Iām sorry but Iām gonna judge a movie with a 250 million budget and Oscar winning director harsher than I judge a musical made by a (formerly) smaller artist that started posting his music on TikTok for the fun of it
Your dialogue is stiff because everyone is being too honest
Great dialogue can come from radical emotional honesty. But in most real conversations, people
dodge questions
answer indirectly
lie (badly)
change the subject
crack jokes to avoid serious answers
lie (convincingly)
say half of what they mean
tell the truth but get so anxious/angry/defensive others now think they're lying
If your dialogue feels unnatural, it might be because everyone is saying exactly what they think, or articulating their thoughts too well. Try letting characters hide things instead.
explained to an 8 year old that once a fruit is ripe you only have so much time until it rots so you have to eat it soon and she said so i'll never be able to keep it perfect like this forever? no and there are about a million pieces of art for you unrelatedly
i like when a video game does all its plot progression via boss battles so "she tried to kill me and it didnt work and now we're friends" is basically the story of every one of of the protagonists friendships.
I have spent three (3) hours of my life researching spiders to write this, so here it is:
Peter Parker and his Spider-Adaptions after the bite!
DISCLAIMER---
I, Signal āRAD1OS1GNALā Rajio, am in no way a scientist. Most of this is google searches (-ai, obviously), random articles on google, and when there's gaps in the āscienceā, I make stuff up. A relative of mine whoās an exterminator told me this made sense though, so thereās that! Have fun reading yall!
The OSCORP Spider
The Spider was a hybrid of the Brazilian Wandering Spider, Brown Recluse, and Black Widow. OSCORP genetically modified this already-genetically-messy spider, which made it highly intelligent. While most of this spiderās abilities were modified, its chemoreceptors stayed largely the same as any other spider in the arachnid order Araneae.
The only reason Peter didnāt die was the genetically modified part of the spider and Peterās own DNA had similarities because of a modification in Peter's DNA that was given to him in the womb, presumably by Peterās biological father who worked for OSCORP.
WEBS
Peterās organic webs are a hybrid of the three spidersā, but the genetically modified unknown type of spider is highly intelligent and depending on the intentions that the spider (or Peter) spins the webs which creates different versions of the webbing. Peter often channels the intention of the webs dissolving quickly after use, which makes the webs dissolve within thirty minutes.
The Black Widow would give the webs exceptional tensile strength and elasticity. Black Widow Silk is pound-for-pound stronger than high-grade steel, which would make the webs extremely strong.
The Brown Recluse would give the webs intense stickiness. Brown recluse webs are layered with microscopic nanotendrils that act like packaging tape, which allow it to bond strongly to surfaces and entangle prey.
The Brazilian Wandering Spider would make the silk capable of heavy-duty binding. The BWS uses dense, robust silk tailored for subduing large prey. Itās less reliant on webs and uses silk for structural retreats and protection.Ā
The brown recluse doesnāt use its web to hunt, but rather actively hunts at night. The BWS is an active hunter with no web.. however, The Black Widow creates a web that they use to catch insects inside. This is what Peterās webs take after the most.Ā
Anatomical diagram depicting Peter's silk glands. Disregard āSTINGERā, does not apply to this version of Peter Parker.
BEHAVIOR (Of the OSCORP Spider. See: OTHER ADAPTATIONS for Peterās.)
Luckily, Peter doesnāt take after the OSCORP Spiderās behavior; but from what Dr. Banner has researched about the three spider species and the genetic composition of Peterās spider-DNA string, the OSCORP Spider wouldāve been highly unpredictable and easily agitated.
The Spider wouldāve been a nomadic hunter and loved dark spaces. It wouldāve been nocturnal as well.
Its chemoreceptors are fine-tuned to quickly track the fresh scent trails of active prey, as well as aiding in navigating dark, confined spaces.
The chemoreceptors can also detect pheromones easily.
VENOM
The Black Widow provided the OSCORP Spider with intense, powerful neurotoxin that would've forced the nerves of the bitten to constantly fire by uncontrollably flooding synapses with neurotransmitters, resulting in severe abdominal rigidity, sweating, nausea, and muscle cramps.
The Brown Recluse provided the OSCORP Spider with a potent enzyme that would break down cell membranes and blood vessels, triggering blood clotting, severe local inflammation, and evolving skin necrosis.
The BWS provided the OSCORP Spider with a complex blend of neurotoxic peptides that would delay the inactivation of sodium channels, which would react with the black widowās ability to force nerves to fire by intensifying it almost ten-fold. It would lead to extreme systemic pain, dangerously high blood pressure, and shock.
In the OSCORP Spiderās case, this blend of venom wouldāve caused immediate neurological overload such as paralyzing cramping and autonomic nervous system storms. Rapid necrosis, and a massive spike in blood pressure in heart rate would also occur.
In Peterās case, his body nerfed the venom as much as the genetic modifier in Peterās DNA could, which creates a much more diluted version of the toxin. Venom was extracted from Peterās retractable fangs (that reside behind his canines) and tested in a computer program to see how his venom would react.Ā
The simulated (and accurate) effects on a person of the male sex that was five-feet and seven inches tall, one-hundred-and-thirty-two pound weight was minor necrosis, complete bodily paralyzation lasting for an hour after a five-minute fight/flight/freeze response, nausea, racing heartbeat, sweating, brain fog and inability to think straight, progressive muscle weakness (muscle control will return after paralyzation wears off), shallow breathing, blurred vision, and numbness.
The simulated (and accurate) effects on a person of the female sex that was five-feet and three inches tall, one-hundred-and-twenty-three pound weight was of equal reaction, as well as a person of non-specific sex that was five-feet and five inches tall and weighing one-hundred-and-thirty-seven pounds.
These weights and heights were based on global averages.
OTHER ADAPTATIONS
Peter has additional adaptations, such as:
Retractable fangs that reside behind his sharper-than-average canines
An uncanny ability to stick to any surface
Distance chemoreceptors in the form of dermal gland pores on his hands. In response to this adaptation, Peter has had to wear gloves. After meeting Tony Stark and Bruce Banner, they have invented a type of glove that is seamless to the human eye and blocks the chemoreceptors in daily life. This is retractable via Peterās StarkWatch. The Spider-Man suit lacks these.
āSpider Senseā; A tingling sensation in the back of Peterās skull that warns him of incoming dangers. Intensity depends on how dangerous the incoming event is.
Heightened senses. All of Peterās senses are heightened slightly more than a non-mutated human, but when the āSpider Senseā is active, all senses go into overdrive, allowing him to dodge attacks, hear from city blocks away (his brain instinctively filters out unnecessary input such as car horns), etc.
Peterās senses when the āSpider Senseā is not active is much more dulled down. He can hear one-hundred and twenty feet away if actively attempting to do so.
He chitters and purrs.
He can communicate with spiders via vibrations and chittering.
I might add more to this, but for now...
That's all, Folks! In case I don't see ya again, good afternoon, good evening, and goodnight! Hope yall enjoyed!
Tony Stark didn't usually do parent-teacher conferences, mostly because he wasn't a parent, and partly because he despised schools filled with sweaty teens, but Peter had managed to get a C-minus of all things in AP Chemistry, and Happy had intercepted a very sternly worded email about "unauthorized polymer synthesis using school-funded equipment."
And so, here Tony was, expecting to pay off a teacher into secrecy and to not look too closely at what Peter was making.
Instead, he got a man in a faded knitted sweater with a fox on it, sitting at a desk grading papers with the terrifying, rhythmic efficiency of someone who had done this for years.
"Mr. Stark," Grace said without looking up from his red pen. "Take a seat. If you're here to tell me Peter is a prodigy, save your breath--I know he is. Which is why it's insulting that he thought I wouldn't notice him cooking up a non-Newtonian fluid with a tensile strength that defies three laws of thermodynamics in my storage closet."
Tony blinked, mentally recalibrating his expectations as he slowly lowered himself into a plastic chair that was entirely too small for him.
"You didn't report him to the board?" He asked curiously.
"Because the board would take his experiment, lock it in a drawer, and fail him," Grace said, finally looking up. His eyes were incredibly tired, but there was a steel in them Tony wasn't expecting. "Peter's a good kid, but he's being reckless. Tell him to do his actual classwork, and if he's going to synthesize classified materials, he needs to use proper ventilation. The smell of burning petroleum gave me a migraine."
Tony stared at him. The man's face was familiar. It had been on the cover of everyone's magazine a year ago. The world's mysterious savior. The Man Who Thawed Earth.
"You're Doctor Captain Ryland Grace," Tony said, a smile curling onto his lips, intrigued. "You're the guy who saved the planet from becoming a popsicle and then told the UN to go fly a kite."
"I like teaching," Grace said, exasperated but tellingly didn't deny Tony's words. "And I prefer just 'Grace'. Now, if you'll excuse me, I have twenty-four more papers on covalent bonding to grade, and unlike you, I have a bedtime."
And so, Tony left the classroom completely and utterly smitten.
(Not in a 'let's get dinner' way, but in an 'I need to put this magnificent, grumpy specimen under a microscope and figure out how his brain works' way.)
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Cooked up a little drabble for my Project Hail Mary x Iron Man AU (check it out here).
Sorry if I just kind of disappeared. Finals are kicking my ass.
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