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ENG-323: 4-1 Student Feedback

Mar 24, 2025 6:35 PM

Guiding Light Outline

ACT ONE. 

Ally Hollander, a blind woman, sits in a conference room on the 78th floor of the North Tower at 8:25 AM, accompanied by her guide dog, Bixby. She's discussing a merger with her partner, Derrick.

At 8:46 AM, a massive explosion shakes the building, sending shockwaves through the air. Glass shatters, and chaos erupts around Ally, who cannot see the destruction but hears screams and smells smoke. (INCITING INCIDENT)

Despite her blindness, Ally remains calm, relying on Bixby to guide her. Bixby nudges her leg, signaling it's time to go. Ally grabs the harness, telling him, "Let's go."

People panic and press the elevator buttons, but Derrick pushes everyone out of the way to try to get Ally to go first once the elevator arrives. Ally refuses to wait and asks Bixby to lead her to the stairs.

As they move toward the stairwell, an explosion behind them sends rubble crashing down over them. Derrick explains that their coworker Karen's leg is pinned, and Ally helps lift her out.

Ally's vision fades as the smoke thickens, but she continues forward, offering Derrick her hand. Bixby guides them through the chaos. (FIRST TURNING POINT)

ACT TWO.

Ally, Derrick, Karen, and Bixby continue descending the stairs, the building shaking as debris falls. The sound of cracking metal and collapsing concrete fills the air.

The stairs ahead collapse, blocking their path. Dust and debris engulf them, and Ally struggles to breathe as she hears Karen's shallow breathing. The group feels trapped. Bixby's panting reassures Ally. She grips his harness tightly, whispering, "Hop up." He leads them forward, carefully avoiding falling debris.

They reach a narrow landing, blocked by heavy concrete. The building trembles again, and they are nearly trapped. Another explosion sends them into panic.

Ally's hope begins to fade, but she refuses to give in. She urges Bixby forward. Then, Bixby pulls them down a narrow corridor they hadn't noticed. The group follows him, hoping he knows the way. 2.

They emerge into a clearing and find firefighters, who guide them toward safety. The group moves quickly as the building continues to rumble. As they continue down the stairs, the building shakes violently, and debris falls around them. Bixby expertly guides them through the chaos, anticipating the falling rubble.

The group reaches the street, but Bixby halts, sensing something wrong. Ally hears Derrick's whispered words: "They're jumping from the upper stories." The tower is falling. (SECOND TURNING POINT/LOW POINT)

Karen cannot run due to her injury. Ally's determination hardens. She orders Bixby to find the subway.

ACT THREE.

Bixby leads them through the panicked crowd toward the subway entrance. Ally, Karen, and Derrick follow, with Karen struggling to keep up due to her injured ankle. At 9:59 AM, the South Tower collapses, shaking the ground beneath them. The group races toward the subway entrance as panic rises. (CLIMAX)

They reach the subway, emerging into the relative safety of the underground. The air is thick with dust, but the danger from above is over.

Ally, Derrick, Karen, and Bixby huddle together, finding a moment of relief. Ally strokes Bixby's fur, grateful for his unwavering guidance through the chaos. (RESOLUTION)

One year later, Bixby is awarded a service medal at the White House for his heroic actions. Ally stands proudly by his side. The ceremony ends with a wide shot, showing the bond between Ally and Bixby, a partnership that proved unshakable in the face of disaster. 

THE END.

Emma B March 25 at 8:03 AM Hello Sarah! This is a very moving, although anxiety inducing, story. Overall, I feel you create a sense of tension and suspense very effectively (I must admit I felt a knot in my stomach as I read your outline). One suggestion I have is perhaps adding a bit more exposition or scenes that reveal your character's personalities and background. Because your story is one of survival, you want your audience to really root for your characters and desire their survival above all else. Both Ally and Bixby are easy to root for, but why should we root for Derrick and Karen as well, to the point that Ally and Bixby are put in harms way helping them? That may seem harsh, but I find when we watch shows that rely on survival, like Yellowjackets or Squid Games, we don't care as much when secondary characters die because we don't know much about them. I look forward to seeing how your screenplay evolves!

 Sarah B March 27 at 5:02 PM

Hey Emma! Thanks so much for your thoughtful feedback! I'm really happy to hear that the story made such an impact! I definitely wanted to build that tension and urgency, and screenplay is so much harder for me to write (I have no idea why!!). I totally agree with your point about character development, thank you for sharing. You are 100% right. In a survival story, it’s super important for the audience to connect with everyone, not just the main characters. I’ll try to add more scenes to give Derrick and Karen some more depth and backstory, so their survival feels just as important to the reader. I really want the whole group to stand out, not just Ally and Bixby. Thanks again for the suggestion! It’s exactly the kind of feedback I need to improve the script. I’ll keep working on it and hope you’ll like the next draft even more!

Jennifer M. March 30 at 5:02 PM Sarah, Thank you for posting the outline for your work-in-progress in our workshop. I look forward to reading the peer feedback in this assignment! As always, let me know if you have questions along the way.

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Finding Key Words

Portraiture/Environmental Photography

Being able to capture the world through the eyes of the lens is what I love most about photography. Through every click, I am able to record a moment in time that I will never get again - people are able to see the world how I see it and that is what I find so powerful. Therefore, through photography I want to experiment more on how I can explore new creative ways to portray my cultural identity.

Traditional Pasifika Patterns - Hiapo & Tivaevae

I am interested in traditional pasifika patterns and designs, especially revolving around Hiapo & Tivaevae because I feel that it is a practice that needs to be maintained and uplifted. Much like Niuean & Cook Island language, these art practices are dying out. It would be interesting to explore how I can implement these two traditional art forms in a contemporary way, without culturally appropriating it.

Minimalistic Style - Positive & Negative Space - Trivialisation of Colour

I am intrigued by the contrast of minimalistic and chaotic style created by positive and negative space. I find that this design aspect is something I want to experiment more and explore further.

Peer Activity - Reviewed by Awatea

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GROUP 1 - sound project feedback (from a member of group 8)

This project I feel has a lot of highs! The parts this group did well, I think were extremely effective. I’ll go through my favourite parts first, and then maybe look at some things I thought they could’ve improved.

My favourite parts:

- the high ringing transition to elevator music is very comedic. Almost dark comedy because the expression on the actress’ face is how I would describe as desperately tired. I think this transition suits the tone of the scene very well, and this is the kind of contrast and creative thinking that really elevates a narrative above the usual!

- Some nice papery and plasticky sounds as various objects fly at the actress. (I’ll come back to how this might’ve been further improved!

- The elevator door sounds very cohesive to the room, good choice.

- The use of outside (?) noise, I assume it was outside and if so, very well done. The dogs barking, children talking is really nice and includes the viewer.

- the rain outside is also a creative choice. I like that it gets louder in one room, but I think it should possibly have a different shape or sound, as it sounds like her roof is a greenhouse roof or one of hose corrugated plastic rooves (or is it roofs?) - which I strongly doubt but I suppose isn’t impossible!

- I think the noise of her footsteps inside what I hear as an echoey hallway work well, and I like the subtle slides/scratches in her footsteps.

- Nice zip (could be louder!)

Things to improve:

- Wind sounds - I dislike howling wind for a scene like this, I don’t quite know why, I suppose it feels a bit cartoonish. Perhaps more layering of different wind was needed?

- Room tone changes, I felt like there could be a more noticeable difference between the rooms. The rain adds to this, but each tone needed to feel perhaps like she was moving further into her house.

- The paper and bags hitting the actress at the start I felt could even be more ! Or the leaves! I wanted more rustling MORE!

- The woman’s footsteps, I also wanted MORE. Gimme that slap on the pavement!

- If I’m being very picky I would ask for more diagetic sounds in her flat, like a radio in the background or something. Perhaps that would overwhelm the scene too much, but just a thought!

Aimee, Jake, James S and Lucy did very well in this overall. I enjoyed their sound design thoroughly and look forward to their short film!

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  Peer Feedback: Making It Meaningful – Dr. Catlin Tucker:

Feedback is how students feel seen and supported. It is also how we communicate to our students that we value the process over the product. When we give feedback as students work, we signal that the work they are doing is important, and we care about their progress.

Teachers want to give students timely, focused, and actionable feedback, yet it is easy to neglect. Traditional approaches to providing feedback are time-consuming and often require hours of work beyond the school day. Given the bombastic pressure on teachers this year (and every year), I’ve been working on strategies to help support students in giving each other feedback. As a learning community, all members should play a role in providing thoughtful and substantive feedback.

Peer feedback is most effective when it is focused, and students have clear guidelines for giving feedback. Below are three strategies designed to make peer feedback meaningful.

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Character design feedback (1/2)

I made a google form document to ask my peers which of the 6 designs they liked the best. Below are some of the responses I gathered.

Based on this feedback, I shortened the list of possible designs down to 4 designs, seen below.