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Nobodys gonna read this but it’s ok

I’m writing a short story! I’m not that far into it, but I thought I should post it just because. I have no idea what to do to make this first chapter longer, so filler ideas much appreciated I am definitely no pro at writing.

I’m updating this every chance I get✌🏼 955 words so far.

Vineridge a small town in Myalie, was known for the fact it was built on the edge of the largest forests and most vital ecosystem in Myalie, the weeping forest, the forest was protected by the nature guardians, adelais and adeline, the twin sisters have been the guardians of nature since the former one passed away, leaving the role to her heir. The reason the forest was so important was because it was home to hundreds of species of different plants and animals that were nowhere else in the world. When animals in the forest are forced to migrate to a different part of the country, they’re also forced to change their diet, habitat, and way of life. And the forest was at risk for deforestation due to the incompetent king of Myalie, who had made it clear over his years ruling the country that nature was the least of his concerns. He made messes of nature then left it for adeline and Adelais to deal with. Earlier that morning, Adelais received the notice he had sent them about the project, the project was unexpected and never discussed with them beforehand, which made her go ballistic, making the trip into town she stormed over to the king's house at 8am while her sister was still asleep.

“The forest is an essential part of the country's environment! You can't start tearing down trees! it'll push climate change faster than it's already happening!!” Adelais yells at the man sitting across from her at the desk she was standing in front of, slamming her hands down on the desk as she yelled at him. “I know it's unfortunate, but we need the land for another village.” he replies with a stern tone, his expression unimpressed, taking a drag from the lit cigar hanging lazily from his lips as he shifts through papers, not minding much attention to the woman across from him. “You ‘need the land’? Need the fucking land? Edwin there's 5 villages throughout the whole country, you have more than enough fucking land to build on! You can build literally anywhere to build another village yet you choose the most vital ecosystem in our country?? You are the most incompetent man I have ever met, you should not be allowed to run a country." Adelais snaps at him, her voice filled with rage. She storms out of the office before he could respond to her, slamming the door as she left. “Tell him the only way we’re speaking again is if he changes his mind.” she tells the guard at the front door as she leaves the house, slamming the door behind her.

There were already people cutting down trees in the forest illegally, causing animals to lose their homes and being forced to migrate to different areas with different conditions they've never lived in, forcing them to change their diets and way of life, which also put the other wildlife in Myalie at risk too. Edwin had never understood the importance of the forest, and she wasn't about to waste hours trying to convince him to change an opinion he's had since before they were even conceived. If they had to fight Edwin to protect the forest, they would do what they needed to.

“Where have you been? You weren't home when I woke up.” adeline asks her sister from her seat at her vanity as adelais enters their shared bedroom. “Edwins. He's planning to start taking down trees in the weeping forest to build another village.’ Adelais responds with a loud sigh, sitting on the edge of her sister's bed. Adeline whips her head around to look at adelais, her eyes wide with shock. “The forest is a vital part of the country, he can't do that?!” she scoffs.

“I tried telling him that.” Adelais shrugs.

“How do we know we can't educate him so he makes the right choice?” adeline asks her sister, rummaging through the drawer in her vanity where she kept her hair accessories. “Because it's Edwin, Adeline. When has anyone been able to convince him to change his mind about anything? He's made it clear nature is the least of his concerns. He's an incompetent bastard.” Adelais scoffs from her spot on her sister's bed, a spell book now open in her lap, scanning the pages as she and her sister talked. “White lace bow and teeth rings.” adelais hums as she flips through the pages of the book. “Thank you,” adeline responds, grabbing the bow and closing the drawer,then opening the drawer below where she kept her rings. “And you’re right. But there isn't much we can do, guardians are strong, but me and you alone wouldn't be able to fight Edwin's army and win.” adeline grumbles as she pulls her white hair into a half up half down style, using the bow to tie up half of her hair. “The project is set to start in 6 to 8 months, that gives us enough time to make the trip to get the other guardians."Adelais replies, closing the book, tossing it on the bed and standing up. “Sister bonding trip!” she says with fake enthusiasm, walking over to her side of the room. The girls had never really contacted the other guardians nor did they know much about them, they had exchanged a couple of letters back and forth with the water guardian, but that was really all. Their crows, funeral and mourning, knew more and provided the information when asked.

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How can I improve this?? I feel like it’s confusing and the scenes are moving too fast 💔 it’s the start of a fantasy story I’m thinking of continuing.

“The forest is an essential part of our environment you can’t start taking down trees” Adelais yells at the man in front of her, slamming her hands down on the desk. “I know it’s unfortunate but we need the land for a new village.” He replies with a stern tone, his expression unimpressed. “You “need the land”?? Need the fucking land?? Edwin there’s 5 fucking villages across billions of acres of land, you could build it literally anywhere besides one of the most important ecosystems in Myalie.” Adelais snaps. Groaning in frustration. There were already animals losing their homes and being forced to migrate to places they’ve never lived in before, due to people cutting trees illegally, which puts the other wildlife in myalie at risk too. “You don’t even understand what you are putting at risk if you start this project.” Adelais scoffs, storming off before Edwin could respond to her, slamming the door behind her as she left his office.

“How do we know he won’t change his mind if one of us doesn’t talk to him?” Adeline questions, rummaging through her hair accessory drawer. “Because it’s Edwin, Adeline. He doesn’t care about anything besides how much money he has, nature is the least of his concerns, which is why hes such a large threat.” Adelais responds from her spot on the floor beside her sister’s vanity, a spell book open in her lap. “White lace bow with teeth rings.” Adelais advises as she flips through the pages of the book. “Thank you,” Adeline mumbles, grabbing the bow closing the drawer. “And I guess you’re right, he’s always been self centred.” She grumbles as she pulls her white hair into a half up half down look, using the bow to make a ponytail with half of her hair. After shes happy with how her hair looks she turns to look her sister on the floor. “We aren’t strong enough alone to fight against Edwin and win.”She sighs. “The project is set to start in 6 to 8 months, 6 months is just enough time to make the trip to get the other guardians.”Adelais responds, closing the book and standing up. “Sister bonding trip!” She says with fake enthusiasm, walking over to her side of the room. Adeline groans loudly, as much as she loved her twin sister, going on long journeys with her made her go mad.

“Adeline, you know the bottomless bag spell right?” Adelais yells over to Adeline, who was 5 minutes deep into searching her closest for her backpack. “Yeah, gimmie one second!” Adeline responds as she finally emerges from the closest, tossing her backpack on the bed and pushing her glasses up her nose. “It’s like a fucking jungle in that closet” She mutters under her breath. “It wouldnt be like that if you just hung up and folded your clothes.” Adelais giggles from inside her own closest, which was much more organized than Adeline’s. “Be quiet or you’ll have to learn the spell yourself if you want a bottomless bag” Adeline retorts. Adelais grunts in response, rolling her eyes as she levitates a pile of clothes over to the bed, dropping them beside her backpack. After 2 long treacherous hours of packing, they were finally packed.

Neither of the girls owned pants since they had always preferred skirts and dresses with tights, so the clothes they packed was mostly skirts, tights, and the couple of pairs of shorts they owned, and a couple of dresses. They weren’t too worried about how they were going to wash the clothes since cleaning spells are simple.

they were sat at the dining table with a map in front of them and the crows, mourning and funeral, snacking on a bowl of peanuts on the table. “You know it might work better if you two split up.” Mourning caws, hopping over to the map. “One of you goes to the cliff to get the land guardians,” he says, pecking on a spot on the map where the lesnaya family house was marked. “And the other one goes the other way to get the other two.” He finishes, hopping back over to the bowl of peanuts and settling back down beside funeral. The two sisters look at eachother. “It would probably take less time…” Adelais sighs, chewing on her nail. “There’s a but.” Adeline says with a raised eyebrow, still looking at her sister who had turned her focus back onto the map. “Communication is gonna be tough, the crows aren’t able to make a journey like that back and forth over and over again.”Adelais finishes, leaning back in her chair and crossing her arms over her chest. “What if we used a teleportation spell to send letters back and forth? The one mom taught us only requires the name of the person to teleport something to them.” Adeline suggests. “Good thinking.” Adelais responds. “Well, That covers everything we need to go over. Unless there’s something else you have in mind.” Adeline shrugs, rolling up the map and handing it to Adelais. “Nope, that’s everything.” Adelais hums, taking the map from Adeline and standing up from her chair in sync with her sister. Adeline walks out of the dining room and heads toward the washroom while Adelais stays in the dining room “Funeral, mourning, who’s going with who?” Adelais points the map back and forth between the crows on the table, who were still snacking on peanuts. “I’ll go with you funeral will go with addy!” Mourning caws. “Are you both ready?” She asks the birds, who nod in sync.

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No idea wether to continue this or not 💔

Not proofread

This was a random idea I just started writing and actually entered flow state on. Will probably be altering this lots if I continue of course

Name pronunciation: Adelais Ad-eh-lays

I couldn’t find a soild source telling me where it originated from, some said French some said German, idk, she’s Scottish German.

Can you guess the genre 👀

Adelais’ parents were both scientists who worked on some of the most advanced genetic science, so she grew up in the lab and was always learning new things, so naturally she was an intelligent girl, and always had been. Although, she often had to teach herself things she wanted to learn by reading books and watching videos. Adelais' parents were too busy working on a project that they had been working on since before she was even born, so most of the time they were too busy working on it to pay attention to her.

Her parents were trying to create a real life shapeshifter by somehow injecting a human with a serum that held one or 2 cells from every animal on earth into a human, and they had been working on it for 20 years, and that's all adelais knew, because that's all her parents would let her know. one day while leaving the lab after a particularly long day for Adelais, her parents promised to her that one day, when they knew her knowledge was advanced enough , they’d let her start doing more advanced science in the lab that would help bring the project closer to a success.

May 6th, 2004, 6:40am, Edinburgh Scotland.

The alarm blares in adelais’ ears, immediately waking her up. She rolls over and fumbles with her alarm trying to turn it off, eventually just pulling the cord from the wall. Out of all the days her ancient, barely-working alarm didn't go off, of course your birthday was one of the times it worked. Adelais slowly sits up and rubs her eyes, yawning loudly. “Addy! Are you awake?” Mary yelled from downstairs in the kitchen. That was odd, adelais thought to herself as she stood up from her bed. Usually her mom didn't care if she slept in, especially if it was her birthday, but she never really knew with them anymore. “Adelais?” her mom yells from downstairs again “one second mom!” adelais yells back down

After finally finding a hoodie that smells clean, she pulls it over her head and goes downstairs. “goodmorning adelais.” her father greets her as she enters the kitchen, not looking up from the morning newspaper. “Morning dad.” she responds as she sits at the table, grabbing an apple from the fruit basket in the middle of the table. “So, Adelais," her mother starts,setting down a bowl of cereal in front of her and sitting down at the table. James looks up from his newspaper as Mary sits at the table, putting the paper down on the table as Mary starts to speak again.

“Me and your father have come to agree that we believe you’re ready to start helping us in the lab.”

Adelais chokes on her cereal, looking up at her parents. ‘“Seriously?” she asks, wiping her mouth with her sleeve. Honestly, she had forgotten about her parents' words until just now, and if her parents were anyone else she would have thought they were joking, because who lets a 12 year old into the lab, but her parents did not joke. She wasn't even sure they knew what joking was and how to do it. “Yes, addy,” her mother chuckles. “Just finish your cereal and we’ll get going.” Adelais nods as her mother talks, scooping another spoonful of cereal into her mouth.

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Writers of Tumblr you helped me in my time of need once I need you to do it twice🙏🏻🙏🏻

I need prompts🥹

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Calling out to any writers with advice they can give

I desperately need writing advice so I can improve my writing more because I genuinely suck butt at it, unfortunately.

My sentences are blunt and usually lack detail, which makes the story super short, rushed, and it causes me to overuse transition words, which is quite literally the complete opposite of what anyone wants.

I have good plots I want to write, I just suck at writing so I can’t write them

Please Help I’m begging

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Big thank you to all the people who gave advice and encouragement I did not expect to get so much 🫶🏼

I promise I’ll start posting again soon ✌🏼

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Calling out to any writers with advice they can give

I desperately need writing advice so I can improve my writing more because I genuinely suck butt at it, unfortunately.

My sentences are blunt and usually lack detail, which makes the story super short, rushed, and it causes me to overuse transition words, which is quite literally the complete opposite of what anyone wants.

I have good plots I want to write, I just suck at writing so I can’t write them

Please Help I’m begging

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Wow I’m still alive

Accidents happen

Summary- thor odison gets you higher than a kite, and when you try to find your room, you end up in Tony starks bed, but you don’t realize until you wake up.

AN- I highkey suck at writing and this is also really rushed. Proofread but I just skimmed over it so there might be some mistakes and blunt sentences.

Warnings- barely but a little suggestive, kissing

You were stoned as fuck. Probably the most stoned you’ve ever been, no thanks to Thor odison, who had already retired for the night minutes before, abandoning you in the living room of the avengers compound. You’d think a god would atleast be a little more responsible of the one HE got high.

Asshole.

You sit on the couch for a couple more minutes, contemplating your life decisions and why you decided you smoked 2 joints by yourself before finally convincing yourself to stand up from the couch and slowly make your way to your room because you really didn’t wanna fall asleep on the couch. Thor could have atleast let the hallway light on so you didn’t have to find your room in the dark, but alas he didn’t so here you were, trying to find your bedroom in the pitch black.

You count the doors until you finally find what you’re 95% sure is your bedroom and open the door, closing it gently behind you as you step into the room.

You didn’t bother changing or going to the washroom, you were genuinely just too exhausted and stoned to care about it, you just crawled into bed and passed out.

At 5:45am, an alarm blares louder than a fucking fog horn, scaring you awake. “I didn’t even set a fucking alarm” you groan loudly to yourself, reaching for your phone on the bedside table to turn off what you think is your alarm. “That’s because it’s mine.” Tony murmurs, reaching over to the bedside table on the side of the bed he was sleeping on and turning the alarm off. You freeze at the sound of his voice and sit up, turning your head to look at him, your eyes meet Tonys, he was just as visibly confused as you were.

“I assume you have an explanation?” He mumbles tiredly

“The lights were off and I thought your room was mine and I didn’t really think twice before going to bed because I was really tired. And really high.” You say in your own defence, shifting awkwardly. “Hig- high? Who in the hell gor you high??” Tony exclaims, now sitting up and definitely awake.

It was thors fault for not telling him before you did.

“..Odison.” You reply awkwardly. Tony rubs a hand over his face “of course it was.” He sighs, swinging his legs over the side of the bed and standing up. He had no shirt on with grey jogging pants hung low on his hips. his back muscles and biceps unintentionally flexing as he stretched was probably the hottest thing you’ve ever seen.

“If you’re gonna go back to sleep, go back to sleep in your room.” He hums, walking over to his washroom. “No, no, im getting up.” You sigh, grabbing your phone from the bedside table and getting up from the bed and heading over to the full length mirror in his room to see what kind of disaster your hair was. You were dressed in basic leggings and a tank top.

You weren’t even paying attention to what tank top you had on until Tony mentions it. “Do you have me on your shirt?” He chuckles from behind you, you look at the rest of yourself in the mirror and finally realize that you were, in fact, wearing the “I ❤️ iron man” tank top you got from your little brother when you told your family you got a stark internship.

And gods, saying you looked hot ij it would be the understatement of the year in his opinion.

“I didn’t realize you were such a big fan.” He teases. You turn around to face him, he had put a shirt on, unfortunate. “I was, until I actually met him.” You giggle. “Is that so?” He hums, taking a step closer. “It is so.” You respond.

You felt the tension, you know you weren’t the only one who felt it either, but you wanted to drag it.

“I should go make breakfast, you hum, starting your way toward the door, just as you’re about to reach the door, a hand grabs your wrist, pulling you back and turning you around. “Breakfast can wait another 10 minutes.” Tony murmurs softly before pulling you into a gentle kiss.

You whimper softly, deepening the kiss, drawing a low groan from him. “Ive been waiting for you to do that for a while.” You breathe out after he pulls away. “I’m sorry I didn’t do it sooner.” He chuckles beforr pulling you back into a kiss, a deeper more desperate one.

Breakfast was delayed for longer than 10 minutes that morning.

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I genuinely don’t have any ideas for oneshots/fics bro help

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I haven’t posted in so long oh my gosh

I forgot about this account completely, I’ve been so busy lately and I also have massive block

I need ideas you guys 😭

I also need show/movie recommendations!! I’m boring, I wanna be apart of more fandoms so I’m less boring💔

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Freddy Carter (Micheal) in fnaf 2 is so fine??😫

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Tom koracick x reader

This is low-key buns so ignore that. It was going so well until a little bit halfway 😭✌🏼

A/N Tom is so underrated but I loooove him and yearn for more smutty fics/oneshots of him. but alas there’s like fucking none so I’m gonna try and write some ✌🏼

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“I have so much shit to do today! so I’m sorry Tom, but no, i cant help you right now, I DO have more important things to do! Either wait for me to come back or do it yourself.” You snap at Tom. you were stressed and just wanted a break, and Tom coming to talk to you about a patient without any notice beforehand threw your whole schedule off and made you even more stressed.

He was standing across from you, arms folded over his chest, eyebrows raised, letting you yell at him.

Ever since he arrived at Grey-Sloan to help with a patient of yours, he hadn’t failed to notice how stressed you were, so he wasn’t shocked when you started yelling at him when you two were in your lab discussing the patient.

“Okay little Ms. Outburst, I don’t mind you yelling at me— frankly it’s kind of hot— but I do mind when people are watching it.” He cuts you off, motioning to the window behind you.

You turn around to see a group of interns standing at the window looking into your lab watching you yell at tom koracick; They immediately scatter once they realized they were caught.

“We’re done here. For now” you sigh. You open the door and slam it behind you as you step out into the hall. You just wanted to be alone.

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Knock knock

“Whatever you need to tell me, I’m sure my resident can repeat it to me in 30 minutes.” You groan.

“Can we just talk.” Tom’s voice comes from the other side of the door.

Of course it’s him.

You wipe your eyes with the heel of your palm before standing up from the bed and walking over to the door, opening it reluctantly and stepping to the side so he could enter.

Tom enters the room and you close the door behind him.

“Are you okay?” He asks. He was standing a couple feet from you and his eyes were locked on yours.

“I should be the one asking you that, you were the one being yelled at.” You sigh, rubbing a hand over your face.

“But you’re the one who’s been stressed out of their head for 3 days straight.” He scoffs. “You’ve been showing signs of stress every move you make. I wasn’t shocked when you lashed out at me, stress makes you more prone to yelling at others. So tell me, are you okay?”

“No.” You mutter.

“Okay.” He hums, locking the door and leading you to the bed and motioning for you to sit.

“Whats making you so stressed?” He asks, sitting down beside you.

“Everything. I just haven’t had a break in months. Even when I go home I can’t get a break because my stupid roommate always has someone over.” You groan. You couldn’t believe you were venting to Tom koracick of all people.

Although, he was probably one of the most understanding people you could find to talk to about something like this.

Tom wraps an arm around your shoulders, giving you a soothing squeeze. “I’ve had times where I’ve felt like that too, and every time I’ve felt like that, I go to a hotel and take a day or two off. You need to leave Seattle for a couple days” He replies.

Damnit

He was totally right.

“I hate it when you’re right.” You sigh.

“I know ya do.”

He hums.

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if the “I aged up this [UNDER 18] character to write smut about them” trope has 0 haters, I’m dead.