threw out her wing and uplifted Sesshomaru the Vampire lord into the sky. As he sailed through the air like a white butterfly and as he came down he landed on Reicheru's shoulders, slashing her on the cheek with his scythe. She kicked up her leg and smacked him right on the node, breaking it and causing blood to sqirt out. "AGH! You bitch! I'll rip your ass out!"  "Too bad you weren't with me earlier." She smiled and threw a punch at him.

"No, but your was there anyway." Sesshomaru slapped Reicheru right on the forehead.

Wuss

He went in for another slap and she caught his ham. "Party is over." She cooly looked at him, with eyes like a silent river. She reached out and wrapped her fingers around Sesshomaru's cranium. She snapped his head to the right side breaking his neck. She wiggled his head around a bit until the bones were disconnected and then ripped his head of and threw it anway. A voilent waterfall of blood gushed from his neck hole.

Wow, that was unnecessarily violent 

Quickly, Reicheru rushed to the body on the table. She lifted up the sheets and sure enough Elaine was there. She looked pale and peaceful...

So, she's sleeping or dead??

"No!" Reicheru snatched her up into her arms. Blood tears ran over her supple cheeks. She caressed the side of Elaine's face and gently rubbed it with her thumb.

She might not be dead y'know?

(though I might doubt so)

Yuki came up behind Reicheru and held her shoulders. "She's still alive Rei-chan. Okay? Listen...Lets take her home. Lets provide her a good home." Yuki wiped the tears from Reicheru's face. "Your rigt." Reicheru said, "I haven't been much of a mom since she was born. And to think, i nearly lost her." "HEY GUYS!" Minna-chan was waving her head at the foursome.

Foursome??

"I have a boat! We can all go back home!" "Lets go." Reicheru said as she carried Elaine onto the boat. Yuki looked towards Sebastian and then quickly looked away. She spoke softly like a gentle whisper, "Do you really want to come with us?" Sebastian smiled and blushed. "Of course I do." He said. "I want to feed you more cake."

Okay Sebastian, enough with the fetish stuff please

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Can you review this story I'm writing Dan?

Sure, just submit it!

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did you know that there is a chapter 28 of blood raining night? would you like a synopsis so you won't have to go through something that awful again?

Nah it's okI'd rather wait till I can review again so that I can experience the horrorBut thanks for the offer!

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So hey look I have this sheet and it’s really handy if you want to develop the basics of a character

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it looks really simple at first but this is actually amazingly useful for getting to know your own characters

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Sorry for not going on for a long time haha

I promise I'll revive this blog after my mocks

Haha I keep forgetting haha,,,,

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So there's this character of mine, he's popular in his school for two reasons : his good grades and good looks, and because he got adopted by his father's old friend, which is a very rich and well-known man. So some people want to be his friends just so they could get closer to his rich caretaker. Does that make him a stu ? If there's anything I should change please tell me. ;3;

No way man, he is not a stu! That is a realistic situation in my books!

I don't know about his personality through, so maybe you should submit it and I'll try to get back to you!

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Sorry I haven't been on for a while, school is a nightmare and I don't really get the chance to review stuff haha

I promise to give you guys a double update this Saturday I promise