Notes on stumbling run 31-07 and group discussion
Great text, but it’s too much. Ballet into political scene works very well because it alternates movement-based with text-based scenes
Be specific with what our text-use convention is
Beginning is great, but first few scenes feel like a summary of scenes. Text-less scenes in between would give it more air (i.e. have Ari and Vera meet and fall in love in a separate scene)
Transitions need to be clearer: politician scenes need to have a clear moment of transition, of collectively putting the coat on, transforming, manspreading. Introduce those conventions better.
Beppo can be guiding the scene. It’s nice, but there’s too much text.
The run was way too fast and the arch of the scenes was therefore not clear
Best man speech can be more about the interaction with the text. You need one or two scenes with full arches before you fall into a politician scene. Take your time!
Convention of the text and of the characters was unclear. Translate some of the text to actions to make it more understandable.
We need more space to see the repercussions of the politicians’ actions on the town people.
We need to see more reactions of the people on the bans (like the Peach/Chip response to the canned meat), whether positive/negative or off-handed
Carrot banning = opportunity to introduce Lau’s character. Have her needing to hand in all of her carrots as the carrot blending scene happens.
First market scene must be lively, we see how much we love vegetables. Lau may feel affected but the rest must actively love all else she sees. Then we’ll see the contrast with the second market scene
We need to embody our play, breathe the text, feel the actions instead of anticipating the text. Back to technical basis. When we embody the play, the information is going to come out.
Bring back moments from the first sharing. First ban can be just Laura giving up the carrots (threefold). Then we reprise that after the second scene, with the whole line of us giving up different vegetables one after another.
Exercise: do the scene without text and see how much it needs.
We need contrast with quiet scenes, minimal scenes, like how the Keir Starmer speech worked in our first sharing
What is our objective in actions per scene?
Really choose the lines that need to land: ‘No animals were harmed in the canning of this product.’
Do we need to bring back a domestic scene to emphasize the impact that the banning of carrots has on the smallest unit of life (the couple, the domestic life)
Go back to the play as if we were running it without the clown. Track the plot points. Put on the play as if we were not clowns. Really understand what it is before we bring in the clown and muddy the storyline.
Do we want to introduce more clearly who we are as clowns, before we start the tale of Cropshire? The first frame could be us playing around as clowns who cannot speak, try to welcome the audience. Ask them to turn their phones off without speech etc. Then the challenge hits us from the left: to perform this tale.
Is the scene providing the audience exposition to the clowns or to the world?
What is the straight play trying to say to the audience? Tragic story of impending doom and what happens when fascism takes over. Clowns put on this play but don’t want to perform these terrible parts. There then needs to be a moment of distance between the clowns and the play.
Are the rebels (Lau, Ali, Vera) just clowns who are trying to put on the play, but then our clowns get punished for it?
How are we going to make this way? What is this play about?
Bring in the sound of the curtain rolling for all scene transitions so that the sound can then start to dictate what we need to do later on in the play (sound comes before movement)