✨Hello there, super star!
I read the first chapter of your fanfic, and I must say, it is amazing!
The way you write is very gripping, I am totally captivated.
I simply can NOT wait for the next chapter, deary.
Mousey's voice (I am using that nickname) is very believable, and, honestly, I wouldn't have acted any other way, either.
That skele is so very obviously Killer. I just love how your writing just brings him to life. He is portrayed so wonderfully. And so is horror, as well.
I can't find any flaws in your writing, dear.
The only complaint I have is, I need more.
Jokes aside, I hope the second chapter has a bit of description as to what the room looks like? My mind doesn't seem to be making the correct mental image (I think of a canvas white room with just that one armoire, i know that's wrong)
Oh, and, thank you for making the Mc gender-neutral, most first make them a girl, so, not all audiences can really tap in to the story.
Yet another point to prove that this fanfic is high quality.
Kudos to you, for such a passionate, and lovely first chapter, super star.✨
AAAAAAA OHH MY GOODNESS!! ‼️🌟🧡
thank you soooo so much for all of your kind words and feedback!! ;w; it means SO much to me and made me so happy to read! 🧡
one of my biggest worries when writing was if the voice sounded somewhat realistic for the situation - which is why i think it took me nearly three years to finish the first chapter LOL so that brings me much relief and joy to hear! :>
also shhhh who said it was killer..? (he's my favorite to write and i'm so glad it was obvious through his dialogue and actions alone, thank you so much jshfjsjx)
also also! good point to bring up!
i left scenic descriptions in the first chapter very vague on purpose - chapter two plans to be exploratory and description heavy!
but i entirely understand when the brain can’t imagine the scene, i struggle with that often and typing up the layout is actually my favorite thing EVER because of it HAH
this is something I sketched up about a year ago based off the first two chapters (I wonder what those papers are…🧐)
please don’t mind the messiness, but it was concept and visualization to how I saw the room and the atmosphere of it!
the thing in the bottom left corner is the edge of a bed, there’s a desk on the left side, a bookshelf full of plants and random assortments on the right, and random things scattering the walls.
I drew this with the intention of it being kind of from the pov of the wardrobe - so this is the view Reader (Mousey hehe) has in the first chapter! I’d just imagine the view lower to the floor and it being like a Narnia wardrobe, so obviously a little more boxed in.
I hope that helps with the visualization going forward!
and thank you so much once again for all of your kind words and encouragement!! this genuinely made me so excited to write the second chapter and I’m hoping to finish it by the end of the week! 🫡
have an absolutely wonderful day and please take care!! 🌟🧡
