“First the high as shit ramblin’ about lizards in hats yesterday, now everyone’s staring at each other’s asses. You know what, there ain’t enough Blackwell money to keep me in the shit hole anymore.”
David stops despite his better judgement and he turns back around. He wants to yell at them and say that staring at each others’ ASSES ISN’T SURVEILLANCE WORTHY. And yet, once he’s gone back to them, his eyes land on Jefferson’s eyes, and he just can’t look away. Oh no.
‘ Xera, you cannot berate and think lowly of a fan-made game! They work so hard! ‘
Hard work =/= Quality work and if I want to be a smart consumer I gotta look at the shit as well as what fits and most of that story was shit and I get saltier thinking about it.
[ so i played that L///IS fangame that everyone and their mother got their tits up about right (you know the kind; i did the rachel route out of narcissistic reasons)... ] tl; dr: i give it 5/10
Holy shit the exposition is boring as balls
I called out every single plot point that was going to come out of this route and wasn’t impressed with any of it because they talk so heavily about the motif of ‘being real’ and yet I didn’t feel like there was anything real with how they wrote Rachel’s story in the slightest? Like I’m no Edgar Allen Poe with my writing, but damn, give me something different that gives me a reason to think Rachel’s persona that is seen is different than how she is with Max because honestly that was the most generic portrayal of a person who hasn’t been ‘real’ with themselves that I’ve ever seen. Maybe it’s because I was so bogged down by the exposition that I couldn’t be arsed to fully indulge myself in this visual novel, but man, even if it wasn’t, I’d still have a problem with such a cliche, bit by bit story that I’ve seen played out way better in other mediums.
I guess falling in love under a week is a white people thing, isn’t it?
The hammered in point with Max constantly stating “Rachel’s so different--” like, I understand, they wanna get that idea of Max having her misconceptions and shit, but couldn’t you reiterate that twice and leave it at that? It has been constantly repeated and I felt like I was getting my patience tested in what I can retain in my own brain holy shit. I understand, SO DIFFERENT WOW. WE’RE GONNA LEARN SHE’S NOT DIFFERENT...WOW..,,,,
The music is grating my damn nerves and I only had to deal with it for two hours.
I don’t understand how Max can be around a girl for a year and still reiterate repeatedly she knows nothing about her. That either make Max a dumbass or make this a sign of bad writing, which feels like a mix of both. Like, how oblivious can you be? Honestly, with the little slivers we get in the novel, we STILL don’t know much about her except that she got a modeling contract, and she’s hardworking and insecure. That’s it. Nothing more.
If I ever see the word wowzers one more time, I’m going to burn anyone who uses it.
Overall the visual novel feels like a gratuitous fanfic--like I understand the motivation and good intentions to go with it, but honestly from what I’ve personally experience and what I hear from my other friends, it seems too gratuitous and overly ship fodder friendly to be enjoyed if you want some actual story as it all comes pretty quick and unsatisfactory. I could have gotten the same story I was given from fanfic.net or archiveofourown. Obviously it’s a retconning of the original so it makes it into some perfect world where the evil manz don’t exist and doesn’t distract you from the lesbifun times, and obviously it’s supposed to be a fan pandering mess (like the rest of the game wasn’t one already), so if you enjoy those kind of messy panders and just want to see your OTP make it, then hey, here’s something to feed you (And by feed, I mean shove down your damn throat). But don’t come to me saying this is like the epitome of great writing and characters because it all feel tripe and boring for the short section i played of it. Maybe when if I go down the other routes, i’ll feel more successful? But otherwise, I’m not feeling it.
‘ Man, I don’t feel like partying, okay? ‘ // @killtherxchkid (starter call)
“ I’m not trying to avoid you or anything--” but that’s exactly what she’s trying to do. “but I have stuff I need to do tomorrow night. I fucked up on an assignment and Jeffershit’s trying to get me to redo it. I’m gonna miss it, but I gotta keep my As up, okay, or I’ll never get into UCLA.”
‘Y’know, speaking of masterpieces...’ // @mosaaic (starter call)
“I mean, I’m no narcissic nor am I Ansel Adams or anything, but I think those test shots I sent you earlier may be the best I’ve done in a while--though, I wish I had an actual photographer to take them, maybe they could get all the right angles...”
‘ I think Nate may be loosing it.’ // @overcompensatesfornothing (starter call)
“ Like, be real with me, hasn’t he been a bit too strange recently? Like he has been leaving parties early, disappearing often, and when I went in to ask Mr. J a question earlier this week, Nate was already in his classroom already--like he’s been so weird, especially around me, and it’s been throwing off my groove recently... thoughts? “
“ And, y’know, jealousy adds fat in all the wrong places; so why don’t you just lay off on the shitty comments man, it’s not like they deserve it. Jesus.”
‘You know about flowers, right? ‘ // @saecris (starter call)
“ Let’s say a friend’s b-day’s coming up and I wanna do something stupidly cute that it makes me wanna throw up, right? What would you recommend I’d get? “
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