“This story is very lovely! I'm still very in awe by the giant wordcount you wracked up with this by the way, but that just on the side. I greatly enjoy the patchwork family between the characters, with both blood ties and not-blood-ties. I like the way the Fett family helps and supports each other, even when they'll throw around sarcasm non stop while doing it. A favourite of mine is the last scene of chapter 7 - suicide is a heavy topic, and for me especially so when it's about other people's reactions to finding out that someone is/was suicidal. As someone who had some not so good variations of that in the past it was very heartwarming to see Jango's positive, supportive and loving approach, without the usually so inherent judgement.
I'm also excited about the way you incorporated the 'Force' into this universe, and the inherent mystery about the whole government experiment/department thing. I'm also super happy that Padmé got a major role recently, she so often gets overlooked in fanfics when her character is so awesome.
I am aware that this fanfic is pretty much finished and therefor won't be changed, but I still wanted to mention the few bits I didn't like, which was mostly the in my opinion inflationary use of swearing and badassery. I'm all for using swear words and having competent characters actually be competent according to their experience, but well. With the swear words it sometimes feels like every second word out of Obi-Wan's mouth is one (it obviously isn't but you catch the drift) and for me it takes the impact out of the use of them when things actually go (even more) south. No matter if things are going well or not, people are swearing left and right so at this point I can't really tell the difference anymore, at least judging from word choice.
It's a bit analogue with the badassery. At this point everyone seems so overpowered that any potential obstacles perceivably don't pose much of a threat since Obi-Wan & Co. are gonna bulldoze over them anyway.
But that just on the side, I still greatly enjoy the story.
There's however one thing that greatly bothers and that's to do with the AIDS testing. First I have to say that I greatly appreciated the issue being mentioned and discussed in a serious manner by the characters, which is not something often seen in fiction. However, and maybe I misread this in the story and you already know this, the thing is doing a blood test when one has been recently exposed to possibly infected blood is useless within a certain time period. Most HIV tests use an antibody test, which will pretty much always test negative within the first 3 weeks because not enough antibodies have been produced yet that could be detected. The recommended waiting period is three months, a time by which 97% of people will develop detectable antibodies. For being extra sure one can do an additional test 6 months later (it is possible to test negative after 3 months but positive after six months, even if it's very rare). There are two other main tests that have a shorter window period, the fourth-generation test (detection after 2 to 6 weeks) and the nucleic acid test (1 to 4 weeks). The latter is super expensive and pretty much only used when the patient is at extremely high risk of being infected with a fast acting mutation. So, what I'm saying is that if someone got exposed a month prior and then does a blood test they run at high risk of getting a false negative result. This misinformation bit is very common and it always greatly disturbs me when I stumble upon it, because it poses a high danger as there are still many doctors who are not aware of this (a gay friend of mine once did a test a week after he had been potentially exposed at the recommendation of a doctor and took the negative result at face value as he had no way of knowing better and argh). (this got longer than i intended to, in case you already knew all this i apologize) (I'm aware that changing things around now isn't really possible, but might I propose that you could put something in the notes to educate people? I mean maybe the department has some sci-fi way of detecting HIV without a window period, but read like this the story spreads misinformation)”
