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Need some help? No need to fear just call the redemption hot line!

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Skin tone swatches, for use as a resource. 

Spudfuzz on Deviantart made the original resource, which I modified to be a bit more realistic. She gave me permission to post this.

☛These swatches, like all art resources, should be used as a “jumping off point!” All colours are relative, and change with lighting conditions. As they are now, these swatches work best for adoptables, character lineups, and other art where local colour is important. ☚

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Hi, I'm sorry to bother you, but I was wondering if my submission for a one piece oc got through? I'm not rushing or anything, I understand that you guys have a life outside of tumblr, I was just wondering because I changed some things to my OC and wanted to know if I was able to add it in there, or if not. If not, that's perfectly fine, I just didn't want to bother you and wanted to check in.

Dude go for it!! Classes have picked up so I’m not here too often but don’t ever be afraid of sending in your OC’s. Like ever. Throw em at us and we’ll help you in any way we can!!

~Mod Umaru

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skintone palettes

Oh hell yes

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th-thank you Tumblr

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yesss :A:

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for any artists following me

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i recently deleted all my photoshop swatches on accident and had to go back to the default with no skintones so yES I WILL MAKE IT BETTER THAN BEFORE

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Describing Skin Tones

I tend not to answer questions put to this blog, as there are plenty of other tumblers providing answer boxes and research for you all, but occasionally a question will pop up which fits with things I’m already writing around. Here is one -

Hello, I’m wondering if you can help me, please? I’m working on a multigenerational piece and am having trouble finding good resources on describing skin tone/colour. The piece centers around a Hispanic family, if that helps clarify things. Thank you very much in advance. :) @40cleopatra

My initial take on this is not to describe skin tones at all. We don’t greatly describe white people’s skin tones unless they’re incredibly different from just white, why do we need to describe other people differently? In fact, we can get into a lot of unnecessary hot water if we use skin colour to point out race or an ethnic group. Most nowadays have a huge range of complexions and colour tones.

If ethnicity is important, we can bring it up in many different ways - setting, the community, dialogue, customs. There’s a trend in YA nowadays to put realistic people onto covers, but sometimes that takes away from my own vision of the character as a reader. I know what a Hispanic (roughly) may look like, or many other races and/or ethnicities.

What I want as a reader is something different to grasp onto. Katniss had a plaited braid. Aside from that, I left it to Hollywood to cast me the various “looks” of the main characters, I was more interested in what made them tick. I’ve read books set in India which have enriched my life due to the simple differences of culture and perception, not because one characters had honey brown skin and another was caramel (speaking of using food analogies, in some circles that’s frowned upon).

Pick one thing which makes them special - it could be a highly different skin tone, yes, but it’s more likely to be skin texture (rough and tortured from the sun or frost, or smooth as a botoxed bumblebee) or stunning eyelashes (skipped a generation and inherited from grandma), or a gap in the front teeth, or a special limp, or a particular way of talking, or something they wear always because it gives them comfort, or reminds them of their ethnicity which is really important to them because…or…

Short answer: only describe skin if it’s important to the character and story.

But, if you’re after good ways of describing skin tones (including white ones) then here are a few resources -

Read first: Ten tips on writing race (and ethnicity) in novels - Mitali Perkins

Then read this one by Debbie Reese, specifically with a Hispanic slant.

Here’s one most writers should be watching - Writing with Colour (on tumblr). The blog admins are slanted more to the Americas, Africa and Asia so doesn’t greatly help where Australian Indigneous, New Zealand Maori or Pacific Islanders (like me) or even many European nations come in (who don’t necessarily use the term “POC” in reference to ourselves) but it’s a fantastic and helpful resource. The link discusses skin tone directly, and simply.

If white people were described like people of color in literature - I love this Buzzfeed post, and I’m sure I’ve repeated it a few times here, but did it again.

Repost of writing masterlist from @espelp, scroll to bottom for some help on diversity and representation resources.

Skin tone charts and resources (under #skin tag)

Here’s my Character Description board on Pinterest. Not only skin tones, but eyes, face shapes, hair, body language, voice tones, and more.

WriteWorld has a whole heap of resources.

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Kimono drawing guide ½, by Kaoruko Maya (tumblr, pixiv, site). Booklet is available in pdf for ¥ 900 here.

Here you can see:

female kimono and yukata (note how the juban underwear peeks when in kimono + how belts differ)

male yukata and kimono (note how the juban underwear peeks when in kimono)

dressing up: male (kimono is not closed yet) and female (kimono closed with datejime belt and ready to put on obi)

differences between female and male kimono once dressed (note how the collars and belts set)

common drawing mistakes (compare with previous picture: shoulders lines are too defined, there is a double hem, collars are narrow, belt is not at the right place etc)

women back collar (the lower the sexier) and men back collar (close to the nape)

back and sleeves differences between men and women

collars and sleeves and view of how kimono drapes around body

Furisode back (long sleeves kimono) and formal furisode obi knot example

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DON’T CHANGE A CHARACTER’S PERSONALITY FOR A SHIP

DON’T CHANGE A CHARACTER’S PERSONALITY FOR A SHIP

DON’T CHANGE A CHARACTER’S PERSONALITY FOR A SHIP

DON’T CHANGE A CHARACTER’S PERSONALITY FOR A SHIP

DON’T CHANGE A CHARACTER’S PERSONALITY FOR A SHIP

DON’T CHANGE A CHARACTER’S PERSONALITY FOR A SHIP

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THIS INCLUDES CANON X OC SHIPS.

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And OC X OC

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If you can do private review, via email or message? I'm also interested to take a private review (not the same anon).

Yes we can though it might be a bit more wonky to do it like that, We would prefer that its though the submission option on tumblr but, worst comes to worst yes we can do it through email.

Its just easier for us to keep track of it all through Tumblr.

~Mod Juvia

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Do you have a template or anything that you want for the OC review? Or do you just want whatever information you think is needed?

We don’t have a template set up because its different for every fandom, so we promise to get something up tomorrow! If you want you can head over to our other blog http://top-of-the-guild.tumblr.com/ and look at our template for Fairy Tail characters and modify it if you want to!

~Mod Umaru

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Hi, I was wondering for oc information/reviews, can you do private reviews? I'm shy and not ready for people to see my oc just yet.

Hello there!! We would be happy to do a private OC review! Just remember to specify before you put your OC information if you wish to make it private! Because when you submit it we cant tell if you’re the same anon and such;; We can’t wait to hear from you!

~Mod Umaru

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Hey hey were not dead!!

Were not dead we promise we just need material to work on!!

If you wanna help us go ahead and send in asks and submissions to help us stay busy

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How come the other mod hasnt added in the series they know how to make ocs from?

Because shes lazy as hell!

No its just because were both a little busy and all

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Do any of you babs have any personality suggestions for a character that's supposed to be... erm, "kinky"? I have a character that I really like, but I for some reason struggle to build an actual personality for them outside of being sexual and lonely, and I don't want to seem like I'm romanticizing the concept. .n.

Mod Juvia here!

Mod Juvia thinks that depends on how they grew up and what they do for work and such.

If you had a kinky character who works as a dominatrix or a the counterpart for men or anything between their going to be a very strong based personality.  But if they are a more secretly kinky person that could change their personality a lot.  

It depends on where they are and what they have been around their lives. Their environment will mold them as well. Think about it, if they grew up around people who were very vanilla in their sexual endeavors and treated kinks as something that should be shamed they might feel ashamed that they are kinky so on and so forth. A family who didn't shame kinks  and were open about that stuff they may be fine with their kinks. 

That make sense?

You could also give them traits like being Flirty or seductive. Try reading about characters who are kinky and see if they have character traits you wanna give yours. Piece together personalities just make sure you dont make contrasting. If you give them flirty they cant be really shy and such.  

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Heeyyyy, it’s me again, with another bad OC from my weeaboo stage! this one, however, I did redeem, and I’ll get to that in a minute. (The redemption will be SUPER long as it’s an entire universe and long backstory and lots of describing, combined with an already long backstory, so this is going to be a very long read for everyone ^-^“)

( @land-clouds )

Hi!! Ill be responding to it under the read more again;;;; But welcome back I’m excited to read about this OC!!!!

~Mod Umaru

Anyway, this smug lil turd here is named Mizuki Yamauchi. It literally means “Moon on the mountain”, and I had named him that way because of his past. He was made around the same time Hisoka and Nobuko were created, which was around the timeframe where I was obsessed with children being experimented on by crazy scientists.

Mizuki is a Demon. However, instead of staying in Hell, he was for some reason transported to Earth as an infant, on a large hilltop, in the middle of the night (Moon on the mountain). A small group of “scientists” who were heading back to their labs found him and decided to take him. There were several other children, although none of them were ever really allowed to interact much. Mostly so they could grow attached to the scientists, I assume, though I never really thought it out much (when a backstory is so bad even you don’t know why shit happens) . Before Mizuki turned 8, he was loved and adored by the scientists, and he grew to love them as family. But, when he was 8, he started getting experimented on. It was just like Hisoka’s and Nobuko’s, with the chemicals and everything. However, while Hisoka and Nobuko conversed with the other kids regularly, most of the kids Mizuki was with were kept in solitude. Around the time he was 10, he was sitting in his room, which is next to two others, when a small note slipped through a small slit underneath his wall. He opened it and it was from a girl named Jessica who was around his age. She was pretty much just saying hi and asking if he was okay. They became pen-pals and good friends while trying to keep their relationship secret. Eventually, when Mizuki was around 12 or 13, he was able to sneak into her room one night and they talked and eventually admitted that they liked each other. However, the scientists must have somehow found out, and the next morning Mizuki was ushered into a room where Jessica was on some table, tied down. He was forced to stand and watch as she was chopped to bits with an axe. After that, he finally snapped. He grabbed a bunch of chemicals that he could find and injected some scientists when they weren’t looking as he made his way to the middle of the place, where he lit it up and burned it. He ran away, not necessarily caring about all the other kids who would die at that point. From then on, he had an odd fascination with chemicals and everything to do with them, often injecting harmless people who he managed to charm enough to trust him. Oftentimes they didn’t die immediately, but he recorded everything that happened to them and left them where they were until someone came and found them, occasionally they died in hospitals or before anyone found them in time. Keep in mind that, throughout most of his life, he didn’t even know he was a Demon.

Alright! Now, here is the revamped Mizuki! (I don’t know how to add a second pic so I’ll give you that in another submission ^^“)

Mizuki Yamauchi’s new name is Isaiah Cullen. He also now has a new AU surrounding him, and his backstory has some of the same concepts, but done differently (and better). First, let me explain the AU. 

In this AU, Souls, Heaven, Hell, Angels, Demons, and Reapers all exist. There are 3 different types of Souls. Blue souls mean that the entity is extremely benevolent. They have done very little harm in their lives and are very unlikely to do so. Red souls mean that the entity is extremely malevolent. They have done very little good in their lives and are very unlikely to do so, at least any good that isn’t required to meet their desires. Yellow souls mean that the entity is in between. They have done both good and bad in their lives and are likely to do both. Red and Blue souls are both rare, and Yellow is very common. Red souls have a 100% chance of Hell at death, Blue has a 100% chance of Heaven, and Yellow has a 50-50 shot at either. There have also been rumors of two strange Green souls having been found, however they were both retrieved from two infants. It is extremely difficult to pinpoint what Green could mean, as infants have little personality, and other infant souls were any of the other three colors. Until there are more found, it is unknown exactly what they are for. One Green soul is being kept by God, the other by Satan, although it is unknown what for. The normal Human eye is unable to see souls. They are very close to one-dimensional and are located right behind the heart. Unless a Demon or Angel retrieves them and a Human spots it, they are unable to see it. Souls are the life-force for Humans. Let’s think of the body like a machine. The heart is the main mechanism, and each body part and organ are different segments of machine. The heart is vital to the machine working, however, what turns the machine on? Once a Soul has found a way inside of a Human, or when one develops (There are cases of Reincarnation, although rare), the heart starts pumping, and the machine is now functioning. The soul is like the “on”-switch of the body, and if it ever leaves, that’s like flicking the machine “off”. The Soul also holds most of the personality of the entity.

Heaven and Hell aren’t exactly like how we see them today. Hell is not a fiery inferno where Sinners are burned for all eternity. Instead, Hell is dark and freezing. The kind of dark where you can’t see your hand in front of your face, and the kind of cold where if we were able to go in, we would be human icepops in a few minutes. There are no lava pits, but there are normal pits. Once a Sinner is thrown inside and reaches the bottom, they start getting visions. Very, very vivid visions. They are forced to remember and relive the absolute worst moments of their lives. But, it is very personal. A “worst moment” could be anywhere from failing a test to torture and/or rape. 

Demons and Reapers are Sinners who were deemed evil enough to be freed from their torture as a Sinner. Although they are the same class in the slight hierarchy in Hell (Souls/Sinners at the very bottom, Demons/Reapers, “Higher-Ups” that are just very old Demons, then Satan himself). Demons take the souls from the still living. They get an “assignment”, or rather, a victim, from this thing called “The List.” A person on The List can be any color of Soul, which means that a Blue could be sent into Hell, but by Demon only. No one knows how a person gets on The List or if it’s even possible to get off, but really, no one cares, either. But, because of the fact the once the Soul is out it causes near-immediate death, and thus murder, they are only given an assignment once every 6 months, if they’re even that lucky, but most likely once every year or so, to keep suspicions down and play it off as “just another murder” in our world. They can take it in any way they so choose. Demons and Reapers are extremely resistant to cold and have this glow coming from their eyes that is similar to a flashlight, or “nightvision”. They also have wings about the size of them that are black, mostly because the main form of transportation in Hell is flight since the ground is covered in pits. And, since their wings are also thin and are easily able to be burned or clipped, they’re also extremely skilled at running and can run very fast. Most Demons keep their looks from when they died. The “Higher Ups” also have ice abilities. There is also a certain “True Power Mode” that both Demons and Angels get into that is triggered by extreme emotion, but the certain emotion that triggers it varies from person to person. In this mode, Demons are partially controlled by Satan and Angels by God, where they have a new ability that also varies from person to person. They are extremely powerful in this stage, however if they get injured they are immediately thrown out of the Mode and it will be extremely difficult to get back in it.

Heaven is the exact opposite. Heaven is full of light, and is the temperature of a warm, pleasant summer’s day. Instead of pits, there are these stairwells. “Sinners” are replaced by “the Blessed”. The Blessed climb the stairs, and each step is a new memory. Instead of the worst moments of their lives, they only see the best moments of their lives. Again, this can be anywhere from passing a test to something extreme, such as being cured of cancer or having a child. Once they’re considered pure and kind enough, they are able to become an Angel. Angel is just the shortened form of “Guardian Angel” Guardian Angels make sure their assigned Human lives the best life they possibly can and make sure they stay out of harms-way, oftentimes this Human has a Blue soul, and in extremely rare cases, a Red. Angels also keep their looks from when they died. They have pure white wings that are as large as they are, and all the same powers as a Demon, except ice powers are replaced by fire.

Reapers are actually a group of their own, belonging to neither Heaven nor Hell, although Reapers typically were Sinners. Reapers collect the souls from the already deceased and take them to where they need to go, although they do carry scythes mostly because of the fact that sometimes the soul gets stuck inside the body and cannot escape, either some medical deformation or condition blocking it or the person was just very dull, and they need to “help” it, but also just for intimidation purposes. As they take them to both Heaven and Hell, they can usually choose which side they like better and which side to fight for. Their wings are mainly black like Demon wings, as most of them came from Hell, only near the middle of the wings and the rest below is where it fades into pure white like Angel wings, since they’re partially Benevolent and Malevolent. However, Reapers are typically disliked by both groups, as Demons and Angels consider them “part-traitor” for visiting the “other sides.”

Whew, alright, that took a while to type! Now, it’s time for Isaiah. (No break in reading for you.)

Isaiah was born in 1615 in the UK as a Noble. He was a sweet, average child, but once he was 8 he started getting odd, wild outbursts of fury that couldn’t be tamed easily at very random times. Because of this and the fact that there was no medication available for it and no mental doctors, he was locked up in his room for most of his life. He had private tutors that taught him that were sent away whenever a fit came on, but most of them never really came back in fear for their lives.  When Isaiah was around twelve, he was very lucky when his parents told him that he could join them on a shopping trip. As he wasn’t much used to being around people anymore, he stuck close to his parents the whole time, like he was still a toddler. When his parents were window browsing at a bakery, he saw a young girl around his age. She seemed to be a very social person, as she walked up to him while managing to not stray too far from her family. She introduced herself as Isabel. It took a while, but Isaiah eventually introduced himself as well and they began talking. They kept secret contact with each other through letters for a while as well, and became great friends, and eventually developed crushes and started dating. Throughout their relationship, Isabel grew accustomed to his fits, which didn’t die down as he grew older but got worse. She found ways of keeping him calm or calming him down, which ranged from hugs and cuddles to banging him over the head with a frying pan. Eventually, they got engaged and had a wedding. At the Altar, Isaiah felt another fit coming on as his vision slowly started to blur and he felt his mind begin to drift. Once Isabel got to the Altar, she mouthed for him to focus on her, and not anywhere else as she held his hands, and it helped. However, right before the kiss to seal the marriage, Isabel was shot in the head. She had died instantly. Isaiah felt his fit coming full force after the few moments of shock at seeing her dead. But this one felt more like he truly meant it. He quickly turned to face the crowd and saw a man fleeing. He never saw the gun, he never saw the faces of the audience, all he could remember then was tackling the man down the church steps and hitting than man in the head with a large rock until it was nothing but blood and brain. He vaguely remembers the man’s face and remembers him from some family gathering of Isabel’s, so he assumed it was some distant relative. Isaiah had ran. He never looked back once at the church, the man, and definitely not Isabel. He also felt very little need to control himself anymore, and caused several accidents and injuries to others from fits and outbursts that were still getting progressively worse as time went on. He also, of course, made enemies. Isaiah died from a stab wound to the chest at age 24. He was in Hell for 100 years before becoming a Demon, and turned 400 this year.

Typically, Demons also keep their personalities, but He (Satan) knew it would be useless to have a Demon as f***ed up as Isaiah, so he changed a few things around in him so that he only has a very short fuse. Isaiah’s an open person when he wants to be, however he’s not the type to go spilling important secrets. He can also be very sarcastic and a**holish, but otherwise seems calm and cool. He has bad anger issues and will get angry at the smallest thing, occasionally getting so angry that he will shoot something. He has short blonde hair and very pale skin. He is missing his right eye, so he wears an eye patch over it, and never bothered with a glass eye. His other eye is bright green. He typically wears casual clothing. He’s 5'9. Isaiah lost his eye after accidentally losing a soul one day, and the girl he had returned back to life after her Soul found her again. His eye was gouged out as a punishment, but he did get the girl’s soul back. 

Likes: -He loves any kind of sweets, though prefers hard candies.  -He likes spending time alone, usually in some type of forest or clearing while trying to clear his mind. Typically he can be found in trees. -He likes it when things are neat and organized, sometimes even going as far as to alphabetize everything. - He adores cold weather on Earth, as Hell is way below freezing.  Dislikes: -He very much hates sunlight or heat. As Hell is pitch-black and below freezing, Demons are very accustomed to cold and darkness. If they are shown sunlight or heat, they are extremely weak to it. Isaiah describes going out at noon in summer as “Feeling like you’re literally on fire and completely blind.” -He hates Angels, for obvious reasons. -He hates any kind of bulls*** and has low tolerance. If you make him mad enough, he is not afraid to shoot you, fatal or not. -He dislikes messy spaces (which is ironic since he kind of grew up in one), and will attempt to clean and sort everything. -He isn’t a fan of loud crowds, but it’s just a minor dislike he can deal with.

Okay…whew…that’s a lot to type and read! If there’s anything that needs clarifying let me know, I’ll be sending another submission in with Isaiah’s picture!

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I really like this! It was following the story line as the first two OC’s you sent in before but the revamp is nice and refreshing!

Im not too sure what I can say or suggest to improve this a whole lot but here I go! ripWhat are the ranking systems, more in depth Is it just Angels Demons Reapers?

If you’re doing a system like that there would be a ranking system, or not, depending on how you want to run your heaven/hell. But if you wanted to have this system it would start with God at the top, then angels like Michael, Gabriel ect. Then lesser angels, and finally the ones who recently turned.

And now on to Isaiah! Why did they start to allow him out of his room, like, if he had such a problem with his outbursts why did his parents suddenly let him come out, and stay out.

Why did his wife get murdered? Whats the reasoning behind that, such as, did her family member not approve of the marriage? Was he a lower ranking noble compared to her? Because back then if you were a lower status you couldn’t marry higher for it would shame your family and throw you out of nobility.

I think thats pretty much it, overall I really like his character!

  ALso give me more angel demon AUS YES COME TO MOD UMARU COME IN THE MASSES

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hhhHHHH THOSE IDEAS SOUND SO AWESOME I'M GONNA CREATE A UNIVERSE FOR IT THANK YOU (it's gonna be like my 4th AU but OH WELL)

“ also, i did actually base their names off of their personalities. Hisoka literally meant "calm/cautious" and Nobuko (I think) meant "joyful" or something along those lines. “ Golly gosh im so glad you like those ideas! If you need any more help, or have any more OC’s you would like help with come on back into the ask box! 

~Mod Umaru

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” Sadly, I was only like 10 or 11 when I made these OCs, so I have no pictures!

I was in a serious weeb phase (like all OC creators go through), and they were bad. Their names were Hisoka and Nobuko, and the idea was almost stolen from a book because they were supposed to be clones. They were made in some odd science lab that’s I guess in the middle of nowhere since no one knows it exists. They were clones of a woman working there in case she ever needed some body parts or organ replaced (that’s stolen from a book I read), but they had to be taken out sooner than normal as small children because they somehow mutated into nekos? And they were rejected by the entire team of scientists but for some reason (honestly I had no reason for a lot of this, I just wanted to make them ‘edgy’) the scientists pampered all of the 5 kids (my two twins and 3 others) until like age 8 and then they started doing “experiments” which was basically torture by injecting harmful chemicals into them and seeing how their body reacted. When they were 10, Hisoka saw Nobuko get tested on while walking past a door, but saw her die, and she somehow grabbed a gun and various chemicals they used on the kids and murdered almost every single scientist there (10 years old), then set the entire building on fire and buried her sister somewhere behind the place, then somehow her sister came back as a shadow creature and hid in her shadow and was evil now and completely opposite her previous personality (she was really sweet and bouncy and bubbly while Hisoka was calm and quiet and cautious and protective)?? These were Creepypasta OCs.

I still haven’t remade these two yet after abandoning them a year or so ago. Any ideas on how they can be redeemed (if possible)? “

Hi! I’m gonna put my response under read more, because I made it a tad too long (the cloning got me hyped up yo). Thanks for sending this in, land-clouds! It was really rad to read over your ideas, feel free to send in more stuff! 

~Mod Umaru

I too know what its like to have a weeb phase, anyone remember Hetalia?

Cloning is something people often use when going into a science fiction topic, which can be expanded on greatly if given the opportunity.

Hisoka and Nobuko sound like Japanese names? So perhaps you can use that base to form their new names- perhaps you can delve into their personalities and name them off of that, combining words and meanings in Japanese (translated correctly into english so you don’t make any weird combos) that relate to the characters and how they either act, look, or anything really!

You say there in this lab, but what is the lab for and how are those scientists improving or killing the world with their research, ie. are they doing it for the greater good or greater evil?

If you’re going the good route there could be multiple ways you go about this, such as making/cloning people for the purpose of caring for others. Also there could be a chemical warfare that needs genetically mutated specimens to be used as weapons, though this one can go both ways.

The bad route would be the obvious, one or more villains intending to use the children as weapons of mass destruction, possibly cloning more to have an army, reprimanding task force.

Just because the idea started off of something already tangible, doesn’t mean you can’t create an original one from it!

If they’re being experimented on, are they being locked up and stuff? Because if so then you may need to formulate a reason as to how Hisoka got out of the confinement. Even if they’re not being locked up, I’m sure they would separate the experiments and lab, to keep it sterile (unless the doctors are unsanitary).

How did Hisoka get the weapon, and how did they overpower the scientists enough to kill them, because they would have had to be adults that have a considerably higher mass ratio to the kids. With this new question in your head you can now play with the fact that the mutations changed their genetic code and altered their body features in an accelerated pace, causing the dramatic shift in appearance/appendages.

If you decide to keep the shift, ears tail ext, maybe theres other races of creatures inhabiting the world too? Which will help plot out and add more mystery to the plot such as; How did the chemicals inserted into her cause her genetic code to shift/lean towards a certain race/species.

This addition of other creatures can also help explain how her sibling turned into a shadow, when she should be dead.

(Or the experiments awakened latent powers within her, causing her body to go into shock and into a state of suspended animation sorry I’m a huge science fiction nerd)

I hope I helped a little! If theres still things you need help with feel free to send in another ask! And I, or mod Juvia will answer your questions.

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Hot diggity

Greetings! Im the new mod for oc-redemption-hotline! Y’all can call me Flamingo, or mod Umaru, or just plain ol’ Umaru!

Nice to meet you all and I hope ill be able to help out with your OC’s!

~Mod Umaru

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i hope i did this right oh gosh

Hhhhhhhhhi! I saw this blog and I thought it would be a good way to maybe get some actual good advice for my character, so here I am. c:

So this is my sorta-persona-but-not-really-persona Nit. Now, I think design-wise they’re fine (though feel free to give me advice on that if you want!), and I got their personality down, but it’s their abilities that I’m worried about… I’m kinda sorta scared that they may be in danger of becoming a Sue. Here’s a rundown of the ones I’m concerned about:

Nit has a quote unquote “angry mode”. It doesn’t make them uber powerful or anything Sueish like that, they just get really pissed off and start yelling at everyone and everything. However, they grow a set of jaws that open from the 9 o'clock side, and they’ve been known to bite people on occasion. Also, it only lasts for about a minute or so, and it’s triggered when all the hands hit 12, which happens gradually as they get angrier (Nit cannot tell time; the hands only measure their temper).

They can also phase into walls. What I mean by this is that they can go up to a wall, sink in, and have their outline and coloration display on the wall. Not really sure if I’m describing this clearly, but just imagine a mural of sorts. Kinda like that. They can move around in this phase and are free from nearly all harm minus things like paint thinners that ruin wall paint, however they cannot cut through corners. Also, they can only do this on painted walls. Still kinda iffy about it.

Nit is a sort of “political figure” in their world. They receive a lot of feedback from characters in their world simply because “they’re the persona”. Nit lives in a fantasy world where character concepts run rampant, and being coined the persona is sort of like being elected president there. They don’t really dictate rules often, as they are very lazy and prefer to eat honestly. However, they can sometimes get people to do whatever they ask for, no matter how mundane or stupid it is. Keyword “sometimes”. It still seems kinda sueish.

So yee, that’s pretty much everything. I hope I did this right, it’s the first time I’ve ever submitted to a blog like this. And if I did, I hope you can help me somehow. Thaaaanks-uh! .v.

I know that with my feed back this may be long so I’m going to add a read more.

This is a really neat idea, the fact that its not time that his face tells but his temper is a really cool part of his idea. Does he easily anger or is his temper pretty good??

Well with the getting people to do what they want is it something like I want a cup of coffee get me one? Or is it like I need you to kill a family for me. Mundane things is good. They are the face character of their world so they should be treated at least a little better or have at least some power to be able to have people do simple things for them. As long as he cant tell someone to like kill a family for no reason other than he feels like it and people just accept it. It shouldn't be sueish. 

Phase thing? Rad but maybe think of another weakness to it? How long can he stay in there? Could he defeat death with this? Think about that. Also why only painted walls? Is there s reason why he can do this in the first place?

Other than that really I think he sounds pretty rad! If I knew the word your building better I could try to help you more...

Thanks for the submission!

~Mod Juvia