I haven’t written in ages (as is noticeable from my last post date) and I was feeling good about the new fic I wrote but then I reread some of my old stuff and I’m like oh wow this new one is shit
I decided to write the fic I've had in my head for the past few days and reading it back I'm giggling to myself because omg it's so cute hehehe. I can't decide if I should make it smutty at the end though. Lemme know if anyone wants to read it and thoughts on if it should have a smutty ending.
hi, love! i’m write fics and i’m white and i try to leave things out of my fics like readers cheeks being red or running fingers through her hair, things like that, i was just curious if you had any tips on what else i could to do make my writing as inclusive as possible and avoid anything that’s white-coded
one thing i try to do is mention the head a lot or open action. i have my moments of slip ups to, my fics aren't white coded but i mention fingers through hair sometimes (because for me it was possible, just painful as heck cause he was ripping through my curls when his fingers got stuck in my fuzzball and now it's possible due to my hairstyle but i have to watch myself there) and to mitigate that, i mention playing with hair, cupping the back of your head, stroking your hair─because this doesn't imply the hair is a certain texture─and you can follow that one up with reader shaking their hair out to keep it from being flat and smashed down, because now we're including readers with thick hair, braids, locs, pixie cuts, wolf cuts, pretty manes of curls, beautiful 'fros, etc.
when you wanna maybe imagine your reader with an updo, imply the reader's hair is just out of their face and out of the way. that can just mean they've put it back, be it in a ponytail, slicked back, with a bandana, etc. but my trick is to not be descriptive. i once tried that with an outfit while writing a fic and one of my friends proofing it for me said they liked to imagine the outfit themselves and i realized i didnt need to go super into depth about my reader's physical appearance because their imagination was gonna do alllllll the reader inserting, i just had to make sure to not include any major descriptors which snap them out of it. so i stopped being super descriptive regarding appearance.
yes, saying "Your long hair had enough tangles in it to resemble a well put together rat's nest", is more Shakespearean─per say─but if you say "Your hair was a complete and utter wreck you'd have to spend an entire episode of Games of Thrones to fix to your satisfaction" you don't state the texture or length of the hair but you imply it's bad enough to take a while to maintain and trust me─your readers are gonna imagine their worst nightmare all on their own and what they want the outcome to be.
i focused more on the reader's actions and emotions more than squeezing in some blushing moments or physical descriptions. eddie just said something heartwarming that she never imagined in her wildest dreams he'd say to her? why have her blush when she could feel like her knees were going to give in while simultaneously feeling as though she could defy gravity, disregard the very laws of physics and float on air?
that's just what I do though, anyone else have more advice for our pal????
i see anon is aware of the big stuff, but i'm reblogging to add that since the easiest white-coding in fics comes up during descriptions of embarrassment, here's the full Embarrassment page from The Emotion Thesaurus, which includes many other ways to show nervousness without describing skin turning red:
(* flushed has a question mark next to it because, for example, adrenaline can flush through you, but it can also be a synonym for blush)
i personally describe hair at a minimum with it being pet over or stroked. otherwise i focus on the other character touching the Reader's nape/neck/cheeks/ears instead.
some people think writers are so eloquent and good with words, but the reality is that we can sit there with our fingers on the keyboard going, “what’s the word for non-sunlight lighting? Like, fake lighting?” and for ten minutes, all our brain will supply is “unofficial”, and we know that’s not the right word, but it’s the only word we can come up with…until finally it’s like our face got smashed into a brick wall and we remember the word we want is “artificial”.
me in planning stages of writing: this fucks. this is gonna be so fun.
me the minute i sit down to write: language is an unwieldy cudgel we use to beat the human experience to death in an attempt at ever communicating fully with another being. i wish intelligent life had never evolved. i want to go back to the cell stage like in spore
requested by: anon
request: How do I write a good kiss scene? As how do I describe it? What details or words would make it good?
What goes into the writing of a kiss scene?
details to incorporate:
the sensations in their stomach, their chest, and their knees
the way their breathing changes shortly before the kiss
the feeling of the other's hands
the texture of the other's clothing
the moment they realise they've reached the point of no return
the feeling they're left with after the kiss
words to use...
... to describe the kiss:
tentative
tender
hesitant
quick
soft
gentle
delicate
languid
feathery
familiar
exploring
hungry
heated
fiery
frantic
impatient
sloppy
messy
aggressive
... to describe how they feel about the kiss:
nervous
excited
giddy
anxious
apprehensive
ambiguous
surprised
reassured
certain
confident
relieved
eager
greedy
... to show what the lips do:
exploring each other
brushing over each other
locking
devouring
touching
sealing
pressing against each other
capturing
lapping
tasting
crushing together
travelling (the other's body)
trailing (down to the other's chin)
grinning into the kiss
caressing
lingering
... to show how their body reacts:
feeling warm all over
buzzing
humming
pumping/palpitating heart
clenching lungs
joy bubbling up
tingly stomach
warm chest
burning cheeks
sweaty palms
blood rushing through their veins
... to describe what their hands are doing:
tangling in their lover's hair
wrapping their arms around their lover's neck
intertwining their fingers with their lover
resting on their lover's hips
pressing into their lover's shoulder blades
cupping their lover's cheeks
touching their lover's chin
curling their arm around their lover's waist
resting on their lover's shoulders
grabbing their lover's collar
sneaking up under their lover's shirt
brushing over their lover's bare skin
lightly squeezing their lover's butt
focus on:
the sensations instead of what's physically happening. (the protagonists might very well not know themselves what is happening exactly, but they feel very precisely)
CW: Overstimulation, nipple play, multiple orgasms, idk what else. I haven't proofread and I don't have a beta so if I missed something let me know and I'll add it here.
This is absolutely self indulgent stupidly long lustful fantasy because my brain cannot stop thinking about this man. Enjoy?
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She wasn’t entirely sure how they ended up in this position. It was all a bit of a blur. One moment they were exchanging quiet, intimate expressions of true and shared feelings, impassioned love confessions. Giggles and admissions of mutual pining. Then a series of soft, sweet kisses that began to turn heated. Now, there they were, laid out on his bed in very minimal clothing. Shirts and pants discarded, her bra hanging haphazardly off the end of the mattress.
Hands roamed across soft skin, fingers digging in and clutching with desire and intensity. His silver rings bit sharply and were bound to leave marks, and the thought aroused her even more. Her mind was spinning. She savoured every moan and sigh that graced her ears from his beautiful mouth. He savoured her sounds just the same. His lips travelled slowly down her throat and across her collar bone causing a particularly satisfied moan to slip out of her well kissed lips.
She tangled her fingers in his luscious hair, messy and disheveled from their rather frantic activities. She loved his hair and finally getting to tug at his roots and feel the soft curls delicately skim across her skin was driving her wild.
“I’ve dreamt about this so many times…” She breathed out.
Eddie pulled away and looked in her eyes with a seductive smirk, “Oh, yeah?”
That look could make her melt. His big brown eyes were rich, deep and dilated. It was so distracting and delicious, she stuttered out her reply.
“Mmm… y-yeah… yes.”
“And what exactly did you dream about?” His voice dripped with a sensual curiosity, and he nudged his nose beneath her jaw. He squeezed her hips, those rings she loved so much digging into her soft skin and once again she thought about the marks she would be left with. This wasn’t her first time, but the way he made her feel was so overwhelming, it felt like it was. Maybe it was the raw emotion, how deeply she cared for him, how much she had longed for this, yearned for him. Maybe it was how he made her feel as though he felt all those same feelings. He made her feel desired and adored. She was entranced. He nudged her again and her brain came back into focus.
“Y-your mouth…” She mumbled with a hint of embarrassment, her face beginning to become warm.
He liked that answer. He made that clear with a low groan.
“What about my mouth?”
“I… I pictured your mouth… on..” She could hardly think through the heavy wanton fog behind her eyes.
“Where did you picture my mouth, hmm?” Eddie managed to remain so cool and seductive, a contrast to her nervous excitement. She couldn’t answer, just sighed and moaned and tugged his hair a little harder. He had dreamt about this too, and he couldn’t believe this was real, it was happening. He quickly caught on to her nervousness and took the initiative to guide her.
“Was it here?” He kissed, nipped, and licked each of her earlobes.
“M-mmhm.”
“What about here?” He dragged the tip of his nose down the side of her neck, ending in an open mouthed kiss and gentle bite where her neck met her shoulder. She squirmed beneath him and nodded.
“Aaaannd what about… here?” Eddie moved a little further down her body, landing at her chest. His hot wet mouth wrapped around her nipple. He swirled his long tongue and grazed his teeth. Her breath hitched and she released another, this time louder, moan. She arched her back to press further into his mouth.
“Oh, you like that then?” His hand reached up to massage the opposite breast, delicately circling the very tip of his finger on her nipple. Her body reacted of its own accord, arching and squirming once more, whimpering and biting her lip hard. She definitely liked that. He moved to her other nipple and repeated his actions. Her breathing was getting heavier. Her fingers still in his hair, she whispered unintelligible praises. He relished the moment before continuing down her body. His long hair tickled her skin in a delectable way.
“What… about… here?” He reached the top of her panties, lace in her favourite colour. He kissed just above the waistband.
“Oh god, yes!” She practically screamed.
He chuckled darkly at her reaction. He took the edge of the waistband in his teeth before letting it snap back against her skin.
“May I?” Eddie asked, looking up at her. Seeing him between her legs made her whimper again.
“Please?” She begged so softly, he felt his heart skip a beat.
“As you wish.” He dragged the fabric down her legs at an excruciatingly slow pace, the gentle caress of his fingers felt like tiny sparks of electricity offset by the coolness of the metal wrapped around his digits. He kissed each of her ankles before glancing up to see her biting her lip.
He sat back to admire the image before him, her naked body spread across his bed with a light sheen of sweat on her skin. Her chest heaving with shaking passionate breaths, mouth agape, her fingers twisting in the sheets in anticipation of his next move.
“You are so beautiful.” He whispered, “I am the luckiest man alive, to have the honour of seeing you like this… I can’t believe…” For once in his life, he was at a loss for words.
The compliment made her face flush with heat. Her eyes scanned his bare chest, toned and enticing. She noticed his boxers had slipped down, now hanging low on his hips, a happy trail of dark hair leading below the waistband. She couldn’t help but smirk.
“I’m pretty damn lucky myself.” She leaned up and grazed her fingers down his chest, feeling him shiver under her touch. She toyed with the guitar pick necklace around his neck. Her hands moved slower as they approached the waistband of his boxers, dipping the tops of her fingers beneath the elastic and playing with the fabric. A new found confidence took over her and she slid one hand down the outside of the fabric, across the outline of his prominent bulge earning a yearning moan from him.
“Although… I can’t be the only one naked here... it seems a little unfair.” She pouted exaggeratedly and gently squeezed her hand around him through the cotton. He shuddered and hissed through his teeth.
“You’ve got me there.” He laughed lightly and made quick work of removing the offending garment before climbing back onto the bed.Â
Her lust filled eyes blew wider, observing the length and girth he had revealed. A hush fell over the two of them. The reality of the situation hit them. There, on the bed, on their knees in front of each other and entirely bare, the intimacy of the moment filled the air with an indescribable energy. They had both wanted this for so long. Eddie could hear his heart pounding in his ears. He became shy under her gaze and he cast his eyes downwards as his face flushed.Â
She inched closer to him on her knees, nearly holding her breath. He watched her fingertips gently touch his stomach, up across his chest and collarbones, twisting the chain of his necklace, dancing their way up to his shoulders and holding him there, drawing his attention up to her face. As he looked up, he was relieved to find a comfort in her soft smile and the beauty of her eyes. He reached forward to tuck a small strand of hair behind her ear. His hand lingered there, and he rubbed his thumb across her cheek. Her eyes fluttered closed and she pressed her cheek into his palm. When her eyes opened, he was still gazing at her lovingly. She shared his gaze, finding a similar safety in the warm mahogany of his irises. They sat in that moment, allowing themselves to get lost in each others eyes, until he broke the silence.
“I love you.”
“You said that before.” She giggled lightly.
“Well, I’m saying it again.” He flashed a grin and pressed his forehead to hers, “Because it’s still true. And I like saying it. I love you.”
“I love you too.” She whispered, closing her eyes again.
Slowly, gently, he laid her back down. He hovered above her, his guitar pick necklace dangling in front of her eyes. She fought the urge to bite it and drag him closer, instead enjoying the soft intimacy of the moment. He gave her body another glance over before leaning down and enveloping her in a passionate and sensual kiss. He kissed his way down her body again and resumed his position in between her legs, laid on his stomach. His hands gripped her hips, and she lifted them towards his face ever so slightly. Finally, finally, his lips made contact with her wet centre. She let out a contented exhale.
He worked his talented mouth and delightfully lengthy tongue in every direction, licking and suckling and occasionally very gently scraping his teeth over her sensitive bud. It was messy in the best way.
“Oh god wow your mouth really is... your tongue…” She could hardly string a sentence together, “You’re really really good at that.” She pulled him closer to her with both hands and he moaned into her, creating a deeply satisfying vibration.
He pulled away and gave her a cocky smile. “Is this this what you wanted? What you dreamt about? Am I living up to Dream Eddie?”
“So so much better.” She said breathlessly.
“Good.” He returned to his work with vigour, rubbing his thumbs into the crevices of her hips. His skilled lips were making her lose all sense of time and space, and when he introduced his equally skilled fingers into the mix she swore she saw stars. He was attentive to what made her tick, finding all the best spots inside her to make her moan and squirm for him. He was enjoying himself just as much as she was, rolling his own hips into the mattress. Soon she was completely unravelling. He had never seen something quite so beautiful, never heard such a beautiful symphony like the sound of her moaning and chanting his name.
“Perfect.” He complimented as he pulled back, eyes glossy. “Perfect, perfect, perfect.” He accented the words with a kiss back and forth to her thighs, ending with a flirtatious nip of his teeth.Â
A gratified sigh flowed from her mouth. “Thank you.”
“Mmm, thank you.” He kissed her hip, then moved up to cage her in with his arms, connecting their mouths and she hummed into the kiss.
As they continued to explore each others mouths, she slid her hand down to lightly grip his member. The whimper from his mouth disrupted their kiss and she felt a boost to her ego. She squeezed him a little tighter, brushing her thumb across the leaking tip to spread the droplets down his length, easing her movements up and down. He bit down on her lip and groaned. He threw his head back and squeezed his eyes shut. She took the opportunity to push him back to sitting on his knees, and lowered herself in front of him. She licked from base to tip and placed little kisses at the there. She coated him with her saliva up and down before fully engulfing him, sloppily. He made glorious sounds as she bobbed her head.
“If you keep doing that I’m not going to last much longer.” Eddie shuddered and she removed her mouth, replacing it with her hand and slowly stroking, “and after how long I’ve wanted this I am not ready for this to end yet.” He said, trying to slow his breathing.
She removed her hand with a giggle and instead moved it to quickly wipe her mouth then push his bangs out of his eyes. She made a funny face and stuck her tongue out at him.
“God how do you do that?” He questioned with softening eyes.
“Do what?” She asked, confused.
“How do you manage to be incredibly sexy, like just fucking sensual, and yet also be the most adorable human being?” He chuckled.
“I’m multi-talented.” She shrugged with a silly smile.
“You are everything and more.” He breathed out, “And now you’re mine.”
“Yours.” She agreed, “And you are mine.”
“Absolutely baby, all yours.” He grinned down at her before attacking her neck with kisses and love bites.
“Eddie!” She giggled again, tugging at his hair and she could feel his smile against her skin but his assault did not cease. His barrage only increased in intensity, near desperation as his length bumped against her thigh. She wrapped one leg around his hips and he held her there, digging his fingers into her flesh.Â
“God, you feel so good.” He groaned out.
She moaned, “Eddie?” His hipped stuttered but he continued to suck marks into the skin above her breasts. She tried a little louder, “Eddie?”
He pulled back and looked deeply into her eyes, “What’s wrong? Did I hurt you?”
She smiled at his concern and smoothed his hair down, “No no that’s not it. It’s just… I’m ready. If you are.”
Relief flooded his features, quickly replaced with arousal and excitement, “I am so ready.” He scrambled to reach across their bodies, rolling over to his bedside table, yanking the drawer open haphazardly in search of a condom. She couldn’t help but laugh a little, and wondered just as he had wondered about her moments before how on earth he managed to be such a goof ball while simultaneously being sexy as hell.
“Aha!” He exclaimed when he pulled the package out of the drawer triumphantly.Â
“You’re ridiculous.” She laughed.
“Ridiculously sexy?” Eddie wiggled his eyebrows and shook the condom like a polaroid.
“That too.” She concurred, taking the package out of his hands and ripping it open with her teeth.
“Now that was ridiculously sexy.” He grinned with wide eyes.
“Shut up and put this on!” She laughed, handing him back the package for him to roll smoothly down his length. She eyed him as he did so, admiring his ring clad fingers on his own member, squeezing her thighs together at the thought of how deliciously he would stretch her out. Moments later he was above her again, her hands tightly gripping his shoulders as he guided himself slowly into her, careful not to rush her. Once fully situated, he locked eyes with her and they both let out a breath. She wrapped her arms around his neck and threaded her fingers through his hair softly, and slowly, slowly he began to move in and out.
He kept the pace slow and steady, but deep, letting them both relish in the feeling of connection. It wasn’t long before the languid pace just wasn’t enough for either of them, with her tugging his hair harder and moaning his name and him biting his lip so hard he thought it might bleed. And so he picked up the pace, maintaining the depth of his thrusts. She wrapped both legs around his waist, pulling him ever closer and hitting an angle that had her mumbling incoherently, a mixture of expletives and his name over and over. Hearing his name roll off her tongue in sheer pleasure spurred him on and he hoisted her leg a little higher, and without warning her orgasm of the night hit her hard and fast.
A smug smile enveloped Eddie’s whole face, “Shit, baby you look so gorgeous coming undone like that. I wanna see it again. Do you think you can do that?”
She could only manage to nod and whimper as he thrust even harder, faster.
“I wanna…” Her sentence was cut off by an uncontrollable moan as he hit a special spot inside her and she clenched down on him, “I wanna be on top. Eddie, please…” She was breathless and couldn’t get enough of him, wanting to feel him in as many positions as they could manage in one go.Â
“Oh fuck yeah, princess.” He rolled them over, managing to keep them connected. She situated herself atop him, placing her hands on his chest for stability and rolled her hips in circles.
Eddie threw his head back briefly, but quickly snapped back to look at her, not wanting to miss a moment of the glorious sight of her straddling him. She had one hand on his chest and one hand in her hair, pulling it back provocatively. Her eyes were tightly closed as she lifted herself up and down on his hard length, her beautiful breasts bouncing right in front of his eyes. He couldn’t resist reaching up to encase them in each hand, massaging and pinching her perky nipples. She responded by clenching tightly around him, and he took a mental note of just how much she enjoyed nipple play, remembering earlier in their experience with his mouth on them. He groaned and recreated the scenario, wrapping his mouth around one nipple and encircling the other with the pad of his finger. He bucked his hips to match her rhythm and dug his other hand harshly into her hip to hold her steady above him. The combination of his mouth, his delicate tingling of his finger across her nipple, and the pinch of his rings against her hip was overwhelming. He bit down on the nipple in his mouth and growled.
That did it for her. Once again she felt ecstasy roll through her body from head to the tips of her toes.
“Atta girl.” Eddie praised, stroking her hips and thighs as she laid her head on his chest trying to catch her breath.
“You tired now baby girl?” He asked her softly and she nodded. He carefully pulled out and laid her down next to him. She immediately cuddled closer to him and hummed happily into his skin. He kissed the top of her head.
“We can stop if you want.” She snapped her head up to look at him.
“But you haven’t even gotten to finish.” She protested.
“Don’t have to. This has been an absolute pleasure, and besides we can always have another go at it when you’re rested up.”
“Mmmm, we can definitely do that.” She replied, then with a sly smile she slid her hand down to pump him a few times, “But right now I wanna make you feel as good as you’ve made me feel. Three times now.” She continued to glide her hand up and down.
“I’m impressed by your self restraint,” she kissed the tattoo on his chest, “and your stamina.”
Eddie scoffed, “Me too. I don’t know how I’ve managed to control myself this whole time. You drive me crazy, you know?”
“Well, don’t control yourself anymore. I wanna feel you. Gimme all you got, Munson.” She smirked devilishly.
“Careful what you wish for baby.” He snarked, and in a flash he was above her again. He thrust in sharply, deep and hard. She yelped and clutched at him, causing him to smirk, “Told you.”
She shuddered with anticipation. He lifted both her legs up onto his shoulders and started a relentless pace. She was tired as he had noted before, but this was too good. She could only lay back and let the sensations take over her entire body. He bit her shoulder, letting out groans and grunts in her ear. She wanted to memorize those sounds and listen to them forever, hearing him lose himself in her. Her silky walls constricted around him with every moan. His thrusts became less controlled.
“Shit, shit, shit.” He babbled.
“Harder, Eddie please. I’m so close.” She whimpered.
“Me too baby, me too. So close.” His voice was a disjointed whisper as he continued his uncoordinated thrusts. She pulled at his hair and with a deep groan he regained his control enough for a few more deep hard thrusts before they both let go together. He collapsed on top of her, panting. She could hardly move from the overstimulation, but she slipped one hand onto his back to rub comforting circles on his bare skin. He let out a contented sound and kissed wherever he could reach on her chest from where he lay.
After a few minutes of blissful silence, basking in the afterglow, he rolled off her.Â
“How how did you make me cum three times while inside me? Nobody has ever made me do that. Not even myself. I don’t think even the best vibrator in the world could.” She let out a laugh but winced at the tender sensitivity between her legs, clenching them together in pain. He tucked his face into her neck and wrapped his arm around her, feeling a little guilty for possibly hurting her.
“Sorry…” He mumbled into her skin, giving her a soft kiss there.
“Eddie, baby, do not be sorry. That was amazing.” She stroked his hair and kissed the top of his head, “If it’s going to be like that every time, we are never leaving this bed.” She said with a laugh.
Hey, thanks for making this! I’ve never struggled with what to put in tags on my fic, but I’ve never been systematic about it, either–I just kind of put whatever.
The categories seem like a really useful way to think about it–not every fic will necessarily have something for each category, but it’s a good framework for either thinking of things to put, or making sure you don’t skip things that would be good to put. Â
Image description: Tags are Tricky…a quick and dirty guide
1 Canon
How does it relate to canon?
Alternative Universe
Canon Compliant
Canon Divergence
Crossover
Fix-it-Fic
Future Fic
Missing Scenes & Codas
Pre-canon/Backstory
2 Format
Is it something other than a story?
5+1 Things
Art
Dialogue-Only
Epistolary
Online & Social Media
Podfic
Poetry
Songfic
Texting
3 Tone
How does it make you feel?
Angst
Crack
Fluff
Humor
Hurt/Comfort
Smut and PWP
Whump
4 Relationship
Describe the relationship
Platonic
Coming Out, Families, Friendship, Siblings
Getting Together
Amnesia, Body Swap, Childhood Friends, Different First Meeting, Drunken Confessions, Enemies to Lovers, Fake Dating, Flirting, Friends to Lovers, Huddling for Warmth, Meet-Cute, Miscommunication, Road Trips, Roommates, Sharing a Bed, Slow Burn, Strangers to Lovers, Trapped in Elevator
PG-13
Cuddling, First Kiss, Kissing and Making out
Sexy Times
ABO, Dirty Talk, First Time, Kink, Roleplay, Sex Pollen, Sexting and Phone Sex, Voyeurism
Commitment
Arranged Marriage, Established Relationship, Honeymoons, Infidelity, Jealousy, Kid Fic, Long Distance Relationship, Pregnancy, Weddings & Proposals
5 Theme
What is the theme?
Activities and Interests
Baking and Cooking, Camping, Celebrations, Crafts and Hobbies, Drinking or Getting High, Fashion, Holidays, Pets, Piercings and Tattoos, Religion, Sports, Theater and Dance, Yoga
Adaptions
Fairy Tales, Historical, Reality Show, TV/Movie/Book/Adaption
Character Driven
Anxiety and Mental Health, Introspection, Queer Themes
Jobs
Artist, Celebrities, Crimes and Suspense, Firefighters, Lifeguards, Media and Journalism, Medical, Military, Musiscians, Pilots, Retails, Royality, Teachers
Other worldly
Apocalypse, Faries, Ghosts, Magic and Fantasy, Parallel Universe, Sci-fi, Shapeshifters, Superheros, Supernatural, Tentacles, Time Travle, Vampires, Witches, Zombies
Places
Bookstores & Libaries, Coffee Shops & Restaurants, College, Flower Shops, High School, Summer Camp, Wineries
Note: These are examples, not a definitive list, but I hope the categories are useful" end Image description
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