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@dream-girl-evill wanted to see the Freight rewrite I did from a while ago that does some major revisions to the passenger/freight dynamic more accurate to real life (though mostly US based). Major note that this is from a wider rewrite with some massive roleswaps and a pretty weird character lineup, though this song is one of the less drastically changed. Ft. Coaches being more annoyed by freight being slow and blocking their way than calling them stupid, Rockies are no longer anti-homeless because a lot of railroaders aren’t really bothered by freight hoppers as long as they don’t cause trouble. I play fast and loose with British vs American train terms because that’s quietly accepted precedent in the show.

context: Jojo is a genderblind cafe car who’s basically a play on the “barista with two degrees” joke and is the intellectual of the coaches. Slick is similar to Devious Diesel from the Railway Series/Thomas in this rewrite because I think being a conniving cartoon villain just works for a symbol of Big Oil. Curie the Nuclear Flask (also genderblind role) is the Dustin/Hydra figure, a heavy, shy freight car that others are scared of for anti-nuclear reasons. Uranium flasks are hilariously overbuilt and safe and there’s been some WILD tests involving smashing them with 100 mph locomotives. They get There’s Me because the vague themes of that song are weirdly appropriate for nuclear power.

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Knowing the inspiration behind Ra’s Al Ghul actually does help inspire a rewrite.

It totally defeats the purpose of a villain, but then again it’s kinda messed up to constantly use a villain created by racist origins, so I don’t really care?

but what if the League of Shadows was the opposite of controlling the world, and was instead just an endangered tribe or organization dedicated to protecting the Lazarus pits. Of course, many have gone after them, and that’s why they were vilified. Because it seems selfish to horde immortality all for yourself. And they stay alive because the Earth or some god creates Lazarus pits every decades or year or so, so they are the only ones who must keep it a secret while also destroying the pits while still using it to keep themselves alive.

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watched heretic yesterday and the first like hour was incredible until it devolved into slop that mistreats women for shock value. also i think the plot point of "what if an atheist brutally abused women to prove his point" feels like a strawman made up by religious people when confronted with the systemic oppression of women that is inherent to most if not all major world religions.

anyway here's how I'd rewrite it:

- hugh grant has a deep hatred specifically for the christian church rather than abrahamic religions in general. this could for a variety of reasons but please something a bit more deep set than "oh i studied them and they're all based off older myths so i think they're bullshit". it could be anything but my suggestion is he's gay and lost the love of his life to religious persecution (most likely related to the hiv epidemic). this leads to his neurosis and need to "rescue" people he believes can still be saved, esp. young missionaries.

- this means he genuinely believes he's doing a good thing. one of the things i found most compelling about the first hour is how deeply uncomfortable and creepy he was despite not actually doing anything to hurt the girls or showing any intention of that. keep that up for the whole film! he has them prisoner which is horrible and fucked up but he also wouldn't dream of hurting them - he just wants to convert them (possible parallels with conversion therapy here, maybe he went through something similar at the hands of christianity).

- remove the basement bullshit. everything happens in the living room where he pulls out the monopoly games. his arguments were pretty full of holes and sophie thatcher begins to point them out in the film but stops short of actually poking holes through his points! have sister paxton just want to leave but sister barnes refuses to let him and his ideology win. the film becomes a tennis match of an argument between barnes and hugh grant, with sister paxton "arbiting".

- the ending has sister barnes result to violence, attacking hugh grant both out of a desire for freedom and hatred for what he respresents to her. this forces her even deeper into the religion but gives sister paxton pause. we end with them becoming free but with much to reevaluate, potentially stepping away from the church a while.

#heretic #my rewrites #idk you'd have to carefully toe the line between This Is Not Okay but also Religion Is Not Okay #and i felt like at first the film had it pretty down but copped out for the ending.#the saw bullshit was so unnecessary and just ruined any moral complexity it may have been trying for

Can't wait to do this again!

Okay so I wrote this parody of When can I see you again? by Owl City for Aranea. I was gonna do “How do you plan to begin?” as directed at Meenah (like how do you plan to begin fighting LE) instead, but I decided to do it as a farewell to the people who are leaving the dream bubbles. c: idk why I’m posting this here though omg I guess tbh I’m showing off a bit because I rly love to do song rewrites a whole lot so;;;

If I don’t cover this myself (very likely I won’t), I’ll probably just send it to some nice Homestuck singer (cough totalspiffage) so they can do whatever they want with it idk

also sry for no read more cut I’m on mobile sOBS„,

Can’t wait to do this again! I hope to see you again! Can’t wait to do this again! I hope to see you again! Can’t wait to see you again! I hope to see you again!

You’re still alive, so there’s still work for you! Open your eyes now, there’s plenty to do! If you don’t die, you can win the game in time! It’s just a matter of time 8efore we will start the fight! If we all work hard we’ll 8e alright! Just 8e sure to listen to the Seer of Light.

It’s 8een fun but now you’ve got to go! The game is on and you are in the throes! 8ut 8efore you go, just so you know I have to tell you, till then, Can’t wait to do this again! Oh oh oh oh I hope to see you again! Oh oh oh oh Can’t wait to do this again! Oh oh oh oh Just so you know, I hope to see you again! (I hope to see you again!)

You’re on the run, soon your friends will meet you! Jack Noir will come, 8ut they’ll help you pull through. Just stay on course! You will all 8e together again! It’s just a matter of time, we’re here to help through the end! All together soon we will ascend! We will help the universe to mend.

Just stay on course! You will all 8e together again! It’s just a matter of time, we’re here to help through the end! All together soon we will ascend! We will help the universe to mend. Just so you know in case we’re all condemned…

I hope to see you again! Oh oh oh oh Can’t wait to do this again! Oh oh oh oh I hope to see you again! Oh oh oh oh Can’t wait to see you again! Oh oh oh oh

It’s 8een fun but now you’ve got to go! The game is on and you are in the throes! 8ut 8efore you go, just so you know I have to tell you, till then, I hope to see you again! I hope to see you again! Can’t wait till then I hope to see you again!

#if this coding doesn't come out right i'm gnona scream #I just spent like 20000 years putting br codes on every line ugh #mobile is difficult #long post #my rewrites