[SUBMISSIONS TEMPORARILY CLOSED, ASKS ARE OPEN] Dedicated in reviewing original characters, aesthetics, fanclasses, and anything Danganronpa-related. The reviews we give are subjective and must be taken with a grain of salt.
there hasn't been any posts in a while, everything ok?
yes, thank you for checking in on us! uni classes have been really mean to me as of recently, so not much activity has been coming out of me. alas i hate being old </3
hi, how are you? anyway, is shsl traceuse a good talent? it's related to how my oc will get murdered by another one of my ocs in the story. (ps. traceuse is someone who does parkour :))
a traceuse is a good talent, but i would recommend finding an alternative title for it. parkour artist seems to do just well without the french. traceuse, from what i find, is also feminine, so i definitely recommend changing it if the person with the talent is male.
absolutely! brown and pink give off sweet vibes, like chocolate-covered strawberries. i’m also personally a big fan of the gray/pink colour combo since it makes the pink really stand out!
this might be a weird question, but the setting for the killing game that i'm writing it's in a simulation/timeloop where there are multiple possibilities for the survivors. i'm having a hard time on picking who might survive though, i even have percentages and a causality-method for choosing them but i still feel guilty over what i want to pick and what might actually be fair... so really the main question here is on how to choose a survivor, i guess ;m; thank you!!
survivor casts are very difficult to decide, but it personally comes down to one question: do they have someone to live for?
if a survivor doesn’t have someone to live for, you can replace them for somebody that did. if they have someone to live for, they have a reason to stay alive. otherwise, there’s no reason why they wouldn’t kill and/or let themselves be killed. they survive as a tribute to that student, and having someone to live for definitely enhances character development.
for example, in dr1, asahina survived for oogami, naegi survived for sayaka, fukawa survived for togami, so on. in sdr2, hinata survived for nanami, sonia survived for tanaka, owari survived for nidai, and kuzuryuu survived for pekoyama. in v3, saihara survived for akamatsu, harukawa survived for momota, and yumeno survived for chabashira. you get the gist of it. the survivors are best when they have somebody to live and fight for and it provides character motive.
Hi~ thank you for reviewing my OC Amai Umehara! As for the vague backstory, some of the parts would be spoilers(ex. why he got into the rehabilitation center) while others definitely needed fixing. (1/2)
And, I used official DR characters as height/weight reference, and I now realized official DR characters are a bad source to use for that. Thank you so much for reviewing him!
it’s no problem! if you ever have any questions i’m always down to research things to help you out. i’m glad i was able to help!
my first ever review on this blog! my feedback with be written in bold to distinguish from the creator, @danganronpa-lux.
fair disclaimer: these are my own opinions and research. don’t take my words personally. i give suggestions to help shape the character, and you in no way, shape, or form need to accommodate these suggestions to fit my feedback. these are opinions, so don’t come after me to defend yourself.
with that, let’s begin! our character today is amai umehara, the super high school level chocolatier!
Name: Amai Umehara
-“Amai” means “sweet” in Japanese and “Umehara” means “plum field” in Japanese. I was aiming for some sweet-sounding name because he’s a, well, chocolatier.
here’s the issue: as someone who’s learning japanese and has relatives there, i can say with confidence that amai is a very rare first name, especially for a person who’s masculine. amai is hailed as a japanese name by several white suburban mums, but not so much in japan.
if you want something that conveys something similar and is masculine, a suggestion of mine would be ichigo, which means strawberry and is masculine depending on the kanji. kurumi means walnut, and mikuri means chestnut, and both could fit. kyou mean peach and an means apricot.
other than that, umehara is a unique last name but i would expect to find it in japan since it makes sense!
Appearance: He has Auburn hair that he styles as this(http://chloebritchford.wixsite.com/chloebritchfordfmp/blank-1, the 5th picture, just imagine that with bangs). He wears a chef’s uniform and a tiny chef’s hat. He also wears a red apron. He’s 167cm tall and weighs 62.5kg.
167cm is rather short, but the average height in japan is 171cm so it’s not absurd and it fits the range. 62.5kg is also an ideal weight, with the range being 56kg - 70kg.
however, the outfit amai wears is similar to hanamura’s outfit from what i’m hearing, so i would try to look into that and try to make it distinctively different. maybe make him wear a baking apron over some other garb. the apron definitely fits, so i would say keep that, but maybe try to change what he wears it over.
Gender: Straight Male
straight isn’t just gender, the term would be cisgender male. straight means cisgender and heterosexual/romantic. you just need to change the term to cisgender.
Super High School Level: Chocolatier
Age: 17
i have nothing much to say! the shsl chocolatier is a relatively more common talent, but not so much that i would discourage you from using it.
Backstory:
-His family owned a chocolate shop that was passed down onto hundreds of generations. All of the family members knew how to make chocolate, so Amai naturally took an interest to chocolate-making.
our modern day chocolate was invented in 1847, so the familial practices is not too far-fetched. it checks out!
-However, tragedy struck his family. His parents got killed because of a car crash when he was 14, leaving his sickly older brother Chai to run the shop.
ah yes, my favourite, the dead parents trope. car crashes are lethal, but the chances of dying from a car crash compared to getting injured is very broad. 1.25 million people die from car crashes every year, but 20 - 50 million people are only injured. that makes the chances that one parent died about 0.25% - 6.25%, which lowers to a 0.13% - 3.13% chance if you include the likelihood of both parents. needless to say, the chances are rare.
i’ll at least give a break since it was later on life, but if his parents died only three years ago, it should definitely be reflected on amai himself. he’s probably still grieving, so if you wish to keep this, any issues touching parents should make him emotional.
-To make matters worse, people were losing interest in handmade chocolates, making him and Chai struggle to remain in business.
-That’s when he was sent to Solera Rehabilitation Center. Chai visited his little brother a lot despite Chai himself also being sick.
i’m combining these two comments together since they’re brief.
the chocolate industry is booming. handmade chocolates are no exception to that. i know for sure that a handmade chocolate shop near me quickly goes out of sale when it opens its doors in the spring. chocolate is an industry that’s probably never gonna die out, so i don’t see why the family business would be going out of business.
as for amai being put in a rehabilitation centre, i would like a little bit more explanation as to why. is he sick like chai? was amai willing to go to it or did he resent it? things such as that nature.
-When he turned 17, the invitation to Academia Lux came. At first, he didn’t want to go because going to Academia Lux meant leaving his sickly older brother(Chai) behind. However, Chai assured him that he would be fine without his little brother, making Amai reluctantly leave to Academia Lux.
Likes: Vanila Ice Cream, his older brother Chai
Dislikes: Seafood
overall, i wouldn’t say the oc is bad, but the backstory has a few inconsistencies or vague parts that need to be elaborated upon. in my opinion? a 7/10– if you improve the backstory a little bit, then this oc definitely has potential!
what do you think of a culprit who didn't know they've killed someone. as in, they were manipulated to do the killing blow by someone else (without making the blackened notice that the victim is dead) and monokuma decided to rule them as the culprit.
Ohohoho, playing by the technicalities, I see.
I can perfectly see Monokuma making that decision. But knowing the unpredictability of that bear, he might also try to find the actual perpetrator, just because he feels like it.
what would you need to submit for a moodboard review other than the moodboard?
We will have it sorted out once we reopen submissions. But to have a general, prototyped idea, it’s just the moodboard itself and a short description/supposed visualization of the work.
who's the artist for genocider syo in the moodboard?
It’s a hard search, as the only source stated on the original Zerochan forum where I found it (https://www.zerochan.net/886475) credits to a person whose pixiv ID is 47055.
Other than that, nothing. My devices are having troubles accessing pixiv rn, so I will check if this pixiv ID is legit.
does mod amami or mod syo have any dr ocs/fanganronpas they're working on?
As for myself, I do have 2 OC’s (funnily enough, I have one of mine queued here, submitted long before I became a mod) and ran a fangan roleplay on Wattpad, but was left defunct due to the other members being inactive.
- Mod Syo
P.s. mod amami u can just quote reblog if you have answers, sorry for hogging the asks again ( ; n ;)
i personally have several fanclasses! i believe i have fifteen as of now...? and a lot of independent ocs as well. i also run several oc killing games on discord! i’m currently the mod in five since i have a problem.
they’re my pride and joy, but once i joined this blog i deleted all of my applications. my most known ocs are ouye himura, shsl occultist, nekomu yumeshi, shsl duvet tester, kunio yagihata, shsl school mascot, ren takizaki , shsl thief, and shiro minami, shsl ???. i would love to go off about them, but knowing me i’ll write a 20k+ word post.
does mod amami or mod syo have any dr ocs/fanganronpas they're working on?
As for myself, I do have 2 OC’s (funnily enough, I have one of mine queued here, submitted long before I became a mod) and ran a fangan roleplay on Wattpad, but was left defunct due to the other members being inactive.
- Mod Syo
P.s. mod amami u can just quote reblog if you have answers, sorry for hogging the asks again ( ; n ;)
Originally Mod Miu’s idea, and it was also stated in the former bio of this blog. I myself have little experience, but I’d presume it’s for those people who likes to associate Tumblr aesthetics with their OC’s or canon characters.
for a brief introduction, i’m mod amami ( @angelomania ) and i’m the newest member of this blog! i’ve been into danganronpa for almost five years now, so i’ve had a fair share of experience with ocs in the fandom. i’m looking forward to reviewing ocs and giving you guys feedback!
when writing motives (and not just the usual 4 but a heck ton), what would you need to keep in mind? and also welcome mod rantaro!!! i hope you have a great time!!!
thank you! i hope i do too!
in my opinion, for writing motives, i like to choose ones that tailor to a certain person’s weakness and/or fear. i would say to avoid non-physical motives, such as [x] will happen if someone doesn’t kill in [x] amount of hours/days/etc., since it’s only a threat and not necessarily impactful. motives are best when they’re physical, not mental.
i would also try to avoid motives previously used in other games. for example, making every student sick copies too much from the despair disease in sdr2. starvation is also pretty common for a fanganronpa to use, but that came along with the tower motive in sdr2 as well. this also means that you shouldn’t use similar motives to your own, especially in the same class.
if you want a motive that creates a good case, i personally like to use ones that handicap the students so that they have to think outside the box. for example, one of my personal favourites is a motive where the characters are tied/handcuffed/etc to another person. the culprit would have to think outside the box and make sure their partner didn’t see the murder. in order for it to work, they would have to create some sort of trap without their partner knowing, and it’s fun to use. the trial would be interesting as well, since the partner of the victim would get the basic “they were your partner, so you must be the culprit” accusations towards them. limitations make a case worth writing and it definitely gives good inspiration.
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