Because itâs on my dash again and I am going to have a meltdown if I just scroll past it.Â
Some of these donât work. I am a fan of said. Said is the wonderful little work horse who carries your writing.
Yes, some of these are useful, sometimes, but your dialogue should be written so you donât need these most of the time.Â
If your character is sharing a secret. Itâs revealed. You donât need revealed as the dialogue tag. If you need revealed as the dialogue tag, perhaps you need to go back and rework the dialogue so what you want to convey is in there without the dialogue tag giving it away.Â
IN RESPONSE TO
Acknowledged  - can be useful, but most of the time you donât need it. Acknowledging is when you agree someone is right or acknowledge their reply.Â
âAye, Captain.â (this needs no âshe acknowledgedâ tag. Itâs implied by the dialogue.âÂ
âHey Mom, Iâm home. Where are you?âÂ
âIn the kitchen, dear.â (we donât need âshe answered, we know Mom is answering the question. If for some reason someone else is answering, then âansweredâ could be useful, but most of the time, we donât need it.).Â
Protested - Could (rarely) be useful, but again.Â
âAll right, Henry, bed time.âÂ
âBut MomâŚ.â - clearly a protest. needs no dialogue tag. Most of the time you wonât need this if your dialogue is written thoughtfully and clearly.Â
INPUT/JOIN CONVERSATION/ASK
Added - useful.Â
Implored - less useful. implore is a kind of begging and again, I think itâs something you should show with action around the dialogue (eyes implore, outstretched hands, etc).Â
Inquired  - I can think of no reason for this that a simple ? at the end of dialogue would not convey.Â
Insisted - usefulÂ
Proposed - unnecessary. if thereâs a proposal. âHey, why donât you help me with my project?â itâs in the dialogue. you donât need this.Â
Queried
Questioned
If youâre writing a piece of dialogue that ends in a question mark, these are redundant. A query is best for a database or research. Itâs rare that you need to use this tag in fiction, if EVER.
Recommended - this is one of the ones where it should be obvious in the dialogue. âWhat should I eat?â
âTry the chicken.â (I donât need, she recommended. Itâs in there! The reader knows just from the dialogue that the character is recommending the chicken.
Testified - If one is testifying in court, this is obvious. If one is not in court or in an exciting church, this probably doesnât fit.Â
GUILTY/RELUCTANCE/SORRY
Admitted - useful, but should be used sparingly. Â âI ate the chocolate.â itâs an admittance. you donât need this most of the time.Â
Apologized -  can be good, butâŚ. usually unnecessary. âIâm sorry.â needs no âshe apologizedâ tag. Itâs an apology. the reader knows that. Most apologies are obvious to the reader.Â
Conceded - usually goes with conceded defeat, conceded an election, etc. too flowery for most dialogue.Â
Confessed  - maybe, but again âI ate the chocolate.â is a confession. âI love you.â can be a confession (heck, it could be an apology!) but itâs much better to make it clear what âI love youâ is from the dialogue around it and the action instead of relying on the speech tag.Â
Professed  too flowery for most fic.  âShe professed a desire to continue her studies.â Itâs usually in sentence, not a dialogue tag.Â
FOR SOMEONE ELSE
Advised -Â âWell, why donât you wait and see how you feel tomorrow?â - itâs advice. itâs obvious to the reader. Much better to do it in dialogue.Â
Criticized - âYouâre so negative with her.â (critical). âStand up straight.â âOh, I canât stand an overdone steak.â  all critical. all obvious from the words in the dialogue.Â
Suggested - sure, sparingly. most of the time a suggestion with again, be obvious.  likeâŚÂ âTry the chicken.â  âUse first gear.â  âWear a hatâ  - all of these are suggestions, if for some reason they WERENâT suggestions, âWear a hat,â she commanded. then itâs a good time for a different dialogue tag, but if itâs obvious from the dialogue, you donât need this.Â
JUST CHECKING
Affirmed - good for articles and making oaths, not for dialogue.Â
Agreed - sure
Alleged   not a speech tag. yes, I can allege that the dog was in my yard, but itâs not something that youâd attach to speech.Â
Confirmed - âSeven-two-two-niner.â âRoger that, seven-two-two-niner.â Thatâs a confirmation. You figured that out without the tag, didnât you?Â
LOUD
Announced - useful
Chanted - rare, usually for kids âK-I-S-S-I-N-Gâ you know how the song goes, how kids would chat the rhyme? You can hear it. You donât need this. Maybe if something that wouldnât normally be chanted is, then it could be useful.Â
Crowed   nope.  this is a classic said bookism. Think of any moment someone has crowed something at you. Have you thought that? Bet you havenât.Â
LEWD/CUTE/SECRET SPY FEEL
Appealed  - âDonât you want to help us?â  - itâs an appeal, didnât need the tag. You can do this with the dialogue itself.Â
Disclosed - Â âI make twenty-million a year, before taxes.â Â - again, this is obviously a disclosure.Â
Moaned - this is one of the ones where itâs hard to imagine this working. Think about people moaning. Can they talk at the same time? Usually not. Moaning takes the space of talking and makes a terrible speech tag.Â
ANGRY FUCK OFF MATE WANNA FIGHT
Argued  - âGreen is a far better color.â  âOf course youâd say that. You always say that.â   - theyâre fighting. thatâs the first thing youâd think. if theyâre NOT fighting, then a dialogue tag might work. Most of the time if youâre writing an argument you wonât need this.Â
Barked  usually one âbarks a commandâ or âbarks an orderâ âbarks at their superiorsâ. Itâs something attached to a piece of dialogue that isnât written.Â
Challenged -Â âOh really, you think you can do better?â - itâs a challenge, doesnât need a tag.Â
Cursed  âF@ck, she really hates those said bookisms.â  - I cursed. you didnât need the tag to know I hate.Â
Fumed - You canât fume speech. chemicals can fume. You can fume. Speech does not fume.Â
Growled - Trying growling and speaking at the same time. Doesnât work well. This oneâs a maybe. She growled a challenge. âJust you try it,â she growled. I donât think you need it.Â
Hissed - okayÂ
Roared - Lions roar. Dragons roar. They donât really TALK while theyâre doing it.Â
Swore - again. check out cursed. If your character is swearing, you donât need this to prove they are.Â
My thoughts on this subject are long, and I donât want to offend anyone. The words of your dialogue are so much more important than how you tag them. Speech tags are there to clarify who is speaking and clarify how something is being said when itâs a surprise. If itâs a question, thereâs a question mark. you donât need âshe asked.â Itâs obvious. Same thing if itâs a reply.Â
Now, if there are like eight people in a scene and you need the speech tags to attribute who is talking, then sure.Â
âWould you like a coffee?âÂ
âSure,â David replied. Then great, but most of the time, you donât need them. If thereâs a question and the next line is an answer to that question. Replied, answered, etc are redundant.Â
Adding flowery dialogue tags can take AWAY from the meaning of your words and how they come out of your characters mouth. Most of the really descriptive synonyms for âsaidâ come from âtelling, not showing.â Which you donât want to do.
If Emma is angry, donât just show it in the dialogue tag, show it in her speech itself. How she stands, how her face looks. Thatâs so much better than.Â
âI hate you,â Emma growled.Â
Her eyes flashed as she stood still as a statue. Her words slurred into a growl. âI hate you.âÂ
One of them tells your reader Emma is angry, the other shows your reader what angry looks and sounds like.Â
I rant because I love you fellow fic writers and I want you to write better fic. Learning to avoid the quick fix of the dialogue tag that conveys what you want to pass on to your readers makes you write better dialogue so its clearer and makes you describe better action.Â
Those things make you a better writer. a quick fancy dialogue tag is just a quick note. A highlighter. Paint a damn picture.Â
here are some AWESOME resources on said bookisms and why to avoid them.Â
http://www.fmwriters.com/Visionback/Issue%205/tags.htm
http://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Main/SaidBookism - even TV tropes hates them
http://www.dbjackson-author.com/2012/01/25/writing-tips-said-bookisms-the-obscure-sin-that-can-doom-a-manuscript/
http://www.writesf.com/08_Lesson_05_Perils.html