#novel hook

[jessicachouwrites]

My boots splash in the knee-high water, accompanied by the jangling of bejeweled chains. A menagerie of lockets, gleaming brighter than birds of paradise, cuddle against my chest, thumping in time with my heart. These tunnels are open for only a few hours each day, the catacombs inside almost entirely cut off from the outside world, save for the cracks through which my air flows after the tunnels flood. The guards will never find me, and my treasure glitters around me like a dragon’s hoard.

[lanaezell]

Novel Hook/Synopsis

I had written one a long time ago before I changed the plot of my novel and it was full of hyphenated descriptors and might have been the longest solitary sentence I've ever written.

So I made it two sentences. It might still be too long for a traditional hook and it has a lot of clichés. Here's what I came up with:

Since We've Been Wrong:

When sixteen-year-old Celina is admitted to a psychiatric hospital after a suicide attempt, the last thing she expects is to make friends with the skater boy who sneaks in to sell pot to the patients. After her release, Celina is challenged to maintain her sanity while she faces living in the same house with her sharp-tongued father again, making friends at a new high school, and whether to give in to a blossoming love that could be as passionate as it is unstable.

Feedback? Advice? Suggestions?

[confessionsofawritingaddict]

It's so stressful trying to figure out a good hook for my finished novel. Especially since I already have a kick-ass hook for the novel I'm currently writing. I'm almost tempted to say screw it and just focus on this project.