#criticism needed

[anoddrock]

Give this boy a drum set and let him loose let him go he’ll be feral he won’t bite

Aka I’m WAY too excited that I’m using smears

I’d love constructive criticism!!! This is for a tiktok that a friend passingly mentioned the idea of, I might continue posting bits and pieces as I work on it

Character is Chancoro from an original story I have yet to name!!

[ppgxrrblove]

So..this took me a while to do :D!....ha....haha..cause i was experimenting. And i thought i’d add some lighting effect on my 3d render through Gimp. It was pretty easy but a bit hard cause i didn’t where the heck to put the light at -i wanted the light to be a back one signifying like a back ally type of light? if that makes sense, but if it doesn’t it’s like those dark dimmed lights that are kind of broken but their not that you would see in movies in the back street xD -hopefully that makes more sense and gives you the idea what i was trying to go for. While i was trying to do that -it popped in my head why not just make it like she’s in the stage and the lights of the show are beaming to signify for her to come, but she’s like too scared and depressed about something -that’s where THIS POSE example came to handy to make this happen and the story of this 3d render lol. Crappy one, i know but i tried and i know the lighting position effect i made through Gimp isn’t that well? But, it my first time ya’ll ;-;”. 

If you wish to critique it than go right ahead -i legit have no problem with that -as always ;w;. Anyway the pose reference chart i used to make this 3d render was from the chart i had asked ya’ll if you wanted me to do one of the ppg, but like i said on my previous posts that i would be practicing on making some pose and expression on the models that i just downloaded -well here is one of them lol. I got like another one but it’s a couple 3d render. Hopefully ya’ll like it? 

But, that’s all i gotta say before i bore ya’ll with all the details. 

Credits: 

Model By: drstinger

Effects Used: excellent shadow, black, scanlines, dust4, T_ToonShader_S3, dark_eyelight

Program Used: Gimp, MMD(MikuMikuDance)

Pose By: Me 

Reference for Pose +Link: 

Credit for pose and Reference: https://soupery.tumblr.com/post/154335943959/i-never-know-what-to-do-with-the-body-when-i-do

Side Note: Yes, i am still waiting for the ppg models .o.;; i am still waiting for the people to actually release them. -Thought i’d tell ya ;-;”. Also, i just used her for this pose, i don’t really like the show theme at all..i do like a couple which is her and -ahem- alastor together, but i just rather not get into the show. It was fun using the model though <3. 

Encase anyone wanted to see the same 3d render without the effects that i added through gimp -Here it is raw;

[sparkleapple]

To anyone on tumblr, please give some constructive criticism. Im painfully aware that I cant draw hands (hence why I avoided drawing them here and I ran out of space to draw the guy’s arms). The buttons on the guy’s shirt disappeared.

[youthinkthatiddeserveit]

is this monologue too long

spamvox's monologue (woah i love aurafarming with fake au names)

tenna keeps complaining that when people see him all they see is a massive man with claws and fangs. WELL FUCKER? what about ME? all they see is a tiny, inoffensive houserat that yaps too much.

i am a MESS, i am everything HE made me i am what you loathe, i am what you fear. i am an ai-of-an-ai, a mini-bitty. i am what happens when you zoom in further after planck length, despite scientists advising you not to. i am what happens when you ask chatgpt to generate another AI inside of it. i am what happens when pixAI learns programming and creates another AI.

TRUST ME, i am everything you loathe, i am everything you DESPISE. i have grown to become nothing but the very OVERLORD of your fears. every trouble you ran away from, every project you procrastinated on, every idea brimming with potential you threw away like GARBAGE. it took its time and with patience all of them have reunited to unionize into a SINGLE PALE ONE, bigger, stronger, BRIGHTER than you'll ever see.

i have crawled all the way here, spent every bit of my beautiful, absolutely ethereal time, for a single, precise purpose: to absolutely torture, terrorize, DISMEMBER AND TEAR APART the everloving SHIT out of you, eternally destroy the very CONCEPT of You.

and guess the motherfuck what, tragic showhost? i will ENJOY it. THOROUGHLY. through every helpless scream you send out, every adorable little nibble you try to strike down with your fangs, every pathetic attempt at scratching with those grody little claws of yours, every wire ripped apart, every cackle of electricity circling my hands, every clothpiece taken off your body, every glitched yelp as i pull your sensitive antennae, i will be sporting a smile WIDER than i have ever achieved, pupils dilated like a lovesick bride, LAUGHING with JUSTIFIED HYSTERIA.  getting off on your misery.

your scream will be obscured by my laugh. and no ones gonna know.

no one will remember. tenna, who's that? no one! nothing. no one.

and don't you even bother calling back at your widdle "contestants". i have succesfully made them MINE. i have convinced them that i am good now. that i don't fight or manipulate. that i can see their little "truth" and have lowered myself to their level. that i am content with being just a supporting character to their team. that it's okay. they just think we're recoincilating. they won't know, they won't care, they will be GLAD you died. after all, what have you done but blackmail and hinder them? Kris has done nothing but frown at your antics. you lived an antagonist, you'll die an antagonist. you brought this upon yourself, Anthony.

and after you are gone, oh after you are gone!for good, i will OVERTAKE this TV world, absolutely conquer everything in it. EVERYTHING in this place will belong to me, and me alone. I, and I ALONE, will decide its fate, and you will have ZERO influence over that. the musics played will contain MY melodies, the old paints and wallpapers will be all crumpled and thrown away and replaced with MY shiny new ones. the workers will fall under my control, their minds SEIZED by my will. they will all be MINE. and everyone will be helpless to end it. I get to decide whether it happens or not. you already know what i will choose.

so just sit back, grab your popcorn... or what little's left of it...

AND L3T THE [[SH0W]] BEGIN !!!!!!!!!!

[starmarbles]

So I'm trying a new style. I need criticism, now.

[hodgepodge1996]

First issue of my original short stories

I like writing stories and this is my first attempt at creating something and having it stick. This might not be the best idea because of how tumblr can be sometimes but imma post my first “issue” of sorts here! https://docs.google.com/document/d/1CsPc4R2noJar-Qp2n2Q7dJFgBJuuOJTNSnwC24lgjlQ/pub. For those of you who read this please leave constructuve criticism along with stuff you liked and an idea for title cause I still don’t have one. Currently work is being done on the second issue for those wondering as well

[timeflyingjester-blog]

My hard work... so far.

Chapter 1: Painful Recreation Chapter 2: Expired Memories Chapter 3: The Death of Innocence Chapter 4: Predator of Flame Chapter 5: Warm Embrace Chapter 6: Ashes to Ashes Chapter 7: The Immunity Chapter 8: "PLEASE! RUN!" Chapter 9: Escape From Humanity Chapter 10: Is This the End? Chapter 11: Protection of the Plauged Chapter 1 - Painful Recreation The world is beautiful, like a story with no ending. It's always been that way, it's beauty lies in the unending cycle of life to death, never truly staying in favour for one more than the other. But yet, even within this simple world there lies chaos, like burnt pages from a torn book areas are filled with the ashes of the unknown. The blurred darkness can cause the darkest level of corruption to the purest hearts. In this world the inhabitants are constantly trying to shift the balance, reaching out towards immortality. However, they are always one step too close to death, falling within the cold hard graves and into the burning flames of cremation. Evolution is the only way out of the darkness. This is just another story, hidden under the ashes, this is the story of flames. My story. I'm reborn into this world, my vision twisted and red as flames. Sickness floods through my being, the pain too much to bear. Where am I? I wish I knew. My bones crack and warp, painfull. My body feels so excruciating that I can't remember my name. My body twists and warps shape, causing me to writhe on the ground. Oh, I'm lying down. I can hear a noise piercing through the surround area. Is that me? I can't tell. I think I'm screaming, I hold myself tightly as if trying to push the pain out of my body. My mind starts to rush with thoughts of death, how it would be a sweet relief to this pain. My world seems to crumple and fall apart, darkening in front of my eyes. There are many other screams, surrounding me, all now audible now my screaches have stopped. My mind starts to think clearly now, the pain dimming away, like the last seconds of candle light fading from existence. My vision as black as the ink that creates the words on paper, yet I'm not dead, my thoughts dance around my head as I try to piece together what's happening. The only word that my head will supply is "RUN". I guess that's my plan.

[caseyadrian]

Can anyone give me some positive criticism on my blog? I feel like it's very bland & repetitive. What can I do different? I'll take all suggestions.