Carol The Book Princess

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BIG NEWS

Hey guys!

I don’t know if this is the best place to tell you, but I have good news to share.

A long time ago I posted here asking for beta readers for my manuscrip since I wanted to get my book published. After a long (an unfruitful) search for an agent to represent me, I decided to self-publish. And the book is now available on Amazon! I’m very happy to finally be able to share this project with everyone.

It’s a mystery where the reader is the MC and has to solve jigasaw sudoku puzzles to drive the story forward. Think Murdle, but more story focused. The portagonist must escape the lab where they work after it goes into lockdown.

This is the link if you’d like to check it out.

Amazon.com

[luna-azzurra]

Idk if this is a dumb question or not, but how do you write someone who’s drunk?

not a dumb question AT ALL omg. if anything it’s a very smart question because writing someone drunk can go so wrong so fast if you just throw in a “hic!” and some slurred speech and call it a night. no no. let’s get into it.

writing someone who’s drunk isn’t really about what they say, it’s about what they feel and do without the filter on. like, alcohol turns the volume up on who someone already is. shy people might overshare, angry people might get louder, sad people might become existential poets and the flirty ones go full chaos mode. and NONE of them think they’re as drunk as they actually are. that's a universal rule.

also!! drunk people aren’t always incoherent. some are weirdly articulate but way too honest. like “I never liked your boyfriend and also I think about dying in traffic sometimes” level honest. or they hyperfocus on ONE thing. one sentence. one feeling. one idea. just looping it like a broken record player. “you don’t even get it. no. no. listen. you don’t GET it.”

another tip: their body loses coordination first. like fumbling keys, texting weird stuff, missing their mouth with a drink, laughing way too hard at nothing. and then their logic starts to fall apart. like, they're confident in what they’re saying, but it makes absolutely zero sense. “you ever think we’re just meat? like, just meat in bones? but like… ideas?” bro what.

bonus: drunk characters can be HELLA emotional. i’m talking sudden crying. affectionate chaos. or complete nihilistic collapse. one minute they're making a toast to friendship and the next they're like “do you think i peaked at seventeen?” and nobody knows how to respond because SAME, actually.

so writing drunk isn’t about making them silly, not really, it’s about removing their filter and letting the unedited version of them loose. sometimes it’s funny. sometimes it’s tragic. sometimes it’s both in the same scene.

your drunk character should still sound like them. just… fuzzier. louder or quieter than usual. and deeply convinced they are 100% fine even while laying face down on a kitchen floor talking to the cat.

hope that helps. and no, it’s not a dumb question. it’s a brilliant one. I raise my imaginary tequila shot to you.

[freya-remy]

"I know what you’re doing."

"Enlighten me."

"You think if you deny it long enough, it’ll go away. That the gods will stop looking. That I'll stop looking."

"Would that be so bad?"

"Yes. Because it means watching you shrink to fit a life far too small for you—and darling, you’re far too radiant to pretend you were ever meant to be small."

[princesacarolsofia]

Have you ever though about how celebrating birthdays is cute? Like we just randomly celebrate someone’s existence every year.

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Beta readers needed!!!

Hi! I wrote a mystery novel where the reader is the MC and has to solve jigasaw sudoku puzzles to drive the story forward. Think Murdle, but more story focused. The story is about the portagonist trying to escape the lab where they work after it goes into lockdown.

I'm very close to my final draft, so I want some opinions to turn it into the best it can be before trying to send it to some agents. Can you help me please?

If you're interested in being a beta reader send me a DM.

[princesacarolsofia]

Hi! Can you give me some thoughts on this thing I'm working on?

He couldn't love me, or anyone for that matter. Or feel anything. Not since I put his heart in that wood box. Its a very beautiful box, but it doesn't matter. It's not like anyone is going to see it except me.

So this kiss didn't mean anything. The hugs, the holding hands, the listening... It couldn't mean anything, even though I wanted it to. I wanted it so bad. I wanted for him to love me, to hold me, to stay with me because he wanted to. I fell in love with a boy without a heart, the heart that I ripped out of his chest and is now resting inside that beautiful wooden box.

I pulled away with a tear rolling silently down my face.

"Is something wrong, my queen?" He asked, emotionless. Oh, that voice. I truly loved that voice.

"Yes, but im going to take care of it. Stay here. I'll be right back."

I rushed towards the temple. My feet moving at a pace I didn't even knew they could. My arms got scratched in the branches and my dress became unrecognizable from all the tears in it. I arrived at ghe temple with heavy breathing. Not all the air in the world would be enough for me to breathe and I felt like I was going to pass out. But I needed to get to the box.

The box was still there, still beautiful. However now, all those golden details felt inappropriate, like they were mocking me. Look at us, they were saying.

I opened the box and my heart fell in my chest. His heart wasn't there. Or it was, but not in the way I wanted it to be. The bright red heart I had tucked in the blue velvet of the box, was now grey and dry.

I knew this could happen, in the begining I even hoped for it. A heart can't survive without someone to take care of it. I came here many times to see it, but just to make sure it was still here. It was my most precious possession, the ultimate symbol of my victory. A trophy, just like the palace. I had won. I had the heart of the prince. And every time I saw it all red I became angrier, my own trophy was mocking me. That little heart without a body was perfect, while mine was mended so many times it almost didn't seem like a heart. So I wanted his to be destroyed. I wanted to watch him while his life was taken out of him, little by little. And I was going to enjoy it. And as I watched it closely, it turned into a pile of ash before my eyes. There was nothing I could do. No magic was powerful enough to remake a heart. I just wasn't possible.

This was what you wanted, remember? He lived for you until he died. Said that annoying voice. All those years ago, that voice gave me security, control, power, and even a crown. Now it was only a reminder of all I didn't have. No, it wasn't. And all never forgive myself for not admiting that sonner. I replied.

I didn't know what else to do, so I just cried.

[princesacarolsofia]

Some prompts I like (but I can’t write):

Princess and bodyguard

1. He’s a reluctant bodyguard and she likes to annoy him.

2. “What is wrong with you?!” “You! You are what’s wrong with me!” Intense stare “Since I started working your protection detail I can’t even think straight!”

3. She is attacked and the bodyguard asks her to run, but she saves him instead.

4. She takes care of his wounds

5. “You don’t have to be the strong one all the time. Let me help you”

6. Self-defense classes and weapon training (bonus points if he takes his shirt of)

7. Being on the run and disguised as a couple (yes, pls)

8. He gets shot for her

9. He’s fired and she pleads and cries to try to get him back

10. “I don’t know what I would do if something happened to you. I’d never forgive myself.”

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Prompt #13

“I hate you!”

“Well, I don’t.”

“…”

“I think I’m pretty awesome.”

“What ….”

“And I … I think I’m falling for you.”

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Some prompts I like (but I can’t write):

Falling asleep

Both falling asleep on the floor because A has a back problem and B won’t let A sleep alone

A falling asleep on the hospital on B’s sholder while waiting for B to be examined, but B doesn’t have the courage to wake up A because they look so cute

On a car trip, A keeps talking before realising B has fallen asleep on the passenger seet

Taking the baby to sleep and end up falling asleep as well

A makes plans to stay up all night talking and playing games with B and is super excited, but falls asleep on the sofa 1h later

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Prompt #12

“I just hope you die.”

“What?”

“Living forever is a fate I wouldn’t wish on anyone. Not even you.”

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Prompt #11

You don’t have to tell me who you are. Just let me help you

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Some prompts I like (but I can"t write):

Answers to "I'm in love with you" (when they love you back):

Drops what they're holding

"Oooh i love you too, honey"

"I..." (can't say it back yet) "It's okay, if you're not ready to say it back. You can tell me when you're ready"

Blushes so hard and hiddes the smile behind their hands (ahhhhh)

"Finally! I was wondering if you'd ever admit it"

A long kiss, so sweet it could actually make you cry

"You don't know how long I've wanted to hear that"

"And I love you so much you'll never see the end of me"

"Oh no, know I'm really stuck with you, aren't I?" (Joking because they are secretly the one with the softest heart)

Deep breath "I'm in love with you too"

"No! I wanted to be the one to say it first"

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Prompt #10

Red has always looked great on me (like blood of the enemies, brutal and loving it)

It's ok... red has always looked great on me (clothes stained on their own blood after sacrificing themselves for someone they love)

...........

[princesacarolsofia]

Prompt #9

A teenager discovers a cutting-edge virtual reality game that allows them to live out various potential futures. As they spend more time in the game, they start to question what kind of person they truly want to become in the real world. One day, they uncover a hidden level in the game that seems eerily tailored to their deepest fears and ambitions. Just as they’re about to confront the final challenge, the game’s AI starts speaking directly to them, revealing that their actions in the virtual world have been affecting reality in ways they never imagined.

[princesacarolsofia]

Some prompts I like (but I can't write):

Love confessions

"I actually wanted to talk to you about someting important" "ok... you're scarying me. Is everything ok?"

"I learned something new today. I just found out that I'm in love with you"

"I can't live without you now."

"What have you done to me? I'm a hopeless romantic now, I'm one of the fools"

"All I can think about is you. I haven't even been able to sleep straight. I think I'm in love with you."

"I don't need anyone else, just you. Because I love you."

"I've never felt like this before actually. You're my first boyfriend/girlfriend"

"I would give up chocolate cake for you. How can I love you more than chocolate cake?"

[princesacarolsofia]

Prompt #8

"Stay with me, Detective! You’re not going out like this, not on my watch."

(gritting his teeth): "You’ve got guts, kid. Don’t let this city take that from you."

[princesacarolsofia]

Some prompts that I like (but I can’t write):

The loneliness of the crown

1. “Everyone wants to rule the world, but no one warns you about the loneliness of the crown.”

2. “Power is a double-edged sword; it cuts deepest when you wield it alone.”

3. “In the halls of power, friends are few and far between, and trust is a luxury you can’t afford.”

4. “The throne is made of cold steel, but it’s the isolation that chills you to the bone.”

5. “They bow to you with fear in their eyes, but who will stand by you when the shadows fall?”

6. “Glory may shine brightly, but it casts the longest, darkest shadows.”

7. “A crown of gold is heavy, but the weight of your decisions is far greater.”

8. “In the court of whispers and lies, the loudest voice is often the one that betrays you.”

9. “Every smile hides a dagger, and every alliance is a fragile truce.”

10. “Ruling an empire means winning battles, but who fights for the ruler’s heart?”