Snarry: Everyone's had that one booty call they wish they never made. This is the story of Harry's drunken booty call gone wrong. -tsunamihatake
Hi there! So this story was very well done, and you're obviously a very good writer. This may sound strange but I liked your description of Severus' home, just because fan fiction writers tend to overlook the setting and focus on the interactions between characters. Additionally, I found a depth within the setting (hopefully you intended for there to be depth) and I liked that as well. Vocabulary was stunning and characterization was spot on. The dreaming part did confuse me though and I'm still uncertain as to whether or not the scene within the dream actually happened? I got lost for that bit I guess haha. One more thing, you tend to focus on the eyes of the characters a lot? You always have a unique description and such for them, but I would suggest avoiding that sort of repetition. Anyway, despite slight confusion I followed the plot and I was satisfied with the ending! Overall, it was a really nice story!
-Allie xx.

















