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I mostly post either original characters or things I am currently fixated on. As of now, I am interested in:
1. Moon Knight
2. PHM
3. OC's
My AO3: here!
NEW FIC!! A Solar Eclipse: Read here!! (It's about Moon Knight getting friends… Of course it is)
If you like behind the scene stuff for fics, look up the tag #Knights Among the Stars: Patch Notes on this blog and you'll find the new series I've started :)
If you want to see what I reblog??: here!
Overall, this is a good vibes only zone (except when discussing AI, ICE, or ___phobic individuals)… with some jumping around in fandoms for art sometimes, haha.
...And another revamp recap! This one has more substance, like A LOT more. Ch 22 had an entire new 4K word section tacked onto it ok wow.
Other parts: 1 >>>> 2 >>>> 3
The fic itself: HERE
CHAPTER 21: "Evaluation"
GRAMMAR wowzers.
No more Reese clocking them :(
NEW: "I know some may be surprised as to the fact we haven't had one before, but there's a reason." Ms. Knight's eyes squint, and she folds her hands togther. "Hence, why the three need your protection, embracing, and pathfinding tomorrow. This situation is new and old territory for all of us. Am I to assume you all will be able to assist us?"
OLD:
"You guys haven't had one yet?" Reese looks around the room. They all advert their gaze from her.
Soldier wacks the back of her head. "Hey!"
"No, no, that's… fair." Mr. Knight grimaces
CHAPTER 22: "Cony Island"
Not much changes beyond the MAJOR section being added in for Mr. Knight, Commander, and Moon Knight (Child Alter). It explores their dynamic, their roles, and hints to some things in the future (Moon Knight's tie to Khonshu). It also parallels the main story, especially with the line:
"You will never know what people want; that's up to the person themself. Even if they say something, sometimes they want the opposite. You have to be careful and aware of their true meaning."
Which is essentially Marc and Jess' convo, where Marc/Steven/Jake want to grow closer, but one of them wont allow such. Jess sees through it pretty easily, but I like the paralleled structure, and now this chapter actually means something :)
CHAPTER 23, 24, & 25: "Two Birds With One Stone" / "Doing This Together… Finally" / "It Leaks From My Hands; The Love I Cannot Hold"
I've gotta be honest, only grammar was changed, and sentences swapped around/cut out. Nothing important at all.
CHAPTER 26: "Courtship"
Steven found Ryan's journal AND chats it up with Khonshu. Nice new section right at the beginning!
HC: Greer still makes money from Wakanda by "spying" on Marc&co. She doesn't spy anymore, but no one has pulled her pay, so. That's the HC I have now put in this chapter for one line, haha.
Greer gets confused by Steven's desires and struggles with coming to terms with the fact that she's also being woo'd over. It gets better at the end, just as it did prior, but the woo'ing aspect of the chapter is more pronounced for Greer now.
"Greer's heart skips. Oh. It's for her. She doesn't know what to say about that. She's thankful she's all fur, or else she's sure she'd be red from head to toe.
Is he trying to court me?"
AANNND that's all folks! Those are all the revamps! I'll be (hopefully) posting the next chapter either this weekend, or next week! I can't wait to get a start on this once more with all of my new notes in hand.
Heya! Weird Question - would you mind if I alluded to your 'Soldier is of some form of Russian decent' headcanon in future chapters of the chatfictm? Just because it's not really widespread, I wanna make sure you're cool with it before I even think about it haha.
On a scale of normalcy to groveling at your feet because HELLO DEE HI THERE I love you dearly how do I answer this
The answer: Yes
(And you never have to ask by the way—I love seeing people use ideas and making them unique in their own ways. I’m super super excited for the future chat fic tm chapters :))
WHO was going to tell me What If… Marc Spector Was Host to Venom? Is devastating at the end. I feel so heart broken and so spoiled rotten that it hurts.
I feel this is an important addition. He saves so many people on a regular basis that this just keeps happening. And he feels so much for his uncle that the answer is always the same.
You can read a pretty good summary of it here, but as (most likely) Ashkenazi Jews, PP probably follows the minhag (custom) that says “that by naming a newborn child after a deceased loved one, the soul lives on through the child.” (Quoted from the site linked above.) And given how his Uncle Ben died, it just makes it all the more sadder tbh.
another fine distinction is that the soul isn’t thought to be reincarnated, it’s that the memory of the loved one is kept alive and more good deeds in life can be inspired by (and thus partially attributed to) the dead. ‘may their memory be a blessing’–the memory of the deceased is honored, respected, and who they were is retold as inspiration to the next generation.
ben’s memory is a blessing. that’s extremely jewish. spiderman is inspired not just by the shame of his death, but by the moral teachings he’d given peter in life. and his name given to these babies is another part of it: babies named in spiderman’s honor are also very honestly and truly named in his honor, and continue to be blessings to the world.
...And another recap of my revamps! This one is boring, but hey, I find this stuff interesting.
Other parts: 1 >>>> 2
The fic itself: HERE
CHAPTER 11: "Recovery"
Poem at the beginning, say hello to The Rabbi’s Red Ink by Shereen Akhtar!! :)
A LOT more clarification between what exactly freaks the three of them out: Steven is that he wants to talk about it; Jake was prompted by needles/doesn't want to forget it; Marc doesn't want to lose them. It's hatched out more. I don't know why it was even a bit vague.
Mr. Knight is even more of a boss I love you
haha:
"Huh. Polycule. Marc's heart stops and his cheeks return to their bright pink tone."
"They all love another deeper than they may believe. …Mr. Knight wonders if they know that they all feel the same way. Oh well. If it doesn't disrupt their work, or their mental psyche, he won't interfere."
CHAPTER 12: "A Rusalka's Kid"
Welcome Let America Be America Again by Langston Hughes into the poetry collection!
THIS ONE IS BORING there is literally no difference except for a bit of grammar mistakes, small changes, etc. The biggest is that I used << & >> at the beginning and end of quotes to signify Russian being spoken.
CHAPTER 13: "Rehabilitation"
Welcome Self-Help by John Skoyles to the collection!
The entire talk is far more structured out. It says the same thing, but it's written better.
Also I emphasized the duo of Mr. Knight and Moon Knight further and I didn't think I did so in a well thought out manner beforehand.
COMMANDER SHOWS UP AT THE END NOW!
CHAPTER 14: "Clubbing (Take Two)"
Welcome Dangerous Life by Lucia Perillo to the collection!
GRAMMAR. And fixing up some Soldier speak.
CHAPTER 15: "Arcade's Games"
Welcome The Cache by Dan Gerber to the collection!
Fixed up some stuff between Marc and Logan. Made some pacing better. Boring chapter for revamps overall besides the quotes from my professor fantasizing over cereal in my notes.
CHAPTER 16: "Drug Busting"
Welcome Winesaps by Dave Smith to the collection!
I changed "Marc" to "their Knight"/"Moon Knight" after being captured, as they don't know who was in the body last (plus it shows that they are the ultimate codependent found family)
CHAPTER 17: "Open Door of Dreams"
No more new poems past this point!
Mr Knight now turns pink, glows, and looks soft when in their natural element.
Also, I like this section:
"The alter shucks off her cardigan, wrapping it around her kid, and strapping them in tighter. They look up to her with determined, dead-seat eyes and a grimace that spells danger.
Oh, she's definitely met this one before, her instinct supplies. The alter glares at the dots outside. His fingers against the wheel drum, silently formulating a plan."
This entire quote:
"'You're amazing, Soldier.' The alter turns a bright, pastel pink once more. They look fuzzy around the edges, the glow making them appear soft. 'Has Marc told you so yet?'"
Some dialogue changes for Ben/Reese & Yehya/Reed's section. Not many, but I swapped up some stuff to make it flow better.
Jeff now call's Marc either "Moon Knight" or "his Boss". He only call's Marc "Marc" once, and that's underneath his hand.
"'Moon Knight—' Jeff attempts to tell him, but his Boss places his hand over his mouth. He shakes his head, not wanting to hear anything. He mumbles out a Marc underneath his palm instead. Moon Knight keeps him practically strangled."
I love you 8-Ball; new line I love:
"Their lights make Jeff grimace, a headache already slamming against his head with a ferocity he's only known after a hangover. Or doing Cocaine. Or looking at the TV too long waiting for Powerball numbers. Or all three of those things in one, beautiful, mind-bending combination".
CHAPTER 18: "Recouping" & CHAPTER 19: "Summer Camp" & CHAPTER 20: "Trust Building Plan #2: Quality Time"
Grammar and pacing. Only slight changes:
CH. 18's ending was lengthened for better pacing
CH. 19's dialogue was either shortened or made better. Stop making Logan stutter, old me. He never does that.
CH. 20 had basically nothing
I only have 130 ish pages left of my AO3 download to skim through and fix up, and then we'll be off to the end! :)
