Seeking queer women or lovers of wlw literature as beta readers for a complete knight x princess novel with dark themes!
Faelin and the Knight's Betrayal is a complete fantasy novel of 89K words with series potential. I am seeking people's opinions to sharpen this novel, no need to tell me what you thought of every line, just read and tell me what you think at the end :) Interested? Have questions but don't want to commit? No worries! Send me a message!
As punishment for saving her new-born brother’s life from her grief-stricken father, Princess Faelin thought she would live in banishment forever with only her loyal knight, Talia, and her own magical hair for company. That is, until Faelin’s father delivers an ultimatum; find her brother before her next birthday and deliver him back to her father’s clutches, or a Manucorum— a deadly series of trials for her hand in marriage— will begin.
Faelin, content in banishment, struggles to choose between her brother’s freedom and her own. Desperate not to lose her, Talia convinces Faelin to find her brother, and with the aid of Faelin’s magic— and Talia’s swordplay—they do.
However, despite her growing feelings for Faelin, Talia lets Faelin’s brother escape their capture when her loyalty is tested by someone from her past. In failing the king’s ultimatum, she and Faelin are both thrust into the Manucorum. They survive—not without eachother’s sacrifices—only to find their relationship twisting at the centre of a dark ritual instead.
A ritual that demands Faelin’s life, or her brother’s.
A ritual that will tip Dominia into imbalance, and resurrect their ghoulish mother, who died so Faelin’s brother could live.
With the Manucorum a farce, Faelin’s brother missing, and the reappearance of Talia’s street-rat siblings demanding her loyalty, Faelin and Talia must test their trust in eachother to the limit.
However, when Faelin chooses to die herself to save her brother’s life, Talia can’t help but stop her for the sake of their future together. In betraying Faelin by taking away her magic, Talia begins a series of events that destroys their relationship, and starts the same dark ritual they worked tirelessly to stop.
