Hey, So umm if your seeing this I would really appreciate it if you could tell me what you think. I have been very nervous showing people my work because I don’t know if it’s any good, I personally am in love but i created it so it’s probably not all as incredible as i pass it as. I figured here would be a good place to post it because nobody knows me and I can disappear if it sucks. Please be brutally honest.
That one girl
She cries herself to sleep,
Because the hate towards herself runs so deep,
Deeper then the line of cuts on her torso,
Even deeper then the knife would have to go,
All she wants is to be alone,
So she can stay in her zone,
All she gets is depressed,
While those she loved hate on her like the rest,
It wasn't always this way,
She used to run around and play,
In they yard,
Before she chose to put up a guard,
With the trees,
and the bees,
Endless laughs,
Slightly blurred photographs,
They way she was hit by the sun,
Now all she can do is run.
Run from the trees,
And out to the seas,
The precipice,
That ascending off would bring benefits,
Don't try change the mind of someone who believes strongly,
She can only do things wrongly,
But it can only be right,
To just jump and be out of sight,
And in one single swirl,
The world said good bye to that one girl.