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Most individuals will argue that universities and colleges do not contribute to or increase mental health problems. Having poor mental health can happen to anyone, and students should seek their resources and support as colleges are not responsible for pre-existing mental issues. The article “The University Should Not Be Solely Blamed for Students’ Poor Mental Health” mentions, “many people like myself come to Cambridge with pre-existing mental health conditions…blaming Cambridge does not allow people to tackle their mental health at their root cause.” It mentions how Cambridge should not be held accountable for students' mental health because school is not. We can agree that college has no role in giving access and does not play a factor in students' mental health. In the article, it mentions that most students already have pre-existing mental health issues. Although this can be true, students face many hardships and can gain a mental illness, which is commonly stress and anxiety. The cause for students feeling mentally unstable can be financial hardship, academic pressure, and accessibility, which are caused mainly by the school.

- Give a brief description (1-2) of what changes you made and why. Does this revision sample reflect your learning and growth in this course? From another course? What are you proud of? What are you still working on?

The changes on this paragraph was strengthening my counter argument. This sample reflects what I’ve learned in the course and my growth because I feel that my rebuttal and counter argument have gotten. I am proud of my formatting, but I would also like to work on strengthening my paragraph structure.

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Mental health issues, also known as mental health disorders, are on a broad scale of conditions that can affect one's daily life. The effects can include your emotions, behavior, and overall well-being. Many individuals face mental illnesses, but incoming college students are vulnerable to mental issues because of the variety of factors they face transitioning to college. The college takes lots of responsibility and dedication, which can be difficult for most students to manage as they are also juggling their issues. There are many causes of stress and anxiety in college students, including financial hardship, academic pressure, and accessibility. There are many barriers to students accessing mental health support, and colleges should provide more accessible options. Creating more accessible and convenient opportunities for students can help them succeed academically and encourage self-care.

- This paragraph is my introduction paragraph and I feel that it is a strong piece of my paper. I am more confident now when it comes to writing a thesis statement and how to begin the introduction.

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Writing Sample- Blog Post

Gonzales, Arianna. “Exploring Personal Mental Illness Stigma Among College Students of Diverse Backgrounds.” California State University, Sacramento, 2022. Print.

The scholarly article shows a study exploring personal mental illness in college students. This article is useful in my research because it mentions the barriers that are faced by college students including personal experiences. This is an academic source that is credible because it is peer-reviewed as well as written by a university.

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They Say I Say Chapter 4

Chapter 16 of part 4 talks about how you can engage the audience in your writing. Literature contributes by showing the meaning and significance of debates. The chapter mentions different templates that can introduce a topic and involve work by a classmate or teacher. Literal works do not spell out their own argument or explicit thesis statement.

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They Say I Say Chapter 6 Exercise

3. Read over something you’ve written that makes an argument. Work with a partner to review your draft to see if you’ve anticipated and responded to any objections. Use these questions to guide your review: Have you anticipated all the likely objections to your argument? Whom, if anyone, have you attributed the objections? Have you represented the objections fairly? Have you answered them well enough, or do you think you now need to qualify your own argument?

Does the introduction of the naysayer strengthen your argument? Why or why not? Yes, it will strengthen the argument showing credibility towards the scientists and Bakersfield's preparedness.

"Bakersfield has taken measures in preparing for earthquakes however, I do believe that there are still lessons that need to be" implemented into its earthquake resilience and preparedness.

Naysayer- Here many scientists will object that Bakersfield is prepared for an earthquake.

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Midterm Reflection- Blog Post

espond to the following questions in your blog for the remainder of class:

What has been difficult for you so far this semester (academic or otherwise)? Why?

What has been easy for you? Why?

What has surprised you? Why?

If you could start the semester over, what would you change? Why?

What are you looking forward to for the second half of the semester? Why?

What changes have you noticed about yourself so far? What have you learned about yourself?

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Rhetorical Analysis- Practice Exercise 10/13

What is the purpose of the text? The text aims to show the negative impact of social media on people.

Who is the target audience? How do you know? I believe the targeted audience would be people highly reliant on social media. I know this because the article mentions examples of how teenagers have become reliant on followers and how much time they waste on social media.

What is the author's main argument? The author's main argument is social media becoming increasingly prevalent in modern society and its negative impacts on people.

How would you describe the tone of the text? Provide examples (quotes words or phrases) of the tone. I would consider the tone of the text as informative and relatable. The author mentions relatable scenarios to engage the audience

Is this tone effective for the author's target audience and purpose? Why or why not? The tone is effective and engages the targeted audience due to it being relatable when mentioning wasting time on social media.

Ethos:"As Copeland (2011) explored in a Slate article, to find out if this supposition is true, Alex Jordan, a psychology student studying for his PhD at Stanford, and other researchers conducted an experiment to try to gauge how participants judged their peers’ emotions." // Pathos: "searching for happiness and fun, users find loneliness and sadness. In trying to make new friends, they lose their close friends. In seeking encouragement, they find stress and addiction instead. In this new age of social media, the social platforms’ users are the only ones who stand to lose."// Logos: "Studies show that a strong relationship exists between these emotions and social media. The consequences that these social networks will bestow on society—whether good or bad—will come down to one choice: whether users can realize how much is too much."

Do you think the author's argument was effective and convincing? Why or why not? I do believe that the author does a good job of backing up the claim on social media's negative impacts.

What does the article make you think about or question? What would you like to explore more after reading this? What I question more after reading this article is how social media can be a waste of time. After reading this, I hope to manage my time and prioritize what's important rather than spend time on social media.

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A Few of Your Favorite Things- Blog Entry

I am an expert in talking about cats, and there are many points I can teach about why they are the best pets. I enjoy talking about this topic because I truly believe that cats are underrated and many people do not like them. Cats are super grateful and can be very friendly depending on how you raise them. I used to be against having a cat as a pet but when I got my first cat my mind completely changed. Cat just mind their own business and are not as much of a hassle as dogs.

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They Say I Say Ch 9

There is a huge variation in the return to education. It is likely to depend on factors such as attendance, field of study, determining student graduation, and occupations.

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Chapter & Exercise

3. Read over a draft of your own writing—a paragraph or an essay—and then respond to the following questions. How do you distinguish your own voice from the argument(s) you are summarizing, quoting, and responding to? How could you use a template from this chapter to clarify the distinction between your argument and their argument(s) Where could you use first-person voice markers or embedded references in your writing?

The way that I distinguish my own voice from the arguments is by summarizing and quoting what others are saying. The template that I have implemented from the chapter to clarify the distinction is "the evidence shows that earthquakes are prone to happen in seismic zones which proves that people should be prepared." I could use the first-person voice markers or embedded refrences when different people are speaking or different arguments are being made.

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1. The topic that I picked was movie genres. I picked this topic because I enjoy watching television especially Disney movies. It is important to me because watching Disney films is a part of my childhood that I like to remember. I have learned that kids movies share inspirational messages and are have a huge impact on kids. What I have found most interesting about this topic is that Disney films can help strength a child’s cognitive and behavioral development. They can have many lessons on love and friendships which are helpful for developing children.

2. It has been difficult to brainstorm while finding information that is difficult. I feel like personal opinions and experiences come naturally when brainstorming. I feel like so far writing assignments have been a lot similar to the ones in high school. The only thing that has been different is the organization on the essay. For the next step I will work on my thesis statement and introduction paragraph.

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"They Say I Say" Ch 2

Exercise 3:

a. How does this summary fall prey to the “closest cliché syndrome” (p.35)?

This summary falls prey to the "closest cliche syndrome" because the author is being misunderstood and the writer is assuming the author's point of view. The writing is misunderstanding Ben Adler point of view on climate change.

b. What’s a better verb to use than “say”? Why do you think so?

I believe a better verb to use could be "stated". I believe that this sounds better than what is being said in the sentence. It sounds more professional and using the word "stated" shows how it is a claim.

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