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Reflection on Project 3

At the first glance of project 3, I thought it was easy, since I focused on the word autobiography, which means no more researching, no more information sorting. Until I read the "Who I am" articles striving for distinguishing the difference between storytelling and narrative describing than I realized I should help myself get rid of the previous storytelling style, because I am writing a paper in college level rather than just a memorial diary.

Listing all the memorable technology items or technical moments is another tortuous process, since I do have pounds of item, but the memories with them are either break into several parts or unworthy of mention. So, after I struggled out the particular items I want to write, I concentrated on plot setting and characteristic building though it’s not a pure story or drama. From the perspective of clearness and literacy profound, indicating deep meaning of technology literacy in wordless acting or characters behavior became the main goal to achieve.

Then came draft composing, it didn’t seem so harsh for me, but after the peer review, which I got two completely different point of view, I was lost. I thought if there wasn’t any vague presentation, this kind of situation wouldn’t appear. So, there must be some serious problem or some details I didn’t represent and explain well, which only resulted in this.

Revisited my essay, I did find some troubles which are made by unconsiderate and thoughtless. Currently, I am still revising some part of my essay, hope it will end great!

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Preparing Questions for Project 4

1.  Who was the original audience for my project 2? How do you know the answer? Point to specific things in the project that reveal this audience consideration？

The original audience is students who are currently major in accounting and those who are interest in this field but still don't know what accounting do specifically. I know it from the composing process of my Project 2, which I directly point out as: “many students choose accounting as their major after graduated from high schools because they think it is easier for them to find jobs comparing to some other majors.” Indicating why so many people start choosing accounting as their major. Also “Companies worldwide are paying more attention in their financial management and internal financial control then ten years ago. As a result, professional accountants are needed for more and more companies.” This is another reason encouraged accounting industry to grow rapidly. However, since most of my audiences are abecedarian, them may not investigate deeply and think over what kind of literacy and technology they have to deal with in the future, and that’s also the initial purpose of my project 2.

2. What was the original context for project 2? How do you know? Also point to specific things in the project that reveal this audience consideration?

For the context of project 2, I concentrate on traditional literacy and new developed technology like information technology and computerized accounting systems to assist daily works in different level as an accountant. I began with denying math is the essential focusing in accounting though admitted its status. Then draw forth one of my core thesis about literacy that professional and precise writing and reading skill is the most necessary and important traditional skill in accounting. Because there are different kinds of files need to write in their daily work. And supported it with evidence from University’s requirements and acknowledged accounting standard worldwide. After that, I elicited the second thesis by quoting someone’s theory that computers can correct some mistakes and errors that students made in financial statement and letters. “It develops writing and analytic skills, uses the professional standards, and uses the technology students will encounter in the work place.” To illustrate those advanced technologies are beneficial and efficient enough which worth us facilitating. In the end, I made a brief comparison between the traditional one and advanced one, but still, depends on the acquirers.

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Questions on Project 4

1. 75% content of project 4 should come from the souce of project 2, which part shall I choose to emphasis in project 4?

To figure out this, I should first answer some questions and follow the steps to analyze the valuable part I desire to present to my audience, find out what they want to know, that's the most essentical of my project 2.

2. In what form should I use to deliever to audience and public?

I'd better refer to other senior's remixed sample to get some insprition and do the research to compare one methods with another, also, I should choose the one I am facilitate with.

3. Where can I find the souces help with this project?

I actually don't have much idea about it.

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A Revision Plan for Project 3

I am kinda confused since I received two totally difference comments of peer review, one insist that I am not focused enough and the development is not clear, while the other holds that focus and development are both well done.

So, instead of getting my inspiration from peer review, I personally would take the following revision for my essay. First, correct those language errors, some of my sentences are pretty tricky and informal, blended with grammar mistakes. Second, I am going to add more details rather than apparent word to present literacy hidden behind, I should keep in mind not to say what the details will indicated out loud, instead, be precise , neat, still brief to my details described. Then, I will consider changing my heading paragraph into some more attractive structure, in order not to be tedious.

Finally, I would connect my literacy part with common Michigan State University fellows since they are my target audience, my essay need to aim literacy with them!

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Respond to Sample Student essay 5 & 6

Technology autobiography is truly a big headache for me for a while since I began to list memorized technology moments, sample students essay 5 survived me I thought, this kind of combination storytelling and narrative describing is just the approach I have been searching, the structure of whole essay is simple but stand close to daily life and community faced everyday, which make audience feel close and sensate. Author focused her point on the effects and change of her strained relationship to warm and comfortable status because of the appearance of Facebook rather than MySpace and any other social technology tools. The development seems natural and smooth, without big twist, but still impressive, since this experience is so common that people will hold the same feeling when reading along. However, her shortcoming lies in arrangement and MLA, the beginning part which indicated her previous relationship with her mother is somewhat tedious long which can simplify a little bit more. In addition, her writing style didn't follow the prompt of MLA, since she didn't refer to her Facebook though she directly picked some pieces in it up and the date at the front didn't format correctly. However, as a whole this piece is a brilliant one in stance of autobiography.

Essay 6 is attract me until I know the literacy hiding behind his RP forum, since I firstly thought this story is kinda beyond real life and those characters are all fake. Unfortunately, I was totally wrong, both its development and arrangement of this essay is well done, and it followed the time sequence to present his experience from first purely game to bonds with friends in the forum or little chat boxes. The thread of emotion part was illustrated by his example with a men called Jamie, and several little story made readers all realized the relationship is true and tight! The character he build is Jamie, and Jamie help setting this whole story more close to realistic life. Again, most of his MLA style is correct, only the reference part is vague, and readers have no idea where to find the resources, and currently I am not sure whether refer to own sentences need a formal reference or not.

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Respond to Kristin Arola’s Technology Autobiography

Kristin's article is full of her emotion regarding technology impact on her life. 

First, she talked  about several technology items attract her, described their appearance and account for some details in. The words chosen is very vivid and concise, which arouse readers interests a lot. Also, the same sentence structure at the end of each item makes the essay's arrangement seem agile and considerate.

After that, she followed the time sequence, which is the most usually used strategy to precisely present her technology literacy in lifetime, and illustrated that her technology literacy is not smoothy as people thought. Though her grandma is on the cutting edge of technology when she was young, is still in a small town, which can't compare with other city's technology literacy. Later, as a result of lack of money, she became not that willing to accept new inventions like years ago. Finally, she opened her mind as being admitted to a technological university and in order to caught up with her peers, she again learned to literate technology from some of her roommates, which made to whole story seems winding but consistent.

She didn't directly wrote down the spirit that led her catch up with what she missed during the dislike technical phase, on the other hand, she mentioned her grandma as a main thread character to infect her, also, if not her strong spirit to learn new things, she will never open her mind to accept those she said city-folk's technology again, which obviously indicated from the details she described

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Reflection on Project 2

The writing process for project 2 is alternate harsh and enjoyable, since project 2 is longer and more professional than any other project I did before, it requires deep dig into crediable journals and articles people created by spareing no efforts into researching, which is, on the other hand, horizon widened  However, my task to combine what I discovered with experience and adequate explaination is a difficult process, only when fusion facts found and own translated explaination are integrated together can writing skill truly practiced and improved.

Also, my attitude of keeping curious about unheard things related to my profession really encouraged me to gain much knowledge that can't be find in textbooks through my investigate into one articles to another, which is worthwhile! That why I said the whole process is blended with sweet and sweat.

To be honest, before the investigate, I was totally confused what kind of technology can accounting have, accounting is mostly things related to writing and literacy rather than advanced technology. But things turned out that I was wrong. During my way of discovery, the more I read, the more technology applied nowdays showed up, which amazed me a lot, since some of those technical termiation are never heard before. After my project 2, I think my understanding of accounting also has a earthshaking change.

During my peer review, I would say not really like what my peers comments, I received two pieces of comments and one of them is misleading, which denied the literacy part and point that only dialy used technology is the focus. So, I didn't really follow the suggestions from my peers but I do carefully considered my combination of two parts in the rest of my revision. As a whole, I enjoyed my writing with project 2, and hope it turns out good.

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My Top 5 Moments of Technology Literacy that I Can Remember

1. Singing KTV with household DVD player

2. Using electronic dictionary to translate unfamiliar words

3. Owning iPod, have my first experience with Apple

4. Having my first PC, Sony

5. Creating my Facebook account online to start social contact with others

I chose the last one to extend my details.

My Facebook account was created last year, since is not so far from now, that I can still remember them vividly. It was my first year studying abroad in Michigan State University, when everything seemed so strange to me and unfamiliar people all around that I created it. Actually, I had no one accompany with me at the beginning, it was a great change I made myself to go abroad though I have already finished my first academic year in my domestic university. Interestingly, the main source of encouragement to establish a Facebook account was urged from our school, as the excuse of getting to know your future roommate in advance. Otherwise, I won't start my journey with it so soon, unless I meet some fantastic foreign friends. 

Honestly, I was amazed by the things contained inside the Facebook page, people's informal or humorous chatting, funny pictures sharing, instant news link clicking as so on, the more I dig, the more functions I found, though the process to search for a particular friend is a little bit complex. Under the circumstance of foreign culture, I soon get facilitate with it.

I am grateful for this experience, which pushed me to blend in this culture which first unfamiliar to me, and if is not Facebook, I would't get acquainted with so many fabulous people 

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Respond to "Literacy in Three Metaphors (excerpt)"

Literacy, always seems mysterious to me though many years of learning writing and reading and so many things which I think the focus of literacy. However, my eyes on literacy changed as I read Scibner's article talking about three metaphors of literacy.

He revealed the truth that literacy is adaptation, power and a state of grace. The essence part, in my opinion, is that the requirement for literacy keep changing and what called literacy keep up with the changes as well. It may have growing standard for literacy though it's low in the past when the average standard of literacy is lower than now. This from other perspective, also indicated that literacy indeed distinguished people in society, and for those who have no need to literate with higher technology, his states are lower in the same time.

In spited of the difficult and blended meaning literacy have, it's known to all that literacy is unavoidable, which forced us to accept it. Whatever your professions are, basic communication and daily technology facilitating is still need even though not literacy itself is adaptable. Literacy's effect to humans life is faster than ever, it's high speed lead our society to change faster, and the more you literate, the more power you own. This will be the source of grace states in the future. 

The whole essay have the effect of literacy and its complication thorough, which I think literacy is still a controversial but worthwhile topic, and we will have more comprehend with is as time going by.

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Respond to "Storytelling, Narration, and the 'Who I Am' Story"

The article ”Storytelling, Narration, and the “Who I Am” Story”, written by Catherine Ramsdell,obviously discussed two concepts storytelling and Narration, which totally different from each other but still being mixed by users when talking about who I am story.

She first claimed that stories are the cornerstone, they are fundamental and primary form of communication, which are needed whatever industies one belong to. She support it with a typical example related to corperation and business world, also, in the end, where she connect the who I am stroy with professional world, things turned out to be clear and essential.

Narration is described as story being reordered and reshaped in order to  affect the audience or reader in a particular and deliberate way, which means is detailed but not present a long span of time. While storytelling is distinguished as events show in the sequence of time, there is no need to use the effect like flashbaack, or any attraction strategies. The two fundamental factors consists of story is action and character, though hard to discuss which one is more essential.

The most valuable part I learned from this article is the steps to create an amazing narrative essay, since we seldom write descriptive essay before, but is just needed in the project 3. Though the steps are pretty complicated, the essence part to make certain the story shows and does not tell is already been admitted by me. This is the key to let readers and audience extand their dominant impression rather than reading the boring words direct from me.

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One Paragraph for Project 3 Beginning with A Given Sentence

My first experience with digital technology was watching series of Disney cartoon on a household digital DVD player, therefore I am now much familiar with how to operate with it than years before. My father brought it when we moved into a new house aiming to relax in spare time. However, my interest in it is much more than my father, though I had no idea how to use it or even switch on it at the very beginning. I went through the instruction handbook, dug deeply to find its undiscovered functions and applied those steps over and over again to get facilitate with this fresh device. Not only did I utlize it to watch rented movies and TV show to learn knowledges not in textbooks, I also learned how to sing kaeaoke by plug microphone in the machine. And on my 12th birthday, I even invited my friends to enjoy this entertainment together.

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Questions for Project 3

1. There are masses of technology I used have literacy reflection,  but which one is the specific technology worth of writing in details?

To solve this, I am going to flash back, list all the typical technology I used and recall my experience of them, review which one of them can fit the background and be worthy to read by my Michigan Stated audience.

2.What is technology literacy indeed?

To research some examples online, this may help me build up the feeling about what technology literacy is, and get some inspiration from it.

3. Which kind of detail will attract readers, affect audience and should be written down in the length-limited paper?

The structure is important, which shall make readers feel the reality as they are personally on the scene. Also, the culture or literacy part reflected should be the one we shared together since my audience is Michigan State University's compatriot.

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Respond to Student Essay 3 & 4

After reading sample student essays 3 and 4, I got great inspiration on how to change my own piece and there are several things about them especially enlightened my insight and my construture.

I want to comments on the 4th essay first, since it's a little bit more impressive, the method of its beginning is very creative which aroused me attention by an example of Wise in the field writer concerned, and author alternate his own interview experience with Dove and core thesis he discussed. He focused on technology first and turned to literacy part, which actually divided into online and offline, and the constructure to differ the pros and cons is arranged. However, its whole essay's key point or point of each paragraph is not clear enough, which means audiences are hard to catch the points even though quotations are applied with facility.

For the 3rd sample essay, its language is straightaway and even somewhat "informal", but is earily for audience to read quickly since the length is relatively longer, and the focus is really concerntrated, author write about the process of learning to be a vaterinarian from the very beginning, which is applying for college entry, step by step in detail. So, the arrangement followed the time sequence and show us literacy related to vet hand by hand, considered audience awareness very well. Its development of what to confronted with writing if already become vet is presented us the necessary of conscientiousness.

Both of their MLA sytle is perfect, which follows the formats of headers and quota are inserted appropariate with in-text citation, works cited at the end page is suitable as well!

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Revision Plan for Project 2

After reviewing the sample students essay and got comments on my paper from peers review and Ms Platt, I have get some ideas on how to revise it to improve its arrangement and preciseness. First, apply what "Annoying Ways People Use Source" taught us to change my quotation that lead the whole essay, since no clear connection can be found with the core thesis of literacy and technology, and several other improper quotations should be either changed or deleted, certainly , it can't appear that sudden without transition and reminding at all.

Second, technology part should be added if I complished the writing part, the key of the essay is not only literacy which I emphsized in the draft, but technology already applied and being taken advantages of as well, so I need to spend almost the same length to address newly accounting technology, which apparently more likely to corresponded with accounting using in our dialy life.

Hopefully, after revising the inappropriate part, my essay can look much better and stick to the key point

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Questions regarding Audience

1.How else can your hard work on this essay be put to good use?

My eassay is mainly about literacy and technology a professional accountant need to be skillful at, ranging from tranditional writing skill to IT colloction and master accounting system, in order to help my eassay put to good use, I can share my opinions and initial ideas which finally constructed the article and try to make it breif but concise.

2.Who might be in the dark about writing and technology literacy in their majors and future careers. But how will they ever hear what you have to say?

I am certain that college students like me, most are freshman and sophomore, are the people might be in the dark about writing and technology literacy in their majors, not only accounting major students. They also make their way to better understand what they need to literate with, as for me, I can post my eassay concerning what I have researched about accounting major and make it convenient for those people to go through pull them out from the darkness about literacy.

3.You’ll need to think hard about your audience and ask yourself a lot of questions. Who exactly will you be writing for?

In order to be purposeful, my target audience must be determined, which is either accounting major, accounting as future career, or just accounting interested people as I do, and they aren't the only targets I am writing for, I should also be consider those who totally has no idea what accounting literacy are, and perserve some part of explaination to them.

4.What are their characteristics as people? What are their concerns?

The main characteristic my targets have is the spirit to inquiry into things they are curious about and research into fields attract them, otherwise, they won't be interested in my essay, or even won't find and go through it. What they concern most is the current standard of accounting language and technologies which related to their future development and whether competitive not, they seize every chance to get those knowledge regarding accounting information and seeking own ways to aquire these new knowledge

5.What writing strategies will be most effective in communicating with them?

When talking about communicating, one of the most important emphasis when comes to judge how effecient it is. First, I would certainly use quotes which people can easily understood and provide my thesis with true data and facts along with detailed explaination. Second, I would present it along with my own experience as I am one of tons of accounting major student, and add some view from Michigan Stated accounting related teacher which can be more convincing than only me research.

6.how will they be able to access your writing, i.e., how will you get your writing into their hands, and where and when will they be reading what you wrote?

I will certainly choose to post them on my Facebook and blog or some other social websited that everyone can reach after it is finished, since my essay is not that professional, or even may existe mistakes or biased view. Also, there will be more chance to be seen by my friends who are mostly accounting related major such as fianace, marketing. They obviously can access it through personal computer whenever they try to contct me or I will tag them into specific category, once they search it, my essay would show up and trying tobe  helpful to them.

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One Paragraph Using Sourse from Project 2

On the other hand, Corman from California State University said that computers can help improve writing skills for accounting student. In his work, he stated that computers can correct some mistakes and errors that students made in financial statement and letters. “It develops writing and analytic skills, uses the professional standards, and uses the technology students will encounter in the work place.”(Corman) I think programs such as Excel can help students do different statements. Current office programs have added a lot of functions of accounting. It will help student in learning and organizing writing in accounting discipline.

Work Cited

Corman, Eugene J. “A writing program for accounting courses.” Journal of accounting education. Vol. 4, No. 2. Fall, 1986. 25 Mar. 2012.