so I’ve got a short, plain excerpt from the beginning of this fic; it’s probably not good because it took me about ten minutes to write, but constructive feedback would be much appreciated.... and i will likely add more purple prose later, as is my style
Mason Pines woke up on the pavement of the road to Gravity Falls, a town he and his sister once had fond childhood memories of. His head hurt, and one side of his body was flanked with scrapes, red with stinging blood.
As he crawled to his feet, he felt a chill in the air. It was only June and yet it was dark as pitch and cold as an icebox.
How long was I out? He wondered to himself — it had been bright and warm the last time he’d checked. Through the shadows, he could see the bus he’d taken with Mabel which had taken a harsh spin into a ditch...
“Mabel!?” He shouted, and scrambled towards the wreckage. Looking through, he couldn’t see any bodies aside from the corpse of the poor bus driver. And a note carved into the bus seat they’d been in before the crash, the hunting knife used still stabbed into the faux leather.
It simply read ‘Corduroy Cabin’.
Who would etch something like this into a bus seat? What the...
The young man, puzzled as ever, retrieved the blade and analyzed it. There wasn’t anything special about it — just a normal hunting knife with patches of what looked like rust, though he wasn’t sure that this type of metal was meant to rust at all. Wasn’t it made of stainless steel? Carbon steel, maybe?
He shrugged it off, and after discovering a map of the town in the front of the bus, he took off. His twin was long gone from the immediate area. And the message he’d received was his only clue to finding her.