when love is gone, where does it go?

WHEN LOVE IS GONE, WHERE DOES IT GO?

[supersymmetrys]

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Artemis, 21, she/her

English and Spanish speaker

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In the Angel's City ; a Hollywood drama. (Intro post.) #Tag

Roadrunners (drama) ; A road trip story.

Neon Bible (horror) ; A Mexican horror story. (Intro post.) #Tag

Game & Performance (drama) ; A drama set in a dreamy Greek setting. #Tag

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[nondelphic]

the first draft won’t kill you. it will just chew you up and spit you out and make you better. like emotionally. or like. worse. but in a literary way.

[supersymmetrys]

i've been writing lately!! unfortunately it's been a lot of fanfic but hey... it's something!

[midnight-stalker]

Saving writing tips from tumblr

Never actually referring back to them 🤭

[rubymemes]

𝐀𝐑𝐑𝐄𝐒𝐓𝐄𝐃 𝐃𝐄𝐕𝐄𝐋𝐎𝐏𝐌𝐄𝐍𝐓 𝐏𝐑𝐎𝐌𝐏𝐓𝐒 (a collection of prompts from the TV show “Arrested Development”, feel free to adjust phrasing and gendered terms as necessary)

"Tell me the truth."

"I’m a monster!"

"I don't criticize you."

"Are you serious?"

"Look, I screwed up, ok?"

"Why didn't you tell me that?"

"What's the matter with you?"

"I’ve made a huge tiny mistake."

"Another brilliant idea, Einstein."

"I hear the jury’s still out on science."

"I’m a scholar. I enjoy scholarly pursuits."

"So what are your plans for this evening?"

"You're just jumping right into this, huh?"

"This Jesus character, he was shredded!"

"Why are you squeezing me with your body?"

"If you're suggesting I play favorites, you're wrong."

"I mean it’s one banana. What could it cost, $10?"

"I don't know who that is and I don't care to find out."

"She thinks I'm too critical. That's another fault of hers."

"Well, I'd rather be dead in California than alive in Arizona."

"I want to cry so bad, but I don't think I can spare the moisture."

"I don’t understand the question and I won’t respond to it."

"Tell you what we're gonna do: "Rock Paper Scissors" for it."

"There’s a good chance I may have committed some light treason."

"I deceived you. "Tricked" makes it sound like we have a playful relationship."

"Mom always told us to curl up in a ball and remain motionless when confronted."

"If you weren’t all the way on the other side of the room, I’d slap your face."

"If that's a veiled criticism about me, I won't hear it and I won't respond."

[cali-xicana-deactivated20150717]

[isabellebissonrouthier]

Sometimes writing a first draft is delightful and eloquent and sometimes you're like DESCRIBE THE BREATH AS BREATHY AND JUST FUCKING MOVE ON

[rubymemes]

𝐇𝐔𝐍𝐆𝐄𝐑 𝐆𝐀𝐌𝐄𝐒 𝐈𝐍𝐒𝐏𝐈𝐑𝐄𝐃 𝐏𝐑𝐎𝐌𝐏𝐓𝐒 (a collection of prompts inspired by the universe of the Hunger Games. Feel free to adjust phrasing and gendered terms as necessary.)

𝐓𝐇𝐄 𝐓𝐑𝐈𝐁𝐔𝐓𝐄𝐒

"One more kill."

"I have to win."

"Run!"

"I'm scared…"

"I'll keep you safe."

"I volunteer as tribute."

"We should be allies."

"Is that all you can do?"

"You don't scare me."

"I don't need weak allies."

"I don't want to die in there."

"The odds are not really in our favor."

"I'm more than just a piece in their Games."

"Are we gonna fight, or are we gonna chat?"

"I'll bring pride to my district."

"I don't have much competition here."

𝐓𝐇𝐄 𝐌𝐄𝐍𝐓𝐎𝐑𝐒

"Let's talk strategy."

"Smile for the cameras."

"I'm here to help you."

"You need sponsors."

"You're not going to die."

"You're gonna have to trust me."

"I know how you're feeling."

"I'm not losing a tribute again."

"Here's some advice: stay alive."

"Just try to appeal to the crowd."

"Don't even try to go to the cornucopia."

"This mentoring is very taxing stuff."

"Unless you want to die, you should listen to me."

"You're gonna have to be a lot more likable than that."

𝐓𝐇𝐄 𝐕𝐈𝐂𝐓𝐎𝐑𝐒

"I earned this."

"I deserved this win."

"I'm the luckiest, aren't I?"

"No one is a victor by chance."

"I did what I had to do to win."

"You never really leave the arena."

"Every day it gets a little easier."

"The nightmares never really end..."

"I have nothing to lose, now."

"I can never truly go home."

"They've hurt everyone I love."

"You belong to the Capitol now."

"I'm so grateful to the Capitol."

"I'm so rich and famous and miserable."

"No decent person ever wins the Games."

"Are you really surprised? I'm the best!"

𝐓𝐇𝐄 𝐂𝐀𝐏𝐈𝐓𝐎𝐋

"Manners!"

"I'm rooting for you!"

"What is this outfit?"

"I love this district."

"Feathers are so last year."

"Happy Hunger Games!"

"You're my favorite victor!"

"I can't believe you're wearing that."

"Let the Hunger Games begin!"

"I'm wearing the latest trends."

"I think someone's a little nervous."

"Who's your favorite tribute this year?"

"Are you betting on anyone?"

"May the odds be ever in your favor."

"The Games are so boring this year."

"I am so excited for the Hunger Games."

"If I could bet on someone, I'd bet on you."

[writinglyra]

Rewrite Tag

Thank you @njnetails for tagging me in this.

Rules: Rewrite the given lines in your own style.

My Lines:

The boy stepped closer, leaving behind a trail of wet footprints. Unfortunately, one of his shoes decided to give up on living and lost its sole on the way. His skin was peeking through the holes of his white tank top, and the stains on it made it seem like they were actually part of the clothing. His jeans seemed to have been mauled and torn apart by dogs, even though that wasn’t actually the case. In a brawl, you grab onto whatever you can get your dirty hands on, and his poor jeans got caught in the crossfire.

My Rewrite:

He soaked the floor under him as he approached, a tattered wreck of a boy. One of his shoes was soleless, lost in the fight. And his tank top was ripped and stained red enough to reek of intention. He looked like he'd been mauled--like he got caught on the wrong side of a rabid dog--but he hadn't. This wasn't nature; this was human. All dirty hands and bared teeth.

I'll tag (with no pressure) @veneritia @innocentlymacabre @supersymmetrys and @writingamongther0ses

Your Lines:

When he was done, he set the lyre aside and looked out over the water. His body sank in the air, as though he was only now coming back to himself. Keroesa pulled his chin toward her until he could see the stars reflected in his eyes. And when she kissed him, she could taste the words clinging. And he ran his hand through her hair. His skin came alive with flush and fire.

[newloverofbeauty]

[lannegarrett]

I know adverbs are controversial, but "said softly" means something different than "whispered" and this is the hill I will die on.

[welcometowriteblr]

WTW PRESENTS OUR 41ST EVENT!

WelcomeToWriteblr brings you another prompt event, this one themed around the planets of our solar system! Like our last prompt event, this month is a redux of an older event that we’d once again like to bring to the community! 

From MAY 25TH TO MAY 31ST create something in response to that day’s prompt and post it. You’re welcome to do absolutely anything for the prompt of the day, whether it be a drawing, an excerpt, a playlist, or a moodboard. This event is aimed to get everyone involved and we will accept all submissions! 

HOW TO PARTICIPATE

Tag your posts as #WTWEVENT and #WTWCOMMUNITY

Format your posts like this: WTW PLANET PROMPTS - PLANET NAME: CHOSEN PROMPT

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Day 2 - Venus - Politics 

Day 3 - Earth - Nature 

Day 4 - Mars - War or Conflict 

Day 5 - Jupiter - Religion or Commerce 

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Day 7 - Uranus - History or Science 

Day 8 - Neptune - Lore or Mythology 

Day 9 - Pluto - Death 

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[mostlymaudlin]

if you're worried about repetitive sentence starters in narrative writing (ie: frequently starting with "I" or a pov character's name), i think the most important thing to focus on is not the kind of words you're using, but rather the moving parts in your story that are being highlighted.

english is best suited for a subject (I) - verb (wrote) - object (this) sentence structure; that's the format that the reader will inhale without noticing, easy as breathing. it's also the easiest for you to write (hence, your draft full of sentences starting with pronouns). for a lot of the delivery of your story, you should be in that "stealth mode" so that the lines you want noticed can really leap off the page in comparison. messing with the subject-verb-object pattern signals to the reader that there's something to notice, and writing is awkward when it's full of sentences that say, "look at me!"

if you're worried about variation of sentence starters, you want to zoom out on the narrative and think about the scene you are trying to show, or the point you are trying to make. let's do an example from my own writing:

That’s not all true. Baz had already mapped out the best regular flights from Heathrow to LAX. He was talking about weekend trips in the middle and FaceTime date ideas he’d found on Pinterest. It filled Simon with dread. Baz wasn’t taking any of it seriously. As silly as the role was, everyone knew Bad Blood was going to be huge. Baz was the exciting, fresh face joining a star-studded cast for the most audience-friendly teen vampire show in history. Simon wasn’t going to let him blow it.

all the blue sentences follow, in general, that subject-verb-object pattern. the pink sentence is the outlier, and it's also the most significant line in the paragraph; in this story, this is the moment where you finally learn simon's motivation for previously breaking up with baz. the rest of the sentences all start with a noun, but they're different nouns based on what needs to be said.

here's another way this could be written:

Simon knows that's not all true. He'd watched Baz map out the best regular flights from Heathrow to LA and look up FaceTime date ideas. Simon worried that Baz wasn't taking it seriously. He knew Bad Blood would be huge, despite the concept being silly. But Simon knew Baz was the exciting, fresh face joining a star-studded cast for the most audience-friendly, sexy teen vampire show in history. Simon wasn't going to let him blow it.

this probably looks more similar to the kind of paragraph people get nervous about. simon simon simon -- like, stfu man! what's really happening is just that simon is not the best subject for all of these sentences. it's true that "simon knows" and "simon watched" and "simon knew," but we already know all that, because we know we're in his head. when you look at paragraphs like these, you want to identify the true subject of your sentences. even in the most introspective of paragraphs (like the above example), the narrator is usually not the Most Important Noun.

let's do one more example for when you're writing really menial tasks -- this is where i most commonly have this problem:

Andrew turns on the TV, puts the volume almost all the way down, and crouches in front of the DVD collection. His fingers trail along the spines for a moment before he pulls a case from the shelf. The player swallows the disc as Andrew crosses the room to turn out the lights. Tinged blue in the shadows, he comes to stand in front of Neil again, hand extended in demand.

so, same thing: the subjects, the nouns taking action, are andrew, his fingers, the dvd player, and then andrew again with a modifier. the first time i wrote this, i'm sure "andrew" or "he" was the start of every sentence, because my man is just doing his lil task here and sometimes that's not the most exciting thing to write. but again: it's not all about him! other nouns deserve the spotlight. the last sentence breaks the pattern, but it's also the completion of the task: he has successfully set the movie-watching scene, and this sentence is transitioning us to them watching the movie.

there's lots of ways to write and i definitely don't have all the answers, but i do think that any writing advice that asks you to focus on mechanics rather than structure will ultimately not help you solve the root of bad writing habits. when i write, i'm thinking: what's the main player noun in the action taking place? that's what becomes the subject of my sentence, so my starters are naturally a lot more varied. it's less intimidating to think about the purpose of your story (which you're already excited about!) when you're writing than it is to put that focus on mechanics.

good luck! you've got this!!

[sailforvalinor]

Writing two characters who you intend from the beginning to have a romantic relationship, writing characters for each other, is absolutely fantastic in its own right, but there is something to be said for writing two characters independently, and then a good bit into the writing process seeing them side-by-side and going “GASSSSPP WAIT A MINUTE”

[iamnotlanuk]

oh yeah I forgot I made this template have fun

[zegalba]

flower polaroids by Mathieu Trautmann

[nikasholistic]

The more you write, the more you discover your writing style, the more you develop the craft. So write, write even if you think it’s not good enough. Write to master the process of writing.