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Extremely important post ♡
So, I found an old list of notes for when I was adding the final touches to my fourth book. It’s been out for a while, but I thought I’d share what it’s like from an author’s POV when in the final stages of proofreading and making small touches. :) (I’ll add my current commentary in pink brackets)
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Change the title of prologue. It’s not a prologue. (Fair point. The whole bit was that it’s an epilogue.)
‘you’re not going to write one.’ (Not sure what this refers to. I know the line but not what I was telling myself here. Keep in mind I didn’t write this with sharing it in mind. I hardly did it with myself in mind sometimes, and I’d look at my own notes and be confused.)
In fact, maybe move it to the end? Probably not. (I didn’t end up moving it in the end. I felt it added more of a WTF factor, because the reader wants to know who these people are and what’s going on with them.)
Too. Many. Severals. (I think this is probably a word over-usage thing?)
Page 9: Ring should be region. (Because my book takes place in a loose parody of an inferno-like world, a concept that has been done a million times and I probably could’ve been more unique about, I wanted to give it a little bit of a unique and grounded edge.)
“She went through. The room engulfed” might flow better (don’t know what the original line was. I’m assuming ‘she went through, the room engulfing.’
“It’s tradition, though,” (I guess I forgot the commas.)
“Sophomore, either,” (same here)
Replace soul with life. Has more of an umph to it. (Self-explanatory. Plus from a meta perspective I don’t believe in souls so there’s probably some metaphysical explanation in-universe for the afterlife. Did I write it? No. That would’ve been boring for this project. But still.)
Page 16: “what? What is this?” (Don’t know the context.)
Page 23: About four times should be changed to eight times (This is because I’m very particular about the way I use specific numbers in my work symbolically. I might’ve gone overboard with it at some parts in retrospect, though.)
Page 24: change “fuck this” to “enough of this?” (I guess I found it too swear-y, which is funny, because some neutral feedback I’ve received on this work thus far is that there’s a lot of swearing. My bad. I’m naturally a swear-y person and both protagonists aren’t exactly polite company but I guess a character I thought this was OOC for said this.)
Page 24: change ten to five (This is because I’m very particular about the way I use specific numbers in my work symbolically.)
You know I’m suddenly 50/50 on giving her an accent. Probably not. (There was a character I considered giving an accent but decided against; the MMC’s best friend.h
Page 29: Change it to them having access to portals, not teleporting freely. (I’m assuming this was to resolve a logic error, like if they could teleport freely why wouldn’t they just teleport everywhere)
Page 33: Change the fire sword metaphor (I don’t remember this, but it was probably a bad one.)
Page 35: Remove ‘anyway’ (Filler word, I’m assuming.)
Page 36: lower case (I deliberately lowercased the ‘names’ of two locations in this work because they’re not names, they’re directions.)
Page 36: Yep, change last one to level 9 (I guess I figured the FMC was progressing too fast)
Page 41: Trying to solve level 15, 16 and 17. Also, three weeks to two. (See above. Also, two weeks may have been a number symbol thing but I’m unsure. Probably.)
43: Five chances. (Number symbol)
Page 45: Two months (Adds credence to what I said two points ago.)
Page 57: “I’d say watching a human try and fail at beating me is moderately fun to watch.” (I think I changed it to moderately to fit the character better and used a more extreme word.)
Page 108: Dagger. Also, search for book for knife and replace with dagger. (Yeah, no memory on why I changed a character owning a knife to a dagger. Actually might’ve been symbolic)
Page 121: add a line showing MMC’s discomfort (btw, obviously I’m using the actual character names in my notes I’m just doing it for context sake here. I think this was probably some unwanted comment and as this character is aroace I wanted to make it clearer?)
Page 136: Would he swear? Also add detail about how there had been white roses prior. (White roses were symbolism for something and background storytelling for something that comes later. It’s a detail I think most people would miss but I felt it was an interesting Easter egg anyway. And no, this character wouldn’t have so openly so I changed it.)
Page 145: Five second intervals. Also reframe his knowledge of the trials to make it clear MMC’s father was lying. (I don’t remember the context, sorry. I’m six or seven months separated from this work.)
Page 158: Really? ‘Knocked heavily on the door?’ (yeah, that was poor prose.)
Page 166: Realistially, she would figure out pretty quickly what the code was. (There’s a code that’s pretty obvious, so I think I changed the wording.)
Page 176: That teleportation line is silly (Don’t remember)
Page 189: not what a truism is (I misused a word)
Page 287: “Just adding being getting.” Speech 100 lel. (LOL)
Change showering line (related to a trauma, I think? Don’t remember.)
Change changeling to who are you (For some reason, I used comparing people to changelings like three times in this book so I changed it.)
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There were way more, of course, but listing them all would’ve been boring. Goes to show that no matter how much you edit or proofread, there will still be things you miss. My notes for my current WIP, I delete as I go, but maybe when I’m on the fifth and final proofing I’ll keep them around to showcase afterwards.
I wonder if the rise of cozy games and games where you have a ton of control (I.e the shift in the sims franchise for more player control in 4, and the same with acnh) is because as things get worse (and head towards collapse) more and more people feel less in control of their own lives and need an outlet more and more so. Ok maybe that’s not as revolutionary of an idea as I think, and obviously games with less direct control are still popular, but still. I guess what I’m saying is that it’s probably a reason for a chunk of people. Idk. Maybe I’m entirely wrong. Cuz games like city skylines have been popular for a long time. But some people I mean. Now that I’ve thought about it for more than 0.4th of a second this is kind of obvious. But you know. Pretend I said something profound.
Give a man a loaf, feed him for a day. Give a man approximately 28,000 loaves, and feed him for a lifetime. But considering he’d probably get scurvy, lower that to about 120 loaves. I mean, I guess that’s most cost-effective than giving him a proper diet. Well, this got dark.
I don’t believe in witchcraft personally but I like to believe that the reason the world is so fucked is because some Joe Schmoe medieval serf performed a spell to get extra grain and doomed everything. I mean, I don’t even mean in the whole ‘world is so bad nowadays’ thing because the world has always been terrible. It’s actually pretty good for the first world materially. Other things are a different matter. But what if man-made climate change was caused not by fuels but by some random peasant hundreds of years ago. Free writing prompt for y’all lol.
No seriously let’s say witchcraft is real. There have probably been hundreds of thousands of people to have practiced it in all of history. If that were the case, surely some butterfly effect bullshit would happen and stir up some shit when Sally Downtown is using carnelian to help with inspiration for her risotto while Sam Uptown is summoning a demon while John Averageguy is taking a shower and somehow, all of these events come together to cause an Earthquake in the middle of Singapore or a fire in Italy or a flood in Monaco.
…the random thoughts I have while writing, man.
I love watching deltarune theories because I, someone who doesn’t do much theorizing on my own, will finish ch5, think “oh, cool,” go to youtube and it’ll be like “this is why the remains of onion san actually formed tiny souls inside of them that go on to become the knight and create a time loop” or “what if the game takes place in a popcorn machine” and it’ll make perfect sense, too.
Episode 9 spoilers
The most unrealistic part of TADC ep9 is that Cain uses the internet and gains faith in humanity.
Man, I’ve never played any of the silent hill games, but the soundtracks are great for writing to.
I think evil ralsei would be fucking hilarious at this point. Like in the end it flashes back to his scenes and is like “please… have mercy on them… SO I CAN CRUSH THEM MYSELF,” “every chance I get, I pray… for THEIR DOWNFALL” but it was an unreliable narrator or screen cut off thing or just blatantly lying to the player that the scenes really played out that way. It would be so funny at this point no one can see my vision.
My top 3 most inspirational and personally memorable Umineko quotes
1. <VERRRRRY GOOOOD!>
2. THEREFORE, MORE THAN ANYTHING ELSE, HE WANTED A LOT OF MONEY RIGHT NOW…!
3. "......People are born with sin... and live life to obtain forgiveness from someone. Or perhaps they are born with riddles... and live life searching for someone to solve them. Here, all of her riddles had been solved, ......with no lingering regrets. People are riddles. They want someone else to solve their riddle. They live life wanting someone to solve the riddle that they are, the most difficult riddle in the world. They want someone to look at the riddle they are. And they want that person to solve it. For her, that wish had been granted.”
But y’know that last one’s more of a footnote.
Me when I’m editing/proofing and realize number hyphenation is actually more complicated than I thought, so I have to check every possible number combination to make sure it works grammatically
Why are AI bros so fucking obsessed with being polished and formal on Reddit.com “I use it to edit my posts to be of finer quality” IT’S REDDIT. Here’s what bothers me: I saw some dude posting AI comments somewhere. Got accused of being AI slop. Instead of owning it the obnoxious clankshgr makes a pretentious post written by chatGPT on why it’s not slop, because they “don’t just copy and paste what AI says.” Except they clearly do. Every fucking sentence is written in GPTspeak. Just because you say “hey, reword this slightly” doesn’t mean you put any more effort into it. I don’t like AI slop posts because you don’t sound like a person, you’re expecting me to engage with a shell of yourself. It’s inauthentic. It’s also annoying when people don’t disclose it. If you disclose it, whatever. If you wait until you’re called out then you’re being a fraud and that shit gets on my fucking nerves.
It’s different if English is your second language and you run your post through a bot to correct it. But doing it just because you want to sound like a pretentious… two watts?… yeah no.
Better swap your F and D keys because WASF
Deltarune chapter 5
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Umineko Hane OOC kinda sus
TADC ending initial impressions (spoilers, full)
(Disclaimer: tumblr only allows videos up to 10 minutes, so this is sped up a little. I don’t think it’s incomprehensible but I’m just yapping anyway so you’re not missing any deep thoughts. My brain is a back and forth game of Socratic questioning and autism and probable adhd.)
(Spoiler: I don’t think either. I have mixed opinions. I know that defeats the purpose of a grabby title but I actually don’t think my opinion is that coherent or worthy lol)
Book Rant but I don’t give any context on any of it so you get the pov of someone listening to contextless mad musings from the Irishwoman down the street
Okay so I finished a book that I got at the store when I was a preteen. I kept it in my house, didn’t get far, and nine years later I decided to read it. It was not an enjoyable experience.
There was just… so much in this that I didn’t like lmao. The stiff dialogue. The lack of dialogue tags (though I loved the dog with said name). The most stereotypical and obvious killer ever (seriously, did we need the whole killing childhood animals stereotype? the ‘I was born this way’ edgy monologue? I know lady gaga was mentioned but I doubt that was foreshadowing for this guy’s rationalizations.)
Also, “papers are the dodo of news and blogging is in?” LOL WHAT YEAR IS THIS? Blogging is dead asf, even when this book takes place. Also this chick thinks she’s going to live to 110. Let see. 26? 29? 29 in 2016. 1987? Holy shit Fnaf- jk. 1987+110=2,097. Girl you better grow some fins and learn to swim, learn to swim, learn to swim. ♪ I love how most people just like to pretend collapse, or at the very least, climate change (a massive factor) isn’t a thing. I don’t mean this as a genuine critique, I just like the dissonance.
I did like the whole quirk the killer had near the start coming up again. Though, on that topic, it’s funny how a bunch of women are being killed in this book and she and Pills (what I call her bf) are going at it and getting frisky in between funerals.
Carnist dissonance with the cattle-prodding “joke.” Love to see it <3 (sarcastic)
Now for the part of the story that really grinded my gears. Preemptive pun. Suddenly, Pills becomes gullible ans reckless and leaves the house to help a guy calling in the middle of the night, when he knows the protagonist girl is being stalked and a killer tried to break into their house. Speaking of, he says, on the next page, the killer DIDNT BREAK INTO HOUSES. Not only did he witness the aftermath of that almost happening, but one of the victims, the older woman, earlier in this book, HE BROKE INTO THE HOUSE OF. Or are we meant to assume that her house was already broken into? I don’t know! Either way, it makes him gullible.
He also comments on how he wanted to go out to spare his friend the risk, ignoring the actual target that is his girlfriend inside the house, never mind the fact earlier I’m pretty sure either her brother or this guy dismisses her uncles as targets based on their gender, but we’re meant to give a fuck about whoever Jimmy is? And for fuck’s sake, the guy who needs help goes by the alias ‘Mike Rhoder.’ This guy lives in a town in Rhode Island. Though if that’s a road pun that’s clever from the author’s POV.
This book was also so boring for most of it because it’s talking about her fucking home renovations and the colors of shelves and her cutlery. I’m not joking, most of the book is spent on this. The protag is also this not-like-other-girls type and the guy… the guy is an unlikable Hugh Jass who tells her to get over her trauma, is forceful (yeah, yeah, she’s into it, but I don’t just mean in that way) and basically tells her she can’t leave because she needs him, and they’re doing all this whining and making it about themselves and their love in between murders btw. Terrible, unlikable people, but objectively she’s been fucking gaslit into thinking her trauma isn’t a big deal. Does the writer have a hatred for therapists? Even as someone in therapy I’m skeptical of psychiatry and pathologizing everything, but no, some douchebag will not solve your issues either. The worst crime this book committed was being boring. Yeah. Most of it was, anyway. I’ll add stuff if I think about it.
I feel like there’s something I’m not getting because this book is from a bestselling, respected author. That’s kinda why I’m not saying the name because I’m kind of a wuss about it. Like I’m committing sacrilege. And don’t get me wrong, it’s not like the prose is bad. I struggle with my prose because I have a vivid imagination but a hard time describing things. I’m just not good at metaphors and stuff. I almost compared a girl crying in my current WIP (fifth book) to an antique kettle, before I realized quick how asinine that was, laughed and deleted it. It’s just the story stuff that bugs me.
I mean I picked it up when I was a preteen, probably because the concept gave me LIS vibes but fuck if I could go back and time… well, id do more significant things but still.