6 people have shown interest in my WoF rewrite and that’s enough for me so I’m sharing some of my changes and notes so far this is just for arc 1
One of the worst parts of the first arc is how dumb the villains are
So in this rewrite Morrowseer and Blister are manipulative they show sympathy towards the dragonets of destiny for how the guardians treated them
Blister and Morrowseer sort of have a mother gothel and lord frollo vibe
They are so sneaky and their voices are so fake and almost patronizin
But they are the first adults the dod have met who didn’t hurt them or yell at them or imprison them
Now onto info about the DoD
CLAY
Clay is the dragonet with the most scars only second to Glory
Most of his scars are from Kestrel and Dune
Webs didn’t physically hurt Clay but his bias from his time in the sea kingdom showed and he was the one who talked about how dumb and lazy mudwings are
Clay was the foundation of the dragonets he was the one who broke up all the fights and kept them safe and took the blame for everything especially when it came to Glory
He knew that Tsunami could handle herself and Starflight never got in trouble and Sunny was sweet enough to avoid any serious punishment
But Glory was a target the guardians hated her and everytime Clay can’t get there fast enough to take the blame he cries a bit when he sleeps because he feels like a failure
Clay is a bigwings he doesn’t know it but he was born to protect his sibs and that’s why he feels so hollow everytime he fails to protect them
When the guardians discuss killing Glory (the dragonets still don’t know yet that Morrowseer ordered them to) Clay is reluctant to leave the cave and let them out he doesn’t want to leave Glory behind
For the first time this is real life and death and if he is too slow like Kestrel says or too dumb like Webs says or too lazy like Dune says then Glory could die
When they get captured by Scarlet and put in the arena or held captive or n display Clay just lays there not eating or drinking he feels like everything the guardians said about him was true
Peril finds him and throws a rock at him to get his attention
Clay doesn’t talk to her or even look at her for a day or two until she finally asks him what’s wrong and he tells her
He says he’s a failure to his friends and everything the guardians said was right and Peril asks him why
His and Peril’s romance will be teaching each other that one screw up in their past doesn’t define who they are and they don’t have to be what people say they are
That will also be Clay’s solo arc learning that his friends still love him and they know he tries his best and sometimes Clay needs to know it’s okay to lean on them as well
TSUNAMI
Tsunami my girl my love
She has the third most scars out of the dragonets since she was most likely to fight back and she was good at fighting
This Tsunami is not at all princess material especially not sea princess material
She fights and she yells and she won’t be silenced she is angry and everyone needs to know
Coral is disappointed her lost daughter isn’t like the daughter she wrote about and Tsunami knows this
Which is why when Blister shows up praising Tsunami for her strength and tells her she truly has the pride and confidence to be a queen Tsunami latches to her
Tsunami’s arc in the second book would be about her juggling everything in her life and trying to be the strong warrior Blister praised her for acting like
She is the leader of the dragonets it’s her job to make the right calls and now she has a sweet little sister with too much power for a dragonet to understand and a slimy suck up whispering in the queen’s ear (whirlpool)
And then she offers to guard the last princess egg in the hatchery her mouth had moved before her brain could catch up and how she was responsible for a little green egg that had a massive target on it
Then she rests on a beach with the egg whispering her frustrations to it and another dragon arrives a laid back happy seawing who is the opposite of her
Riptide has no worries sure he’s sad his dad disappeared and his mom died but that happened when he was young and now he lived on one of the outer islands with his aunt
Tsunami envies him he’s lost so much and he’s still so carefree she wants to be like that
Riptide knows Webs is his dad but he never thinks of him he hasn’t seen him in who knows how long
And Tsunami is angry she’s furious and she yells at him that all this time her friends had to listen to that slimeball talk down to them that coward who wouldn’t even act like a dragon and fight her all those years
Who stole her away from the place she was truly meant to be and stole away a life where she could’ve grown into the princess Coral wants her to be
Her and her friends had to endure years of Webs and all this time he was supposed to be doing it to this guy who had the audacity to act like nothing was wrong in this life
And Riptide says sorry which shocks her to the point she falls backwards and just sits there
He says he’s sorry that happened to her and her friends but he thanks her because now he knows his dad isn’t a good dragon and he won’t ever wonder what he could’ve had
And Tsunami calms down her racing heart slows and she stops barring her teeth and for once in years she lays in the sand and feels the waves crashing against her talons and she relaxes
Tsunami and Riptide are opposites she is fiery and passionate and wants to yell and he is calm and collected and willing to listen to everything she has to yell about
They learn from each other Riptide gives her a place to relax and calm down and just rest and Tsunami gives him a place to let out that built up frustration
Tsunami’s arc focuses on her role as the leader and her struggle balancing everything in the sea kingdom and with her friends and now her little sisters one who is so powerful she might crack under the pressure and another who isn’t even hatched yet but already has her life at risk
GLORY
Glory has the most scars she was the most hated by the guardians and they wanted her gone
Now they were free and two of those monsters were dead and one was injured and his life rested in their talons
If it was up to her she’d leave him for dead
But Sunny was near tears when Glory suggested that and Sunny was her little sister so how could she say no to her?
So they head for the rainforest hoping to learn about poison and venom
Glory is already picturing the rainwings
Clay got his happily ever after meeting his brothers and sisters and learning he isn’t a monster
Tsunami found out she was a princess and even if Coral wasn’t a good mom she still had two sisters who adored her
Now it was Glory’s turn to find the hidden rainwing utopia filled with knowledgeable warriors who were the opposite of what everyone told her she was
But they enter the rainforest and her friends start disappearing one by one her heart is racing and she feels her throat closing up
Glory didn’t like being touched but she also didn’t like being alone she had always been with her friends she had never been truly alone before
Even Tsunami who she fought with constantly and would probably trade for a ripe mango was still her sister and the thought of a world without her made her face hot and her eyes sting the thought of anyone laying a claw on her brothers and sisters made her want to scream
Then a friendly pink face appears and Jambu introduces himself and calmly explains what they did and her friends are safe and they just want to take her to their village
Glory feels pride as she learns to tree glide and she thinks that her dreams have come true her tribe had sleeping darts and a unique way around the rainforest when Webs wakes up she is going to make him eat his words
Then they land on a platform and her dreams are crushed as she learns her tribe sleeps in the middle of the day and spend their time eating fruit and napping
And worst of all this pink faced baboon is her brother and there’s some old purple rainwing who’s face sags that sits in the treetops and always seems to be watching Glory
But it turns out to be not all bad when they find the healers and she is greeted by a rainwing around her age with shiny violet and blue scales and sweet brown eyes and a flower tucked behind her ear
The rainwing introduces herself as Morning and jokes that together they are Morning Glory and for some odd reason Glory liked that and she smiled
For some reason Glory kept visiting Webs but spent all her time asking Morning questions
Glory learns from Morning and Mangrove that dragons are going missing two of which were Mangrove’s partner and a friend of Morning’s little sister Tamarin
Glory tells the current queen that she will investigate this all on her own and she’ll bring back the lost rainwings
When she is getting ready to leave the old purple rainwing lands beside her and Glory recognizes those pale green eyes
She wishes her good luck and adds in her two cents that she thinks none of the current queens should be on the throne including Grandeur the purple rainwing says Grandeur is too old to be on the throne
That makes Glory laugh because this rainwing must be the oldest dragon she’s ever seen granted she hadn’t seen that many old dragons in her life
Glory investigates and she feels eyes on her which makes her go back to the rain village
The regular things happen Glory meets Blaze who is a bit ditzy and she meets Deathbringer who is goofy in a way he almost reminds her of Jambu but he’s an assassin so he’s deadly enough to bare no resemblance to Glory’s goofy and sweet older brother
Deathbringer arrives in the rainforest attempting to assassinate Glory but the regular thing happens he gets captured then Glory gets kidnapped
Glory and Kinkajou escape the volcano and when she arrives and after Jambu tackles her in a hug Morning gently takes on of Glory’s talons in her own and tells her she’s glad Glory’s back
And Glory is starting to maybe like being touched so gently as if she might break
Glory challenges the Queens for the throne and to her surprise the old purple dragon WAS Queen Grandeur and Glory wondered why in the world would she say she shouldn’t be Queen
The challenge goes as it does in the book and once Glory is crowned queen and Grandeur is revealed to be her relative the old dragon admits later in years she wasn’t a very good queen but she felt she had to stay on the throne to make sure the other idiots she shared it with couldn’t make this tribe any worse
Glory and Morning will be a very slow burn they probably won’t they together until arc 2 or maybe 3?? But Morning will show Glory that their tribe is still worth fighting for even if it isn’t what she imagined
Glory learns that not everyone will treat her like she’s useless she has a place in this world and there are dragons who care about her and believe in her and the guardians that told her she was useless and unwanted should be buried on level ground so she could dance on their graves
STARFLIGHT
Starflight’s beginning stays the same he was quiet and stayed out of trouble with the guardians he has the least scars next to Sunny
He was desperate for Nightwing powers he’d lay up at night with his eyes closed shut hoping to hear a thought ther than his own or see a glimpse into his future
Sunny was his lifeline during that she reassured him that powers or not he was their starflight and they loved him
But everytime he wished she’d say that he was her Starflight he felt a weird pit in his gut the same pit he got when he lied to himself and said that maybe one day his powers would kick in
Starflight’s arc will revolve around lies I headcanon the sky kingdom as being very homophobic (Scarlet is a homophobic lesbian she will kiss Burn then ban gay marriage because she’s the worst) and Kestrel ingrained it in the dragonets (because she’s the worst) or tried to because Starflight was the only one who actually takes it in
Starflight focuses on Sunny convincing himself that he loves her and wants to be with her
And as a dragonet he imagined the night kingdom as a beautiful kingdom full of knowledge and wisdom
So when he is kidnapped and taken to their secret island he is met with nothing but disappointment to find an island covered in ash and smoke with grey clouds so thick you can hardly tell if its day or night
He meets a sister who despises him and a father who is in charge of the rainwing tests and he just feels a wave of disappointment wash over him
Then Morrowseer seems to switch on him as if having Starflight in his clutches made him comfortable enough to show his true colors and Starflight sees how truly nasty the large dragon was and Starflight realizes he’s completely alone and everything he hoped for and believed in was a lie
Until Morrowseer brings him to meet five dragonets backups for Starflight and his friends and Starflight makes his first friend on that island
Fatespeaker is a little odd and quirky but Starflight likes being friends with her and thinks her and Sunny would get along
The other dragonets acted like meaner versions of Starflight and his friends he couldn’t tell if they liked each other or not because one minute they were joking then someone would step on another’s tail and it would turn into a fight
The angriest of the bunch seemed to be Flame he was a big red Skywing and he seemed to despise Starflight for a reason he didn’t know
Then one night or day Starflight couldn’t tell he was laying in the dormitories and Flame approached his bed and in a hushed voice he asked if Starflight had seen the other kingdoms
Starflight could only make out Flame’s gold eyes in the dark cave and whispers back a yes
And then Flame asks (hesitantly) if there were couples that were the same gender
Starflight gets a pit in his stomach and Kestrel’s hissed words rang through his head
But she was dead now and her words shouldn’t effect him anymore
So he whispers yes and he sees Flame’s eyes widen
Flame and Starflight sat and whispered to each other until Fierceteeth hissed at them to shut up and go to sleep
Starflight had only known violence from Skywings from Kestrel to Scarlet
He had no idea a Skywing could talk in such a gentle voice
The rest of the book goes on like usual with Fatespeaker and Starflight exploring and investigating but with more moments between him and Flame
Then the prophecy is revealed to be a lie and Starflight is blinded by the volcano and when he wakes up in what he guesses is the rainwing infirmary
And Flame’s hushed voice speaks up from the other side of the room asking if he’s okay
Flame and Starflight are a crack ship I came up with while planning relationships I’d like to keep or rewrite and their relationship will begin with Flame despising Starflight because of Flame’s own internalized homophobia he met a cute boy and every voice in his head told him to push him away
Meanwhile Starflight’s internalized homophobia made him cling to any girl who was nice to him in hopes of being “normal” like he thinks he needs to be
And Starflight’s arc revolves around lies and truth learning the truth of the Nightwing home and uncovering all their lies and even the lies he tells himself in hopes of living up to be what everyone expects him to be
SUNNY
Sunny is Dune’s favorite she doesn’t notice how he snapped at the other dragonets or hurt them she was quite literally the golden dragonet
Sunny doesn’t know why she was his favorite since she didn’t look like a sandwing
Dune died in front of her and her only example of her tribe was dead and with his last breath he whispered “six-claws”
But she was the happy one sure the others saw her as their goofy little sister but she didn’t mind so long as she helped end the war
But now the prophecy was revealed to be fake what she thought was her destiny and what she was born to do wasn’t real
Poor Starflight was blinded and Sunny wanted to comfort him but he had his new friend to comfort him so Sunny assumes he will be okay in the meantime
She can’t exactly remember the nightwing’s name but Sunny knew she had pretty violet eyes and a soft face that made Sunny want to smile
Sunny gets kidnapped like usual by Fierceteeth, Strongwings, and Preyhunter and when she makes it to the scorpion den where she finds wanted posters for an odd looking sandwing dragonet, Morrowseer, Dune, and a Nightwing she doesn’t recognize
Sunny meets Six-Claws and when he tells her his name she audibly gasps and tells him Dune told her his name before he died
Sunny assumed it was a strange code word but it was actually a dragon
Six-Claws gets teary eyed and tells her that he and Dune were very close before Dune left for the talons of peace (You can pry Dune x Six-Claws out of my cold dead hands)
Sunny meets Thorn and is told the truth about who she is or part of who she is
Instead of Thorn killing Preyhunter she has Sunny’s captors imprisoned because killing him just made her look a little cruel??
Sunny spends a day in the scorpion den talking to Thorn and her new adopted brother Qibli (who she insists on calling her tiny baby brother even though he’s taller than her and honestly?? Let her have this she was the little sister her entire life she deserves a little brother she can baby)
The rest of her book carries on like usual and she gets kidnapped by Addax and held captive by Burn and Peril helps her and Scarlet escape
When Sunny makes it back to her friends she is greeted by Fatespeaker first who is decorated in flowers thanks to the rainwings and Sunny thinks she looks very pretty but she stops herself from getting distracted and runs to her friends
First she tells Clay that Peril says hi because above all else she is a little sister and her job is to embarrass her older siblings and she definitely does that and is so proud of herself
When she tells them about her mom and getting kidnapped Fatespeaker claims she knew it and she could sense it but Starflight said she was crazy
Sunny thinks Fatespeaker is a little kooky but Sunny likes that and she thinks Fatespeaker is very pretty to boot
The dragonets gather the tribes but now they are wary of Blister because they know Morrowseer had been faking sympathy so how would they know if Blister was genuine or not
The queens gather at Burn’s stronghold and it plays out like usual with the second dragonbite viper that kills Burn and it starts heading towards the dragonets and Clay in an attempt to save Starflight gets bitten (might change this??)
Peril saves Clay and Sunny notices Prince Smolder’s pet scavenger Flower waving her paws and chittering
Fatespeaker says her “moon powers” are telling her that Flower wants to show her something
Sunny could’ve guessed that on her own but she played along and thanked Fatespeaker because she liked the smile Fatespeaker gave her
Sunny finds the eye of onyx, blister dies from greed, Blaze survives, and Thorn is chosen as the next queen yippee (again might change some things here)
Sunny’s arc will kind of remain the same? I want her to not know who she is supposed to be when the prophecy is revealed to be fake her entire life she’s known she is one of the dragonets of destiny but it’s all a lie and she has to find her place in the world and decides she is sick of having others speak for her
Fatespeaker and Sunny are endgame here they will be a very healthy relationship they enjoy each other’s company and spend as much time as possible together once they are official since Fatespeaker and Starflight are just friends there won’t be any of that weird Sunny being jealous incesty thing?? Anyway Sunny and Fatespeaker are chubby girlfriends and I love that for them
Finally here are some general changes and even some descriptions??
Clay is chubby and bulky like usual and Peril is taller than him
Clay assumed he and Peril have been dating since she saved him from the dragonbite viper so she is worried over absolutely nothing
Glory is very thin like unhealthy thin since in this rewrite Rainwings are complete vegetarians they aren’t supposed to eat meat and the guardians refused to get her fruit or vegetables so Glory ended up throwing up most of what she ate
Morning keeps having taste tests with Glory where they find the strangest fruits and vegetables and try as much as possible in hopes of getting Glory to a healthy weight
Peril is also thin because she was eating straight up rocks so she bonds with Clay over food now that she can eat and they will find a secluded place to just hang out and have a picnic
I can’t decide if Moon should end up with Carnelian or Kinkajou?? Maybe they should all be together?? Anyway I know I want the love triangle to be Kinkajou, Moon, and Carnelian
Qinter will be in this rewrite and they will not be sunshine x grumpy because that just ruins their characters??? So instead they will both be “this guy thinks he is completely unlovable and horrible and I swear I’m going to prove him wrong”
Turtle might be aromantic?? Maybe a qpr with Pike??
Peril and Glory bond over Scarlet and actually become pretty good friends
I’m still working on this and most of this will definitely be revamped so any suggestions will be great
Also Sunny and Fatespeaker are chubby girlfriends and I love them
Tsunami is thick and muscular like she could 100% bench press Clay and Riptide would cheer her on from the sidelines
That’s all I have so far I might add more later on and again a lot of this will be revamped so any constructive criticism or suggestions will be appreciated (please be nice tho or I’ll cry)
