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[findoster]

It makes it a lot more stressful to wait till the last minute to write an essay because you have to cram it in fast which can make the quality of work not as good.

[baylacutrie]

Journal 13

I can use my writing process outside of the classroom for writing essays for job applications or anything like that. I can also use this process to help me organize my thoughts or ideas because the writing process includes the organization of ideas and information.

[erinthomas02]

I agree it would be helpful for writing applications for future jobs and is very useful to organize ideas and thoughts and keep track of information.

[findoster]

I agree with you the writing process could be very useful for a job application because it allows you to organize it better. It also can be used to organize your thought and find a better way to organize the information you retain.

[findoster]

Journal #13

In my opinion the greatest translation from the writing process to work outside the classroom is brainstorming.

Before you begin a project of any kind it is best to sit down and think about all of the different possible ways to approach the topic or situation at hand.

Brainstorming allows you to think of all of the different scenarios and decide which one will play out the best in the situation. Because of this brainstorming Is the part of the writing process that can translate best to other topics outside the classroom in my opinion.

[findoster]

Journal 12

For me the most challenging assignment this semester was the rhetorical analysis. I had never really done much work with rhetorical analysis’ before now so learning how to do them was somewhat confusing. This semester my writing has developed in many ways. I have become a lot better of a writer, learned a lot of new writing techniques, and become a lot better at grammar. Before this semester I placed commas randomly and it was an issue but I have become a lot better at knowing when to use them.

[cheynedaniels]

Journal #11

In the article, “To Save The Climate, Look To The Oceans,” the author does not use ethos enough. By using ethos more she can develop her ideas more and make her information and article more credible. I will be using this as my counter argument in my infographic. Ironically she also didn’t involve a counter argument in her article, being that incorporating some of her ideas and solutions may affect the environment even more depending on locations as they can get in the way of migratory patterns. I also am considering including that.

[findoster]

I think you did a great job of refuting the argument in your journal. It was a good observation that she could add more ethos to enhance her argument. I think it is very interesting how you pointed out the fact that she didn’t have a counter argument of her own. I don’t see too much else that needs to be added, good job!

[findoster]

Journal 11

For my counter argument in my infographic I am talking about how the author could have done a better job at using more exact facts and statistics. While she did use some she could have been more exact on which states in the country were effected the most and talked about the types of people that are most affected. 

While she does need more specific examples she does use a lot of evidence to prove her points regardless.

She gives off facts and statistics about fracking and how it effects humans in a negative and positive way.

The author uses logos and ethos to persuade her readers which is anyone that cares about the environment and the safety of human life.

[taliannabell7]

It is very important to evaluate every source you use for credible references and information that is provided. One of the most important things I was reminded of from reading “Evaluating Sources” was seeing when the article was created and how current the information provided is. Knowledge from the article changes the way i read an article because before I can believe what I am reading I need to make sure it is credible. This knowledge can change the way I look at articles and information from the web because I need to make sure I know the difference between the writers own personal truth and facts.

[findoster]

You made a really good point about checking credibility by looking at the date it was published. Information changes over time so you need to make sure you have current or the most recent information to make sure it is trustworthy. Without information being credible you have no way of knowing if there is bias or if it is even true in the slightest bit.

[findoster]

Journal 10

It is important to evaluate a source because you can make sure you understand everything and make sure you are reading correct information. The most important factor in doing so is to check the credibility of the source to make sure it does not give off false information. Because of this retained knowledge I will now make sure to look very closely at sources I study to make sure I can trust what they say. It will change the way I look for articles on the web because I will now be on a more specific search for articles with high credibility and a lack of bias.

[annadwhite3]

Journal 9

https://www.weforum.org/agenda/2019/08/here-are-5-reasons-why-the-ocean-is-so-important/

I found this article called, “Here are 5 reasons why the ocean is so important”. This article is written by Sean Fleming who reaches out to his audience about the five main reasons why the ocean is crucial to life on earth. This article would appeal to anybody who is interested in protecting our oceans and to the age group of older teens and up. He goes through each topic in order 1-5 and provides multiple statistics for each one. He even provides a graph for the reader under the topic, “it helps regulate the climate”. This article definitely supports the argument of my original article. They both connect ways how the oceans are so important to our climate and ways we use the ocean in a positive way. 

[emsjournals]

Your title page design is so pretty!! It made me actually check out the article, which was really interesting to read. I love how simple your title page is, and the fish in the back are really cute!! 

[findoster]

I really enjoy the design of your article because it is good looking and makes you think of the topic. The article you read seems very useful because the climate change is a big problem and this offers a way the ocean can help. It seems like it is a very reliable source to use and I think you did a very good job of making your title slide very neat and organized. Good job!

[findoster]

https://www.investopedia.com/ask/answers/011915/what-are-effects-fracking-environment.asp 

Melissa Horton wrote this article about fracking and its dangers for people that care about the environment. It tells of the dangers of fracking for the environment, humanity, and wild lands. The purpose of thew article is to convince people that fracking is bad and a serious problem in the world. The format puts it into different points about the problems of fracking and what the dangers are for different areas. Horton does a great job of putting the information into different sections and describing each one in detail.

[cheynedaniels]

Journal #8

The purpose of this image is to display the damage caused by the wildfires in California. The intended audience is for people looking to show support or gain knowledge on the fires sweeping through California. The image uses mostly pathos as it displays a woman standing in what looks to be the remnants of her home, which appeals to the viewers emotional side making them feel bad for this woman.

The picture shows contrast as it has the trees that are alive in the background and then what looks to be fallen trees on the ground throughout the rest of the image.The photograph demonstrates alignment as the woman is strategically in the forefront of the picture and all of the damage lies behind her. It also includes proximity as it has a large open space surrounding the woman and trees very far in the background. However, it doesn’t really involve repetition other than the colors being dark and lifeless.

This reflects my understanding of the my subject as the photograph shows the damage done by the fires that have become more common and larger in size due to climate change, which is one of the largest environmental issues that our planet faces today.

[findoster]

This was a great image to use to show the effects on climate change and it does a great job of showing contrast, repetition, and proximity. I can see exactly where you are coming from with your analysis for all three different categories. It seems like there is a lot of contrast among images relating to change in the environment because most images will show what the damage has caused compared to what it should be. This is the case in your picture with the living trees in the background of the destroyed ones, and in my pictures case because it shows what the ocean looks like normally (blue and beautiful) compared to the gross water involved in an oil spill.

[findoster]

Journal 8

This image shows a ship that has leaked a large amount of oil followed by a man attempting to clean up the oil. The purpose of this picture is to show how gross and terrible an oil spill is for the ocean and it’s wildlife. The man is even wearing a mask to protect himself as he attempts to protects the oceans wildlife from this large amount of oil. It shows the affect of these terrible disasters.

I found this image on a website to promote the devastation of oil spills. It shows just how large the spill is and shows how gross it is to clean it and for the sea, to live in it. The intended audience for this image is anyone who cares about the protection of our oceans and the life that exists in it. It is intended for people who don’t understand the devastation that oil spills cause. So in a sense the intended audience is anyone. The purpose of the image is to show how terrible an oil spill can be for the ocean and how much it can spread. It is also intended to show how hard it is to fix these oil spills and how gross and next to impossible it is to truly fix one of these spills.

The person that created this duel image intended to use pathos in order for people to understand the horror of these oil spills. It uses pathos by showing an image of the oil spill, then showing the effort and disgust people go through to try to save the ocean and its wildlife from these tragedies. It makes anyone that sees it feel emotional about the event and make them feel as well that a change needs to be made to prevent further oil spills from occurring.

The image shows contrast because the image is from far enough out that you can not only see the gross oily water, but you can also see the crystal clear blue water surrounding it. It shows the sheer difference in the water when it is clean versus when oil has been spilt. It makes you realize how gross and horrible oil spill are.

The image affects my understanding of oil spills because it makes me realize how tragic they can be. It completely changes the ocean around it and affects the wildlife is drastic ways. It also affects my understanding of the subject because I see the great lengths people go through to attempt to clean up these spills.

[baylacutrie]

Journal 7

While reading “How to Write the Perfect Sentence”, there was one thing that really stuck out to me. It was when the Author said, “A line of words should unfold in space and time, not reveal itself all at once, for the simple reason that it cannot be read all at once.” This stuck out to me because I feel as if I tend to shove as much information in the smallest amount of space as possible. I am not quite sure why I do this or when I started doing this, but after reading that, it made me realize that I should try to “slow down” my writing. I mean that when I am writing, I should space out my information and fill that space with simple writing so that the reader can absorb all the information rather than being all of a sudden overwhelmed with a pile of information all in like two sentences. 

[erinthomas02]

I agree I usually try to put as much information in one sentence as possible. I always try to break up my sentences more or take out words that are not needed as much and “slowing down” when writing would be very helpful. 

[findoster]

I also agree with this. I feel as if I often find myself trying to pack as much as I can into a sentence. I need to slow down and write more sentences. It is more important to be clear than to jam everything in together.

[findoster]

Journal 7

In the article, “How to Write the Perfect Sentence” one thing that really stuck with me was that the perfect sentence should be easy to understand, but sound slightly odd. The reason this really stuck with me is because I can fully understand how it is true. If you are trying to write a good sentence you want the reader to be able to understand it easily. But just because it is easy to read doesn’t make it memorable. The added factor of it being slightly weird to read makes the reader remember that sentence specifically later on. ““Nothing tastes as good as skinny feels” – a terrible message to send about dieting and body image, but a well-turned sentence, surely.” This sentence does a really good job of expressing this idea because it is well written but it is very weird so it really sticks in your mind later on.

[annadwhite3]

Journal 6

I remember doing peer reviews in high school but I have not done one in a very long time. I really liked when my classmates took the time to dive deep into my paper and give me feedback that I could actually use. Comments that I could read and then go back to a specific spot on my paper and change were the most helpful. Whether that was reorganizing my paper, tweaking my thesis, or grammar corrections. One thing I did not think was helpful was when my peers would just comment “great job!” or “I like this sentence”. Those are nice comments, but if you like something specific about the paper say WHAT you liked about it so the author knows what exactly they did good and they can take note of.

[erinthomas02]

I also have not done a peer review in a little while because it was done a lot more in high school when writing papers or stories for class. I agree that when getting a peer review hen the comments were just saying they liked what I wrote were nice were also not very helpful in what I could improve on. I like specific notes on what I could change and work on as well because it allows me to go back and change parts of my paper. 

[findoster]

I really agree with you on both of these parts. I like getting useful information about what to fix because it is actually very helpful. But getting small comments saying stuff like good job is just not helpful and doesn’t do the author any good. It can be very frustrating getting feedback that does not do you any good. It is much more helpful when the feedback you get is helpful for your paper.

[findoster]

Journal 6

When going through the peer review process there are multiple things I find helpful that my peers can give me such as a grammar review, quote analysis, and help with introductory and conclusion paragraphs.

Sometimes when you read through your own essay there a tons of grammar issue that you will not notice, but if you get a second set of eyes on the essay they may realize those mistakes and be able to fix them for you.

When you are analyzing quotes sometimes it can be hard to come up with a good way to do it that makes sense. But if somebody else looks over it they may offer a different perspective on how to make it flow better and make more sense when reading it.

Introductory and conclusion paragraphs can sometimes be very difficult to write because it is summing up your entire essay in both of the paragraphs. If you struggle with it perhaps your peers could offer a way to make it more clear and concise.

[jaylagreen]

In the article, Give Black Households More Economic Power by Nick Maggiulli, the articles argument was successfully, and in the article the author uses logos and ethos. I believe that the intended are people who want to learn more about what African Americans have to do with pertaining to median net worth compared to other races but also the economic inequality they experience.

[ryan-stoney]

Your thesis was very easy to follow, and I can tell the direction you are going with you essay. To me I do not see anyway to change it to benefit it. 

[findoster]

I really liked your thesis it was very well flowing and was easy to understand what the topic is about. I as well don’t see much change needed in your thesis, good job!