#critique request

[prosepathologized]

Hello lovely writing people! This is a link to the first two newly revised chapters of my character driven queer time travel romance, Any Minute Now. I have a lot going on in chapter two. It’s a hefty chapter with a lot going on and a lot that needs to happen and be introduced. I think I’ve done it in a way that’s interesting, but it’s a 4.5K+word behemoth. I’ve looked at it all that I can, so if anyone is willing to give these two chapters a read, I need to know: 1. If it drags and where 2. Anywhere it might feel too long-winded on the part of my narrator. Hoping to cut 1.5K words at least. Happy to read for you in exchange! (No, I don’t want any paid betas, thanks.)

Any Minute Now 1&2

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[shitty-toyhouse-warnings]

Making same assumption that you want to remain anon. (In future, if people are requesting critique, please lmk if you don't mind me not censoring your username!)

Anon i really like this. It's very easy to read and condensed, and the specific ways / places the content can be found is an optional dropdown so nobody is forced to read possible walls of text.

Best one we've seen so far that's definitely for sure!

[mghawkswood]

More character portraits hooray!

I'm looking for feedback on improving my process (aside from something impossible, like "work on being more patient!" or "take a break and come back to it!") so that I like the finished color as much as I liked the sketch...

WIP shots below the cut:

Base sketch:

Detail sketch (which I was really excited about!):

Value underpainting:

I think this is an opportunity for a lot of improvement - if I had spent more time blending and detailing here, I might have had a better end result.

Color reference:

Overlaying value and color layers:

Final after tweaks and additional line:

[bogbodybitch]

What are people's thoughts on the flowers in this painting? I think it might look better without them so the bird stands out more and the painting looks less busy. One friend said I could also change the color of the flowers to make them less distracting.

What do y'all think, and if you think I should change the color what color should I change them too?

[batwynn]

Can I ask a huge favor of my followers?

Can you write a basic/short critique of my art and comics, if you have the spoons for it? Really just anything that stands out to you that you feel needs work. There’s some things I know I need to work on, some things I’m already working on, some things I won’t be changing for time constraint reasons (for certain projects), and others I obviously have no clue about. I just feel like I’m really not seeing something wrong here.

It can be anon or not anon, whatever you’re comfortable with. I promise no anger, arguments, or blocking unless you are… you know, just being mean to be mean and not actually offering criticism.

I’m not 100% sure what I can offer in return for it, but if you’d like to add an art request with your message or want like a sticker packet or something I can definitely do that! If you think of something else, just let me know!

Thank you SO much! 🥸♥️

[jksketch]

Assassin’s Creed - SUPER fun subject for the Ten ton Sketch Challenge this week. I have never played the game but I LOVE the character design and costumes. After reading up on it i feel like I need to give this game a play. I Believe the character I drew is the Revolutionary war assassin named Connor AKA Ratonhnhake. If you have any critique or insight I would love to hear it

[romanofastora]

Tried sketching @slightlysimian 's cute as hell Valentine. I want to date her but he won't let me. Headcanon that she loves mango juice and always enjoys one after a long of work. Also. I'm taking drawing classes, so any pointers or stuff I can improve would be greatly appreciated

[garylart]

Which looks better design wise? The stones above the windows are different. The top or bottom. Note that I have not compile the lighting (because it takes like 1 1/2 hours to compile) so the textures and shadows looks a bit odd.  Also does this building look like something you’d find in any American town?