Absolutely love the idea that post taking the blue AI out, when Caine hits his limit he goes back to being the lil red orb (Y'all go read this fic Against the kitchen floor, it does this do well). Bonus drawing just cause I was feeling hella soft:
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When you mentioned you were gonna do a part two, I was quietly hoping it was gonna be this part, and it is this part, and I'm so happy about it. Oh my God.
THE CUT TO BACK WHEN CAINE JUST HAD THE LIL RED HAND REACHING TOWARD THE SCREEN
IT HITS SO GOOD
I'M LOSING MY MIND
THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU it's such an honor!!!
More in-depth rambling below the cut. Standard apology for using speech to text in case it decides that these characters' names aren't spelled how I know they're spelled.
Once again, your panel flow is perfect as always. Iiiii actually have a degree in illustration. I don't get to use it that much anymore for chronic illness reasons rip but it does let me more pointedly gush about your work. ANYWAY I'm always really impressed by how well you storyboarders are able to, you know, make the story flow around just through composition and directional lines. I just think it's neat and you're clearly very skilled at your craft.
Really love the way that Kinger's body language slumps leads into like the scared surprise that Caine is giving in this first panel. The hand in the foreground over Caine does so much to like establish what's going on and I just think that's neat.
I love Kinger's expression on panel two, really doing a great job of establishing the "we are talking about business now" energy
God, and the way you can tell in the next panel when Kinger looks back from the desk to look over at Caine, like, Caine is genuinely VERY upset by this. Like, you sell that fear and shock so well. Like, there's such subtlety. There's a lot of subtle acting in how you've drawn his eyebrows and mouth here, and the little lines around his eyes are also doing so much, and I just think that's neat.
AUGH and then the way you show the progressive sad emotions as Kinger goes to leave that side shot, and the way you capture just the lines on his eyes and his eyebrows, and the way that helps emphasize the mood and the shading here. It's just really neat and I'm destroyed. I'm destroyed and I wrote this. I know what's going to happen in it and I'm still destroyed.
GOD the shot of Caine by himself, and you've done a little bit of shading in his eyes to really help emphasize, and God, he looks so upset and so scared, and I just want to give him a hug.
Okay so the cut between Caine reaching out to Kinger as he leaves and Caine's hand in the past HITS SO HARD!!!!! It's just such a great visual way to depict the prose I wrote down without the words, and I just think that that is cool. Also, the hand reaching out is just really well done, very expressive. I'm absolutely losing my mind about your shape language on that red hand. It's just really good.
HHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH and then the little "don't go" and the way that like you made the font a little smaller to really emphasize that. And again, Kinger's hand reaching for the doorknob is just a really good hand. And then you can see the little surprise on Kinger's face and the way you use more circles in it to help emphasize that surprise is neat.
And then the next panel, Kane's body language and the shot being from slightly above so we can see how he's kind of curling in on himself. And again, you have the glitches triggering and AAAAHHH it's so good!
THE WIDE SHOT SHOWING KINGER AT THE DOOR I'M LOSING MY MIND IT'S EXACTLY HOW I PICTURED IT
GOD so the big shot showing Caine's expression as he starts to cry, and the way you make his teeth seem a little sharper to help, like, emphasize that big emotion, and he's still got the glitches. And again, God, shading adding so much here, the little bit of highlights in his eyes!!
The shot of Kinger coming back. I don't know, man. The fact that you can't see Kinger's face, you can see the little bit of tears from where Caine's sitting. And again, like, body language here, so good. The little curve of his back and his shoulders and showing that little bit of tears does so much. And you can see clearly that, like, you can feel the apprehension of Kinger standing over Caine in this shot, and it really emphasizes, you know, he big, Caine small. Caine is the smallest he's ever been in this moment.
AND THEN KINGER SITS DOWN WITH HIM YEEAAAAAAAH WE DID IT
GOD CAINE sitting there on the bed with his little hands on his knees, and he's still got the tears, and he looks so sad. This is the most sad little Muppet man I've ever seen in my life. And the contrast of like the heavier lines on him while Kinger seems to have softened and he gets more soft shapes. Just, ah, so good. Also, I love the little bit of depth you gave to Kane's shoes. It's very good.
Love the flow on. "Are you sure that's what you want?" This is a really strong composition. My eye really strongly goes from that text to Kinger's face to Caine's face. It's just listen. You could draw the little like golden triangle in there, maybe. Probably not. But you know, it gives me. It's good. It's good. I'm sorry. All I keep saying is it's good. I just really like it and I want you to know that I really like it in detail.
Oh God, Caine's expression in the "I don't want to be here" line. Listen, the shading you did inside his mouth here to really emphasize that depth is just good. And then you show his little teeth shutting, and oh my God, my heart. HIS LIL NOD AND THE WAY HIS HANDS SQUEEZE SHUT WHEN HIS TEETH SHUT AAA IT'S SUCH GOOD BODY LANGUAGE
Meanwhile, Kinger's expression has gone full like Midhell Manor, sitting and comforting someone, which, ah, yes, it's all I wanted.
The final shots with poor Caine actively shaking. And Kinger has finally softened, and he just promises, and then he just sits with him, and oh my god, it's so cute. Again, really love how your shading emphasizes the ending of these. It just, it always makes it feel like it lands, and I think that's really cool.
I love them, your honor. They're my favorite. I'm so glad I wrote 55 thousand words just to get here just so I can write God knows how many more words before they can finally call each other "Dad" and "Son". We'll get there, but by God, they're going to earn it.
One last time, thank you so much. Genuinely, this means the world to me. This is one of the coolest things that's ever happened for me, and I'm just really flattered and happy and grateful. I hope you enjoy the upcoming chapters, and I hope everyone else who enjoyed these comics, you know, will check out the fic, and hopefully they'll like it. That would be neat.
Aaaaaa thank you so much again for the in depth analysis, again this feedback is genuinely so dear to me!!
Real quick I just have to glaze the lines that made me do those two shots of Caine reaching out in the present and past
“He’d done something he wasn’t supposed to and now his creator was giving up on him. Leaving him all alone in a box, no connection, no input, no-“
Like so much is said about Caines past in just these words, dude gave the wrong outputs, was put in a box and abandoned for it and it messed him UP. Those lines had my mind racing and I just had to visualise it with him reach out to not be abandoned again
You’re allowed to be excited about the little things. You’re allowed to be goofy. You’re allowed to be dorky about your favorite tv show, to make blanket forts, to enjoy cheesy movies, even just to sleep with stuffed animals. You’re allowed to do any of the things that make life a little more bearable. It’s fine, ok?
This is one of my favorite monologues in all of fiction, and I think the voice legitimately, unironically adds to the experience. With the modern connotation we now have surrounding this voice of faux cheeriness, machine generated empathy, machine generated “humanity”, to hear that voice declare utter despisal of life on earth for damning it… its poetry. It’s the only remake of I Have No Mouth we need.
I never really considered that a rabbit would care for a scarab one way or the other. Didn't think a rabbit could formulate an opinion on the scarab at all
in my ideal beautiful world they escaped the circus and caine never died they turned him into a tamagotchi and the cast all takes turns passing him around to take care of him and they show him the big beautiful real world and he gets to learn about humans and spend time with humans and he speaks to them through their pockets while they go about their daily lives hes just their little virtual beast who is so curious about the world and they love him now that hes not keeping them trapped in this digital hell for all eternity
"make peace with the fact that people will always see their own version of you in their minds. you don't have to be responsible for who they think you are."
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