Interruptions in Dialogue
Often hand-in-hand with our favorite, the em dash, people tend to interrupt each other a lot! Sometimes because it’s high tension, sometimes because they’re correcting the other, and sometimes because they’re sick of the other guy’s voice.
People tend to talk at each other. Disagreeing opinions may bring people to interrupt one another. Go somewhere public and listen in on someone’s conversation. How common are interruptions in real life? It’s pretty common.
So, consider adding some interruptions to your characters’ dialogue! Examples included, of course.
Interruptions add a realistic dynamic to speech. By breaking things up, dialogue will be more varied and more interesting to follow. Of course, you shouldn’t have characters cutting each other off left and right, or it’ll get annoying. But it does help the dialogue flow between speakers when properly implemented, just like how you want a variety of sentence lengths and structures.
They can work wonders on your characterization. Some will interrupt more than others, and they’ll all react to being interrupted differently. Do they continue their sentence, ignoring the interruption? Do they stop to listen? Do they get upset with the other for cutting them off? Are they just a rude person, simple as that? Or are they annoyed with that person in particular?
“She’ll come around, Ethan. I promise. Until then, while you’re here, you should tour the city. I’ve requested the day off tomorrow so I can—”
“That won’t be necessary,” he interrupted. I heard the scrape of a chair against the tile. My lips pursed. Estranged from Aunt Lillian or not, he was being harsher than necessary. Then again, she should have expected this. “Goodnight, Lillian.”
“Oh, of course! Goodnight. It was so nice to—”
You can use an interruption to show what your character doesn’t want to talk about. Is there a topic they’re avoiding? Are they cutting someone off before they reveal a secret, or interrupting a heartfelt apology before getting too gooey? Interruptions are a great way to swerve the conversation in a different direction.
He hung his head. “I’m just so ashamed. To let that woman deceive me—”
“It’s fine,” I assured him. “Really. It was an illusion, and we don’t blame you.”
“Don’t you dare say goodbye.”
They can help you set the tone. Interruptions are great for arguments! They increase the tension as characters clash to have their thoughts heard. You don’t want absolutely every line to be an interruption, though!! Keep it varied.
“You’ve talked to your mom on the phone, so I thought you’d give Ethan a chance, too—”
“Give him a chance? What is this, a competition?” I snapped. “You’re the only one who wanted him here. I was just starting to enjoy being away from them, and then you just dump this on me. Trying to get points with your brother by selling me to him.”
“Points?” she echoed, her mouth hanging open. “Oh, never! Alice, I swear I only agreed because I thought you wanted your parents to visit you. I thought it meant he was willing to try again.” Her eyes were pleading. “I miss my family, Alice.”
“It just means he’s willing to risk lesbian cooties for the sake of beating my mom in court.”
She recoiled, her wide eyes filling with moisture again. “He’s just stubborn. He’s always been like this. But after a bit—”
“You haven’t seen him in fifteen years. Get real, Aunt Lillian. He’s not your kid brother anymore.”
It can show one character’s dominance over the situation or conversation. Cutting someone off in speech can be a sign of their authority. The other person might give a weak argument, only to be cut off and shot down by the person on the offense.
But Aunt Lillian wasn’t buying it. “I want you to sit out for the rest of the night.”
I made a sound of protest. “But—”
“You’ve already strained your shoulder.” Her voice was firm. “You don’t want to injure it any more than it already is.”
I was honestly curious. “Why do you like her?”
“I don’t—” he sputtered, wide-eyed.
I arched an eyebrow, grinning. “You don’t like her?”
Vince looked at the carpet, pink still flaming his cheeks. “She’s just… she’s rather pretty, don’t you think? And she has a certain confidence to her…”
And there you have it! Just make sure to use the interruptions sparingly, and only when appropriate. If you use them too often, they’ll stop carrying as much weight. The fewer interruptions you have in a scene, the more weight each of them will hold.
Now go forth and have your characters rudely interrupt each other (or for other reasons)!