I got an email reply from Carla with some feedback of my screenplay as I asked her to read over it, this was the feedback....
I totally understand what Carla means by add specific character voices because the way all the girls talks seems really similar and I think I’m going to go over the dialogue again and really add character to each person to make the distinction between each character really clear. (We are allowed swearing as long as its relevant to the character-- which I’m glad Carla mentioned as I have some swearing in my dialogue.)
Luckily in todays lecture the main focus seems to be dialogue and the different ways to convey it like speed, tone, text (what we see on the page) , subtext (What they mean), how dialogue is expressed.
A good way to think about dialogue which we did a bit in the lecture is type out the gist of what I want the person to say and think of all the ways you can say it and choose the one most like our character would say. (e.g GO away, Fuck off, don't let the door hit you on your way out, I think were done here,,, etc) I defo plan on doing this with most of my dialogue later and I also think it’ll be really useful to have a character post on each character with their main personality traits, background things like that so that the dialogue really represents each character.
“Don't worry about being bold in your script and not saying everything in the script but rather the subtext” -Carla. I actually think this is better than having everything to on the nose so I think I’m going to go through mine again read it out loud and maybe get my flat mates to read a character each and edit based on how it sounds outload.
I also had a chat with Carla who recommended that I watch the craft, which seems very similar to my screenplay idea just set in the 90′s instead. So I plan on watching this later for research.
