EVERYONE PLEASE HELP WITH MY PROJECT, EVEN IF I DIDN'T TAG YOU
I call upon all writers, please
I will accept any type of assistance
Any type at all
@vyuntspakhkite-l-darling @agirlandherquill @ajgrey9647 @mk-writes-stuff @illarian-rambling @supersoakerfullofblood @smudged-red-ink
I know this is probably not a good thing to ask some pretty busy people, But I'm trying to Brainstorm an argument between J&R that drives a rift between them for a bit
Feel free to pass this right up, but I'd love if you were to give me a few suggestions, lines, or even help me build the dialogue.
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If you want to help here's the overview:
(Rose calls Jak Horns and Jak calls her Petals until shit gets serious - Like someone's going to die or unless they're really angry.)
Rose and Jak get into a heated argument over... something? (Idk what... but it's probably Jak's mental issues)
Rose ends up hurting Jak by saying he's worthless, (She very much doesn't mean it but she's got some anger-management issues)
Jak ends up hurting her by Saying he doesn't care about her and/or he doesn't care about her efforts to help her and just wants to be alone (He also very much does not mean that, but he also has issues with anger)
Neither of them can really communicate properly, and I have Rose's End Line that hurts Jak, but I don't have his that hurts her.
So far I've just got this outline:
Start it off with R confronting J about [issue]
J shoots back with a very tired, and frustrated snide comment, because he knows about [issue] but he doesn't know how to fix it and it's making him angry with himself
R says something sarcastic back because she's getting annoyed
They go back and forth for a bit
It escalates with J saying something about how not everyone can be so perfectly level-headed all of the time
R shouts at him for that
More back and forth
It escalates again with R saying he's too sentimental
They take jabs at one another's insecurities for a bit (For Rose: Her hiding her feelings, the fact that she's very passionate and loud most of the time, and for Jak his drinking and his inability to cope with himself and his memories)
Then R Says something about how she cares about him
J shoots back with his Hurt Line
And She immediately shoots back with hers and storms out, (Probably crying)
At this point J is probably also crying
{I'm planning on letting the Argument run when I write but I need a framework so it doesn't go completely off the rails,}
Anyway, Rose's main goal here is to kick some sense into Jak
And Jak's main goal is to get Rose away from him so he can't hurt her anymore. He wants to use this argument as a way to hurt her badly enough so she'll leave and not be truly hurt when he eventually dies, or hurt herself by trying to help him
He wants to keep her safe, and in his eyes the only way to do that is to hurt her enough so that she stays out of harm's way.
So, I only have these so far:
"You can be suck a fucking Prick sometimes, Horns!" - R
“Why should you? Why do you? I don’t want you to! Why can’t you just leave it alone? Why can't you just leave me alone?" - J
And Rose's hurt line which I will keep to myself for now.
I will take anything, Lines, series of lines, descriptions, tips, brainstorming sessions, reconstructing of the outline, Literally Anything
