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Best Presentation

First I would like to congratulate my class on doing an exceptional job on project 3! In my opinion I think that Rebecca’s presentation was the most effective. Her topic on natural cosmetics is something that definitely needs more awareness. Her poster in particular made me question what products I was using and what I was putting on my face. it made question whether or not the creams and makeup I was using were healthy for my skin and has me now considering using more natural and organic cosmetics. Her website was beautiful and creative, and I loved how she created a testimonials page for people to share their thoughts and to interact with all people in this community. Her proof page was something that I thought was unique, and it was something I never thought  I could use as a genre. Overall it was was interesting to see how she came about with it and how she executed it. Lastly, I liked how each of her genres encompassed a different rhetorical appeal to promote her message. With a little more distribution and promotion, it could definitely become a successful campaign and gain a lot more circulation! Great job.  

[jroneree-blog]

I enjoyed her presentation and her wix website too She did a great job with staying upbeat and positive through her presentation Maybe advertise her genres a little more The poster was good, but simplifying it may be more effective #bbenc2135

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Presentation Review

      I really enjoyed everyone’s presentations. All the topics were interesting and I learned something about each one.       The campaign that stood out the most for me was Hudson’s #VeganBeStrong. I found the campaign to be well-thought-out and very effective. First of all, his genres were on point. I’m a big fan of all three of his choices, Buzzfeed, Instagram and Youtube. They are extremely popular among the social networking sites we have today. It was a really smart choice that resulted in a lot of people engaging with his compositions. Furthermore, I have always believed that the best way to get to someone is humor. His Buzzfeed article was humorous, with the memes, gifs and his writing style, and at the same time informative and persuasive. In regards to his Instagram, I loved how he was active and got really innovative with his posts, like by including an interview and recipes. He knew how to keep the campaign alive and give the audience what they wanted. 

[jroneree-blog]

Humor is an effective way to grab someone's attention The posts were interactive and well made The buzzfeed was good, maybe a little more decoration The recipes seemed somewhat extensive, but were still a really good addition #bbenc2135

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Presentations: Peer Review

Out of all the projects presented these past few days, Laura Smidt’s was far superior in every aspect. The impressive nature of her project started when we saw a large amount people following her blog, which is significantly more than most other projects, and an astonishing amount to get after only a week. She did a lot of impressive work, and it had to have taken a great deal of dedication to make her genres. Not only did she show off her follower base, but she also deviated from the normal genres presented by posting a blog. Her project was great, and it’s not to say that anyone else did poorly, but that Laura’s project was well put together, with the pulchritude of how she amalgamated her sources. Laura’s genres went the distance and seemed unparalleled. The project was an incredible achievement, and had a certain amount of authority and finesse. But it wasn’t only the project that held her up, but how she addressed the class.There was a lot of humor, and a lot of energy, and hardly any mistakes that the class, or our professor could pick apart or criticize. Laura captivated us with her follower base, and by the end of her presentation, we understood how she managed such an amazing feat. If there was a perfect result for project 3, Laura’s would be it. But I fumbled my presentation, and I believe that is immensely detrimental to the credibility of my review. But these are my thoughts, and I know that Laura’s project was excellent. #bbenc2135 #GreatJobLaura

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WRITING INTO THE DAY What is the message of this campaign? Purpose, audience, mode, medium, rhetorical appeals, style, design. Is it effective?

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In the chalk written post, the author writes “End Slavery April4-5 Landis.” Because it isn’t very likely that they are talking about real slavery, we must assume that some other group of people is going through something similar to, or as horrible as being forced to do back breaking labor in which they receive little or no compensation for with days on end. The core of slavery is having a group of people doing jobs and tasks that no one wants to do, but activities that have to be done. Therefor, I can only assume that because they are only “ending slavery” on Arpil 4-5, it is either a holiday or another sort of special occasion. The other thing they used for a medium and mode is a poster set up outside. It says “Shine a light on Slavery”, still not giving the reader any real information. The design is very simplistic and doesn’t give much information, forcing the reader to look into their campaign. I think it’s effective in some respect, since it forces the reader to look into more detail, however, it deterred me because of the small font on the poster and the fact that whatever they’re doing takes place in “am” not “pm.”

[jroneree-blog]

Viral Marketing

Viral marketing is a way in which a company or franchise attempts to get it’s brand out into the general public as successfully as possible. It’s main goal is to become as notorious as possible while keeping up a good reputation to keep their target audience interested and wanting more of their product. There are many campaigns that are currently using social media as well to Market their products and get the word out about their goods or services. However, Viral marketing is a very specific way that companies make their project well known in almost every area that they can cover, whether it be through the internet, or in a newspaper, it seems to have reached almost every source possible. Seeding a campaign is an imperative approach to doing this, because seeding is what steps you take in order to reach out to that many more people than you had before, such as making a commercial with an actor or famous person. A company could also use incentives, like giving out deals to people that purchase their goods sooner than later. It can also effectively use pathos, by making either humorous commercials, or heart-sinking adopt-a-dog commercials.

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WRITING INTO THE DAY Look over this buzz feed article and pick a piece of art which you like. Tell me what about it appeals to you. Now perform a rhetorical analysis on the piece of artwork (purpose, audience, rhetorical appeals, style, design, etc.) What can you learn from this piece that might assist you in Project #3, or assist someone in workshop next week.

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My favorite piece of art from the buzz feed article was the one about Shakespearean insults. I remember reading some of Shakespeare‘s work in almost every grade in high school, and a lot of the verbiage was always somewhat unclear. But I remember one day in class someone posted something similar to this; a list of three categories, each one containing many insults in Shakespearean dialect. It was fun that day, biting thumbs at each other and calling each other droning doghearted coxcombs. The purpose of this piece of artwork was to present insults that Shakespeare had wrote and which the general public didn’t know the meaning. It is an interesting piece, which is more for those interested rather than targeting a group. It appeals to mostly Ethos and Pathos, because it’s trying to be humorous, but we also have to take the creators word that these statements really are insults, and not something else. But then again, as long as we believe we are insulting each other using an archaic language, it wouldn’t matter too much. This might be able to teach me how to structure my project better, and organize all of my categories in a neater fashion. The style of the Shakespeare picture was that each insult was alone, isolated from another.

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WRITING INTO THE DAY Is the book always better? Name a book that was not better than the movie and explain why. OR Choose a text (book, poem, song, video game) and explain what choices would need to be made to remediate it into a movie.

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The book “The power of one” written by Bryce Courtenay was a book I read senior year in my AP Literature class. The story is about this young white boy that was raised in South Africa, his mother had gone away and he was being raised by an African American mother. There is a lot more backstory in the book, but eventually he meets a man on a train who inspired him to become a boxer. He went to the man’s boxing matches and spent time with him afterward, walking around wherever the train stopped that day. After this encounter, the main character P.K. began training to become a boxer, and went on to compete in many competitions. That is a very vague summary that doesn’t really do the book justice, but that’s what it would have to be if it were to become a movie. The first quarter of the book is all backstory and how P.K. went through out life as a child up until he got the dream of becoming the best boxer in the world. Even though there are some important characters that are mentioned in the first quarter, it would more than likely bore the audience if it was placed in a movie. The movie would have to start with some backstory, and then have P.K’s meeting with the boxer on the train, and then follow the main character on his journey “which was through school, and while training at a jail.” The people he met along the way were unique and lifelike. P.K. dealt with hardships before he was a boxer, because his family was poor, but after he went to school and began winning in his boxing matches, he gained a large amount of support, and made a lot of friends quickly. These types of moments would be necessary for the movie. Scenes where he met his first friend, or his first boxing practice, or his first boxing match. I don’t want to spoil anything, but he goes on to face more challenging opponents as he gets older.

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WRITING INTO THE DAY Choose your favorite story (book, movie, tv, etc. Fiction or nonfiction) Who are the characters? What is the setting? What happens in the story? (Plot) What’s the central conflict?

Now, perform a rhetorical analysis on the story. What’s the rhetorical situation: Purpose, Audience, Rhetorical Appeals, mode, media, genre conventions, style, design, sources (inspiration).

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My favorite story is a Television series called Avatar the last Air Bender. The show is animated, and based off a fictional world in which there are people with special gifts in four different categories: water, earth, fire, air. Only special people can bend their respective element, and there are plenty of normal people with no bending ability. However, there are certain people that can master their element even further with extreme and extensive training, developing new techniques stronger than others. The main characters include Ang, Sokka, Katara, and prince Zuko. Ang is around eleven years old and constantly shows his childlike side, while Sokka is the comic relief. The show revolves around Ang, because he is the Avatar, who has the ability to use all four elements. In the beginning of the show, he starts off alone with his flying bison Oppa, and he only knows how to air bend. That being said, the air bender people were extinguished by the fire nation, who serve as the antagonists of the story for the majority of the show. Ang must learn all four elements and stop the Lord of the Fire nation. In all, this show brings a lot of humor and action, while having great charisma and containing elements that make it fun for any age group. The rhetorical situation would be that it uses mostly pathos, because of the humor and intense emotional scenes that drive many of the characters to performing their duties. Ang struggles to master all of the elements, while Zuko struggles to kill the avatar because he wants to gain the respect of his father. The purpose of this show is to take the audience on an adventure, and bring them into a fictional world with some conflicts people can relate to. The style in which it’s told is mainly chronologically, however, there are some important flashbacks that happen which explain the story even more, and connect the dots that Ang could not remember. The mode would be digital because it’s a show, and the media would be entertainment from a T.V. The show was based on the Manga that was written as an Asian Comic.

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Narrative

The issue I am covering is the issue of concussions in the National Football League. The paper I wrote is pretty clinical, because it is a research paper but I think since this issue completely turns a player’s life upside down emotion needs to be displayed to help the issue become better understood. I actually read a narrative when I was researching for my paper. The narrative was written by a football player and his response to learning about the effects of CTE. He had not suffered from CTE but his fear for CTE was prominent throughout his article. It was interesting because he also talked about the benefits of playing football and covered the topic of if it was worth it for him to be at risk for CTE when football gave him a great lifestyle. I think it would interesting to compose a narrative about a player suffering from CTE, as there are many psychological effects that audiences do not realize. If I were to do a narrative I think I would struggle with which details to cover and which ones not to because CTE is created by traumatic head injuries over time. So it would be hard to talk about a five year old injury and the talk about a 65 year old man struggling from CTE. I think I would need to really make sure that my narrative is structured very well by having flash backs of the players injury as he struggles from CTE in the present.

[jroneree-blog]

I like your topic, and the incorporation of CTE

explain more benefits on a narrative genre

the narrative you read could be summed up faster

good counter arguing the possibilities of narrative genre

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For my issue I had to really look into nutrition and got to see just how little people really know about where they can get the nutrients they need. Speaking for the vegan community and the issue of getting the proper nutrients will be impossible without the use of narrative genre. This is the main genre needed to establish ethos and credibility, so I plan to do so with the research I gathered as well as my interviewee’s thoughts. I would have to state and explain the different ways vegans can and should eat so they can stay healthy and balanced. Personal stories and making it seem like anyone can do it will also be helpful when creating content aimed at those outside the community. i could also target the audience with a bit of pathos and add a little of information on the mistreatment and abuse of animals for non-vegan products. A lot of my research consisted of narrative genres as well so I do plan on using that to better tell the story of a life without animal products. it will definitely be a way to get people in the community to be stronger in their lifestyle and those outside of it to want the full story.

[jroneree-blog]

Good job introducing the issue.

explain more difficulties that vegans face

what is a vegan (If the person reading didn’t understand)

Good strategy for how you could target your audience

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Journal March 22

My issue is on concussions in the NFL and how they directly impact player’s health in both short term and long term instances. Because my issue is on a physical injury, a narrative would work great in a few different perspectives. If it was from a player’s perspective, they could talk about the experiences they went through before, during, and after the concussion. If it was from someone on the medical staff, they could describe the position they were in, and the decisions they had to make in order to keep the player and the coaches happy while keeping the injury into account, whether or not it is dangerous for that player to return to play. It could also be taken from the coaches perspective. Coaches could explain how they had to deal with players who received concussions in game, and how they had to put different people in to make up for a valuable lost player. However, I think the best perspective to do would be from the player, because the audience would be able to read an account first hand from the person that actually dealt with one or more head injuries, and has dealt with it over the years.  

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Ted Talk

In the ted talk made by Jane McGonigal, she explained that she was a game designer, then told everyone in the audience that she would extend each person’s life time by approximately seven minutes. She then admitted that this seemed skeptical, but then she showed long complicated math that meant nothing at that point in the talk. She then used pathos and explained what the top five regrets people had on their deathbed were. She took long pauses during this point in time in order to let the more serious tone set in with the audience, because she wanted everyone on the same level as her before she switched gears. She then confessed that she had sustained a head injury that was extremely serious, and part of the recovery process, she suffered severe pain and emotional stress, and was restricted from doing a wide variety of tasks. She connected with the audience on a personal level, and then explained in entirety her coping mechanism. It involved making her recovery a process, and she kept repeating that each of her coping mechanisms was “scientifically proven.” I think she gains and loses some ethos because of this, because it makes sense that she needs to say what the science aspect of her recovery process was, but she used “scientific” loosely, and in almost every sentence when it was unnecessary. However, the logos also had played a big part in her talk because it went chronologically with her recovery process as well as explaining traits that would help lengthen the audiences life span. She described the four tasks that anyone could do in order to expand a lifetime, and explained the math that was shown in the beginning. In all, it was well organized and used ethos, logos, and pathos effectively

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WRITING INTO THE DAY What is the rhetorical situation? (Audience, purpose, rhetorical appeals, media, mode, use of genre conventions, style, design) How does the media craft the message? If you were to remediate it, what would you change?

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The rhetorical situation is the context of an event in which there is an issue and an audience that depict a specific situation. In this picture, the situation is that there is a handsome young fellow holding a flower, and a young girl and a furry ewok holding hands. It seems pretty comical because the advetisement is showing notorious lego people. There are more cut and dry emotions, especially since the lego man holding the flower is frowning. This makes the audience sympathetic to him, especially since many audience members have felt this before; liking someone who is taken by someone else. Because it’s a picture, it is portrayed better than if this were written. It’s hard to describe this picture in a funny manner, so the picture is the most effective way to present this situation. There is a lot of pathos in this picture, because of it’s humor, but also some ethos, because of the lego label. The media has made it to where we can only see one perspective. The audience is viewing from the left, and there could possibly be a sniper forcing the princess to hold hands with this ewok, However, from what we can see, it’s just a love triangle.

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Persuasive Genres: Video Games vs Violence

The purpose of this article was to show that although in several cases video games could have been linked to tragedies such as Columbine that video games do not tend to make the players more prone to and desensitized to violence.  The audience is everyone ranging from teenager to adult because it brings up issues and shootings and politics. The rhetorical appeal that was used the most was logos. Dickinson brought to light facts of several court cases that claimed that video games led he guilty to commit the crimes that took place. An example was the mention of the Columbine shooting. The media and mode is visual and text based. The overall style is a news article without media.With media added into the design and style this could have been a much better article. This article could have been better adapted into a podcast which could allow opportunity for the lawyers of the cases and the victims of the tragedies to say how they feel about video games in regards to violence. It would also allow for nonviolent students and individuals to make note of why playing video games does not make them prone to violence. 

[jroneree-blog]

Could be more specific with the audience. The author might be more focused on the parents.

Good use of paraphrasing and describing the article’s main points.

I like the solutions you came up with at the end of the post, expand them.

You talked about the Columbine shooting a lot, but you can mention other games as well to make this stronger.

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Journal 4 // Persuasive Genres

    In his article “Are Kids On a One-Way Path to Violence?”, Chase Dickinson discusses the effect violent video games have on today’s youth. His purpose is to convince people that video games are not to blame for a child’s aggressiveness or violent behavior. Dickinson claims that the fault lies with parents for not controlling/supervising what their children are playing with, and also with any mental disorder the kids might have.     The main rhetorical appeal the author uses is Ethos. He uses facts from previous investigations of young criminals and mass shooting incidents. In addition, he states that he is a gamer and has been in the industry, showing that he has experience in the topic.     The audience are readers of the journal the article was published in, “Weber Writes” from Weber State University, like students or faculty. The audience could also be parents interested in the topic or looking for advice in regards to filtering their children’s games.     The way Dickinson wrote the article adds to his purpose because he begins by stating what other reports say and then proceeds to disprove them with his arguments and analysis. He uses a strong tone, is very detailed and to the point, which makes the reader feel like he knows what he is talking about.     The medium of this composition is print. It could be adapted into a podcast and include interviews with people from the gaming industry or even parents who have gone through this matter. Furthermore, the piece can become a photo essay by adding visuals such as pictures of popular video games or of the incidents mentioned.

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Good physical structure of the post it was easier to read. 

I like the picture you added it goes really well with the topic you chose

Explain more about the media and mode and why the article fits into that category

Good use of quotes from the article and paraphrasing as well.

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Journal March 16

In the article “Are Kids on a One-Way path to violence?” Chase Dickinson argues both sides of a problem that has been controversial since gaming really took hold in recent years of development. The purpose of this article is to inform the reader of the controversy and explain the arguments in a manner that makes the reader choose a side after getting the information. The audience is more than likely parents, because Dickinson addresses that parents should filter some of the more mature parts of video games out. The media and mode would be online, and this makes it more accessible to a wider variety of people. The style of this article is very scholarly because the author presents the facts and a broad spend of games in which many different people play. He informs the reader on the types of games and what violence they include in order to argue whether or not they are bad for children. This article could be made into a podcast if Dickinson was interviewed and he explained his reasoning why he thought that it isn’t necessarily the video games that cause violence. In all, I agree with him because I don’t think that video games cause violence, however, player interactions may have something to do with frustration many gamers face.

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Writing Into the Day - Project #2 Reflection Take a moment & around 200 words to reflect on your project. What is something you like about it? How many drafts did it require, really? If you had another week, what would you change? (Don’t say how you’d procrastinate it further.) How has your approach to research changed?

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As I gaze upon the ashes and dimly lit embers, I remember the fire I had built only one day before. The fire was not magnificent, but it was well built and adequate. If the fire was my paper, it had plenty of sticks around it, and some logs as well to keep the fire burning a while longer. I even put in a fire pit, surrounding the flames with protective rocks so that the fire would never spread out of control. The structure was decent, and did a fine job. As George Byron said “What is writ is writ, would it were worthier.” I take this to mean that I, the author, have gathered the information and made it into an essay, but I do believe it could have been better. I like how my essay, on a base level, checks almost all the boxes of the assignment, but it doesn’t seem as matured as I hoped. If I had another week, I would definitely add another log or two, and a lot more dry sticks and leaves to keep it going until everything I have said has burned out, and the ashes and dimly lit embers symbolize a once great fire.