I love reading works about lesbians by lesbians bc ‘Pining after ur best friend who is dating a dude she is clearly not into and also u don’t know what to do about this weirdly intense friendship you have and you kinda hate urself for it?’ that’s a lesbian experience if I ever read one!!
I’m gonna rehash my prev comment but I love how grounded and realistic it feels emotionally, the way everyone interacts w each other? I really like the dynamic of Jamie begrudgingly liking Eddie despite her best efforts, or that jamie does actually get frustrated with dani. “it sent an ugly thrill through her to imagine Dani seeing her with another girl” wormed its way into my brain bc i love reading about ugly feelings like that.
I said ur writing feels elastic and i have spent so long tryna figure how to explain it other than like, something adjacent to comedic timing? like pulling an elastic band and then it snaps back into shape. eg, ‘The message it would send: look, I don’t need you, either, not that that was remotely true’ or ‘it doesn’t feel like a confession, it feels like letting all the air out of a balloon.’ I feel like you really capture the push and pull of how jamie presents herself & builds these walls up vs like, she is v tender and emotional? loved the ‘she still feels like that hypersensitive, lonely little kid’ paragraph a lot.
This last bit is just lil details I really enjoyed for one reason or another:
- Describing ‘Saturn devouring his son’ as ‘fucked up in the kind of way jamie wants to keep looking at’
- ‘[dani] using her tongue to lick the cup clean. Jamie has to avert her eyes’
I feel like this is totally incoherent but I hope I SORTA explain my many feelings about LSITS
Omg this was such a delightful message to start my day with thank u so much. I do love how specific and yet somehow universal to gays this particular pining experience is hahaha like...i have absolutely had an lsits jamie experience myself obv and like u said it’s so.. specifically relatable LMAO why are we so prone to these weird intense romantic friendships
I’m so happy to hear u felt like all the various character dynamics felt grounded :D that is like the #1 thing I notice and enjoy in other people’s writing, the way certain writers are able to capture all the small gritty ugly feelings that come with being a person hahah and i’m really glad i managed to somewhat do that myself in this story!! Also i think I said this already to you but i LOVE the description of my writing as “elastic”, that rly stuck with me after your first message and continues to!! ALSO also, this is probably way more than you intended to know about my own thoughts on my writing lmao, but I for some reason started really struggling with Jamie’s characterization the longer i wrote her - i was kind of starting to worry that she was becoming a featureless cypher lol - so it means a lot to hear that u felt like I captured her character well :)
In conclusion thank u so much I love all of these thoughts!!!! I appreciate it more than i can possibly express