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Hey! Sorry to bother you, but are you active? And if so, does the character have to be from a source of media, or can it be totally original? Does it have to include a picture? I'd love to send one of my characters in to be reviewed if thats alright with you. Thanks!

i’m like.... half active ig lol

it can be 100% original, no picture is needed

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What fandoms do you accept ocs of? Should I send my oc in through asks?

any fandom as long as i’ve seen it, sorry for never responding lmao

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There he is,his name is [Ra],names are often consisting of a avrebiation between brackets,ruler and creator of his own kingdom and star,later beaten by another O.C.(the Snake) I might submit later,snake’s reason to trap him on his own dungeon and to steal his solar ship was to keep the night and darkness forever,now the hope of the space depends on some kids from different planets.

Age: he’s way older than the earth!!!! Complexity: possibly skinny????,also tall

Personality:balanced serious

Zodiac signs:cetus and cat

Powers: manipulate the space and create light,also the ones that his species have,like using the darkness to shape shift,create black holes, etcetera

Hope this is ok….

I think it’s fine. Though, he seems to be extremely powerful unless you were making him a literal god?

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Are you active?

Yes, I am, I just don’t get submissions that often lmao

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Can you review my OC? Thank you.

Original. It follows a group of agents in Skotos, a village mostly populated with people who have been wronged by humanity. (It has become a haven for those types of people after people discovering it by pure luck + technology).  One day, while Skotos agents were doing their thing (school and house visits, assemblies, online posting, whipping out bells and shouting, etc) and trying (keyword: trying) to educate people about the horrible things they were doing and why they should stop it, they discovered this organization about the Angels. (They were trying to convince everyone to stop what they were doing, but most of them refused to listen and called the agents names. One of the agents found out that the treatment was because of an organization called the Angels through questioning various of the villagers. The Angels apparently originated from the internet and formed an organization about their beliefs over time). The Angels were trying to promote humanity’s sick things by saying that the victims deserved to be mistreated and even insisted that not only that humanity should not show pity for the victims, but they should also even treat the victims more harshly. To counter this, the head elder of Skotos formed a team of Skotos agents to shut down the Angels (AKA kill all of them since none of them could listen to reason and almost everyone had been brainwashed by their propaganda), but the Angels wiped them out. This continued down the line, through generation and generation and the story takes place where “Squad I” is sent out to hopefully stop the Angels. My OC is in Squad I.

Aarav Kumar

Name: Cassius Kumar

Inspiration: Gaius Cassius Longinus, Judas Iscariot, Satan, Adolf Hitler, and Kamui Gakupo.

Age: 22

Birthplace: A village named Angeli. Angeli’s Latin for Angel, which ties into the expectations it has for its citizens. If they sin, said villager must repent. If they do not repent, they get moved to the horse stables and/or banished to die a slow and painful death. Meanwhile, if their family sticks with them, they are executed. The system is pretty twisted but it’s an exaggerated version of the high expectations people have for each other and the consequences that said people face when expectations aren’t met (not to mention the number of violence humans exercise on a daily basis).

Sexuality: Asexual Demiromantic

Crush: N/A

Looks: He has light brown skin, sable hair, and sapphire-blue eyes. He has some acne on his forehead, though some of it is hidden by his bangs. He also has wrinkles on his forehead and his hands. He is 5'11 and weighs 120 lbs (he’s supposed to be underweight). He wears a long-sleeved black shirt with black pants and black leather shoes. His cloak can somewhat be compared to that of a nun’s dress, except that it is halfway cut open in the front, and he, of course, doesn’t wear a veil. (He’s a priest of a made-up religion).

Abilities/Powers: Every human (in this world) has two special abilities (no one in this world has been born with more or less abilities, although there is a drug that can permanently take away your abilities). One of them (the first of which is the same for everyone) is awakened at birth, and the other is awakened (or rather, it just appears when said person turns 21) when they turn 21 (in this case, Cassius has “awakened” the two of them). The 1st power is the ability to hear any language and have it translated into your own when it reaches your ears. This excludes phrases that are meant to be said in the original language, names, and curse words (the last reason is to provide plucky comic relief). The first ability also rewinds the grammatical structure of a sentence that someone says to fit your language, as well as mess with your eyesight so words written in a different language will appear as if they were written in your language. The second power that Cassius possesses of is kind of strange: He reads a passage from the Babonian Scriptures (the Babonian Scriptures are still a work in process for Babo. Right now, there are 1,000 pages, 700 which are filled with him punishing random people) and whoever his gaze is fixated upon will have what he describes happen to him/her (for this to work, the Babonian scriptures must be whole- same book cover, same pages, same text. If a requirement is not met, then it does not work). However, even if this power seems overpowered, it does have its drawbacks: If he messes up on a word, his power won’t work (the thing he’s trying to do to his enemies will instead happen to him); If he can’t speak, his power won’t work; and his power can’t reach those close to him (he knows because he tried to kill a rabbit, but it got away since it always stayed within the 20 feet blind-spot that his power has) because Babo wanted Cassius to develop fighting strategies and to not rely on his power too much (he gave Cassius a blindspot). The quote he reads also is limited to that of the Babonian Scriptures, and it won’t work without his eyes.

Strengths: He is intelligent, calm and wary of others and is a careful judge of character. He (most of the time) knows what people to trust and what people to avoid. He also communicates with people with apparent “ease,” though he is terrified of humans on the inside. However, sometimes this shows through his constant habit of not meeting the eyes of someone he talks with. Another strength of his is that he’s (usually) very determined and hardworking when it comes to achieving something that he wants.

Weaknesses: He is a dirty coward, and would gladly throw you under the bus if it meant saving himself even if you saved his life 2 seconds before. He is also not very physically fit, so it is easy to crush him and outrank him in terms of physical strength, as well as going crazy (an exaggeration) when he’s not in control of the situation presented to him.

Family: Prisha Kumar (mother, alive) and Indranil Kumar (father, alive). They both love him but they cannot communicate because if they communicated with a sinner, they would be executed. Prisha loved Cassius, but her way of showing love was letting him figure out things for himself and spanking him when he got a problem wrong. In his childhood, Cassius saw her as a dictator; however, when he matured, he began to love her when he saw the long-term lasting effects that her discipline had had on him. (There’s tricky wording with the two “had"s right next to each other but I couldn’t find a substitute, partly because English isn’t my first language so my vocabulary needs expanding). When she noticed his lack of emotions (due to his shrunken amygdala, he experiences social emotions [shame, guilt, embarrassment, etc] on a much smaller scale), she shouted for joy knowing that she wouldn’t have to deal with a lot of crying when he entered his teenage years. When she found out that he had gotten raped, she grew infuriated but told Cassius to suck it up (after comforting him for about an hour) since she knew he would be seen as a sinner by the community. Indranil was a strict man, though he was a bit more lenient and caring than Prisha. He took the main part in raising Cassius, teaching him about the world and the behavior that he should act in. He also believed that the conclusion to major problems could not end without bloodshed and taught Cassius to defend himself. Indranil was always the parent to go to whenever Cassius was confused with something or needed an emotional bolster. That being said, though, Indranil still punished Cassius. When Cassius was little, he would take a ruler and smack the back of his legs with it. As he matured, Indranil changed tactic and made Cassius sit on a durian shell for a set period of time, with the time differentiating with the weight of the "crime” committed and Cassius’s age. Cassius fondly looked upon his father, though the times when his father was upset were the worst for him, as he hated the punishments his father would dole out. When Indranil found out that Cassius had little social emotions, he celebrated with Prisha and cried tears of joy. When he found out that Cassius had been raped, he did everything he could to distract Cassius from that incident for a few weeks.

Friends: He has two friends. One is a male witch whose name is Przemysl Slusarski and the other’s a Muslim named Ahang Arjani. He respects Ahang, and they both like to learn more about the other’s religion, create theories about life with each other, talk about their pasts, and brainstorm theories about which areas humanity could improve on. His relationship with Przemysl is filled with lots of bickering and Cassius smacking the other male for being an idiot (he’s the only one who could get under Cassius’s skin), but they are friends nevertheless.

Drive: He wants to kill Julius Green (his rapist) and educate humanity on their mistakes and why they should fix them.

Likes: Horror books, Books with deep meaning, Books in which humanity is wiped out, writing and reading in his “ego journal” (it’s a journal in which he writes his faults in to lower his ego. Unfortunately, it’s a double-edged sword as his self-esteem is not very high because of this) daily, playing chess, thinking about the happy times he spent with his loved ones, thinking about the happy times he’ll spend with them if they’re reunited, thinking about all the ways he can kill his rapist, and reassuring himself that he’ll be out of the treacherous world he lives in once he kills his rapist. He also has chocolate cravings (though he never indulges in them), which can show you his opinions about that particular food. Other additions to his likes are silence, knowledge, and inner peace along with sleep. Dislikes: Noise, deprivation of sleep, bumbling idiots who are good for nothing, overly happy people, intelligent people who he can’t manipulate, Angeli, the Angels, his rapist, and the world he lives in.

Personality: He is very shrewd and calm (most of the time), and oftentimes thinks before he acts/speaks. Because of his past, he enjoys manipulating the situation since it makes him feel like he’s in control. Due to his shrunken amygdala, he doesn’t show much emotion (hence social emotions that include but are not limited to guilt, shame, embarrassment are not present). He also has enormous amount of cowardice and the low self-esteem he has.  However, although he enjoys using the situation to his advantage even if it costs a few lives in the process, please note that he does not take pleasure in anyone’s death (except his rapist). After all, major problems can’t be solved without bloodshed. He also likes to complain about what’s wrong about the world and himself, which was something he picked up after he was banished from Angeli. He doesn’t think it’ll do anything- he just does it to lower his ego. That’s only his exterior though- on the inside, he’s actually a very confused person who is drenched in sorrow every day and whose only driving point is the murder of his rapist. (At the beginning, he plans to suicide after he kills his rapist because he’s tired of the world he lives in and he wants to be reunited with his loved ones if possible).

Health: For his mental health, he is a bit suicidal since he is tired of the world he lives in and only lives for the demise of his rapist. He plans on suiciding after he kills his rapist. (No one except Ahang knows about his intentions since he isn’t open about it. Ahang opposes his thoughts and constantly throughout the book tries to convince him to do otherwise, but she understands where he’s coming from and why he feels that way). For physical health, he is a bit underweight due to starving himself after he arrived at a village called Skotos - if his rapist ever caught him again, he wanted to be unrecognizable, hence him growing out his hair, starving himself, and tanning to such an extreme extent that his health is in danger because of it. (He was originally very muscular so losing weight was the only option he could do to change his body shape). It was very difficult for him to lose weight since neglecting his bodily needs meant that an aching pain was in his stomach. His body eventually adjusted to the lack of food, but it took a long time and he still needs to eat. He did not train during the time, an after he fled Angeli he immediately decided that he wanted to do it. He did have some thoughts about why he had to change and not Julius, but he then realized that Julius would (probably) never change.

Fears: Genophobia- it reminds him of the time he was raped and it only “activates” when he’s in a sexual position/setting. Homophobia (the fear + aversion)- his rapist was homosexual so whenever he meets other homosexuals, he grows a bit wary and like his other phobia, it only “activates” when he’s around homosexuals. When people are discussing about them, he slowly walks out of the room or tries to ignore what they are saying by plugging his ears with ear plugs for as long as they talk about them.

Anthropophobia- this was from his past and the pasts of the people of Skotos, too. Ever since he heard such gruesome pasts, he had been growing afraid of people. This does not apply to villagers in Skotos or his loved ones, but outsiders tend to make him nervous. He only experiences it when he comes in contact with outsiders. Apeirophobia- Since humans in this world, if not killed or infected with disease have the potential to live forever, this phobia is actually valid. This again ties into his anthropophobia- he fears that if he can’t kill himself, no one kills him, and he doesn’t catch a disease, he’ll end up living forever and meet another homosexual rapist that’s interested in him. It affects him on a daily basis. Dementophobia- He’s afraid that if he ends up going insane, he’ll lose all sense and morale and he’ll start to act like the monsters he condemns. Never seeing his loved ones after death (I don’t think there’s a name for this fear)- he’s afraid that when he suicides, he’ll end up going separate places than his loved ones and he’ll never be able to speak to them. It affects him on a daily basis. (The Babonian Scriptures don’t say anything about suicide, but he’s afraid that if he or his loved ones lived lives that were very different, they will not end up in the same place. Said places are: Hell [for those who have lived lives filled with cruelty], Asylum [this is a place where souls who have lived neither explicitly good or bad lives go] and Heaven [self-explanatory at this point …] ).

Hobbies: Reading, writing, gathering information, and planning for his cause. Those aren’t really hobbies but they’re little things that he enjoys doing so …

Weapons: A kitchen knife he bought at the grocery store. Don’t ask.

Backstory: When he was 18, he was a senior at Angeli Academy (which was the main school for the city he and his family resided in, Angeli) and met someone named Julius Green, who he quickly became friends with thanks to Julius’ bubbly personality. Over the months, though, he noticed that Julius seemed obsessive over something, and it turns out that something was him. When Julius confessed to him, he declined politely, and they continued their friendship. Julius would sometimes get a little too touchy with Cassius, but he didn’t mind- after all, they were great friends. However, even though he was hiding it, Julius’s infatuation with Cassius never did go away, and when it resurfaced it was worse than ever after Cassius started a very deep relationship with a person named Junia. As soon as they made it official, it seemed like Cassius forgot all of Julius, only hanging out with her. They did almost everything they could together, and the times that Julius could squeeze in a chat with Cassius were filled with him talking about how great Junia was. Junia practically became his world. Junia helped him with everything, expanded his confidence, and made Cassius a better person overall in addition to giving Cassius little “donations” to help his struggling family. Julius, becoming jealous, started getting all the information he could on Cassius, grilling him on everything, and even stalking him secretly. He also snuck sneak-kisses when Cassius was asleep, putting his hands in places where they were not supposed to be as well as hoarding Cassius’s “junk” and making them his prized possessions. He confessed to him again but was declined, this time with Cassius telling him to “get help and make a life for yourself.” After Cassius said that statement and fled, he felt a sudden burst of guilt, but he didn’t turn back. (That incident later led to Julius pushing Junia off of the roof of a building. He did it in a way that was so discreet that no one could find out the person who did it. It didn’t matter if they found out that he was Junia’s murderer, anyway- he was the son of the mayor of Angeli, which meant that he was protected at all costs. When Cassius heard the news, he was mortified and cried all week. He didn’t come to Junia’s funeral- he didn’t get the invitation). A week later, Julius and Cassius were assigned to work on a group project together, along with some other students. The very next day, Julius came over to Cassius’s house to work on the project, and 2 hours were made up of them researching and planning what the poster would look like. As Julius was about to leave, Cassius joked and said to Julius, “Now, don’t obsess over me too much now. You need a life, and you need to get one quickly.” Julius was infuriated by Cassius’s comment and tried to fend off his emotions, but they got the better of him, thus driving him to sexually assault Cassius. When the process was finished, a naked Cassius was left on the floor, bruises all over his body and half of his hair lying on the floor, mentally scarred. For three weeks he remained silent, wanting to hide his past, but on one day of the third week, he snapped when he saw Julius being praised for his “purity and kindness.” Anguished, he cried out the events of what he called “the Incident” but he was greeted with the unkind responses of “you’re just jealous,” “f*ck off, you dirty homophobe” and “same-sex rape obviously isn’t real, stupid.” The villagers then proceeded to shun him because of his “lies” and no one would even acknowledge his existence, only communicating to him through their torturous and hate-filled letters (his family was separated from him, as per community law, and he was moved to reside in the horse stables). Those letters consisted of reasons why same-sex wasn’t real and called him out on the “lies” he had told. Every single letter sent a knife through his heart. One day, as he was walking in the streets, unnoticed, he saw Julius wandering around, lost in his dreams. At that point, Cassius could no longer contain his anger and slapped Julius, scraping his overgrown nails at his face and drawing blood. The council decided to kick him out of the village to die on his own. A few days after he was kicked out of Angeli, a ghostly figure who would come to be known as Jibaeja Babo (yes, that’s his name- the “babo” part would be there for the laughs) and asked him to become his “Jesus.” (What he wanted was a person to spread the Babonian religion [not to be confused with the Babylonians] and set an example for other future Babonians). It wasn’t that Cassius was special or anything- Jibaeja Babo was just looking for some vengeful souls and he happened to appear in front of Cassius. He promised Cassius food, shelter, and most important of all, vengeance … but only if Cassius became the religious leader of the Babonians. Cassius obviously agreed. After months of training (which basically was teaching Cassius about the ceremonies he had to do, familiarizing himself with the church, and answering questions about what the Babonian religion was about [ten answers wrong meant a bucket of boiling oil as punishment]), Cassius was given the title of High Priest by Jibaeja Babo was set out to teach people about the Babonian religion. (The Babonian religion basically focuses on how people are creatures of the light, which corrupts people into the horrifying beings that they are. The only way to cure themselves would be to accept the darkness within themselves and realize the wrongs of what they did, along with retaliating and punishing other wrongdoers who refused to turn. Of course, the leader of those retaliators would be Jibaeja Babo).

I don’t see anything wrong with your oc, the weight does seem super malnourished though. I understand you were going for that, though the lowest (that would basically be skin and bones) would have to be around 135, not much lower that that though.

Very interesting character and concept though!

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You know what's an annoying trope in Brothers Conflict OCs? OCs having abusive/dead parents just so they can be adopted by Miwa Asahina. I mean, we don't really see Miwa a lot, but I doubt that she's that generous to adopt any random kid with a generic sob story off the street. Plus, I'm 99.9% that counts as kidnapping to take a kid off the streets and into your house.

Usually most OCs, the way it’s expressed is never realistic and a bit of an overused trope when it comes to OCs.

I feel like the better plan of action would have to be having the OC go to the same school as one of the brothers (maybe even befriend one that’s not the love interest?) and befriend the other family members over time

It’s very overused for there to be abusive/dead parents in OC backstories. Not saying that it’s bad persay, but people have to be careful about how they go about it if that makes sense.

If the parents are abusive/dead, why isn’t the OC living with other relatives (which is most common in those cases)

At least explain why or how something happened rather than “it happened because I say so”

I’m not 100% sure about the kidnapping part, but if there’s a kid on the street the best, and probably most sensible course of action is taking them to the police station as a missing child.

Said child, if their parents aren’t around, would have to either be given to guardians (aka relatives) or put into the foster care system.

Most annoying troupes stem from people being like “This happened because I said so” without there being any explanation.

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Um … can you review my character? Thank you. (I don’t think you provided a specific form, so …)

Fandom: Original. It follows a group of agents in Skotos, a village mostly populated with people who have been wronged by humanity. (It has become a haven for those types of people after people discovering it by pure luck + technology).  One day, while Skotos agents were doing their thing (school and house visits, assemblies, online posting, whipping out bells and shouting, etc) and trying (keyword: trying) to educate people about the horrible things they were doing and why they should stop it, they discovered this organization about the Angels. (They were trying to convince everyone to stop what they were doing, but most of them refused to listen and called the agents names. One of the agents found out that the treatment was because of an organization called the Angels through questioning various of the villagers. The Angels apparently originated from the internet and formed an organization about their beliefs over time). The Angels were trying to promote humanity’s sick things by saying that the victims deserved to be mistreated and even insisted that not only that humanity should not show pity for the victims, but they should also even treat the victims more harshly. To counter this, the head elder of Skotos formed a team of Skotos agents to shut down the Angels (AKA kill all of them since none of them could listen to reason and almost everyone had been brainwashed by their propaganda), but the Angels wiped them out. This continued down the line, through generation and generation and the story takes place where “Squad I” is sent out to hopefully stop the Angels. My OC is in Squad I.

 Name: Ahang Arjani

Age: 23

Sexuality: Heterosexual Heteroromantic

Crush: N/A

Looks: She has tanned olive skin, dark brunette hair, and chocolate brown eyes. She is 5’6 and is 120 lbs. She dons a navy blue elbow-length khimar worn over her black abaya. For shoewear, she wears solid white tennis shoes. (Just so you know, her face is malformed due to hydrochloric acid).

Abilities/Powers: Every human (in this world) has two special abilities. One of them is awakened at birth, and the other is awakened (or rather, it just appears) when they turn 21 (in this case, Ahang has “awakened” the two of them). The 1st power is the ability to hear any language and have it translated into your own when it reaches your ears. Ahang’s second power is activated when she places her left hand over her right (not vice versa). What happens is that a light-bluish transparent force field is summoned around her and her allies. (Since Muslims are often portrayed as killing machines, I thought that her power would be defensive as in, ‘You say that my brethren and I are psychotic murderers, yet I use my powers to protect, not kill.’) Just so you know, you can break her shields, though it is quite difficult to do so unless your ability is refined enough.

Flaws/Weaknesses: She’s very self-conscious and tends to break down easily, especially when she remembers her past. Her flashbacks are a bit random, and she tends to have panic attacks when they occur, which is not convenient for battle at all. For physical flaws, her face is all messed up due to an acid attack. She never had the chance to receive plastic surgery (nor the money- she worked as a maid and she couldn’t waste her funds by spending thousands on fixing her face). However, note that it IS better than some other victims and her eyes are functioning well so she can still fight.

Strengths: She’s a decent orator and negotiator, so she can make others compromise with her with a fair chance (about 10%) of it being a success. However, if she can’t speak, then her skills are useless (at the moment).

Family: Arusa Arjani (mother, alive), Sadri Arjani (father, alive), and Taaj Arjani (brother, alive).

Friends: Cassius Kumar (a victim of same-sex rape) and Nomsa Nozibusiso Jali (She’s an African albino that fell victim to witches practicing their black magic with the limbs of albinos and men with AIDS raping her because of her albinism, hoping to cure themselves).

Drive: Her drive is to prove the world that not everyone fits under one stereotype and there are many people, all with different personalities and drives, though her “teachings” are aimed at Muslims more often than not.

Personality: Due to her past and crowds ganging up with her, she is very reserved and shy. She avoids public contact and is always alert. It takes a lot to get her to open up to her (hence why she only has two friends), and even when she does, she never completely trusts you or lets her guard down. She often will try to analyze you to see if you intend any harm towards her, and if she even catches one sign, she will completely close up around you and will avoid you.

Hobbies: Reading the Qur’an, praying, learning more Arabic, and teaching people about Islam. You could say that those are not hobbies but they’re things that make her feel closer to reality and her way of making sense of all the things going on in her world. Whenever she’s doing these things, it just gives her a sense of peace.

Weapons: Oddly enough, empty soda cans- they remind her of the nice woman who saved her.

Backstory: (Her backstory is not for her to gain pity, but to bring awareness to Islamophobia. This is also based off of the story of a woman called Resham Khan and her cousin, in case you were thinking that the world accepts Muslims with open arms. Search her story up). She was walking peacefully one day in her village, teaching people about her religion and why she should join. It was a last-ditch attempt to redeem the reputation of Muslims since, at the time, the village was full of Islamophobes who still associated Muslims with ISIS (even though the movement/organization had died a few years back). It was not Muslim friendly at all, with everyone being wary of them, saying that they enjoy killing infidels (technically true, but it’s more like government law and they don’t enjoy it) and that they nuke non-Islam influenced countries to make them convert. Still, though, that didn’t stop Ahang from wanting to show that Muslims weren’t so bad and that their beliefs were somewhat valid. (Keep in mind that she was one of the only Muslims who lived there due to the colossal amount of islamophobes- the rest lived on the other side of the village). When she was walking around and talking to people, an unknown person threw hydrochloric acid at her, making her fall to her knees and scream in pain (said person probably rushed to his house, which was nearby, grabbed the acid from his “safety kit” [it’s something that all of the citizens of that village possess to ward of dangers] and ran back to throw it back at her). The people around her, instead of rushing to her aid, laughed at her and recorded her with their various devices. It was only 15 minutes later when a friendly woman rushed to her aid and ran to the local hospital. The staff seemed reluctant at first, but they decided to comply with Ahang’s needs when the woman promised them triple the pay. Afterward, they got her fixed up (though her face was still full of scars), and the woman paid. When Ahang asked why she did that, the woman replied that she reminded her of her nephew, who was executed for his religion. She bid Ahang farewell and left to retreat to her own home just after bidding Ahang a warning not to stay in the village any longer. Ahang listened to the woman and tried to get out of the village as quickly and quietly as she could, but a mob surrounded her when she reached the gates. As she exited the gates, glass bottles were thrown at her as she tried to get away. When she tripped on one glass, the crowd’s “punishment” seemed to increase by tenfold as they began throwing everything and anything harmful towards her direction. This continued until the kind woman arrived again (her house was just a street away) and threw a soda smoke bomb at the crowd, distracting them for a few seconds and giving Ahang the possibility of escape. After she escaped, she went to the nearest village she could find, and it just so happened that that particular village was Skotos, a village composed mostly of people who have been wronged by humanity.

She seems like an overall good OC, though I would raise her weight given that she’s apart of a Squad

muscle is heavier and denser than fat, so keep that in mind ^^

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Saw you didn’t get a lot anymore so here is mine! I’m not that good at writing a bio but I tried my best!

GENE HOSEY my good speedy boy, he’s a speedster and one of the many superheroes I have. He’s part of the second generation of the American superheroes and is the pupil of Carlo who is also a speedster. Gene’s actual birthname is Eugene but since everyone has just called him Gene he likes Gene better. Gene loves music, he really really loves music. He also really loves dancing, just moving in general. He also loves Harry Potter and lord of the rings and Star Wars and all that jazz. He rarely just likes something, he most of the time goes into overdrive and just loves things immediately. His dad left his mother before he was born and he hasn’t met him ever, he doesn’t really feel the need to meet his dad either, his mom now is married to another man and he’s really glad she’s happy and he’s super into the fact that he now has a baby half sister that he can play with. His mother is Jewish and he was raised Jewish and so he is Jewish. His speedster genes (gene’s genes) not only gave him his speedster powers but also just snowy white hair, he lets it grow out because he likes the white hair and wants to show it off. It’s also very very soft Gene is very afraid of the cold, he doesn’t like being cold, touching cold things, he doesn’t like ice cream or cold drinks, he always wears a jacket and a scarf (mostly his gryffindor scarf) even if it’s very warm outside, just so there is no way of getting cold.

I’m not sure about about the fear of cold, you should also go into more detail with weaknesses and about his powers

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Are you currently open to OC reviews?

yep!

i just don’t get many anymore lol

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Hello, I’m starting a character critique blog of my own. Do you have any advice on how to start out?

I have a list of unwritten rules that i follow personally:

Don’t insult the art itself (everyone starts somewhere)

just because it’s a fandom OC doesn’t automatically make it cringy

the best thing to keep in mind is adding how to improve on things at the end

mostly so you don’t look like an ass lmao

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Mateo and Matías are Italian twins born in 1725, they had always loved building and inventing stuff from old scraps they found around their father’s metal shop even if it was kind of dangerous they always wanted to invent and figure out stuff. When they were 26 (1751) they traveled to England when they heard about the industrial revolution happening. They’re both tall and lanky and always wear the same clothes just to confuse the heck out of everybody because they look exactly the same, that’s why they got that hat in the first place, it was a gift that one of them is supposed to always wear so people know which is which, unfortunately they switch wearing the hat like 20 times a day. They have their own language and most of the time they don’t even have to speak to understand each other. They’re always joined at the hip and have never been apart. They can flawlessly finish each other’s sentences and are very often perfectly in sync. They’re also huge fuckin dorks and are somehow able to not trip over each other everytime they walk.

Their biggest fear is being apart, since they’ve never actually been apart, so they are just frightened of the possibility of not being together. There are in fact some differences but they’re very hard to spot. Matías has a small scar on his left hip while Mateo does not. Mateo’s nose broke once when he was only 7 years old, it has healed but if you look hard enough you can still see evidence of that it was once broken.

I think it looks fine to me based on the information you gave me, keep up the good work

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I changed my url from ocreviews-and-mary-sues to oc-tipstricksandreviews

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Hey there, I was wondering, is an OC who has a hard past automatically a mary sue? I am aware that most mary sue's have this added to hide how perfect they are, but surely it must be possible to create an OC who has a hard past and is still a well-rounded, flawed character? Right? I'm worried my OC's difficult past might make people automatically shove her into the mary sue pile

Well, it depends on how harsh and bad the past is, and how effected the OC is from that past.

Such as:

an OC being yelled at all their life for little mistakes

Now they’re a perfectionist (to the point of possible annoyances) who breaks down upon being yelled at

an OC whom feels that they’ve never had anyone around for them

They never rely on anyone no matter what, very stubbornly, and has bouts of loneliness and depression

It’s more so along the lines of, they can be well rounded, they may have high-functioning ____, meaning they can still participate in society (such as a job, or a great friend circle) but they still have that mental illness. 

It’s still very possible to have a well rounded character that has flaws, a hard past, and not a mary sue.

There’s many people in this world who have had bad lives, and are still functioning today. Sure, they may not show it, nor they don’t talk about it all the time, but the past it something that happened before and has made them the person they are today.

Also take in mind the age in which things happen, and how it make imprint on them at that age.

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What is your opinion on OC x Canon fanfic? Do you have any tips?

I don’t mind it. I was one of those people that wrote fanfics like that. It’s not a bad thing, especially if you have a character that you want to pair up with an OC that you worked hard on.

I have a short list of tips:

Don’t mirror the OC with the canon character you plan to ship them with

It’s okay to have similar interests, but when the OC has the exactly same background as the canon character, then there’s a problem.

ie: the OC’s entire clan was killed off, and they’re looking for vengeance (then you pair them up with Sasuke Uchiha)

Also don’t mirror any of the other canon characters either

Don’t mirror the OC with the canon character’s S/O

If the canon character already has a canon S/O it’s okay to still pair them up, but don’t make the OC a carbon copy of the S/O. You can make it where the canon character and S/O don’t get together, that’s fine, but don’t make an exact replica

ie: the sub-leader in their guild, they use their real name as their internet tag, badass but adorable, tsundere, etc, and then pairing them up with Kirito

Don’t make everyone love the OC, also don’t make everyone should hate the OC, it should be a mix of:

“We’re acquaintances”, “We’re friends”, “We don’t care for each other, but we just don’t really care”, “We dislike each other”

It shouldn’t be just one for everyone. Real life doesn’t work like that.

It’s more of a troupe at this point but having the OC be an outcast that no one likes

It’s okay for them to be a lesser popular group, but don’t make absolutely everyone hate them

Yes, they can have bullies, people get bullied, but not everyone’s gonna bully them. Usually bullies are like a group of people, while the rest don’t care

On top of that, don’t make the OC get bullied for something stupid/ something no one would ever bully someone over (ie: their sectoral heterochormia that looks like hazel eyes(still calling out that one fanfic I read))

Don’t make the OC and canon character “fall in love at first sight” most of the time, relationships don’t work like that.

I once had a fan fic I spent a couple months writing, and I got wayyyyy too many comments saying “When are they gonna get together?” “Why aren’t they together yet?”

Let the relationship prosper and actually allow others to see how their relationship developed

Let them get to know each other

Don’t make the OC a family member with another canon character.

It messes with the canon character’s backstory and ways the character may act as well

Don’t god-mod the story. The OC shouldn’t know everything that’s gonna happen like some fortune teller

If the OC happens to be a fortune teller, have them only be able to tell fortunes in riddles, not flat out

If the OC “fell into the world of ____” either given them amnesia to the entire world, or have them be “reborn” in that world, or have them only know a little, but not what happens next

ie: they recognize the characters as characters they’ve watched/read about

Don’t make your character perfect and able to do anything and everything

That’s just the baseline of a mary sue so you can see why I added it

Give them flaws, make them make mistakes, they can always redeem themselves later, or never and always have that flaw that may make people angry or dislike the OC, but that’s what makes an OC seem more realistic and like a genuine person

If you have any questions or need clarifying for these tips I made, just send me an ask and I’ll try to explain more

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Hello, I hope this ask isn't annoying, but what anime do you review? And have you seen Assassination Classroom specifically?

asking a question isn’t annoying, don’t worry. 

http://ocreviews-and-mary-sues.tumblr.com/post/145325652532/hi-do-you-have-a-list-of-fandoms-you-review-for 

I haven’t updated this in like 2 years, so it’s a little out of date, but the more recent ones I’ve seen are lesser known ones (plus i haven’t watched a lot of anime recently)

One to add that’s more mainstream is My Hero Academia

And yep, I have. It’s one of my favorites ngl

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So, you still do reviews? (I’m not sure about the dates of your posts, cause I’m on mobile) I wanted to make a sideblog to post about my ocs, but im still unsure. Maybe some criticism would be good?

Oh, yeah, idk when the last review was that I did lmao, so don’t worry. 

Go ahead and send them in 

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This is my character.

Name: Elizabeth Greems Age: 19 years old

Eye color: green Hair color: dark red, one of her locks is dyed in a blue color. Nationality: american, Italian origins

Personality: funny and very meddling. Sometimes she’s hotheaded.

Backstory: Elizabeth had a totally normal childhood. She grew up with normal parents that loved her and went to a normal school. She was kinda good in Math but she was totally hopeless in P.E.

When she was 17 she started hearing stories about a plumber named Mario that fell into a pipe and landed in a magical kingdom and started to develop a passion for this story. She became decised to find that magical pipe.

She found it falling in a manhole and entered in it.

She landed in the Mushroom Kingdom and was found by some Toads that brought her to the Castle, where she met Mario and Luigi, that were kinda confused to see another human from the Real World.

At first Mario and the Princess tried to convince her to go back to the Real World because the Mushroom Kingdom was very dangerous, Bowser and his minions could’ve kidnapped her but she didn’t care and she insisted to stay in that world.

Mario and Luigi then decided to host her in their little house while some Toads were in charge to build her a little house too.

After she started living here, one day she saw some menacing airships get closer to the Peach’s Castle. She went out from her house and went to Mario, asking for explanations. Mario tried to convince her to go back the Real World because she was totally in danger. Even this time, Elizabeth didn’t want to go back.

The airships landed, leaving their owners out: Bowser and his Koopalings. They started breaking things and causing chaos in the Mushroom Kingdom.

One of the Koopalings caught Elizabeth’s attention, Ludwig. Elizabeth was bewitched by his voice, his laugh, his…hairstyle. She literally fell in love with him.

Since then, she started creating plans to caught his attention and eventually making him fall in love with her, failing.

She created her shirt using some clothes markers and dyed her lock blue to look more like her idol.

Mario and Luigi tried and are trying in everyway to make her lose her interest for Ludwig, but uselessly.

Elizabeth is totally obsessed and she will never stop stalking her idol until he will notice her.

She even created a blog on the Internet when she posts a lot of Ludwig photos without his consent and very long texts that are simply praises to him and his “wonderful” hairstyle.

What do you think?

Very interesting oc

I uh.. I hope you don’t take offense to me asking whether or not this is a meme OC or smth

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Honestly I don’t know. She’s supposed to be me if I would’ve landed in a strange magic world like the Mushroom Kingdom. Her personality is basically the same as mine, but very exaggerrated to make her look almost comic. I didn’t want to make a perfect OC with superpowers to represent me, I prefered opting for a more dorky and almost annoying OC. I chose Ludwig Von Koopa to be the target of all her annoying attentions because he’s my favourite character and I like him very much. Obviously this preference is extremely exaggerrated trasforming it in an annoying and almost terrifying love and obsession. I also liked the idea of an evil and sadistic bad guy that has to avoid the attentions of an obnoxious fangirl.

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Ah, okay okay, sorry for not getting back to you on this, I don't check my notifications often. It seems fine since it's an over exaggeration on purpose