CTM AU Dialogue/Scene script: Citizen Plus Interrogation (glasses included version)
longer script here where at one point a few other scenes are supposed to go there for effect (and I'm pretty sure I'm misremembering the exact french words Lorraine uses in episode 3 if you ask her about Jennifer, but I wanted to include it in idea here anyways).
Writing it took me all day and I couldn't stop thinking about it otherwise. I also looked up the word lounge today, just to find out how to appropriately call that one thing, cause 3 different languages in your head and english being your second tend to mix that up.
Either way: enjoy
Edit: as implied above this is a version where I've made a small change near the end that would've otherwise bugged me forever. Same reason why I also reblogged this.
CONTEXT - Martin has been arrested by Griff Tannen like two scenes ago to spare Jennifer and KB and got knocked out by Griff. He has since been brought to the advanced Citizen Plus treatment facility, so Edna can interrogate and brainwash him. (The layout of it is basically meant to be similar to that of the game, but there is like 2016 level technology there).
INSIDE - CITIZEN PLUS TREATMENT FACILITY
Martin slowly regains his consciousness and finds that his arms and legs have been strapped to an uncomfortable treatment lounger meant for those receiving a direct Citizen Plus treatment. A feeding tube is going into his mouth down his throat, a strange helmet most likely meant to sent electromagnetic signals into his brain has been strapped onto his head. His glasses had been removed. A familiar figure sits next to Martin, one whose silhouette Martin recognizes too well. (A more unsettling version of Lorraine’s bedroom plays in the score, because Martin already knows that something is wrong.)
Martin: Mom? Mom is that you?
Lorraine: Relax, young Citizen. You've been unconscious for almost 3 hours. (Wipes his sweat with a wet rag off his forehead.) We've got everything under control now.
Martin: (not comforted at all) No. We don't. (Struggles against his restraints.) Jennifer. Where is Jennifer?!
Lorraine: Don't worry about her, Martin. We'll soon find her and give her the Citizen Plus program too.
Martin: (wide eyed) Citizen Plus?!
The light turns on revealing both the layout of the treatment hall and the state of Lorraine. Like George she has aged, but worse. Despite her Citizen Plus smile and demeanor, the past 30 years weren't too kind on her health. Her hair, back in 1986 already starting to grey with some streaks, is fully white now and her face fallen in from unaddressed stress and grief of the past 3 decades thanks to the program.
Martin: (unable to bring out a coherent word in shock and horror at her appearance for a moment until he settles on the following) What happened to you?!
Edna: Only the results of your actions, you hooligan.
Martin: Huh??
Edna (having most likely taken a rejuvenation treatment to explain why she is still alive) is looking down on Martin through the windows of the overseeing room. Her face and form are shrouded in shadows and she is speaking into a microphone, her creaky old voice coming out of the speakers in the hall.
Edna: You have no idea how much trouble you caused Hill Valley. Over 50 years of work and meticulous rule, all of that made obsolete within a moment thanks to your "experiment". Lorraine, would you be so kind to prep your son for his treatment?
Lorraine: Yes, your honor.
Lorraine puts tools/devices on Martin's face which force his eyes wide open.
Martin: (as this happens) Mrs. Brown, you're making a big mistake. I need to go back in time to -
Edna: Undo the last 30 years of my work too?! The only mistake I ever made was listening to my weak pathetic ex-husband when it came to dealing with you punks and delinquents! Just look at how audacious and violent the youth have become!
Martin: (is way more worried by the VR goggles in Lorraine's hands) W-what's that, mom?
Lorraine: (putting that onto him) Just something that will help us fix you.
Martin: (knowing damn well what "fixing" here means) But didn't you always tell me that is nothing that needs to be fixed?
Lorraine: (hesitating for a moment in confusion) Well, that's true, Matin, but - (blinks and looks around herself) Wait... where am I?
Edna: Lorraine! Concentrate!
Lorraine: (Snapping back to citizen plus) Right, your honor!
Lorraine steps away from the lounger.
Edna: Now young man. Where did you hide that dangerous time machine of yours?
(At this point here a few scenes of Jennifer and KB are supposed to take place and happen, where they figure out a plan, to give a sense of time having passed. What's important is that Jennifer has already made her way in, while KB organizes something on the outside.)
Jennifer is sneaking around in police uniform with the visor down, going from holding cell to holding cell, trying to find Martin. She stops as she hears the interrogation going on inside the center and lifts up her visor a bit to look in confusion at the sight there.
Edna: Now, now, young McFly. This is for everyone's best. Just tell us where that dangerous time machine is, so we can put an end to this nightmare you've caused us all.
Martin: (exhausted but also clearly bored) It's only a nightmare because you turned it into one.
Edna: (disappointed) To think that you were once such a promising example... those anarchistic hooligans must've twisted your head.
Martin: I'm pretty sure you did most of the work.
Lorraine: Martin, don't be so rude. You know how important the rules are.
Jennifer cannot believe what she's seeing. Martin standing up for himself? Against Edna? Either way, Jennifer has to find now a way to get him out of there and puts her visor down before looking for ways to get rid of the remaining guards here.
Martin: Mom... Didn't you once tell me that there is more to life than following rules? That you've hoped Jennifer would teach me a certain "joie de vivre"?
Jennifer: (stopping for a moment and taking a double take in Martin's direction) Huh??
Lorraine: (blinking and trying to think) I did that once, didn't I? But - (looks around in confusion again) What's going on? Martin, why are you-?
Edna: Lorraine! I didn't bring you here, so you could cuddle your hooligan of a son!
Lorraine: (snapping back into the Citizen Plus program) Right. I apologize your honor.
This gives Jennifer an idea. She goes into a more secluded corner and pulls out the smartphone KB gave her to text something. "HOW 2 break C+?"
A response comes in "U can't??"
Jennifer types again "What U do 2 Leech" she waits for a response "hacking". Jennifer stares in confusion.
A file follows with instructions and after a quick read Jennifer then starts to sneakily take the guards out one by one in the background.
Martin: (pensive) You know mom? I think I found some of that. Video games are pretty nice. And I also like that one Truman show movie.
Edna: Those punks truly corrupted your morals, didn't they? Just as I suspected. But we'll see about that in a few hours.
Martin: You just don't like them because they're different! From you!
Edna: (outraged) They are angry uncaring vandals, who want to see the collapse of society at its foundations!
Martin: (now getting frustrated himself at this lie) They're only angry because they care, while your rules don't!
Edna: Why you little-
At that exact moment Jennifer jumps into the center of the Citizen Plus treatment hall, right next to Martin's lounge.
Edna: What the- what's going on here?!
Martin: (oblivious because of the VR goggles) Huh??
Jennifer: I'm getting my nerd out of here, you old hag!
Martin: (half surprised half terrified for her) Jennifer?!
Jennifer quickly holds the smartphone to Lorraine's wrist where the watch is, and like how it did with KB a high pitched sound emits from it, before Lorraine shakes her head and breaks out of her programming temporarily. Edna screams for the guards to interfere, but the nearest ones have already been taken out. Jennifer is already removing the goggles and the tools forcing Martin's eyes open + that tube that's been force feeding him with terrible sludge. She puts on his nerdy glasses as well.
Martin: (can finally see her normally) Jennifer! You must get out of here!
Jennifer: Not without you, dork!
Lorraine: (looking around in confusion until she spots her son and gasps) Martin! What have they been doing to you??? (she starts to help Jennifer removing the restraints too)
Martin: (just glad to see his mother mentally normal again) Mom! (his arms are free enough to give her a tight hug and almost cries) You're you again!
Jennifer: (removing the last restraints on his legs) Not for long! We gotta get out of here.
With the brainwashing helmet still on, Martin tries to stand up and walk by himself. The interrogation and Citizen Plus treatment of the past few hours has however left him somewhat weakened, so Jennifer and Lorraine end up half dragging Martin out by the arms.
Lorraine: Jen, I'm so glad to see you get along with Martin again!
Jennifer: Less talking, more running!
As all three hurry their way out of there Edna makes a call on her phone.
Edna: Officer Tannen! I need you to go after those slackers!
(It ends off here and is supposed to lead to the Martin whacking Griff with a keyboard scene)
CTM AU uhhh... right, where would Lorraine be in 2016?
Cause I kind of just realized, that despite her having become a Citizen Plus being important for Martin's willingness to bend and go around the rules in 1986 to build his time machine in the first place... i have included her embarrassingly little in the actual 2016 section of the AU.
But don't worry! I haven't written down too much yet for it to be a difficult task.
I guess so far I kind of had the idea that she just died in the meantime? As a kind of like longterm effect of the Citizen Plus program on people? Terrible and lazu, I know, but right now as I was trying to come up with how to plan out the Edna interrogating Martin with the Citizen Plus treatment, I got an actual good idea regarding Citizen Plus Lorraine there: she's actually a kind of caretaker brainwashing assistant there. Officially a nurse for the people who end up hurting themselves during treatment, but in actuality meant to be there every day in case they finally get a hold of George McFly there, so Edna has an easier time breaking him down with the Citizen Plus treatment.
Except of course once Edna has her hands on Martin instead she involves her in that. Of course with Martin wrestling with all this other stuff he has seen and learned the past few days it doesn't work and in fact he seems to start breaking his mom's Citizen Plus program by accident, by just reminding her what she had always told and hoped for him before she herself got the treatment. And as a result, Lorraine would have to be taken out of the room there, so Martin doesn't actually manage to break the program fully, which in turn would have terrifying implications for Edna's small empire of "perfect" Citizen Plus Citizen.
This in turn would unintentionally give Jennifer + KB the opportunity to make a temporary break happen, that helps with getting Martin out of there. Heck, this would even enable a "I'm so proud and happy for you two" from her moment for Jen and Martin + a reunion between George and Lorraine, where the full break away from the programming could be sealed with the kiss tm.
This of course would then basically give Martin and Jennifer somewhat of a blueprint for how to break people under Citizen Plus fully out of that programm in 1986, but of course they don't fully understand yet, how exactly that works out.
