allysen

millersville university

[morganlong]

what are you most proud of with your writing process?

I am most proud of how much my writing process has improved. Coming into this, I had a very basic writing process that I used in High School. It was not the best because high school work is different than college work. I was able to write something, get lots of feedback from it, and change anything that needed changed. I feel that feedback is extremely important before turning in a paper/project because it gives a second set of eyes to read over it and make sure it is perfect for your audience.

[allysenleber]

I agree that my writing process has expanded! Through this course, I learned that it is important to conduct an audience analysis before beginning to write so that you ensure your content appeals to your audience. When writing in the future, I will be sure to make understanding my audience the first step in my writing process.

[katelynma]

Where will you adjust your essay to strengthen your point?

In my essay, I plan on trying to use examples to strengthen my points, whatever they may be. I think using examples always helps to strengthen arguments.

[allysenleber]

To start off, I love that you included a picture of Nevel from iCarly in this! It adds a fun little feature to our last week of Tumblr posts. I also will be using examples to strengthen my argument so that my audience of future employers understands my ability to effectively communicate through my experience of incorporating key concepts into my writing.

[allysenleber]

Strengthening my Essay

To strengthen my points in my essay, I will be sure to include the key concepts from this course when answering the questions. Showing how I used key concepts when web writing will show my audience of future employers that I properly understand the complexities of web writing, and that I am able to effectively communicate with various audiences by implementing these concepts.

[allysenleber]

Most Proud About my Writing Process

An aspect of my writing process that I am most proud about is the audience analysis. Before this course, I never really took the time to deeply consider who my audience was because I was typically just writing for my professors. Now, I know how important it is to understand who the audience is and what they already know about the topic before beginning to write so that you can effectively create content that will appeal to them.

[allysenleber]

What I Like Most About my Learning

Out of everything that I've learned throughout this course, I like that the content I learned can be applied to my future career. As a future teacher, I will need to adjust my audience when writing depending on if I am writing to parents, colleagues, administrators, or children. Completing an audience analysis for each project in this course has helped me understand who my audience is and how I should effectively communicate with them.

[allysenleber]

Thursday Check in

Is the audience of our content learning essay a future employer? I originally thought it was you, as you are the professor and it's our final assignment, but now that I'm reading more into the assignment background it seems as if the audience is a future employer since the questions that we are reflecting on are similar to interview questions. @npfannen

[allysenleber]

Design Choice

The design choice in this Ford advertisement is very interesting. They designed a city on a key as if you would be holding the city in your hands when holding this key. This stood out to me as I was looking through advertisements because of the key design.

[kdwinal-deactivated20240510]

Original Content Writing 3 - Week 14

Share a section of your design project content. What is the work of this sample? How can we help you revise?:

Here is an example of a fan's angry comment (first picture) and the second is TV Movie Studio Co.'s response! These were created from a Twitter template I saved and edited. Any comments would be helpful, but more importantly do you feel the response is appropriate coming from the company (the responding intern)?

[allysenleber]

I agree with @lexi-riddell that adding an apology to the company's response would be helpful. It shows that you empathize with the fans and will maintain the positive relationship between the company and the audience. On another note, I like how realistic your Twitter posts look!

[morganlong]

share a section of your Design Project content. What is the work of this sample? How can we help you revise?

As of now, this is my cancellation post. Is this too general? Should I add or take anything out of this post? I feel that now looking back on it, it could be written better but I'm not sure how. Any feedback is appreciated. Thank you!

[allysenleber]

I think you could take out the sentence "At this time, we are asking for a little time to ourselves to spread the word", as fans may not be considerate enough in the moment depending on how angry they are. I think you could add in that they can look forward to future projects to add a sense of positivity to the post.

[lexi-riddell]

Peer Review Request

So far, this is what I have as the caption for the cancellation post. I'm worried it doesn't have enough information, but I also wanted to keep it rather brief because my audience is young adults. Do you think what I have is enough information? If not, what should I add to it to make it better? Does it appeal to my intended audience? Thanks!

[allysenleber]

I think your cancellation post appeals to your audience of young adults. The briefness will make it more willing for your audience to read. I also think it includes enough information. You announced the cancellation and showed the producer's disappointment, while telling the audience what they can look forward to.

[maurker]

Is this an effective intro? I don't think the intern would even read this short paragraph when looking over the page, but maybe if it's this short they would be more likely to.

[allysenleber]

I think this works for an introduction. It's short enough that the intern would be willing to read it to get an overview of what the pivoting guide is about. Keeping it straightforward is good to ensure that your audience's attention will be maintained.

[allysenleber]

Revision Request 2

This is an angry fan post displaying their disappointment in the show's cancellation, and the TV Movie Studio Co.'s response to the comment. I did not include hashtags in my angry fan posts, as my audience is older adults, and I felt that they don't really use them. Do you think I should include hashtags even though my audience is older adults, ages 50+? Also, do you think the language used in my angry fan posts resemble this age group?

[allysenleber]

Favorite Show

My favorite show is Friends. I did not watch it while it was airing on tv, but I have watched every episode multiple times on streaming services. Friends helps me work through this project and understand angry fandom because I can think about how fans would react if this show would've been cancelled. There are many different plot lines that involve relationships that if it would've been cancelled during any season, fans would be angry and upset that they wouldn't know what happened next.

[allysenleber]

Revision Request 1

This is my cancellation post from TV Movie Studio Co. on Facebook, announcing to their older audience that Favorite Show is being cancelled. Should I add an image to provide a visual that could get the reader's attention, or is what I currently have enough to convey the message? The audience of this show is older adults, so I am not sure whether an image would be helpful for this post.

[allysenleber]

Thursday Check-in

I have a few questions regarding the web writing pivot guide. @npfannen

Essentially, we are just writing this guide for an intern to learn how to respond to angry fan posts?

Are there specific subheadings you are looking for us to include in this guide?

Are we including our audience analysis from part 1 in the guide?

[allysenleber]

Good Design in the Real World

Self checkout lanes are a good design to make the checkout process in a store more efficient. It can also make shopping more comfortable for customers, as they can check out their own items and not have to interact with a cashier unless something goes wrong.

[morganlong]

write a style rule for writing a short tumblr post - based on what you know so far, what is a key rule for getting notices? 

A style rule for writing a short tumblr post would be to keep it to the point. Nobody is going to want to read a long post and then respond to everything. If you keep it short and sweet, more people will likely respond because they don't have to read as much. If you are asking a lot of questions, they may get answered but if you ask one main question, more people may answer. Overall, keeping it to the point will cause less confusion for the audience.

[allysenleber]

I completely agree! Creating content that is straightforward will more likely be read and responded to. I am sure we have all experienced this while posting on Tumblr throughout this course.