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He’s the Alpha

EPUB cover by @valeries-creations

Written by @yslarrysl

G: ABO Footie AU

T: strangers to lovers

W: 37K

Based on She is the Man film.

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“ELLO”

stylesly

London - 9/24

So glad to see you're back !!

aw, that’s sweet. i’m intermittently on tumblr lol. i visit every once in a while but im more active on twitter!

ariesrin

Writing tips: He said, she said...

Readers don't tend to notice 'said', while it's there in the sentence, it doesn't give the sentence any life. It gets the job done, mostly...

Here are some options to try!

whispered / muttered / mumbled → soft or secretive

shouted / yelled / barked → anger, urgency

growled / hissed → danger, teasing, frustration

murmured / breathed → intimacy, vulnerability

snapped / barked / snapped back → irritation, defensiveness

laughed / chuckled / giggled → laughing, fun, playful or flirty

asked / questioned / queried / inquired → curiosity, questioning

demanded / insisted → authority or control

sighed / groaned → fatigue, exasperation, longing

When you're looking to replace said, think about why. You'll generally want to do this when you need the following:

when the tone of the line needs more context.

when you want to show emotion instead of telling it.

when your character’s body language, action, or expression can do the talking instead.

Take a look at the scene you're writing, is the character saying their line? Or are they yelling it? Screaming it? Are they enraged, or perhaps is their voice a broken whisper from grief?

That being said, you shouldn't always avoid using 'said.' It's easy to read in long sentences, and it keeps the focus on the dialogue rather than the rest of the scenes. That may be beneficial and a key component to parts of your story.

deadzouis

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twinktorturer

im sorry. im not woke. i dont think the pathetic and shy character should top to subvert expectations. i just want to see them shiver and whimper and get fucked within an inch of their life. #sorry

#louis is small and tiny #and made for taking dick #i don’t make the rules