#bad writing

[justaneedle]

That's so bad, are for real should just believe that her "commands" will be done? No!

[pippinnextdoor]

𝕯𝖆𝖎𝖗𝖞 𝖔𝖋 𝖆 𝕯𝖎𝖗𝖙𝖞 𝕮𝖔𝖒𝖒𝖎𝖊

𝔈𝔫𝔱𝔯𝔶 𝔒𝔫𝔢

What an ironic title, and one that others have probably used before myself.

There is an inordinate amount of discussion and thought I sincerely wish to explore; or maybe just selfishly expound from my mind.

As we continue, perhaps we may find the answer we already know.

𝔇𝔦𝔳𝔦𝔡𝔢𝔯 | @priestboy

[acrazycatlady]

A writing sin that makes me quite angry even though I've only ever actually seen it done twice and that is, killing off characters just as their character arc concludes, the two examples I have of this are Hollyleaf's death in warrior cats/omen of the stars and Sharlemange/Hugo's death in Kipo and the age of wonder beasts, now it should be obvious why this trope? Cliche? Thing? Idk. Is bad generally. you write this whole character arc, building up to a new shiny version of the character, and then you not only don't let us spend any time with them or the satisfaction of seeing them get a happy ending, all set-up no pay-off. Now what makes these specific deaths even worse is that in both cases the narrative plays them like "oH LoOk tHeY DiEd pRoTeCtInG ThE HeRo! hOw nObLe! tHeY'vE BeEn rEdEemEd oF AlL ThEiR SiNs!" When that's not how that fucking works! The heroic sacrifice is the laziest way to "redeem" a villain, you're completely skipping the 'arc' part of the redemption arc. Except these characters DID have arcs, making their deaths all the more unsatisfying. For Sharlemange, seeing his friendship with Wolf and the other main characters within the context of the happy ending that Kipo created for everyone else. For Hollyleaf, I'd argue that her character arc actually WASN'T finished because she allowed Brambleclaw to lie about seeing her kill Ashfur, but it’s clear that the writers didn't see it that way because of how her death was treated by the narrative, but either way it would have been much more satisfying to see her living while being content not being important/chosen by Starclan

[justaneedle]

Genya's presence in R&R is very hollow. Bad.

[magictransgirl]

pov: leo after killing dannys wife

Danny: leo how could you uwu you killed my fucking wife

leo: danny my sweet little boytoy bottom trad malewife, its just like housewife radio by ghost

danny: leo what does that even mean

leo: so basically im like the housewife right? yeah okay and i snapped and killed her your wife like the girl in the song, now lets have gay sex daniel

danny: fine sure whatever i guess bro. *rolls eyes cuntily*

*danny and leo proceed to sloppily make out and fuck for 69 days and 69 nights and leo is still covered in danny's wife's blood type shiiiit*

this is intentionally written like shit

[grell90]

The Leftover Scraps

(As night falls, Mouseburg Easton Storm prepares to close the shop for the evening.) Easton: locking the door before putting his key in his back pocket. What a sluggish day… at least there were no problems from the customer. He pulls out a cigarette and smokes it as he makes his way back home. Hopefully, Eunie wasn’t waiting up for me again. (He strolls past a few dimly lit shopfronts. One window displays baby clothes and a small wooden cradle. Easton slows, staring at it for a long moment.) Easton: sigh If only we could have one of our own. He exhales a plume of smoke, takes another slow drag, and continues walking, shoulders a little heavier.

(A couple of blocks down the street, he was about to pass one of those filthy alleys, but something glinted in the alley. Moonlight on metal. Eyes in the darkened passage, causing him to stop.) Easton: mmm? Take out his cigarette. What in the… He took a few more steps in and then spotted a teenage honey badger lying on the dirty, hard ground.

(Her clothes are tattered and have several holes, and although her dog muzzle is still in place, it appears to be slightly bent inward. There’s a wound on her side, likely a result of a tough fight.)

Easton: Flicked his cigarette away, then crouched down to get a look at her. What incheese grater you got into??? Jeez… Gently lifted her up by the waistline. Boy, you must haven’t had eaten for days how light you are. Carried her back to his place. (Once he returns to his comfortable home, his wife approaches Eunice from the kitchen.)

Eunice: Thank heavens you're home safe! I was just gonna call- Her eyes widen. Oh my goodness, she's bleeding! Quick, get her to the guest room! (A short while later, Easton carefully patches the teenager’s wound while Eunice sits nearby on a stool, watching anxiously.) Eunice: Where did you find her???

Easton: Back alley. She was bleeding on the dirt ground. It seemed like the fight had taken a toll on her, but those clothes looked like they were from the military. Checks on the clothes. Eunice: Military? Glance over your right. But why is she wearing a dog muzzle? reach for the dog's muzzle Easton: Honey, don’t touch-

(Teenager makes a low growl which made Eunice’s hand pull back) Eunice: O-oh… She looks worried, but her expression softens with concern. Poor girl, got herself wounded. I wonder if she has any parents looking for her? Easton: I had my doubts… Almost everyone who gets left behind in No Man’s Land ends up as prey for the vultures. She’s lucky to still be breathing. Pull the blanket over her

Eunice: Honey! Don’t be like that! She’s alive and well take care of by our hands. She reaches husband's face beside her. When she is awake, she will be grateful and tell us what happened. Smiling before pulling his hand Come on, dear. Wash up; I’ve already made your favorite cheese soup! (As Easton looked back at the teenager, he appeared slightly concerned before allowing his wife to take the lead and closing the wooden door behind them.)

[verynotgoodwritingideas]

Bad Writing Idea! [Jul 16]

You start hearing secret messages in your hearing aid.