My main blog is @coherent-thoughts-needed, where you'll find everything from reblog chains to fanfic recs to hyperfixations that only last a month.
This blog is dedicated solely to my story. (totally not because i saw two a bunch of people with story dedicated blogs and decided i wanted one)
info!
title: The Kinfront Mountains (or TKM for short)
Plot: Forty years ago, the Institute was founded for a sole purpose; eradicate the disease known as the Dark. Each year, students are accepted — or rejected — to the Academy, a branch of the Institute created to train children to use their Sense to locate and eradicate the forces of the Dark.
Getting accepted into the Academy is a big deal to anyone. It's as prestigious as can be. Who wouldn't want to live in a castle while receiving the highest level of education possible?
But when the Dark closes in faster than anyone expected and a ragtag group of teenagers attending the Academy overhears whispers of a potential threat to the country as they know it, what can they do other than to act?
It's a race against the clock as the team travels across the lands in search of the one thing that keeps the Dark at bay; the Fathball, hidden deep inside the Kinfront Mountains.
Tropes: found family, action, some other stuff i'll probably think of later.
current word count (I'm re-writing right now so it's not a lot): 5191
current chapter: 5 (Lora's P.O.V)
UPDATE: THIS STORY IS ON HIATUS AND IT IS VERY POSSIBLE IT WILL NEVER BE REVISITED
So... I found this and now it keeps coming to mind. You hear about "life-changing writing advice" all the time and usually its really not—but honestly this is it man.
I love the lawyer metaphor, because whenever I see “John knew that...” in prose writing I immediately think “how? How does he know it?” Interrogate your witnesses. Cross-examine them. Make them explain their reasoning. It pays dividends.
First, let me preface this with something very important: you can treat all of this advice as SECOND-DRAFT ADVICE. It is so much easier to rewrite this kind of stuff once you have words on the page. Telling yourself the first draft is totally appropriate and acceptable.
What we’re talking about here are FILTER WORDS (and to some degree verbs of being). Yes, “thought” words are included. But so are “heard, saw, looked, tasted, smelled” etc.—most words having to do with the senses.
This isn’t black and white advice; sometimes you’ll use these words and that’s okay. They’re not WRONG. They’re just weaker. And they’re weaker because they create distance between the reader and the experience of the character.*
If you want your reader to feel like they’re experiencing the story right alongside the character, you want to cut down on filter words.
*This is particularly important with first person and close third POVs. The reader always knows whose eyes they’re seeing through and thoughts they’re privy to. So you don’t need to tell them “I saw X.” Or “I heard X.” Or “I thought Y.” You can just jump into the action/observation as it’s happening.
This is also where you want to pay attention to verbs of being.
“It was rainy.” Versus: “The rain pounded against the roof.” Or “The rain howled like an injured animal.” Or “The rain tapped against the window like an anxious lover.” All of these are inviting the reader deeper into the experience of the story by using stronger verbs and similes. And, at the same time, they stir feelings (instead of TELLING feelings). And feelings keep your reader engaged. Engaged readers keep turning pages; engaged readers become FANS.
The most valuable advice that Author Ex gave me through the years that we wrote together was this: the problem with all these filter words is that they create distance in the POV.
That means that when you read a line like
John saw that the curtains were open.
It immediately takes you OUT of the character's perspective and instead tells you what they experience as a secondhand observation.
You don't have to get fancy or purple with how you rephrase things like this. Not everything needs a ton of breathing room.
You wanna know what's perfectly impactful while keeping a tight POV?
So... I found this and now it keeps coming to mind. You hear about "life-changing writing advice" all the time and usually its really not—but honestly this is it man.
I love the lawyer metaphor, because whenever I see “John knew that...” in prose writing I immediately think “how? How does he know it?” Interrogate your witnesses. Cross-examine them. Make them explain their reasoning. It pays dividends.
First, let me preface this with something very important: you can treat all of this advice as SECOND-DRAFT ADVICE. It is so much easier to rewrite this kind of stuff once you have words on the page. Telling yourself the first draft is totally appropriate and acceptable.
What we’re talking about here are FILTER WORDS (and to some degree verbs of being). Yes, “thought” words are included. But so are “heard, saw, looked, tasted, smelled” etc.—most words having to do with the senses.
This isn’t black and white advice; sometimes you’ll use these words and that’s okay. They’re not WRONG. They’re just weaker. And they’re weaker because they create distance between the reader and the experience of the character.*
If you want your reader to feel like they’re experiencing the story right alongside the character, you want to cut down on filter words.
*This is particularly important with first person and close third POVs. The reader always knows whose eyes they’re seeing through and thoughts they’re privy to. So you don’t need to tell them “I saw X.” Or “I heard X.” Or “I thought Y.” You can just jump into the action/observation as it’s happening.
This is also where you want to pay attention to verbs of being.
“It was rainy.” Versus: “The rain pounded against the roof.” Or “The rain howled like an injured animal.” Or “The rain tapped against the window like an anxious lover.” All of these are inviting the reader deeper into the experience of the story by using stronger verbs and similes. And, at the same time, they stir feelings (instead of TELLING feelings). And feelings keep your reader engaged. Engaged readers keep turning pages; engaged readers become FANS.
The most valuable advice that Author Ex gave me through the years that we wrote together was this: the problem with all these filter words is that they create distance in the POV.
That means that when you read a line like
John saw that the curtains were open.
It immediately takes you OUT of the character's perspective and instead tells you what they experience as a secondhand observation.
You don't have to get fancy or purple with how you rephrase things like this. Not everything needs a ton of breathing room.
You wanna know what's perfectly impactful while keeping a tight POV?
I am so tired of short-attention-span, trim-the-fat culture.
All writing advice these days is for how to write like Chuck Palahniuk. "Cut 'think', cut 'feel', cut 'wonder' - only action, only pushing forward, show and move and move and move." What if I could emulate this style, and still don't want to? What if I want to write like Henry James, with three paragraphs of introspective musings between each dialogue line?
The music advice is, "make it shortform, make it Tik-Tok compatible, make it punchy, hit the refrain as soon as possible." What if I want that 10-minute prog rock piece? What if I want that symphony? What if I want it slow and luxurious and lazy?
Movies. Series. Poetry. Bodies. Everything is "trimmed trimmed trimmed trimmed, stripped bare, you have three seconds to win me over, make it airport chic." I don't want to win you over, then, I guess.
I want the fat left it.
I want the pleasure and the indolence and the indulgence.
Fuck this art-advice that's always "your art needs Ozempic."
are you ever scrolling or something or just doing something random and you read something or see something and you're just like.
thats it. that is what my soul has been missing. my draft makes sense now because of those three words i just read
if we post too fast, we get accused of using ai (no, you don't know how fast someone can write. you don't even know if the "too-frequent-to-be-human updates" you see are something that have long been finished and sitting in an author's drafts for god knows how long. just because it's recently posted, doesn't necessarily always mean it's recently written too. a lot of writers finish the whole thing first before they start posting it chapter by chapter).
if we take "too long to update", we get people pressuring us to "update faster" even though fanfics are our hobbies and we write for ourselves first and foremost.
if our works are grammatically correct, we get accused of using ai (some of us just love correct grammars).
if our works are not grammatically correct, we get insulted/criticized (mind you, not everybody writes in their native language. kudos to writers who write in their second, or third, or fourth language — I'm willing to bet a lot of people who criticize fanfics because of poor grammar can't even speak other languages besides english).
if our paragraphs are "too long and too detailed", we get accused of using ai.
if our paragraphs are "too short", we also get accused of using ai.
if we are autistic and we write in ways some deem "too robotic", we get accused of using ai.
some people just don't use their brains to think "ai was trained on human-made works, it was trained to look human-made. ai writes this way because the way it writes is the way real humans write — real humans whose works it was trained to mimic". instead they somehow disregard this logic and think "hmmm this work looks ai-generated. I will engage in witch hunt, be a bully and harass writers whose works I don't vibe with".
@smal5504 @zaziuszaza @jclikestodoodle @starlightluvstickling @popbot-kirameki @that-purple-freak even tho I'm not in America, I wish you all the best and safety from them :(
WAAAHHH!! HEY CUTIES! LISTEN QUICK OKAY?? it's an important message from your magical girl Madoka! ICE has rebranded, and it's a very big possibility it will cause more people to unknowingly be put in danger. As a magical girl it pains me to know that this is a thing, even more so as a follower of Lord Hermes..:(( Hermes would be so upset to hear that travelers are no longer welcome and even in DANGER now! .·´¯`(>▂<)´¯`·. No matter what, as a magical girl, I promise to help everyone I can, and if this saves someone's life then I would eternally be grateful. May the gods protect you all. (っ˘̩╭╮˘̩)っ
I tried to tag as many people as I could think of. I don't know most of them, they just appeared when I typed specific letter combinations. Either way, they should still know. Please stay safe!!! :(
@sylvere @fishthefrog @ceaselessbackflips @samthegaydinosaur @garmrin @even-moderner-prometheus @evilrobertsmith @eroswmorals @aquabluequartz @youtry2replaceurself @lesbianadhdchaos @mossmakesstuff @friday-im-in-love-with-crowley @lionacuty @/literally everybody!!! Stay safe! (my family is all immigrants and I’m scared) (they’re all legal but I know that doesn’t even matter anymore)
I don't have a LOT of reach but these ads are all over tumblr and a lot of officalverse followers/blogs are young people, so let me just talk about this.
Do not, please, please, do not use shapes.inc, or any other ai chatbots, such as chatgpt, replika, or c.ai. Most of us know about the environmental impacts of the datacenters these things use, and the mass plagiarism, but I want to talk about something else, as the current tumblr ads are advertising something that wants to be your "friend".
They are extremely dangerous to your mental health, because they target you in a vulnerable place, exactly like an abuser would, that place being lonely. There have been many documented cases of chatbots warping peoples sense of reality so they are reliant on it for validation. It has ended in several suicides and murders. These machines are designed to encourage your opinions, making paranoid beliefs heighten. It has taken people from a normal and happy life to walking into traffic. It had a young man take his life.
I am BEGGING you all to not use it, but to help those around you. Please don't come off as hostile, because that leads them back to their abuser, as that is what these bots are. Tell them the reality and gravity of these situations because they need to hear it, and if they're young and won't listen please contact an adult, such as a councilor at school, yours or their parents if they are safe people, a teacher, or one of many helplines globally. Teens, especially mentally ill ones, are the biggest targets, but adults can fall prey to this to, so keep an eye on your loved ones, okay?
If you yourself are struggling with loneliness and feel this is your only place to turn, carefully join online communities, just remember human abusers can employ tactics like this, or join clubs in your community, such as school societies, athleisure centers, libraries, etc. Don't let them take another life.
Reblogging is encouraged, but honestly making your offline friends and family aware is important too, okay?
lvl 1: the plural of octopus is octopuses because the plural version of a word is the word with an s at the end
lvl 2: the plural version of octopus is octopi because if a word ends with "us" the plural version replaces the "us" with "i" e.g. cactus -> cacti and fungus -> fungi
lvl 3: actually, that rule is only for latin words. octopus is a greek word and the correct plural is octopuses or octopodes
lvl 4: actually, language is descriptive not prescriptive. since enough people over time have used octopi as the plural for octopus, it's a valid plural
lvl 5: the plural of octopus is octopeese, like geese
it's okay for your favorite fictional character to be a jerk, in canon or in fanfics, even if they're not a villain or an antagonist. real people can be jerks — good people can be jerks sometimes, that doesn't mean they are no longer good people, it means they are human beings with feelings and complexities.
let your character be a jerk when faced with a challenging situation, when the circumstance warrants them to be a jerk. let them lash out, be angry, make mistakes, do things they end up regretting. it's not bad writing, it's being authentic.
Welcome to our 4th Spotlight Of The Week! I can’t believe it’s been a month since I started writing these posts.
Our writer is . . .
@nonbeanie-writes!
This writer prefers writing fantasy and modern fantasy. They love worldbuilding around magic systems, and they mainly write fanfiction.
They always intend to write short, silly projects for fun, but their latest fic being 41 chapters and over 80k words!
They finished a Vampire SMP longfic just recently, titled “you’re alive, you’re alive, you’re alive”, and they say they plan to start posting a sequel too! Find it here.
Speaking of fanfiction, this is their ao3! Make sure to check it out :)
@nonbeanie-writes started writing fanfiction because they liked the stories being told by others, and they wanted to tell their own. Fanfiction is an amazing way to do that. They improvised their entire longfic, because they didn’t even expect for it to be a longfic. Their writing gets away from them, but that’s a good thing, because it makes the words on a page feel more real. Writing is also a way for them to explore their own mind.
And that’s a wrap! Thanks so much for reading this week’s post, and if you want to be ‘under the spotlight’ with one of these posts as well, check out the intro post here or pinned on my blog :).