sorry i wanted to just comment this on your post but CHARACTER LIMIT. UGH. okay so- omg this plot line sounds so so so intriguing!!! my only critique would be that you could make the last sentence sound more final/dramatic by starting it with and + just alluding to death. "and a little after my 18th bday, i found out that i wasn't going to live to see my 19th." this is just a suggestion so feel free to ignore me!!! honestly tho this sounds so good im so excited to see where you take it :-)
yess omg I loathe character limit...but thank youuu <333 I hope my story can be as good as the beginning ha! Right now I’m trying to make a less cliché story and it’s kind of working. I mean, I totally had to rewrite my first chapter but it looks better :D if you wanna see my early draft (with several clichés) here it is. And that thing you wrote sounds good :D I’m pretty sure I’m going to rewrite it until it sounds awesome. For now I’ll publish this to remember! Thanks a lot!
