Drarry- #𝟙 - 𝕊𝕦𝕘𝕘𝕖𝕤𝕥𝕚𝕠𝕟-𝔸𝕣𝕘𝕦𝕞𝕖𝕟𝕥
𝐓𝐡𝐢𝐬 𝐢𝐬 𝐠𝐞𝐧𝐞𝐫𝐚𝐥𝐥𝐲 𝐚𝐛𝐨𝐮𝐭 𝐇𝐚𝐫𝐫𝐲 𝐨𝐫 𝐃𝐫𝐚𝐜𝐨 𝐛𝐞𝐜𝐨𝐦𝐢𝐧𝐠 𝐚 𝐜𝐡𝐢𝐥𝐝, 𝐛𝐚𝐛𝐲, 𝐨𝐫 𝐭𝐨𝐝𝐝𝐥𝐞𝐫.
Right now, we'll be discussing Harry Potter turning in to a toddler.
TW: Talk about abuse/rape/pedophilia, ect.
What I dislike about the books:
#1
Now, I understand if it happens in one or two, different books, but if it happens in every book I read then, it becomes irritating, and not original. What I'm referring to is the generic, issue where Harry transforms into a toddler, and he 'hates' Ron and Hermione, or just Ron. Come on, man, those are his best friends.
There are other ways to make a story interesting than Harry being scared of his bestfriends!
#2
The issue of Harry just easily talking about his childhood.
The matter of Harry carelessly revealing his childhood.Please try to make your narrative more intriguing and build-it up. Harry had matured faster than his peers, so if he's being abused and is 'afraid' that his uncle/strangers will beat him for just about everything he says, he wouldn't feel safe disclosing that type of information.
Just drop in little hints of it.
#3
They're catching on to the fact that he's being abused a little too soon. Again, the more you hint at him being abused, the clearer it becomes to them, until they totally comprehend it. There's no need to rush it; you might believe that doing so will make the tale more intriguing, but it won't; it'll come across as rushed, cringey, and uninteresting, and you might not have any more inspiration after that. Gradually build your plot so that your readers become more engrossed in your work and WANT to read the following chapter when they reach the conclusion of one.
#4
I understand if Draco was in love with Harry, before this transpired or if they were in a relationship before the 'event,' but don't make him INLOVE with a child. Don't even bring up the possibility of him falling for Harry.
Matter-of-fact If he says he 'loves' Harry, don't make him realize it while he's taking care of a child! That's both absurd and repulsive.
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