Was tagged by @anticiajk (Thanks! See theirs here: https://www.tumblr.com/anticiajk/822047464802648064/was-tagged-by-liesonthefloordramatically-link?source=share)
Rules: post the first sentence of your most recent 10 fan fics and tag up to 10 people.
Tagging: @metallicgr3y @didkn @carryingstarlightinherwake @failedintsave @jadeelephant @bitchhips
This should be a fun exercise!
The outside of the mansion was crawling with members of the Speedwagon Foundation. - The Brando Sisters (https://archiveofourown.org/works/87822346/chapters/232744516)
It's not too bad of an introductory line. It sets up stakes, and the language implies that for once, the SFW is an antagonistic force. It could be punchier, but I'm pretty happy with it!
2. “You’re a bit far from shore, aren’t you?” - The Unstoppable Power of Grandpa Paolo (https://archiveofourown.org/works/84217746)
It's a bit risky starting with dialogue, especially without an accompanying tag. However, I think it does a good job at establishing the setting at the start (Paolo's fishing boat). There's also a bit of intrigue. Who's out there? Why shouldn't they be out there? And yet, why are they so far from shore? Mysteries abound!
3. Abbacchio stretched her arms as she walked out of the bath house. - A Slip of the Mask (https://archiveofourown.org/works/83363701)
Great opening line. It promises that Abbacchio's hair is looking great for her seduction scene and that the upcoming spice is hygienic! 10/10, wouldn't change a thing.
4. “Have you heard anything yet?” - Hazy Patient (https://archiveofourown.org/works/80953341)
I like starting with dialogue with no tags, don't I? I mean, it's clarified immediately that it's Narancia speaking, but without context it's a bit jarring. But the abruptness does help to emphasize this isn't the first time he's asked Buccellati this question. So I think it works, but only when paired with the next sentence.
And here we start the Februabba saga. The FebruSaga.
5. Buccellati kept a firm grip on Abbacchio’s wrist as they ran. - The Devil's Soulmate (https://archiveofourown.org/works/80382276)
I like the action of this line. It feels very dynamic, like you're thrown right into the problem. You can see Buccellati's protectiveness through the words pretty well. Even without other words to support it, it's a pretty effective line in my book. You know something is about to go down from this line.
6. Buccellati walked into the kitchen, surprised to see Abbacchio flipping through one of the cookbooks at the counter. - Just Desserts (https://archiveofourown.org/works/80380746)
This is such a domestic opening line for such a silly little story. For the type of story this is, I have no real notes for this opening line. It gets Buccellati and Abbacchio where they need to be immediately, and starts off Abbacchio in a distracted mindset. Perfect for the upcoming silliness.
7. Abbacchio didn’t know what to expect after he finished his conversation with Colomba. - Reaching for a Heart and Touching a Soul (https://archiveofourown.org/works/80379591)
Important note: Colomba is what I call Abbacchio's partner. The line is pretty effective at establishing the setting, though this also falls into the "is snappier when paired with the next line or two" curse. I think Abbacchio's unease is a really important part of the story, so throwing him into the plot confused was definitely the right way to go. Pat on the back, me! :D
8. Sometimes Abbacchio needed some time alone. - Prep Abbacchio (https://archiveofourown.org/works/80328441)
Okay, it's not that bad, but it's hurt without the rest of the intro paragraph. It's designed to be a bit of a rant, so all of the lines are a bit staccato. It reads better as a whole, not when taken alone.
9. “You know, if I wanted to sleep with a prick, I would’ve dated a man.” - Taken for Granite (https://archiveofourown.org/works/80324316/chapters/210900461)
Yet another dialogue with no dialogue tag line, but I don't care. I love this line. I was so proud of this when I wrote it, and I still am. I am consumed with hubris over this line. I can be clever sometimes!!!
10. Legends of selkies go back centuries. - Seal-ed with a Kiss (https://archiveofourown.org/works/80132226)
You do not need to guess what this story is about. I can look at this, and without a shadow of a doubt, I know what story this line matches with. You get the conceit of the story from the first three words: selkies are considered legends, so the characters are going to experience something that calls that into question. Simple meal made well.
This was a neat exercise! I learned that I definitely rely more on captivating opening paragraphs rather than a killer first line. I think that's something that I can live with. Thanks again for tagging me, Antica!