How do you write a slightly envious and very insecure POV character without having them come across as annoying.
(Note: This character isn't the only POV character)
How To Write Envious and Insecure Characters That Don't Seem Obvious And Cliche
One of the major turning points in a character's behaviour comes when they are jealous. Writing jealousy can be summed up in two ways. One, being straightforward and showing the writers that your character is a jealous little bubble of insecurity, the second type is more subtle, where readers can peek into the character's conscience, where they weigh their feelings of jealousy before validating it.
Writing subtle jabs of jealous comments
Instead of portraying jealousy directly, leaving random hints or comments that feel like subtle attacks of incompetence towards your character makes jealousy look more dynamic and natural.
example: "I get jealous of her" or "His presence fires up my jealousy"
(write)
"must be NICE hanging out with HER" (tone difference)
Difference in tones is a simple technique to add volume to a dialogue, making someone automatically sound jealous or insecure without pointing it out directly.
"She was insecure about her body" Plain. Boring. Bland.
Show that she feels insecure every time she passes by a mirror, tell the readers she faces the other way when she comes across a mirror or the fact that she has covered her mirrors with newspapers.
Small ways to showcase jealousy are by adding criticism. Your character won a ballet scholarship to New York?
"Oh, good for you" (Sounds condescending) "You got it easy for yourself, my science scholarship was much harder." (Trying to show superiority)
Add smaller, finer details. Seeing their friend achieve something, and they end up fake laughing, forced laughter, elements like scrunching their eyebrows, twitching near the lips, trying to force a smile.
The list is huge, but elements like these make a character more natural and relatable, acts that readers could relate to.
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