I think I'll leave a small intro here and pin it just in case
I'm Riz! Unfortunately I'm such a boomer when it comes to tumblr, so I'm only using it for art archiving purpose. My current fixations are hypmic and (especially) a3, so most fanarts are going to be from these two fandoms <3
(and also I'm sorry if my english sounds a bit weird! I hope it's still understandable tho đ)
"Impossible! How can you still move? My spell stops time!" "Yeah that's the problem right there buddy. You created a spell to stop time when you should have created a spell that stops me."
use a font like comic sans -- trick your brain into thinking that it's not important, that the writing can be stupid, if it's in a stupid font (if you can't tell i despise comic sans)
time yourself to get to a goal
or give yourself a certain amount of time
quantity >> quality in the first draft(s)!
jot down what you want to happen in that chapter
try organizing your writing (nanowrimo, for example)
do *not* reread! it doesn't need to make sense, it just needs to be there
try not to stick yourself to something you saw on tumblr. what works for someone else doesn't necessarily work for you!
take breaks. time those breaks.
practice writing short stories / oneshots of your characters.
try getting all your writing done within a certain goal (as much as I can for 30 minutes) rather than writing 5 minutes on or off
write down every little wormy idea that comes into your brain! sure, it's probably for a different plot, but maybe you can work it in somehow?
on that note, mash elements of your plots together rather than starting a whole new story
see maybe what little writing competitions you can submit your work to
proclaim your goal to the wide web for some peer pressure
rewards yourself. cheer on every thousand-word milestone. brag to your friends that you've written something, anything.
don't think of the big goalâdon't think of publishing, or posting, etc. think of the end of your chapter, the development of your character, where it goes.
switch your writing environment! where are you most productive?
make a playlist only for when you write. never for anything else.
getting off tumblr, probably.
have people remind you of your goals.
remember that it all comes with discipline, but also your mental health is the most important!! don't sacrifice half your sleep to meet your nanowrimo goals. try to recognize when it's taking you too long and close the document. do something else. come back later.
take care of yourself. <3 use this post as a breather (or reminder to start!)
Iâm Rin T, and in this post Iâm excited to share with you a detailed guide on how to craft vivid descriptions and descriptive sentences for your writing. Iâve long believed that descriptive writing is the magic that turns ordinary text into an immersive experience. When done well, every sentence acts like a brushstroke that paints a scene in the readerâs mind.
I have seen how powerful descriptions can engage readers and establish a strong connection with the narrative. Descriptive writing is not simply about decorating your work; it is about building an atmosphere that transports your reader to a world. your world.
When you write descriptions, remember:
You are setting the tone.
You are building a world.
You are evoking emotions.
You are inviting your readers to experience your story with all their senses.
Below are my personal tips and tricks to help you build detailed and captivating descriptions:
Begin With the Senses
Description does not solely depend on what the eyes can see. Consider sound, smell, taste, and touch. For instance, instead of writing âThe witchâs hut was eerie,â try elaborating: âThe witchâs hut exuded an eerie aura. The creaking timber and distant echoes of whispering winds mingled with the pungent aroma of burnt sage and mysterious herbs.â In this way, you help the reader not only see the scene but also feel it.
Choose Precise and Evocative Language
Precision in language is vital. Replace generic adjectives with specific details to boost clarity and imagery. Rather than âThe forest was dark,â consider: âThe forest was a labyrinth of shadowed boughs and muted undergrowth, where the light barely touched the spindly branches, and every step unveiled whispers of ancient spells.â Specific details create tangible images that stay with readers.
Show, Donât Just Tell
A common mistake is to âtellâ the reader how to feel, rather than âshowingâ it through context and detail. Instead of writing âIt was a spooky night,â immerse your reader: âUnder a pallid crescent moon, the night unfurled like a canvas of foreboding whispers; broken branches and rustling leaves narrated the secrets of a long-forgotten curse.â By showing the elements, you invite the reader to experience the fear and mystery firsthand. (You don't need to be as dramatic as my examples, but this is simply for inspiration)
Use Figurative Language Thoughtfully
Metaphors, similes, and other figures of speech lend an artistic flair to your descriptions. When writing about a scene in a magical world, you might say: âHer eyes shone like twin beacons of moonlit silver, cutting through the gloom as if to part the veil of night itself.â Such comparisons evoke emotions and deepen the readerâs connection with the scene. However, be cautious not to overdo it; a little figurative language can go a long way.
Strike a Balance Between Details and Pacing
While elaborate descriptions are alluring, too many details can weigh down your narrative. Consider introducing the broader scene first and then focusing on key elements that define the mood. For instance, start with an overview: âThe village lay nestled between ancient stone arches and mist-covered hills.â Then, zoom into details: âA solitary, ivy-clad tower sent spiraling tendrils of mist into the twilight, as if guarding secrets of a long-lost incantation.â This technique creates a rhythm, drawing readers in gradually.
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Practical Exercises to Enhance Your Descriptive Writing
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To help you practice these techniques, try the following exercises:
Sensory Detail Drill:
Select a familiar scene from your fantasy world (for example, a witchâs secluded garden). Write a short paragraph focusing on each of the five senses. What do you taste as you bite into a magical fruit? What sounds resonate in the quiet of the enchanted night? This drill helps you to avoid flat descriptions and encourages you to integrate sensory experiences.
Revision and Refinement:
Take a simple sentence like âThe night was cold,â and transform it using the advice above. Rework it into something like, âThe night was a canvas of shimmering frost and darkness, where every breath of the wind carried a hint of winterâs sorrow.â Compare the two, and notice how minor adjustments can dramatically heighten the mood.
Peer Review Sessions:
Sharing your work can offer invaluable insights. Exchange your descriptions with fellow writers and ask for focused feedback, Does the description evoke the intended emotion? Does it deliver a clear image? Use these sessions as opportunities to improve and refine your craft.
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Common Pitfalls and How to Avoid Them
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Through my years of writing, I've learned that even the most passionate writers can stumble. Here are some pitfalls to watch out for:
Overloading With Adjectives:
While itâs tempting to create elaborate descriptions, too many adjectives and adverbs can distract rather than enhance. Aim for clarity and purpose in every word. Instead of âa very dark, spooky, frightening forest filled with creepy sounds,â try âa forest shrouded in ominous silence, where every rustle hinted at unseen mysteries.â
Neglecting the Flow:
Descriptions are vital, but the narrative must continue to drive forward. Check that your detailed passages serve to enhance the storyline rather than bog it down. Ask yourself: Does this description bring the reader closer to the action, or does it detract from the momentum of the narrative?
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Advanced Techniques for the Aspiring Writer
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Once youâre comfortable with the basics, consider these advanced methods to elevate your descriptions into artful prose:
Integrate Descriptions Seamlessly:
Instead of isolating your descriptions, weave them into dialogue and action. For example, as a witch brews her potion, you might describe the bubbling cauldron and swirling mists as part of her incantation, not just as a standalone scene. âAs she whispered the ancient words, the cauldron responded, its surface rippling like a dark mirror reflecting centuries of secrets.â
Reflect Character Perspectives:
Let your charactersâ emotions color the scene. If a character fears a looming threat, their perception will add a layer of tension to the environment. âI entered the dim corridor with trepidation, my heart pounding as the flickering torchlight revealed spectral figures dancing along the walls.â This technique makes the description both situational and personal.
Use Rhythm:
The cadence of your sentences can mirror the pace of your narrative. In high-tension moments, short, abrupt sentences heighten the urgency. Conversely, in serene scenes, longer, flowing sentences can create a tranquil atmosphere. Experiment with sentence structure until you find a balance that suits both your style and the mood you wish to convey.
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Final Thoughts and Encouragement
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your narrative is your unique creation. you too will find your distinctive voice. I encourage you to keep experimenting with different techniques until your descriptions feel both natural and mesmerizing. Write freely, revise diligently, and most importantly, let your creative spirit shine through every line.
Thank you for joining me. I hope these tips can help you.
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But you donât seem to have much stuff, it looks like youâre just carrying one bag from the storeâŠ
Itaru
I had them pack it in a box and send it to the dorm.
Chikage
Just how much did you pull? Donât go adding clutter at the end of the year.
Itaru
Uh-huh, well since you two are here Iâll go home with you. Iâll drive the car around in a bit.
Chikage
âŠHe ran away.
Izumi
AhahaâŠ
Chikage
Weâre home.
Guy
Welcome back, itâs rare for the three of you to be together.
Itaru
We met by chance near the officeâ
Azami
L-love talk!? No way in hell am I gonna talk about that!
Misumi
Woah~! Azamiâs eyes are trianglesâ!
Azami
What kind of eyes even are those!? And stop taking pictures, Homare-san!
Izumi
Sounds pretty lively.
Guy
A doll artist Arisugawa knows is coming.
Izumi
The one whose exhibition we helped out beforeâthat doll artistâŠ?
Guy
Yes, the upcoming exhibition is being planned out but they seem to have ran out of ideas after the fourth one.
So Arisugawa invited them to the dorm to see if he could give them a hint or two.
Izumi
I see, so thatâs what you meant.
Guy
Seems like Izumida and Ikaruga are the topic of interest right now, theyâre being taken reference pictures of in the lounge.
Itaru
Senpai avoided an event. Too bad he didnât capture the flag.
Chikage
Donât bother putting one up again.
Guy
Looks like theyâre just about to leave, why not say hello?
Izumi
We definitely should.
âŠBy the way, Guy-san, is it okay for you to not open the bar up? Isnât it about time itâs opened?
Guy
Actually, I was looking for Mikage, but I couldn't find him.
All thatâs left to look at is the rooftopâŠ
Chikage
âŠGeez, Iâll go take a look.
Guy
Sorry, I know you just came home. If you find him, tell him Iâm already on my way.
Doll Artist
Thank you so much for today! I think I can think of a great piece now thanks to you.
For my exhibitions, Iâd love to ask for your help in PR again!
Izumi
Iâll let Misumi-kun and Azami-kun know.
Homare
But two people certainly isnât enough, correct?
Doll Artist
Yes, I would be grateful if there were one more personâŠ
Homare
Perhaps we should ask Hisoka-kun for help once again.
Izumi
Speaking of, Chikage-san was looking for him on the rooftop just nowâŠ
Chikage
ââ.
Hisoka
ââ.
Homare
Oh my, it appears he has secured him safely.
Doll Artist
Um, the guy in the suit isâŠ
Izumi
Spring Troupeâs Chikage Utsuki.
Doll Artist
âŠ
Izumi
(B-by any chance, do theyâŠ)
Part 2
Izumi
Thatâs it for todayâs practice, thank you for your hard work!
Spring Troupe
Good job today.
Izumi
ââAh, Chikage-san. May I have a minute?
Chikage
What is it?
Izumi
Do you remember the usual doll artist that came by the other day for ideas?
Chikage
I do, butâŠ
Izumi
Well⊠Misumi-kun and Azami-kun were asked to be guides for the next exhibition⊠As well as an offer to you too, Chikage-san.
Chikage
Me?
Izumi
Yup.
Chikage
⊠Can I ask why? Iâm pretty sure we didnât even meet at all that day.
Izumi
Actually, they were already on their way home when they saw you on the rooftop and got inspired by it.
Itaru
Flag collector lol.
Chikage
I donât remember it being that way.
Thanks I appreciate it⊠but considering my age, itâs hard for me to agree to it.
Tsuzuru
With a Gymnasium* school world view, I think Chikage-san would be perfect for the role of a student.
Masumi
Not that different from a Japanese high school setting.
Sakuya
A uniform would look good on you too!
Citron
Guy and I wore it too, so it is A-Okay.
Chikage
⊠To think my escape route would be cut off completely like this.
Well, since Spring Troupe got me assured then⊠What the hell, sure.
[ Option 1: Thank you so much! ]
Izumi
Thank you so much!
Chikage
I hope I donât come in and ruin the worldbuilding.
Izumi
No way! I think the doll artist would be pretty happy!
Chikage
Really? Iâm not too confident, but⊠I accepted the role so Iâll do my best.
[ Option 2: Chikage-san as a student sounds fun ]
Izumi
I think itâd be fun to have Chikage-san as a student!
Chikage
Arenât I a little too old to be a student?
Izumi
More like, it feels like your calm demeanor adds a level of depth to your role.
Chikage
Calm, huh⊠sure letâs just say that.
Izumi
Then Iâll be sending you the character sheet.
Itaru
Now that thatâs decided, letâs start role prep right away.
Citron
I shall help too!
Masumi
Why are the two who got nothing to do with it the ones excited?
Chikage
Not excited, but teasingâs more like it.
Tsuzuru
I knew itâd be a bit small.
Masumi
Itâs doable.
Itaru
No way am I gonna wear this outside.
Chikage
Iâm grateful that youâre helping me out with the role study but why am I being forced to wear Azamiâs uniform?
Citron
You are playing a highschool student, it is only natural to put a uniform on!
Chikage
From a Gymnasium* worldview, I think a blazer would be better suited than a gakuran uniform.
Before that, isnât it weird youâre all wearing blazers but me?
Citron
There is a proper setting for that!
Chikage
Setting?
Itaru
âA transfer student that wears glasses and pretends to be an honor student but is actually a former delinquent and underground boss of the local scene.â kinda setup.
Chikage
Sigh⊠youâre too rotted by manga.
Sakuya
But youâre a transfer student with a hidden side to him, thatâs so cool!
Tsuzuru
Iâm not gonna doubt the two people with the Gymnasium experience.
Masumi
Whatever, just hurry it up.
Itaru
Then letâs go on with that setup.
Chikage
âŠYeah yeah, Iâll play a delinquent, right?
Izumi
âG-good morning everyone! Please take your seats!â
Chikage
âŠThereâs really no mistaking director-sanâs flavor of acting.
Itaru
Sheâs like a nervous rookie teacher, itâs not so bad.
Masumi
Sigh⊠cutieâŠ
Izumi
âToday Iâd like to introduce a new student! Utsuki-kun, why donât you introduce yourself?â
Chikage
â... Sure.â
Izumi
âEveryone, feel free to ask Utsuki-kun any questions you might have!â
Chikage
âUtsuki Chikage. Blood type A. Single.â
Itaru
Oh heâs single all right.
Citron
âWhen fighting your enemies do you finish off with a kick? Or are you the punching type?â
Tsuzuru
Thatâs background info, you shouldnât ask that!
âI have a question! Whatâs your family like?â
Chikage
âI got a younger brother.â
Sakuya
âWhatâs your favorite food?â
Chikage
â...Sweets.â
Masumi
âWhat about your least favorite?â
Chikage
â...Spicy food.â
Tsuzuru
Could he beâŠ
âUmm⊠What are your hobbies?â
Chikage
â... Bikes and sweets?â
Izumi
Bikes and sweetsâŠ
Itaru
Are you actually playing Juza right now�
Chikage
The only Japanese delinquents I know are those in Autumn troupe, and since Yuki calls Juza a âclassic delinquentâ, I took inspiration from him.
Tsuzuru
So thatâs whyâŠ
Izumi
If the exhibition character really is a delinquent, maybe his student role will be related to Itaru-san and Tasuku-sanâs?
Citron
âŠThen I have an idea!
Chikage
⊠Whyâd we move to the courtyard?
Citron
You cannot pull any punches here!
Sakuya
Ehh? What do you mean?
Itaru
I got a bad feeling.
Citron
Commence the fighting etude!
Itaru
Heâs not letting up.
Citron
Fighting is a delinquentâs signature move!
Chikage
Letâs just get this over with. I donât really wanna be seen looking like this outside.
Itaru
I feel the same way too, butââHey, Masumi, stop pushing me so hard.
Masumi
What a pain. Hurry it up.
[sfx: phone buzzing]
Izumi
?
Oh, I got the character sheet from the doll artist!
Part 3
Izumi
Apparently they interviewed Homare-san about Chikage-san and used the info as reference.
Itaru
Homare as the source⊠this ought to be good.
Tsuzuru
Whatâs it say?
Izumi
First off it says that the theme will be âGymnasium at Nightâ
Citron
The vibe is completely different than last time, how interesting!
Itaru
Definitely a shift in mood.
Izumi
Chikage-sanâs setting is⊠on the surface heâs an honor student who acts as the head of the discipline committeeââ.
But heâs in cahoots with the student body president⊠and acts as a shadow ruler who controls delinquents behind the scenes.
Sakuya
Woah, that settingâs cool too!
Itaru
Not too far off. A discipline committee president is a pretty OP character.
Masumi
Really Chikage-like.
Citron
Then the OG Chikage can do it!
Chikage
Homare-san, how the hell did he even talk about meâŠ
Izumi
But it seems like even as a student you donât have to keep up the delinquent role.
Tsuzuru
Yeah, seems like the bad boy act is trashed.
Chikage
True, rather Iâll be the one doing the sanctioning as a disciplinary officer.
Itaru
Not like it changes much.
Matsukawa
Chigasaki-kun, thereâs a delivery for you. This oneâs pretty heavy so Iâll just leave it here~.
Itaru
⊠Oh yeah, from that new game I reserved, itâs the prizes I won from the convenience store raffle.
Chikage
I see, so more clutter for the room. Itâs no good to play all night in such a state.
Citron
He is already doing his duty as a disciplinary officer!
Itaru
For real.
Masumi
âŠHey, it says here your hobbyâs the piano, what now?
Izumi
Ah, it does.
Tsuzuru
Speaking of, I know you can play the violin, how about the piano?
Chikage
Itâs not that Iâve never practiced it, though⊠Iâm not confident. I mean, I can at least practice pretending to play it.
Customer A
Going to the gymnasium at night makes me feel nervous.
Customer B
Iâm getting mystery vibes from it!
Misumi
âShh! You wouldnât want the teacher to find out, do you~?â
Customer A
Oh, sorry.
Misumi
âAhaha, itâs fine.â
âHey, I can show you a special place, do you wanna come with me?â
Azami
â...Senpai, you dropped your pamphlet.â
Customer C
Ahh, thank youâŠ!
Customer D
Um, is it okay to ask for a recommendation? Iâd like to know what you thinkâŠ
Azami
â...I donât mind, but donât get upset if you find it boring.â
Customer D
Of course!
Azami
âThen⊠this way please, follow me.â
Chikage
âYou there, please button up that shirt of yours.â
Customer E
U-understood.
Chikage
âHey, itâs dangerous to hurry around, watch your steps carefully and walk slowly, got it?â
Customer F
YessirâŠ!
Chikage
âGood.â
Izumi
(Everyoneâs adapting to the worldview well, I wasnât really worried about Misumi-kun and Azami-kun, andâŠ)
(Chikage-san as a disciplinary officer, his mature and mysterious allure matches the role well.)
(That delinquent student image might come in handy in the futureâŠ)
Customer A
That was so fun!
Customer B
I was completely immersed in the world building.
Misumi
âBye-bye~! Letâs hang out again next timeâȘâ
Azami
â... Here, I grew these flowers myself. Please accept these as souvenirs, take care on your way home.â
Izumi
(Looks like the last of the customers left⊠And Chikage-san is nowhere to be foundâŠ)
Izumi
(Chikage-san, where did you go? Iâve just about searched every room we usedâŠ)
[sfx: âMoonlight Sonataâ]
Izumi
⊠Sounds like a piano?
(Itâs⊠the same song we heard from the street piano the other day.)
(A piano would be⊠in the music room.)
Chikage
ââ.
Izumi
(What a nice songâŠ)
Chikage
âââOh, teacher, good evening. Looks like Iâve been found out.â
Izumi
(Could this be an etude�)
(Seems like my roleâs a teacher again.)
â...Itâs a really beautiful song.â
Chikage
âArenât you mad? For someone like me, a disciplinary officer, to be in the music room at night?â
Izumi
âYou gave such a wonderful show so Iâll let you off the hook.â
Chikage
â...Thank you very much.â
Izumi
âBy the way, whatâs the name of the song?â
Chikage
âBeethovenâs 14th Piano SonataââMoonlight.â
Izumi
(Oh right, so that was the title. Itâs relieving to have some clarity on its name.)
(On top of that, despite saying heâs not confident with the piano, he played it pretty wellâŠ)
Youâre really capable of anything.
Chikage
âYou mean with the piano?â
âItâs nothing special, this song in particular is difficult for me and Iâm not even that adept at it.â
Izumi
(Not adept at it? I donât think so. I mean, itâs not like heâs⊠aiming to be a professional piano player, rightâŠ)
How can you play the piano then, Chikage-san?
Chikage
âBasic education, really. Itâs not something I started because I wanted to. Maybe I did it to be recognized by adults when I was young?â
Izumi
I see�
Chikage
âŠDirector-san, when did you stop acting as a teacher?
Izumi
Ah! Youâre right, it was actingâŠ
Then that means all that talk earlier about the piano was�
Chikage
Wouldnât you like to know? Iâll leave it up to Director-sanâs imagination.
Izumi
UghâŠ
Chikage
âŠAt the very least, itâs true that itâs difficult and Iâm not very good at it.
Izumi
Did you practice for your role?
Chikage
Just to be on the safe side. I used this song in practice in the past, so I figured I could do this much.
Well, not much has improved. Itâs a relief no one requested a piano performance.
Still, I thought of practicing and it just so happens that thereâs a piano here, so I played a bit.
The songâs not exactly my forte.
Izumi
I see. âŠThen, how about something other than that?
Chikage
Who knows?
Izumi
⊠Feels like Iâm being misled once again.
Chikage
Itâs never easy trying to dissect the âshadow ruler.â
Story Clear!
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Gymnasium in this sense means German for secondary education institution, which is equivalent to highschool in Japan.
A3! Troupe Event - MY WORST WEDDING Event Story Translation (3/11)
Neither Japanese nor English is my first language so please forgive me if I made mistake. However, feel free to point me out, Iâd love to hear your feedbacks on the translation ˶ᔠᔠá”˶
Translation under the cut
.ă»ă.ă»ăâă».ă»â«ă»ăă»ă.
Azami: Persimmons and kiwis are rich in vitamin C.
Sakyo: Expensive. Grapes are on sale today.
Azami: Just a little bit is fine. Donât be so stingy!
Sakyo: Only 10 yen, and then 20 yen. Piling up that a little bit can cost your head. One month, then one year, theyâre gonna accumulate and become a larger amount and then⊠et cetera, et ceteraâ
Izumi: W-well! We will buy persimmons and kiwis at the next sale!
Azami: Tsk. Then at least do your sleeping duty properly. It wonât cost you anything.
Sakyo: ⊠Will try my best. (*)
Izumi: Then, Iâll pay at the cash register!
*Shifts to Mankai dorm*
Izumi: Ah, thatâs right. If they are rich in vitamin C, how about persimmon and kiwi curry next time?
Azami: No curry, pleaseâ.
Sakyo: No, thanks.
Izumi: You two are really in sync at times like thisâŠ
Sakyo: It seems to be edible if itâs only persimmon or kiwi curry, but you canât put both into one.
Young girl: âŠ
Izumi: ?
(That girl... She is looking inside Mankai dorm, I wonder if she needs something)
Sakyo: âWhy are you here?
Miyako: Ah, onii-chanâŠ!
Azami: Onii-chan?
*In the kitchen*
Izumi: I wonder if the younger sister would prefer orange juice rather than tea⊠Do we have any desserts hereâŠ
Azami: I brought some Monakas from my home last time. (**)
Izumi: Ah, that might help. Azami-kun, you can sit here.
Azami: Itâs awkward to be over there so Iâll help you here.
Izumi: Eh? A tense atmosphere there?
Azami: Sakyo only comes home once in a while, so theyâre still not close enough to talk when there are just two of them.
Izumi: I seeâŠ
*Shifts to the living room*
Izumi: Here for Sakyo-san is the Japanese tea, and for the younger sister, would you like to have orange juice?
Miyako: T-thank you.
Izumi: There are also some Monakas that Azami-kun got from his home, so if youâd like to, please feel free to have some.
Miyako: ItadakimasuâŠ
Sakyo: âŠ
Izumi: (Uhm, the air here is really awkward. Sakyo-san looks like he doesnât know what to do either.)
Do you come here to meet Sakyo-san today?Â
Miyako: Y-yes⊠I need him to help me persuade my step-mother.
Izumi: Persuading?
Miyako: Actually, it seems that my step-mother didnât have a proper wedding ceremony when she first got married and when she remarried to my dad.Â
But she said that she used to yearn for wearing a wedding dress back then, so I was thinking about getting her and my father a wedding photoshoot this timeâŠ
Their wedding anniversary is getting near soon.
Azami: Wedding photoshoot?
Izumi: Instead of organizing an actual ceremony or reception, in order to commemorate, the brides and the grooms will wear dresses and tuxedos for taking photos.Â
Miyako: I told her that this is the right time to wear a dress for commemoration. But she said that she was not young enough to wear a dress anymoreâŠ
Izumi: These days there are lots of couples celebrating their 60th birthdays, so I donât think age really matters. (***)
Miyako: I know right!?
Azami: That reminds me Omi-san once said that he did that sort of work too, not only the pre-wedding photoshoot, but also the anniversary photoshoot for couplesâ 10th wedding anniversary.
Sakyo: Did you tell step-father about this?
Miyako: Yes⊠But step-motherâs feelings are the most important after allâŠÂ
Sakyo: Thatâs rightâŠ
Miyako: However, step-mother said that she used to wish to wear a dress back then⊠Onii-chan too, you also heard that last time, right?
Sakyo: I think mother also feels glad that you want to do this for her, but itâd be difficult to persuade her since sheâs pretty stubborn.Â
I tried to be filial to her before, but she refused after that. She told me to spend my money more on something else.Â
Miyako: Step-mother is such a frugal person, isnât sheâŠ
Sakyo: If we can convince her, Iâll pay all the expenses for the wedding anniversary celebration.Â
But if mother still sticks to what she wants, then even me canât persuade her either. It canât be helped.
Miyako: I seeâŠ
*Shifts to outdoor*
Sakyo: Iâll take you to the station.
Miyako: Itâs still bright and it wonât take too long, so itâs okay.
Izumi: Please feel free to come over again anytime.
Miyako: Thank you for your treat.
Izumi: I hope that Miyako-sanâs feelings can be conveyed to your step-mother as well.
Miyako: I wonder if my step-mother saying she didnât look good in a dress is perhaps a matter of principle, that she has some reservations about her ex-husband. Like she cannot forget her ex-husband or somethingâŠ
Sakyo: That wonât happen. Itâs been decades since my father passed away.
And when she decided to remarry, mother also reported it in front of the Buddhist altar with a bright look on her face.
Miyako: I see⊠Thanks for letting me know, onii-chan. Sorry for bothering you.
Sakyo: Be careful on your way home.
*Inside the dorm*
Izumi: âŠWhat you said before, will it be alright?
Sakyo: Itâs no use forcing her to receive the care she doesnât want to. She is not someone who likes luxury things in the first place, so she wonât let anyone spend money on herâŠÂ
You guys donât need to worry âbout it.
Izumi: âŠ
Azami: She is Sakyoâs mother after all, and even though we know sheâs frugal, if we say itâs to commemorate, sheâll agree, wonât she.
Izumi: I heard that Sakyo-san once got refused before when trying to buy his mother an apartment. Maybe thatâs why he is afraid of being refused again after persuading her.Â
I think Sakyo-san also really wants to be filial to his parents.
Azami: (Filial pietyâŠ)
*Shifts to Room 106*
Azami: Oi, hurry up and go to bed.
Sakyo: I still have work to do. Go to bed first.
Azami: Didnât you say youâd sleep properly instead of buying persimmons and kiwis.
Sakyo: Tsk, you still remember that⊠Iâll turn off the light then.
Azami: ââHey.
Sakyo: Hah?
Azami: ..No, nothing.
Sakyo: ?
*Flashback*
Sayuri: âActually, Mom wanted to wear a dress too.â
*Back to present*
Azami: âŠ
Translatorâs note:
(*) He is using ććŠăă here, which means âI will try my best but canât guarantee the resultâ. I donât want to make the sentence too long but couldnât think of any phrasing that can express this nuance, so I noted this.
(**) ăąăă« (monaka) is a type of dessert (wagashi) which is served with tea.
(***) In Japan, people celebrate their 60th birthdays, which is called âkanrekiâ (éæŠ). Kanreki is celebrated as a rebirth or re-entry into childhood.
This was already posted on my twitter before April ended but I forgot to post here đ€ž
I had total artblock since I started working on my undergraduate thesis last year, and this one took an entire month to finish thanks to that persistent artblock. Not detailed, but I had a lot of fun drawing his face o)-(
I'm relieved to know that I don't miss this year's bd, so happy birthday to Chikage and his slay outfit! đ°đ