Hello! I was wondering if you could give me a second opinion on my OC Antony. I mostly want an opinion on his design but also help on personality description. I have NEVER been good on personality descriptions. I had sent him to another critique blog but they haven't been on for a while and just in case decided to send him here too. From what I read you guys are good. :) SO info. Copypasta since I am lazy:
I think It would look better with no "belts" on the shirt. The hat is nice, and it looks amazing while adventuring! Maybe add, say.... A trench coat? It helps show movement and running. Plus, who doesn't like trench coats?
Consider making the snout be solid white, not dotted? You could try both and see which one looks better. Besides that I say you have a very nice design going on here!
Name: Antony VcCloven
Age: 24
Height: 5"6
Weight: 151 Ibs
Species: Alien, Gakoran
Location: Planet Gakor X
Marital status: Taken by Mamluki the Crocutan (she is not owned by me.)
Personality: Very selfish, witty, clever, violent, sarcastic and nasty at times when things don't go his way exactly, though anto can be caring, thoughtful, and able to listen to other people when he needs to. Has a cool head on his shoulders for most of the time unless something pushes him over the edge.
Likes: Apples (basically addicted to them), his job, feeling an adrenaline rush (a.k.a living on the edge/doing dangerous, sometimes stupid things), traveling, hot chocolate, water, split pea soup, any kind of desert, being in charge of others, showing off (he mostly likes to show off his enhanced strength that he got thanks to his cybernetics), any kind of meat, lightning storms, horror movies, his big brother Z and big sister Isabel, kids, and reading.
'Has a cool head on his shoulders' seems a little contradictory if he goes out looking for dangerous things to do and likes living on the edge.
Dislikes: His boss, pears, needles, showing his soft side, being left out of a group, the fear he experiences when he thinks of going back to jail, being stuck inside all day with nothing to do, his big brother Jordyn, his big sister Lillith, his parents, his past, feeling something agitate his whiskers, people asking about his ears (Like "why do they look like that?" "Is that a normal shape for your species or is that shape a birth defect?" his species is widely unknown and very few people have seen Gakorans. That is why people would ask.), the cold (Gakor X is basically a swamp that is hot/warm all year round. The Gakorans are used to only heat. Introduce them to cold without a heavy jacket on and their bodies wouldn't be able to take it.), Being told what to do, and tv. (He finds it boring)
Bio: Antony had always been the runt of the litter. Never getting any attention from his parents because of the size of his litter, Antony turned to being a criminal. Selling drugs, stealing, almost killing a person. Antony was eventually caught and put in jail, of course he didn't stay in there for long. He broke out and changed his entire appearance so he wouldn't be thrown back in jail. He had dyed his fur the color it is now, grew his hair out long, wore/ continues to wear color eye contacts to make his eyes orange, and getting implants in his legs to make him taller without any anesthesia and implants in his arms so that his anatomy wouldn't look off and suspicious. The reason for no anesthesia was because the only doctor he could go to was a sadist doctor, he liked to hurt his patients while working on them. If the patients (all of his patients are escaped criminals) didn't let him hurt them he would send them back to jail. Originally Antony was albino and had short black hair with purple eyes and was very short, almost a legal midget since his height was 5 feet. After going through the pain of his surgery he reformed...well slightly. Still doing treasure hunting for the black market to afford what he wants and how to live how he wants.
To me the doctor part, and the extreme change he went through is pushing it a bit. Is this sort of procedure very possible in his world? (even if only though black market ect.) and is there any draw backs to the implants? ect. you might want to think about it a bit and maybe explain a bit more.
I know the planet and species names are silly but at least they match. People made a huge deal when last time I made a race and the race/planet name didn't match.
I don't see anything that sticks out as awfully bad about this character, you could perhaps expand a bit and maybe rethink the personality a bit, tinker around with the design. Besides that I cant see anything that sticks out as bad. Seeing as its your own original story yo certainly have more freedom with the creativity in it. Just beware of going over bored.
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